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  • Something is Missing
    Too long and complicated, gave up after the second word.  The cast was too popul ...
  • Royally F— (2)
    Clever stuff, funny too.  Can't help thinking, I hope you've got this right beca ...
  • Serendipity
    Had to Google, scaflow, great term by the way but according to Google it is spel ...
  • The Abyss
    Apologies for not returning sooner, didn't realise you'd re-written so extensive ...
  • COP TALK!
    That was fun, not sure what phobia is involved or that you care too much that th ...
  • The Name of Fear
    I've probably got that sympathise/empathise thing the wrong way round but luckil ...
  • The coffee shop
    I agree with the points my fellows have posted before me.  It is a good story, a ...
  • The Spoon Prince
    I haven't read what I wrote last time so if I repeat myself I can only apologise ...
  • Roller coaster
    No apologies needed, Sue, I was just being overtly macho to disguise the fact I ...
  • Roller coaster
    So this was romantic...are girls that sloppy in real life; is that what your gen ...
  • A Lethal Dance
    Great fun. Have you managed to retrieve your tongue back from that far in your c ...
  • Patupaiarehe
    It appears I have a fascination too.  I really enjoyed this, it flowed smoothly ...
  • Murder in the Tower
    And it sucks to be the second to comment.  I agree with Lou, the end was one I d ...
  • A Slice of Life
    Before I say anything here's a typo...  '...heartbeat began to fasten while...' ...
  • Group Therapy
    Before I go any further, and it could well just be me and my ageing mind, but to ...
  • Sleep 2
    Okay, I'm getting a little confused now.  Not sure I'm buying into this, too man ...
  • Sleep 1
    And now I've just finished typing, I see part two has been posted while I was do ...
  • Time to Shine
    I'm going to start by saying I've read better by you, WBU, and that may seem har ...
  • Beyond the Clouds
    Before I was a father, a story like this would have been dismissed as 'one for t ...
  • Price of forgiveness
    I think the emotion of this piece is captured really well but I am having a litt ...
  • Timex
    Yay, you got it here eventually, Shana.  I read this when you posted it on the m ...
  • Iron and Oak
    That was fun, WBU, and I think it adheres to the brief's remit too.  Typo, just ...
  • The Evacuee
    Having been told stories by people who lived this I think you've caught the atmo ...
  • Tentacles
    Well done, Lou, I think you should take on The Ministry of Wit 'n' Observation t ...
  • I Liked Us Better Then
    'Shit, rosy fingered dawn is an asshole!'  Great line, it's highly likely I shal ...
  • Prescience
    First thing I've got to ask; why 'Rentient'? What does it mean? It's being used ...

  • You have captured a believable, emotional scene here - a complete change, if my ...

  • This does give a fair portrayal of a tragic situation and I think you have captu ...
  • Tanganyika
    I am attracted to the charm of this piece and its rhythmic prose but I'm having ...
  • An Atlantic Storm
    Well that buckled my swash, indeed.  I enjoyed the read but was hoping for a sec ...
  • Kill the mechanical beasts
    An internal combustion of a tale, WBU, men and their cars, hey?  In the opening ...
  • Puppies with Wings,  finished
    The voice of this piece is excellent, really capturing and reinforcing what I im ...
  • Bite
    Now that is a cracking opening line for a tale...so many ways that could go.
  • Spider cometh before the Fall
    Excellent fun, he carried on his covering lie about the interest in spiders unti ...
  • Bite
    It still has all the positives it had before and now has added explanation, whic ...
  • Bite
    When this changed from what started out as a literary piece into a tongue-in-che ...
  • Dear Olive
    I get the feeling this is a text (though I understand I could be wrong in my ass ...
  • I don't know you
      '...quick harmless kiss.' As opposed to a long deadly one...I'm being stupid, ...
  • A Constant State of Love
    You are getting some excellent mileage out of these very well written character ...
  • Frankly, Scarlett, because I give a damn.
    limned...new word for me, can't say I'll ever use it but my education keeps goin ...
  • Red
    Very good, NJ, a very 'human' tale.  There are a couple of typos, missed commas ...
  • BARTON
    So this one goes on forever as each character concludes his mission and then is ...
  • The Author of Your Destiny - finished
    How do you know I've never been offered money by a bloke to go up to his hotel r ...
  • The Author of Your Destiny - finished
    What...wait...where have the $3,000 and BJs gone?  Did I dream it?
  • The Author of Your Destiny - finished
    I know it's not finished, devi, but what does spring out at me right away is...t ...
  • Postscript
    Spot on. The character of Divshah was brilliantly executed. I could feel the ver ...
  • Elaborate ruse
    This is nuts, in a good way, but it is similar, in some ways, to the story Chris ...
  • Imprint
    Crackin' piece of writing, took me in and held me there for the duration.  Didn' ...
  • Rewritten Fate
    Good tale and interesting read, which I enjoyed but I did get a slight hint of i ...
  • Playing Army
    Very good, mate, certainly hits the brief to my mind and do I detect some use of ...
  • M
    It's actually 249 when you remove the superfluous word...  'The [people] by-stan ...
  • M
    I knew I could do it but now it appears you can do it too.   There must be an aw ...
  • Melted
    Seeing as how you bullied me into reading this again and now it's twice as long. ...
  • The Dream Seller
    Another great story that conjures a hint of the magical into the everyday world, ...
  • Trigger
    This is a very well written, harrowing even, account of a dog attack.  I'm no ex ...
  • The Raiders
    An enjoyable tale but I tend to agree with Chris and the stodgy 'memory' section ...
  • Melted
    I could be wrong here but i don't think this story meets the brief. That being s ...
  • Intruder
    So, Lou, be prepared for a load of 'What happened?' questions...starting with th ...
  • Holiday Justice
    Speaking French and using parodies of fairy tales do not make you look innocent, ...
  • Holiday Justice
    rigging?
  • Holiday Justice
    vote
  • Holiday Justice
    of
  • Holiday Justice
    kind
  • Holiday Justice
    some
  • Holiday Justice
    posts;
  • Holiday Justice
    word
  • Holiday Justice
    single
  • Holiday Justice
    the
  • Holiday Justice
    with
  • Holiday Justice
    Lou,
  • Holiday Justice
    Take Lily's ten single posts off this and you didn't win.  But if you're happy t ...
  • THE SUM OF ALL THINGS UNEQUAL
    Nice rewrite, keith, and I see you decided 'to hell with the word count', makes ...
  • Holiday Justice
    Well, don't expect me to do the same in return in the spirit of the season...bug ...
  • Merchandise
    Although long in descriptive backstory of the 'wise men' I found a charm in this ...
  • THE SUM OF ALL THINGS UNEQUAL
    First things first, keith, this is pretty much off brief as you can get; no knoc ...
  • Bang
    Yes, a good bit of festive fun; everyone should assassinate at least one neighbo ...
  • Rude-dolph
    So not only did all the other reindeer let Rude-Dolph play their reindeer games ...
  • Francine
    I read this twice, Chris, in case I was missing something and I was, an apprecia ...
  • Pirates in New York
    I liked this but the fact I was left hanging begs the question of this being par ...
  • TIME_AND_PLACE
    Much clearer now, keith, and the fact the time-traveller raised the child comes ...
  • The Red Line
    My American history is a little rusty, Chris, could be because you only have abo ...
  • TIME_AND_PLACE
    keith, sorry for the delay, I shall re-read and add some more crits...or not, it ...
  • Prime
    I like this but it did read a little, not sure 'info-dump' is the right phrase b ...
  • The Treaty of Ghent
    Yes, this is exactly how the world should be. God save The British Empire, bah! ...
  • TIME_AND_PLACE
    Time travel, this always messes with my mind. In the sense that: 'Well, if he di ...
  • Appearances
    Very good, read it as if it was half the length but then it would still be over ...
  • The Name of Death
    You're pretty darn good at this writing lark, BD, it's like you have some supern ...
  • From Ghoulies and Ghosties...
    Creepy.  Pretty sure I'm not scared (or would admit to it) but your 'traditional ...
  • The Wrong House
    I'm a late comer to Game of Thrones but I have been binge watching it so maybe I ...
  • Ascension
    Not scary (saddening though) but an excellent read, so much so I have no idea if ...
  • Marauding Gangs of Children Doing Bad
    Vote rigging, I am surprised, Chris.  I would call you a bounder and a cad but y ...
  • Medieval (revised)
    I always knew The Beat...I can't bring myself to say the name, were evil; I've b ...
  • The Medicine Room
    A hard read.  For someone whose own writing is firmly rooted in fantastical stup ...
  • You Just Never Know What's in Another's Heart
    Bad start, missing apostrophe in the title 'what's'...let's see what else I can ...
  • THE CRIME SCENE
    Very dark but also very visual, almost to the extent of excluding all the other ...
  • Mom's Loan To Lenny
    I like the cynicism in this story, it will ring true for many here I'm sure. A w ...
  • BOARDING SCHOOL, London, 1935
    Like Queen Victoria I do not believe in lesbians; to my knowledge none have ever ...
  • Trojan Horse
    Ken, not that I'm one to stoke anyone's outrage into a full blaze of unadulterat ...
  • Necronomicon
    Very good, mate, the of intrigue you have added keeps the story alive.  I see yo ...
  • A close shave
    Hi Dollys, long time no read, you good?  Spot on, it's like you've hand a hangov ...
  • Forgiveness, Part Six: What goes down, must come up.
    Still reading, mate, still enjoying.  You writing this on the fly or has it beco ...
  • Viking
    I think I agree with Duncan, had you fleshed out the middle (which had me thinki ...
  • Forgiveness, Part Five: Morgan Freeman
    Still rockin' the Casbah, Chris, and i'm still enjoying it.  The BS of Freeman w ...
  • Hunters
    Well, written, engaging and I was happy to see the damsel in distress didn't get ...
  • My Family
    Even the format has got this down pat.  I've read it once, was drawn right in bu ...
  • Forgiveness, Part Four: The Buckinghorse
    Still rollin' high; still got my attention. You'd best have a doozy of an ending ...
  • Bottled Up
    Okay, so I'm not going to argue with your views because I can agree with many of ...
  • Them Earthies
    A nice take on the stray puppy, 'can I keep it, Mom,', idea that is lighthearted ...
  • Coincidence #2
    Nice one.  Split personality droid, I like it.  A few typos but I'm too lazy to ...
  • Romans
    Very interesting, did not know about the completely logical tactic of mass movem ...
  • Nevermind
    I'm hurt...in an amusing way.  Though you appear to making light of my - and you ...
  • Restorations
    I enjoyed reading this BD, steampunk, fantasy, sorrow and a happy ending, all in ...
  • The Hollow Men
    To quote you...  'Wtf was that about?'  So...we're a bird's dream...or we all li ...
  • The Hollow Men
    Maybe we aren't German but A new sentence does always start with a capital...doe ...
  • Burden of Command
    To say it is well written is stating the obvious, you always produce the goods i ...
  • The Vinaigrette Vignette
    Good fun, mate, though I do have an horrific image of you cooking in the kitchen ...
  • REVISED EXCERPT - IMPERFECT HUMAN HEART
    Nice rewrite, devi; it still has it adventurous power but I feel it reads more f ...
  • The Price of Freedom
    Nice one, Sue, a follow on from the way back when 'Steampunk' challenge? Have yo ...
  • NEW - IMPERFECT HUMAN HEART
    A good yarn of battling a storm without and within, with plenty of action.  'A w ...
  • IMPERFECT HUMAN HEART
    In that case it makes sense and I withdraw my whinging.  '...first book...', Ooo ...
  • IMPERFECT HUMAN HEART
    When reading this - which I have done twice, plus skims back - I get the feeling ...
  • The Passing Suite
    A follow on, I like it.  The tale of an unrepentant curmudgeon, that's the way t ...
  • nothing
    Really, you've bailed?  Come on, get yourself back in the fray and start tearing ...
  • Pebble (Try Number Two)
    Brilliant. A literary tantrum.  Almost too scared that you may flip your lid if ...
  • Granada
    Oh I see, I spelt 'points' wrong...asked for that, didn't I?
  • Granada
    A pint?! I'll send you a Vignette of lager.
  • Granada
    I agree, this does allude to many other things off-field but because it jumps ab ...
  • Granada
    Okay, someone likes running the gauntlet.  Again, I'm going to ask the same ques ...
  • A Man of Reason
    I like this Chris, (seems to be a theme for me so far this month), but I - and I ...
  • ...Written by the Victors
    Nice work and hopefully not prophetic.  Had me thinking of Mad Max 3 (Thunderdom ...
  • Father Christmas.
    Hello again, Satyr, breaking the rules again I see with the word count and offer ...
  • Japara; a myth. (version 2)
    Satyr, I really enjoyed reading this story and would ask if it is a retelling or ...
  • Knock on Wood
    Blind Luck and Dumb Luck? Yes?  I hope you wrote this with your tongue firmly pl ...
  • Solstice
    I'll get straight to what I'm thinking, the ending leaves me asking too many que ...
  • Who can really say?
    Hello, good to see you back and kickin' hard.  No argument from me, this is good ...
  • Juniper - Edited(Final Draft}
    I'm not sure if this bounces around too much? Present, dream, present, future... ...
  • Juniper - Edited(Final Draft}
    I've read this a couple of times, Anthony, but I'm unable to gather my thoughts ...
  • The Silly But Beautiful Girl
    It was like you were describing my knackered old face but I do not have the luxu ...
  • That Sound a Ruler Makes When You Bend it Over The Side of a Table and Let Go
    Sooo, how confessional is this piece, Dexter?  At first I thought there was some ...
  • The Chrysalis
    Very good, Chris, a well written tale that ends mysteriously but with a sinister ...
  • Stephanie the New Accountant (Song Link at end of song)
    At first when I was reading this I was thinking it didn't scan  in places for a ...
  • Four Years and a Day
    “Four years after their home was set on fire and pipe bombs destroyed their home ...
  • Four Years and a Day
    Very good, a crackin' yarn indeed. A 'little' over the limit but I care not.  I ...
  • Chapter One
    So, to conclude, this story has definitely got legs. You have given plenty of sc ...
  • Chapter One
    ...without bidding as the brain goes into 'critical' overload and wants to find ...
  • Chapter One
    As we're doing this piecemeal, I'll start with the typos I've spotted. They are ...
  • Chapter One
    Man, I was half way through my critique when the bastard deleted it!  Man, I'm g ...
  • The Peephole
    I like the twisted aspects to this. Not only the 'normal' serial killer but 'Car ...
  • A Beautiful Day
    Nice one, Chris, really enjoyed that. I know you hate comparisons...so I'm not g ...
  • My Life Down Under
    First off a few typos, BB, lower case 'i' in a few places and capital letters ne ...
  • Flickering Thoughts
    I shall be throwing a bucket of cold water over my TV and X-Box from now on; I w ...
  • Scissors of Mercy
    Like the title too...'In the temple of love...'
  • Laptop.
    I was trying to find a way of getting a 'seed' pun in this review but however ha ...
  • Riggs
    Brilliant, Chris, a hard-boiled Christine.  Enjoy the wise cracking motor, perfe ...
  • Kitchen Turbulence
    Nice, kitchen based satire; a grown up Toy Story.  Some great imagery and turns ...
  • A Grim Christmas
    'He knows when you are sleeping He'll put you in your place He's got a silver, s ...
  • Ghosts of Christmas Past
    Cool. I pictured 'Mistletoe' as a Batman baddy, slightly naf but menacing all th ...
  • The Mother Load
    This is very good. Well written, entertaining and thoughtful.  The question whet ...
  • They Buried Him in a Box?
    Nice one, Tiberius, pretty Bizarro.  I must admit, you're writing - which is as ...
  • Franks Giving
    Well written and entertaining (apart from the Elvis Costello reference...I hate ...
  • Paint the Tiger Purple
    One more thing - 'cos you got me thinking - wouldn't it be that Henrietta would ...
  • Edgar's Life
    Good stuff, Chris...  He's paralyzed Edgar... from the Orange drinks all the way ...
  • Sleeping like a baby
    I too want to meet the penguins.  Is this Bizarro? Like others, many, many other ...
  • Home
    I agree with Chris, 'There but for the grace of God...' an' all that.  Powerful ...
  • Blindfolded Truth
    After the first read I though that the room was not the only thing that was insc ...
  • Relevance
    I read this last night having done some socialising and I really enjoyed the rhy ...
  • I don't think we're in Dork anymore
    Erm, thinking of leaving any space on the wee book servers for anyone else?  Yes ...
  • Poirot's Fantasy
    The bobbies will decide on suicide, less paperwork.  Another fun yarn and read, ...
  • Bloke Bird
    Ooooh, Ernest, I do believe you are looking for a fight with this one. I, as a r ...
  • The Visit
    Cool, a ghost story but also - probably incorrectly - I got the feeling this cou ...
  • I don't think we're in Zork anymore
    F1...F2...F3...F4...F5...I wish I'd kept the manual...F6...  Brilliant, and you' ...
  • x
    'Victorian Secrets'? That sounds like a steampunk version of 'Fifty Shades'; 'Fi ...
  • Such Pain
    Oh yeah, and I like the delicate subtlety of the difference between first and la ...
  • The Herald
    I must admit I was trying to second guess the change in meaning from first to la ...
  • x
    icon, your mind must be a wonderful place to wander around; the glimpses we get ...
  • The Silver Arrow
    Vanity eh...will that be allowed in your republic?
  • Hannah
    Oh by the way I believe the full stop after Mr, Mrs etc is not required in Engli ...
  • Hannah
    Hi Dollys.  Do I detect a little cheating going on here? For a start, the first ...
  • x
    As an exponent of writing under the influence of alcohol I think I should extend ...
  • Collateral Damage
    Yes.
  • Palindrome
    Got it, it was a typo.  Home Rule for Ireland was 1886, yeah?
  • Burden of Truth
    Conspirafessional.
  • Prologue
    Intriguing, no doubt, but also not very informative as to where the story to fol ...
  • Marmaduke
    fun
  • Marmaduke
    Factual.
  • Collateral Damage
    Gusto-comical.
  • Step 0
    Couldn'tenjoyitproperlyasIhadtoswitchthescreenoffseveraltimes whenthewifewalkedi ...
  • Another One Bites the Dust
    I tried to approach this without the mind set of 'they're out to trick me' and s ...
  • The Human Terminators: Origins
    Dom, welcome to the multi-sub club, though you have a few more to go to get into ...
  • The Cold Can Burn Like Fire
    Twinkle, twinkle, little...
  • The Cold Can Burn Like Fire
    A bear in a nighty ain't the weirdest denizen in my mindscape, you wanna see the ...
  • In Case of Emergency
    I think only Hamlet might top this in bodycount of the cast.  Enjoyed it though. ...
  • Straight Out of Hell
    Bugger! Just me that was duped then, Keberly. Is there an emoticon of a sad face ...
  • Bomaru's Quest, Part IV
    I wonder if JK ever wanted to boil Potter's head in the Goblet of Acid? The prob ...
  • M I N E
    I was going to make some comments but then I got a sudden bout of drinker's bloc ...
  • Rough Justice
    Apparently there was a real case in 2000, Gwent, Wales but since then there have ...
  • Rough Justice
    Nice one Ernest, a portrait of England's White Van Family life. But, and you may ...
  • The Hearing
    Crackin' (double) twist, I did not see that coming at all.  Perhaps end it '...b ...
  • The Pact
    I think a local idiom would suffice: 'Boss, lah.'  Read it for the enjoyment, fo ...
  • Bestiary
    The Princess Bride, I believe, BZA.  I have an opening line to one of many aband ...
  • Ender's Game
    Chronomancer, what a cool word.  The dialogue in this piece is pretty spot on, n ...
  • Sleep, Alexander
    This is pretty powerful stuff and I think I get it...but would like for you to c ...
  • Traveler
    I am on a train, travelling to places new...is that right?  And, if I understand ...
  • my special ed class teacher
    Crackin' job, BB, you have captured a complete scene, from which I have taken an ...
  • An Evening View
    N'owt wrong with this in my opinion.  It's a poem and I understood it and 'got' ...
  • An Evening View
    Ahhhhhh my eyes are bleeding.
  • The Ghost's Lament
    This had me thinking of Studio Ghibli, I can easily imagine this animated in tha ...
  • Mermaid Wishes
    My favourite line so far...  ....would bubble and pop  as the foam does on the s ...
  • How Much is that iPhone in the Window?
    Get the meaning/message so that's a bonus for me. Looks and reads like poetry as ...
  • Saltwater Cures All Wounds
    You're welcome, Night-rose, and feel free to call me star as often as you like i ...
  • The View from the Admiral's Table
    Yup, that's a poem, Leo and quite a good one too in my humble opinion.  amicabil ...
  • Alohomora
    Right, now we're into the territory of poetry that leaves me like Gretel, comple ...
  • Spin
    Yeah the 'a' or 'an' thing, tricky, innit?  I tend to go with what sounds right ...
  • Spin
    Hi, NJ, looking for an excuse to goof off from what I'm supposed to be doing and ...
  • To Have and to Hold
    On the other hand, I love the stars and don't give a fig about what people think ...
  • THIS IS BRILLIANT AND HAS NOTHING TO DO WITH THE SUBJECT, BUT ESSENTIAL TO GOOD WRITING
    If you're an underachiever, I think I need a new sub-category to plonk my ass in ...
  • THIS IS BRILLIANT AND HAS NOTHING TO DO WITH THE SUBJECT, BUT ESSENTIAL TO GOOD WRITING
    Oh yeah, nearly forgot, and you come here to show off your writing skills too. Y ...
  • THIS IS BRILLIANT AND HAS NOTHING TO DO WITH THE SUBJECT, BUT ESSENTIAL TO GOOD WRITING
    So, you can fix/build motorbikes, deal with the ravages of man-flu, will earn a ...
  • THIS IS BRILLIANT AND HAS NOTHING TO DO WITH THE SUBJECT, BUT ESSENTIAL TO GOOD WRITING
    Why do I get the feeling you ended with a playful innuendo, devi?  I think part ...
  • THIS IS BRILLIANT AND HAS NOTHING TO DO WITH THE SUBJECT, BUT ESSENTIAL TO GOOD WRITING
    Fascinating stuff, devi, I think you have just given me permission to goof off f ...
  • Give a Dog a Bone
    Posting a second, illegal piece, and then demanding a review...you like running ...
  • And then there was Schrödinger
    Just in case you don't read my reply to your comment on my 'losing' piece, I off ...
  • No, Really . . .
    By the way, some great lines of humo(u)r in this, had me laughing a couple of ti ...
  • No, Really . . .
    Are you channelling Enid Blyton, devi?  I am getting a very disturbing picture b ...
  • Coming Home to Roost
    Nicely written, Dexter, and the guilt of wishing someone at the end of their lif ...
  • Sara  -
    By the way, I meant to mention...  '...is just one more thing they need to regul ...
  • Sara  -
    Erm...  Dancing naked, or nearly, in a darkened bar full of horny men can for so ...
  • Cronic Dystopia
    Couldn't they pick another clock to use as the standard?  I only know one Canadi ...
  • The Moment that Never Happened
    girlbird, you said yourself that something was 'bugging you' about this and I ag ...
  • Tales Aboard the Chronicle
    One more thing...  Aloud, the Cap’n bellowed: “Stay yer blade!”  ...can you bell ...
  • Tales Aboard the Chronicle
    Crackin' yarn , landlubber, but I'm a bit miffed I had to read the longer versio ...
  • And then there was Schrödinger
    Nice one.  Begs a lot of questions, all of which I'm far too stupid to ask or un ...
  • Time is Silent
    Ahh, you've changed it already. Still editing, hey?
  • Cure for the Itch
    I had suspected you might not be Canadian but now I know you're an alien. So, wh ...
  • Slave to Temptation
    Just to balance out Duncan's gobbing off to the extreme...  I enjoyed this.  (Bu ...
  • I Am A Living Hermit
    So, before realising you had put a glossary at the end I Googled 'Hikikomori' wi ...
  • Master Perkin's Slave Plantation
    Aaaaaaaaahhhh!
  • Master Perkin's Slave Plantation
    Rapery? You young 'uns and your rapery of the English language.
  • Master Perkin's Slave Plantation
    Good to see you back, Anthony, but I - and I know I could be missing something, ...
  • Spirits - Revising
    Oh yes, I like this one much more.  Very minimalist.
  • CASA
    Shame on you, Dollys, trying to give me an addiction.  I'm going to read this ag ...
  • Yours Truly, A Rewriter
    Nicely done and I think I can speak for us all here when I say 'We've all been t ...
  • Climb
    I can hear Brock shouting 'dude' a lot and 'radical'.  I like this (technically ...
  • The Right Kind of Whispers
    'course it's alright, why ever not.  When it comes to appreciating poetry I am f ...
  • untitled
    Hi Devi,  Good to see you back and this is quite a fanfare to return with.  A ne ...
  • To Light, Ignite... And Bring To Life
    Pretty cool, our first wholesome addiction. Nothing but good can come of this. ...
  • My Affliction
    Oh yes, I like this, NJ.  I had suspected they were 'imaginary friends' pretty q ...
  • Behaving Badly at Christmas
    'Take me with you, I can see...I can see perfectly'  I've let this one stew in m ...
  • Behaving Badly at Christmas
    Ernest, I have a horrible feeling this is a trap, like 'Good luck,' but Donald P ...
  • Star
    I read this a few days ago but because I wasn't totally sure what I made of it t ...
  • Once a Year
    'I'm dreaming of a dark Christmas...'  So, you let out the inner Goth at last, T ...
  • A Very Mr. Darcy Christmas
    Good job on the rework, Trish, it reads better to me now. Though many would thin ...
  • On the possession and ritual slaughter of hermaphrodite pigs
    Not only do I get to read some sweet-ass writing on this site but I get educated ...
  • So This Is Christmas
    Ah, you got me, Dollys. There was me thinking I was all clever because I 'knew' ...
  • Luna's Rose
    A superhero stuffed penguin...what's not to like about that. Pingu with an attit ...
  • Say Something
    Hi Dollys, to start with I'm going out on a limb by trying to make comments on c ...
  • The Cateyville Baptist Church Brawl
    So, I had to take a quick look to see where you're from and the answer was Noo J ...
  • Tiny Dancer
    The descriptions of the dancing seemed perfect to a two left footed hippo like m ...
  • Lydia Moss and the League of Shadows
    Duncan, I was about to read and slate, I mean, comment on your work when I reali ...
  • Spin
    Good stuff, letting us know enough to keep us interested and want to know more a ...
  • King of Pain
    That's what I was hoping for.  43 years married, way to go, bro. Maybe I should ...
  • Goodbye Blue Sky
    I've been thinking, Will, the second time this week it is and I'm quite proud of ...
  • Goodbye Blue Sky
    Apparently one bloke - who, granted, was in a bunker - lived until he was 80. We ...
  • Goodbye Blue Sky
    Fair enough, Will, I stand corrected and move one more step toward being perfe.. ...
  • Goodbye Blue Sky
    I just thought I'd say 'perfect' again to get the hat-trick. Stupid, limited voc ...
  • Goodbye Blue Sky
    Hey, Will, now I'm no nuclear physicist, not even a normal one if I'm being hone ...
  • Step by Step
    Nice job, Tiberius, I really liked this. I got a full on mental picture from the ...
  • Elegie
    Consider me educated.  It pretty much looks to me that it fills all the criteria ...
  • Elegie
    Why do I always feel more educated when I have read one of your stories. Please ...
  • Zombies
    A good idea but there are some typos that need sorting.   '...shuffels through t ...
  • The Call
    Hi NJ, a rewrite hey?  So is it over the word limit by a couple of hundred or so ...
  • Ella
    So even Cinderella is bad-ass in this version, that's pretty cool and would make ...
  • Run, Lola, run
    Oh yeah, meant to say, really like the last line.
  • The Tower
    Nicely done, tragedy heaped upon tragedy. Truly a dark fairy tale indeed.  Didn' ...
  • The Call
    Hi NJ, so, who do you think you are, me? Some serious and blatant rule breaking ...
  • The Three Little Men
    Before I say anything else - this is mental and I think I liked it - but is ther ...
  • The Truth
    Wow, can I have a slug of what you appear to have been drinking. This is well tr ...
  • Everybody Needs A Bosom For A Pillow
    Damn song is stuck in my head now, thanks Sue.
  • Everybody Needs A Bosom For A Pillow
    Corner Shop, just got the title.
  • The Princess
    I agree with RJ, there are some unresolved questions, however, this is exactly a ...
  • Revised, Mary`s Child
    Just got to that word in the second paragraph.  '...offered me an awesome amount ...
  • Slenderella
    Speaking out of turn, JP, I think quite a few people (73% to be exact) have some ...
  • Ella
    I'm proud of ya!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
  • Ella
    Nice one, Will, well written and entertaining. Maybe a window into the dark mire ...
  • In Plain Sight
    It's from the film, Will...  http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=_kKXvDaJIzQ  ...I do ...
  • Darkness falls
    Good work Duncan, you've made a good story even better and I like the lexicon, I ...
  • In Plain Sight
    Cheers to you Duncan?!  I see how it is, some butch ice hockey thug from Canada ...
  • In Plain Sight
    Why let a silly thing like the internet get in the way of what could be a beauti ...
  • In Plain Sight
    Fair points, Will, but I - and you have to allow for the fact I am stupid - did ...
  • In Plain Sight
    Beware the mutants.  Could this be a reflection on today's society, wherein the ...
  • Goodness is Blind
    I like the story Sue, and the twist about whose head was a rollin' in the end. ...
  • Falling Without a Sound
    Hi Mellony,  Well, not that I know about these things you understand, but in thi ...
  • Party time
    I'm glad you explained that to this Englander too.  Excellent working in of fant ...
  • Ash and Rain
    I'm sick of all these angels stalking our streets in disguise, messing with our ...
  • Nail Polish
    I think the fact you haven't concluded this tale is the right thing to do. This ...
  • Cupitorverum
    Excellent two-footed leap into a steampunk world, brass and copper and cogs and ...
  • Archimedes Claw
    Hey Will,  Now don't judge me for this (having said that, I would) but I can't g ...
  • HITLER
    I quite like the 'story' behind this and there are elements of steampunk but I t ...
  • The Marching Man's Son
    As usual some deft painting with words, that is your signature and a cracking re ...
  • The Uprising
    You have got to be proud of this, Trish?  I am impressed that you have built an ...
  • Those Magnificent Men...
    Brilliant Dollys, by far the most steampunk piece yet, with 'machines' aplenty. ...
  • The Perfectionists
    Very good Sue, and don't take this the wrong way, I like the hint of steampunk r ...
  • Aces and Eights
    Hi, NJ, good story and it obviously has legs...but is it steampunk?  I know you' ...
  • Songbird
    Some apostrophe madness to start  the ball rolling, Erica...  '...be the towns s ...
  • Blackbriar
    Well written and I like the Catch 22 ending too. Found the characters engaging a ...
  • Escape from Stalag-Luft XV
    A whole new meaning to prisoner of war 'camp'.  Big fan of the old big build up ...
  • Cobras and Pit Bulls
    Hi Dollys, a quick point that I think would make the piece have a little more de ...
  • Adulthood is Overrated
    Somewhere deep inside..okay right near the surface to be honest, I wanted the ol ...
  • Marcus Speaks
    Spot on Sue, it's Saturday night and words do not come easily to me, and are gen ...
  • Freedom of Stupidity
    Found myself grinning at the end, so as far as I'm concerned you have achieved w ...
  • It's About Remembering What Came Before You...
    Funny, and the thing about it is, I can see 'Finn Minor' doing/having done this ...
  • Suburbia's Vice
    Hi Erica, you okay?  Here in the Motherland, 'choking the chicken' may have a di ...
  • Little Girl Lost
    Hi Trish,  Don't want to be the one to ruin the party but your first line is loa ...
  • Puddle of You
    Hail Tiberius,  Okay, you robbed me. I wanna know what happened on that fateful ...
  • Taste My Fist, Wizard
    I used to get stabbing growing pains in my legs when I was a kid, does that help ...
  • All By Myself
    Good re-write Dexter, but, a well-roasted chicken refreshes the soul?!  Does the ...
  • Creatures Great and Small
    I will freely admit this piece has gone right over my head on some levels.  Is t ...
  • Practicing Pretend
    Brilliantly written, sickening to read.  Typo...  Breathe in..A world where rose ...
  • Drifter (Revised)
    No flippant comments this time, Will.  I like this mate, and if I am right about ...
  • Drifter (Revised)
    An insurance salesman.
  • Trapped (Rev 6 - 15 days left)
    Excellent use of tension and panic, threw me into the pit with Audrey, which has ...
  • A Friend Like No Other
    Good pick up, Sue, after such a long break in the thread.  I also see everyone e ...
  • A Friend Like No Other
    No, it wouldn't.
  • Under the rainbow
    Erm...yeah. Crackin' piece of writing...erm, are you trying to tell us something ...
  • Training
    Movies make it out with a ringing sound and a pulsing, rythmic beat as if the ch ...
  • At Sea (Revision #?)
    Just before you pound your head, Pam...  '...hurt so I they are not working prop ...
  • The Tango
    Ah, Dollys, found one...  'A Smouldering look to each other...'    and another.. ...
  • Under the influence
    Having just written a pithy, witty response and then somehow deleted it, I am a ...
  • Sufferance & Resilience
    Completely off the wall, X, I like it.  I am the door, hear my hinges creak.  A ...
  • Nut Job
    My life would be oh so much more carefree if that was the worst thing I've ever ...
  • The Twilight Doorway
    Aww shucks, Sue, now I'm blushing.
  • Convergence
    Cesidio, have you been back to alter this since I first read it? I might be goin ...
  • Blue Sky
    Pretty much thought that was what you were suggesting, CA, and it didn't detract ...
  • What Lies Beneath
    Crackin' look inside the mind of a nut-job, I enjoyed it.  My thoughts - for wha ...
  • Going Bush
    Nice one, Dexter, just goes to prove the grass might be greener over there but i ...
  • Excuse ME?!
    Ah, the good old 'two nations separated by a common language'.  Well written sto ...
  • Mortified
    I'm not of the female persuasion, and always careful to make sure I am tucked in ...
  • The Little Things
    A mirror for all of us to take a glance in.
  • The Good Citizen
    On the other hand, christaleste, it's handy to know how the system works, should ...
  • The Good Citizen
    This is good old dark humour indeed, I almost feared it was going to get darker ...
  • Romancing the Throne
    Methinks, the lady doth protest too much...
  • Romancing the Throne
    You claimed mine wasn't true but I can see this as being totally factual.  I've ...
  • Street Theatre
    I wondered where this was going but in the end I was satisfied with the circular ...
  • Hot Stuff
    ...even if you did give the punch line away in the title.
  • Hot Stuff
    The world's longest Christmas Cracker joke...I like it.
  • When A Gun Isn't A Gun
    Charming tale that speaks volumes - impressive within 500 words - about a loving ...
  • Pollocks
    When I saw 'Pollocks' I thought I could guess where this was going but you were ...
  • How To Kill Grass
    Sue, your Dad just keeps going up in my estimation. If I give you five stars wil ...
  • When Boots Are Too Big
    Adam it's only the third of the month, let the ideas stew in your bonce for a wh ...
  • How To Kill Grass
    You see, Sue, sometimes you have to be cruel to be kind but in my case I was jus ...
  • Memories of Army Sniper School
    Hello, Cesidio, good to meet you, mate.  Good writing, had me there in the gra ...
  • The New Girl
    17.  But that's both of them end to end...and the laces too.  I've been thin ...
  • Secrets of the Samurai Squid
    Will, you need to sort out the layout of your speech, you've got new paragraphs ...
  • The New Girl
    ...and it's about to start all over again.  Crackin' yarn that I think most of ...
  • The Mutaka
    First a question, RJ, is this true or based on an experience you've had?  Real ...
  • Lyrically Illiterate
    Hold my breath? Is that a veiled threat of impending strangulation, Sue?  As f ...
  • Kudos Thomas
    I like the quirkiness of this and the writing style but I'm not sure it took me ...
  • The Wait
    Good job, the end of the world and all done from a little boy's bedroom. Probabl ...
  • The Painter Boy
    Okay I'll be honest when I started to read this I thought, 'Jesus, how many eggs ...
  • Eloise
    I could be wrong, Ernest, but I believe 'frigger' would be the female equivalent ...
  • Marmota Monax
    Dr Who? Really? You like Dr Who?
  • Rant
    I too worked in a call centre for a while, it was for a major shopping chain and ...
  • Jumper
    Hey, KD, I read this as a standard lost love suicide thing and then I read your ...
  • Over
    I like this because I think it's quite illuminating of a lot of relationships th ...
  • The Destroyer Month
    A bit prophetic this one, Sue, seeing as how the British Isles is sinking and be ...
  • Deadly Angel
    Yes, just goes to prove us blokes are cleverer than you birds. A perfect piece o ...
  • Sin Eater
    I like this. but with the limits of the challenge I feel like I have been robbed ...
  • Be Mine...
    By all that is Holy, NJ, how girlie is this? Valentines Day, crushes on teacher ...
  • Eloise
    Another good entry, Ernest, with enough tech to keep us laymen interested and no ...
  • Rant
    Yay, Zanne, kick 'em in the modum!  Important thing is, do you feel better now ...
  • Milo and the Junior Hi
    I can see this, which to my mind, is a job well done.  Funny, smooth and visua ...
  • The Price
    There's a lot to get in with this story and I think the word count limit is the ...
  • The Long Yesterday (Revised)
    Okay, yet again I'm the thick kid in the class and didn't see it was a mental pr ...
  • Past Lives
    Ow, ow, ow!  This reads well but it still feels like the opening of a much lon ...
  • Past Lives
    Hi Dollys,  I haven't read any comments below so if I am repeating stuff, plea ...
  • The Legend of Lizzie Dearheart
    As usual, ZanneP, your writing is excellent at taking the reader within the stor ...
  • Lucky Man
    JR, this is brilliant. I will admit now to having a look at your profile as I as ...
  • Used up
    Hi NJ,  Right, let's start with some pedantic nonsense...  'Groupies willing ...
  • Lucy
    Smut.  Well written smut but smut nonetheless.  Yet again you bring  a solid ...
  • The Lazarus Effect
    And now I'm going to have to agree with Lanette, I too was a little confused. ...
  • Lord of the Christmas (Lord of the Rings parody)
    Which point was valid? The lack of elf mutilation or the fact that snow isn't th ...
  • Lord of the Christmas (Lord of the Rings parody)
    Yup, you didn't lie, dead elf. But there was only the mention of a dead elf and ...
  • One born every minute
    Nice one Dani, I too was thinking of hitting this from JC's point of view but I ...
  • Professor Moore
    In a lazy mood at the moment, so I won't write an indepth critique just a few wo ...
  • Chemical Light
    Sue, you do know my advice comes with an idiocy disclaimer don't you?  I'm the ...
  • Chemical Light
    Hi Sue,  I can see why you gather such praise for your writing, the relaxed vo ...
  • Last Chapter -16: The Gathering
    Hi Dollys, you good?  Erm, I'm not sure I consider this some of the strongest ...
  • N/A
    Had to Google 'lorno', not sure it's ever going to out do it's harder sibling (p ...
  • N/A
    Hi LostV,  Just dropped by to drop my tuppence worth into the tranquil waters. ...
  • The Guardian
    Hi NJ, things good with you I hope?  Okay let's start with what I think in gen ...
  • Cassia
    Noooo, why did you stop there, my imagination is running away with itself.  Ex ...
  • In which Solomon Fierce receives an offer he can't refuse
    You had me from hello...no wait, that's from a film isn't it?  The title rocks ...
  • Zombies in the Mist: Memoirs of a Zombie Nymphomaniac
    Well, Kim, my advice would be...leave it as it is.  I have always thought rule ...
  • Pandora's Damnation
    Pretty darn cool, Lanette  This bit tripped me for a second...  Keep your do ...
  • The Moon in Exaggetarius
    Atrees, have you heard from the Moon's legal team yet? Such defamation of her ch ...
  • Bad Blood
    Hi NJ, very impressed with your tenacity to write the best story you can and it ...
  • The River
    Hi Wendy,  I like this, mainly because I'd liked to know what happens next...w ...
  • Luna's Reaper
    Powerful stuff ZanneP, had me thinking of the great myths of human culture. In f ...
  • Its Just the beginning
    Real holiday, real horror, what is more scary than the realities of life?  A p ...
  • My Apologies...Edgar Poe
    Hi LV,  Okay I've had someone klever read, and explain, this to me and I must ...
  • Candleburn
    I'm late to the party and pretty much everything I would have said, has been sai ...
  • John Turns Potty in Fifty Shades of Twilight
    Knew it.  Have you tried a dating agency?  Good funny read but, like others ...
  • My Apologies...Edgar Poe
    Bear with me, just need to find my thesuarus and dictionary...and someone to rea ...
  • Witches Brew
    You know what, I am officially monumentally stupid.  I did not get the cat tra ...
  • The "Calm" Before the Storm
    Pedro, I stand corrected and offer my apologies, my fault for misunderstanding t ...
  • An Ancient Evil
    Not at all Sue, didn't know they were Shakespeare's word - I was asleep in Engli ...
  • Romeo
    Oi-Oi, Geezer,  Another funny piece mate, well written with realistic dialogue ...
  • Stupid Monkey
    Stupid monkey’s go in the closet?  Oh dear, this really is a stupid monkey tha ...
  • The Fix
    Pretty much from the start - and this is due to the nature of the challenge's ti ...
  • Lemon Sherbet
    One sentence, that's cool...not for my asthma though.  Good imagery, like the ...
  • On the Other Side of the Mountain
    Aftab, as much as I hate to have to do this, I owe you an apology. I completely ...
  • The Assembly Hall
    Hi Dollys, keeping well I hope?  Let me explain a failing I have. When it come ...
  • Confidence is thinking you’ll wake up tomorrow
    A good piece of writing - in my opinion - should evoke some emotion or reaction ...
  • Eternally Yours
    Ah yes, dead, the best way to approach marriage. My father, a wise man, once sai ...
  • Dark With Wrath, Full of Rage
    Chilling on so many levels.  One small point, you have already mentioned those ...
  • Demure
    What if it's a bunny wabbit with a patch, a pierced ear and a tattoo?  'jersey ...
  • N/A
    I'm scared...but on the other hand he didn't have to buy her a drink.  Images ...
  • First Kiss
    Yes, at last a first kiss we can be proud of. One nil to the boys.  A good ang ...
  • A Heartmost Kiss
    Now, now devi, as the Lord of Laziness myself, I smell the scent of half-assedne ...
  • The Gypsy's Touch
    I'm British Lanette, if we see a foreigner in a vineyard we generally shoot them ...
  • First Kiss
    Hi Dollys, keeping well I hope?  Good humorous work and nicely stomach churnin ...
  • Temptation
    Okay, Atrees, somewhere down there you said much more writing like this would dr ...
  • Ladybird
    Admit it Geezer, your mates didn't really rescue you in time did they?  Good l ...
  • The Bear
    Classic Grandpa's yarn, -he is a Granddad isn't he, the papa thing is totally US ...
  • Hard Luck
    My bad, John, next time I'll dump the vanity and read people's work with my glas ...
  • Hard Luck
    Right Geezer, where to start.  The Scouse 'th' is sounded 'd'; as in 'dis goes ...
  • Hard Luck
    Did you change the 'lah' or did it never exist? Or do I, yet again, need to up t ...
  • Dinner in Damascus
    I can't read this piece as the word count is 666 and you are obviously Satan...a ...
  • Tea for Two?
    Hi Dollys,  Can you guess what's coming now...  sustaining,  plate-throwing, ...
  • Optimistic Americans
    Nice one Devi.  Over here it's known as the 'Umbongo' joke but it's always fun ...
  • Mourning Bath
    Smut, absolute smut.  This is the kind of thing that should be banned...but be ...
  • From the Bottom Up
    Good angle, well handled.  A gentle piece like this shows deserved confidence ...
  • You Can Deal With This or You Can Steal That.
    Fair enough, Devi.  Erm, any chance you can hook me up with these people I cou ...
  • You Can Deal With This or You Can Steal That.
    I have one question, actually just a little clarity on one point.  How does sh ...
  • Little Secrets
    All good advice from Bob and I agree with his critique regarding the story.  T ...
  • The Middle Child
    I won't repeat anything that has already been said as you have, to your credit, ...
  • This Sweet Life
    I think you've just written about '...stealing from your mother's pursey...' ...