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Last Compliment: 9/19/2017

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  • Crabbels the Rabbit, also featuring Lexey Foxx in:  Bucket of Trouble
    Nice one Chris, a fun read about how the real way hook ups proceed in real life. ...
  • An Evening Affair
    Absolutely inspired mate. I'm going to brag I had an inkling what was going on b ...
  • Posh Nosh
    Houdini jokes, clever, life leaking into art and all that.  It was fun and the r ...
  • Tasty Morsels
    I like the way you pulled the rug from under me, as being the old codger I am, I ...
  • The Invite
    I can't give 'English teacher' gravitas to my advice but I do agree completely w ...
  • Special
    That was great fun, PD, I often wonder when these adventurous, travelogue types ...
  • Where is HaShem?
    This struggle of a man questioning his god with an ending that keeps the questio ...
  • A Bloody Bad Life
    As, PD, said, there's a five hundred year discrepancy between your story and the ...
  • Singapore Has Fallen.
    Some minor points...  '...eldest woman and at forty-two, it was she.' Small, pet ...
  • Not all There
    Nice use of the 24 hour slot we were allocated, ran smoothly to my ear...eye...w ...
  • Trial by Hak’enra.
    Sorry, Kitty, was just about to read this when summit came up, I shall be back. ...
  • Day 1
    First off, I like your 'icon', cool bike.  This is a well crafted, with believab ...
  • The Lonetar
    I'm in two minds whether I like the conversational style or not. I feel like I'm ...
  • Rotten Possum
    To my mind, I think you have used the required words in the most invisible, natu ...
  • Sex Appeal
    Top notch satire.  Substitute 'cockroach' for 'woman' and we've got a modern dis ...
  • Operation FSB
    Good laugh, mate, a splendid farce with dire consequences.  Also like your cleve ...
  • Tanganyika
    Just testing the e-mail notification as planned; you get anything?
  • Porkies
    Well written, enjoyable, believable, witty and lying to the fore but (and it's a ...
  • Just a tad
    This is a little strange as I had a close friend (and I am using friend in the t ...
  • The Unwaged .(Revised)
    I agree wholeheartedly with WeBookUser; this story has great potential but the t ...
  • The secret the storm hides
    This has changed...hasn't it?  Where's the bishop/cannon/priest asking someone t ...
  • Everything will be ok
    Jeez, way to make a bloke feel sad...then hopeful...then sad again.  I'm going t ...
  • Sean
    Very good, I was happy to go along with you for the ride not looking for errors ...
  • The Falling Man
    '...threw me...'  I'm an idiot, ignore all my words...and punctuation.
  • Things Remembered
    I understood he was a fire marshal after he opened the box it's the initial use ...
  • Numbers
    So, you read the brief and thought, I know, I'll go this way instead.  I enjoyed ...
  • Holiday Justice
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  • Things Remembered
    Nice one, Ken, an enjoyable read indeed and although I knew he was the arsonist ...
  • Merry Christmas from Arthur C.
    I'm a little reticent about commenting and I'll be honest as to why; I'm a littl ...
  • Christmas Beginnings
    In fear of losing my masculinity, that was lovely...and now I feel a need to cro ...
  • Last present.
    A few of the typos that need addressing.  '...luck [lucky?]son of a bitch.'  '.. ...
  • The Treaty of Ghent
    Nice one, tied up my gripes good and proper.  If only this were true...but then ...
  • Day of Reckoning
    Once this got going the tension was really good. The metamorphosis, the chase, t ...
  • Hex Nihilo
    Very entertaining and a nice expansion on the original piece, with all the lore, ...

  • Typos to start with...  'Chris Wallace: Well, Thhanks [Thanks...unless you were ...
  • Nothing
    Weird crossing of timelines, Ken, I've just passed thoughts in a similar vein on ...
  • Traditions
    That entertained me, I did kinda guess the outcome but I think that's going to b ...
  • Poison Creek
    And while I'm being picky...  '...it was as sure as the sun rising and setting.' ...
  • Poison Creek
    This is still very good, very good indeed, Ken, but to keep your feet on the gro ...
  • Poison Creek
    Impressed, Ken, frontier horror.  Is it 20% bigger than it should be and do you ...
  • Praying hands
    A lot of stones in the second and third paragraphs from the end...or at least I ...
  • Incarcerated
    Oh ay, you saved her...probably.  Very good, gripping stuff, an excellent exerci ...
  • The Piper
    None of my business but that never stops me, I would suggest you look at the dia ...
  • The Piper
    The ending was pretty obvious from the get go but I did enjoy the journey gettin ...
  • Floaters (Revised)
    Rob, up to you of course but I wouldn't say 'my story's cliched' before anyone r ...
  • Upon Silence
    I liked this but I also have a feeling of an over-egged pudding; too much drawn ...
  • Hauntings
    I think you have something here but in all honesty it does need quite a bit of w ...
  • Meeting Dylan Thomas
    Pretty powerful stuff and a subject we must all face one time or another, playin ...
  • Down Texas Way
    Have you taken down your cave monster one?
  • Down Texas Way
    An entertaining dialogue but it did come across as a little anti-climatic and a ...
  • Trojan Horse
    I don't know what you're all whinging about, I always get at least four stars an ...
  • Depths
    Quite a bit of repetitive word use in the first paragraph: first, both, back. N ...
  • Movie Star
    Oh, one thing, after...  “I’m not kidding. Look!”  ...maybe another lie explaini ...
  • Follow Cat
    Erm, where should I follow the cat to?  The word count says '1134' but all i see ...
  • Forgiveness, Part Seven: Heading to the O.K. Corral
    Still a fun read, Chris, but I'm not sure all of this episode moved the story on ...
  • Babysitter Betrayal
    I like this n8, the twist caught me out and that's a plus.  I did have trouble w ...
  • Penury
    I've just read it again, the opening, and I think what it might be is that I don ...
  • Hagionomicon
    A follow on, clever. This your plan all along?  Couple of typos...  'He slippedh ...
  • Casino Ad Val
    Oh, before I forget, this had me laughing and only because I do this all of the ...
  • Casino Ad Val
    Nice to see a gentleman removing the glass ceiling for Government assassins ever ...
  • The soldier
    First thing that caught my attention was you mention the 'lesson learned from th ...
  • Clockwork Conversation
    This is very atmospheric, the idea of this old clock shop with its cantankerous ...
  • Super Heroes
    Let me start with the capitals and underlining...erm, no.  Don't like it, get ri ...
  • Super Heroes
    When you introduced Beller I was impressed with the character you created in suc ...
  • Cryptonomicon
    Good stuff, Duncan, a exciting tale peppered with the right amount of lighter mo ...
  • Always The Same
    Hi Elise,  Let's start by saying it is pretty obvious you can stitch a pretty go ...
  • The Painter
    Okay, Ken, I'm going to start with some typos because I spotted them as I went t ...
  • The Painter
    Also, I know I'm going on but I read it again, when the commandant says he must ...
  • BIOS
    Kyle, there's nothing wrong with this but it did leave me feeling like I had eat ...
  • Wings Of Our Mind
    I'll be honest, Louisa, I'm not a fan of the 'it was all a dream' ending even if ...
  • Unto the Breach...
    Nice one, mate, action certainly is your forte.  Couple of questions; there are ...
  • The last of Harborwind
    Oh ay, I wanted to see the fight.  I'll be honest, I found the dialogue a bit of ...
  • Take Twenty Seven
    An excellent act of escapology, dump the restrictions of the extended number and ...
  • The Old Man's Story
    You have created quite an atmospheric piece but it could lose some flab here and ...
  • Count to Five
    So, you've left me with many questions and I think that's a good thing here a bi ...
  • The Pencil
    I will admit I did not find the first two sentences too enticing, rather too hea ...
  • A Beautiful Picnic
    I made the mistake of reading the feedback first and so I went to your story arm ...
  • The Last Couple
    Can I ask if this is aimed at a YA audience, as that is the tone I am getting? ...
  • Resonance Rush
    I quite like this but I do have reservations about the choice of some of the wor ...
  • All That Glitters
    Whilst avoiding work I decided to trawl through my competitors' feed back and no ...
  • Out of Body Experience
    I'll be honest, mate, I'm in two minds about this (perhaps I'm supposed to be) a ...
  • The Way
    '...bring his brother's shame.'  Should that be brothers'?  I think this ticks t ...
  • The birth
    Does this start in third person and then shift to first? Whatever is going on it ...
  • Cara's Tale
    Very good, mate, came off as a 'traditional' tale even though I know (having rea ...
  • Juniper - Edited(Final Draft}
    I know I keep coming back to this but that's only because i think there is somet ...
  • The Curse Weaver
    I like it.  Full of hinted adventures to follow and those already past.  Well wr ...
  • Spring’s Golden Rules
    Knew you could do it.  This was fun and funny, I particularly liked the line... ...
  • Springtime in Vegas
    The more I think about this, the more I like it.  It could be my inner bleakness ...
  • Digital Spring
    I like this, Chris, a whimsical satire of the way things are already headed.  Se ...

  • Can I first say you need to address the formatting, it is really off-putting. Lo ...
  • The Second Call
    Better still.  Again those dashes, I mentioned after chapter one.  I think this ...
  • First Call
    Morning Rik, was just tootling about the website and decided to pick a project a ...
  • After Cold Winter
    What I believe we have here is the root of a good story that still needs some wo ...
  • The Seasonal Town
    ...and that's when the zombies attacked.  I like this for its meandering but I s ...
  • Unyielding
    That's some scary shit there, man, I always knew the dark was bad ass. I think D ...
  • New Life
    Let's start with the easy stuff...  '“We know something has to [?] out there,” ...
  • In December
    Well, let's start off by saying I'm way too old to enjoy this kind of thing, hav ...
  • Of Dreams and of Memory
    I quite like the 'picture' of the world you have created but it feels like I was ...
  • Where goest the soul?
    Really like the concept and the writing is first rate as usual but the story end ...
  • Don't say it
    So let's start by saying you've got a load more words to use to expand on this a ...
  • The Republicrat Debate
    Okay, this is fun but I have to agree with Jed, too hard to follow with all the ...
  • Missing
    A story based in reality, I believe, with psychological abuse being far more pre ...
  • The Livingroom Curtains
    I have long thought curtains are self-centred narcissists, demanding attention; ...
  • My G-DEC is Insulting Me
    Is this a confessional piece, E-yoro, is there an amp in the corner of your room ...
  • Laptop.
    Typo...  'You [c]an get the real story here.'  5th para.
  • Dreaming About Being Read (revised)
    I am surprised this didn't come up sooner on a website for writers (living books ...
  • Head in Serpentine
    Excellent writing; thought provoking and well balanced. I even learned a new wor ...
  • Wren Of Snow
    This is a pretty good tale but it is let down by some things you could easily ge ...
  • Christmas Blues
    A long drawn out farce of a vehicle for two weak-ass puns...I like it.  An enjoy ...
  • Ein Weihnachtslied
    Very moving and well written, lots of things to make the reader think. I also li ...
  • Santa's Little Helper
    I'm going out on a limb here to suggest the problem you have is the word count l ...
  • Carroll at Christmas (or Take That Charles Lutwidge)
    I enjoyed this Ronnie, a matter-of-fact survival of a family through tough times ...
  • The Annunciation
    So let me get this right, we can expect a Muslim Christmas soon? Does that mean ...
  • Fairy Tail
    Hi Camden, welcome to the challenge.  Let's get this out of the way from the off ...
  • What the hell is going on?!
    So The Simpsons (and Douglas Adams) were right, the dolphins are the master spec ...
  • Surgery
    A good capturing of the effects of anaesthesia but I don't see this sitting into ...
  • Forsaken State of Unrest
    I read it all the way through - and there are some typos, punctuation errors and ...
  • Paint the Tiger Purple
    As I read this I was reminded of an old 'Twilight Zone', I think it was, where a ...
  • Routine
    I've read this a couple of times - with time in between each reading - and at fi ...
  • Wardrobe Shaped Boxes
    Metaphysical. That's a word, right? Is it the right one for this though? I'll ch ...
  • Where the Flames Glow Blue
    I'm no expert in this department - I do it on a regular basis myself - but I thi ...
  • Where am I?
    Oh, Tony, a typo...  You can open the door to changes  It doesn't look like [r]t ...
  • Her final day
    Crackin' story, S3, well written and enjoyable.  in her journal Mia writes -   ' ...
  • Chapter 1--The Museum
    Firstly, congratulations on your impending publication; let's hope the advance i ...
  • Epiphany
    Reminded me of The Goons; I could Neddy Seacombe and the rest clear as day. 'He' ...
  • x
    Come on, icon, there was no way I was going to have a daughter, I need a gang to ...
  • Evil Bastards
    This lot would have made 'The Birds' a very short film.  A fun read Jed, and pro ...
  • Seriously!
    That was fun and the 'f' word, such a versatile weapon in our arsenal is it not? ...
  • Creepy Crawlies
    Do you need - and you know I am probably wrong - the 'but' in the last line of t ...
  • Palindrome
    It's good RJ, like it indeed.  Your punctuation is all over Ye Olde Shoppe thoug ...
  • Beyond the Prism
    I've read it now, Duncan, and I know I said I was glad to be out of the one word ...
  • The Sins We Carry
    Engaging.
  • Divorce Confession
    Enjoyable.
  • Can't Love You Anymore
    Lyrical.
  • In A Pinch
    Twice in one day, Keberly, you taking the...  Okay, you asked for it...  '“Shhhh ...
  • Wings
    I am the first to admit that sometimes understanding passes me by and I think th ...
  • Haunted in a Good Way (revised)
    Hi Miss_Ladybug,  First off you need to edit this, there are quite a few spellin ...
  • The long wait.
    Oh yeah...  "Let's bring rock back." They said to each other while fist-bumping ...
  • Soror
    Ah, I think I get it and with the fear of being wrong beating at my chest, I thi ...
  • The Cave Doctor
    Hi Bob,  Part of a bigger piece, I suspect?  I'm not getting a twist here but ma ...
  • Dance of Death
    Great visuals but not exactly action packed.  In fact they way you have written ...
  • Great Expectations
    Good stuff mate, and all the usual compliments. Nice balance of action and humou ...
  • Visiting hours are over.
    First thought as I opened your piece, Leonarae, a block of text hitting me in th ...
  • Skanx
    What's this Chris, number 5?  Yup, action scene alright and unrelenting too.  On ...
  • Fucking Charlie
    I like this Tony, it's action at a slow, leisurely yet brutal pace.  It needs ed ...
  • Consequences
    Whoa, plenty o' action here. Nice job.  I am no expert with commas but I am pret ...
  • The Woman in the Black Suit
    The action kicks off instantly, no doubt, but it petters out pretty quickly too. ...
  • The Last Deception, Part II, 1968
    In fear of sounding like a parrot, I'm with Chris on the start, it takes too lon ...
  • The Perfect Cut
    Very good indeed...again.  But you dishonour yourself with this shameful error.. ...
  • The Sumerian
    A good action scene even if, to my mind, it takes a little while to get going. I ...
  • Over the Trope
    It sounds worse now, sounds like he's floating above the pool, JC style.  Maybe ...
  • Over the Trope
    Two on day one...are there more to come?  Nice one; funny, well written and ente ...
  • I Am My Father's Daughter (Revised)
    Well, that was a sucker-punch I didn't see coming. I was expecting a load of tee ...
  • It's a Sin To Kill
    Tony, I'm going to come back and read this again as the way I am reading it at t ...
  • The Hearing
    You're right, Chris, the closing speech marks at the end of the last paragraph b ...
  • Ender's Game
    Missed " at the end of...   We must use the subject.    He stood, fully convince ...
  • A Teacher's View
    Yeah, I hate young people too, messing up the view and stuff...and that 'lol' th ...
  • Listen
    Yup, pretty good stuff. Nice easy words that convey the sorrows of the narrator. ...
  • Listen
    'My heart, they freeze'?
  • Alohomora
    Is it Leo's Dad who says the 'A' word...I may still be confused but at least I'm ...
  • Saltwater Cures All Wounds
    Powerful stuff but I did feel the overuse of adjectives took away some of the ur ...
  • Victim of Reality
    Dude, no. I mean...no. I can't...no. No, no, no. seriously man? It's just...no. ...
  • To Have and to Hold
    This is pretty powerful stuff, calling her unborn child after the man's dead son ...
  • Amy's Ant
    Crackin story, loved the interaction between teacher and pupil. Amy will go far, ...
  • Arguing Over Victoria
    A brilliantly served slice of 'Little England' and Tim reminded me of 'Just Will ...
  • Monster (Revised)
    I really enjoyed this and I came to it without knowledge of Medusa's 'birth'.  I ...
  • Attempting to Rob Taco Bell
    Yeah, I'm not sure it fits the challenge either. Neither of these two seem like ...
  • Eyes of Teal
    At first I thought the protagonist was looking into the eyes of a corpse, so kud ...
  • Victim of Circumstance
    Ernest, do I smell the suspicion that this has been lifted from a larger piece, ...
  • The Potter's Field
    A good argument, Duncan, I recant.  I shall walk away, feeling slightly foolish, ...
  • The Potter's Field
    It is a well known fact I give you many opportunities to pick me up on my gramma ...
  • Bang
    Well, this just made my morning feel pretty grim...which I guess is what you wer ...
  • The Heart of Time
    Good read, fells like a section of a much larger work.  Not too sure the silent ...
  • Bad News
    Hey, JacobC, welcome to the blood and sand of literary circles.  So, I admit I f ...
  • Heat
    I'm not sure if it's legal to read this kind of thing on a Sunday/  Couple of ty ...
  • Time is Silent
    Very good, Sue, I'm letting it mull before commenting further...there's a tickin ...
  • Cure for the Itch
    There's a lot of the use of the word 'day' in the first paragraph. Just noting i ...
  • The Colour of Happiness
    Others have mentioned it, this is very poem like and that's not a criticism as I ...
  • Quitter
    Nice one, Tony, and even though when I read it the ending was the only way it co ...
  • Taking After My Old Man (Revised)
    '...and I want to be a pirate...'  That line made me smile.  I have read this se ...
  • Thana's Plea
    I was joking mate, I can barely spell Inglish words let alone Spanish ones.  I q ...
  • Edge
    Excellent, really enjoyed this and the skill with which it was executed.  Gotta ...
  • Perfection
    An addiction that cost him his wife, son and life...and it wasn't even drugs.  I ...
  • Just One More Time
    A vampire, Ken?  You know how you dislike first person, well I'm like that with ...
  • Just One More Time
    Ken, I see your point, just me being thick.  It was all the blood drinking and f ...
  • Chronic Distortion Perversion Compulsion
    Tiberius, I assume you don't sleep too easily at night...or during the day eithe ...
  • Traditions
    Ken, none of my business and please feel free to tell me to take a hike, but kno ...
  • For the Love of Christmas
    Despite this being 'dedicated' to me, in what I fear is a rather sarcastic way, ...
  • Small Miracles
    Yes, well said, brother. At last someone gives the 'absent' (from most of the st ...
  • Chronicle of Immortality: Matthew
    The story of the twining of the bull was enthralling, you really caught the feel ...
  • Raunchy Night
    I've looked up 'vignette' and this looks like one.  I'm not sure I feel this is ...
  • Lydia Moss and the League of Shadows
    Well, that was a rollercoaster of action and mayhem.  I'm not going to dare to p ...
  • The Party
    Before I start can I say I like this and I feel the relief that party gives desp ...
  • Mud
    RJ, I've been thinking - and reading your replies to the feedback - I still thin ...
  • Mud
    Second para: should 'blood hell' be 'bloody hell'?
  • Gimme Shelter
    I can't help but notice you ignored the rest of my advice though...their will be ...
  • Gimme Shelter
    I've just told you what I think...and you know I'm always right.
  • Gimme Shelter
    Oh, I see it now.  Didn't have me reading giggs on last time. Don't know how I m ...
  • Gimme Shelter
    Wow-wow-wow-wow-wow-wow-wow.  That's not reiteration of Duncan and Sue's praise, ...
  • Death's Messengers
    Okay, I'll give you the right to be man again. However, you're on probation and ...
  • The Call
    I have faith, I know you can do it but you also know the folly of following my a ...
  • The Hook
    This could almost fit into the 'Grimm Tale' challenge, a bit of a Hansel and Gre ...
  • Run, Lola, run
    Alright, Duncan, good holiday?  So, I am seeing this an as metaphor(?) for life ...
  • The Butchers Son
    Now this is more my cup of tea, Ken, direct clear writing that takes me along in ...
  • Belle
    90 words Tony, easy, just slash and burn I bet you will find loads of words that ...
  • The Brother and Sister
    You know we were discussing overwriting? Well, I made this comment after reading ...
  • x
    There's a lot going on in this tale and I'm not sure if the word limit allows it ...
  • Everybody Needs A Bosom For A Pillow
    Very good, Sue, but just to keep up what may appear to be bullying on my part ca ...
  • Slenderella
    Crackin' twist (of the mind) and really hip and with it to boot.  I personally t ...
  • Snow White
    Very good, Aftab, I'm off out tonight, any chance this place could be near my st ...
  • Goodness is Blind
    Yup, makes it clearer why Blondie is there, so i am happier now. Not happy, that ...
  • Prologue
    So, the madness begins...and yet I sense a little of the cheat in this piece. Ho ...
  • Goodness is Blind
    Sue, could you change 'wet herself' to 'pissed herself'? It might fit a little b ...
  • Walled and Bounded
    Very good, an introduction that is powerful enough to want to read on. Will he s ...
  • "Urban Paradise"
    You're welcome.
  • "Urban Paradise"
    Yeah, you've cleared up the problems I had, maybe if Smith at the end said '...y ...
  • "Urban Paradise"
    There are some really good turns of phrase in here and I love the idea of a 'fai ...
  • Left on Main
    I'm a little confused when you say they are 'uninitiated' does that mean they do ...
  • Chapter One: Spina Bifida
    Hi Nicole,  Firstly may I shamefully plead a lot of ignorance when it comes to S ...
  • Grey
    Thank you for that, I have just taken a stroll around this town with you and fel ...
  • The Pearl
    Excellent.  It's not the same but it put me in mind of a film - 'The Radio Flyer ...
  • The Apple (Draft 2)
    Jack, can I start by asking if you really need the apologetic sounding paragraph ...
  • Left on Main
    I'm still getting sick of telling you how good your writing is...and this is no ...
  • Alvin and Harrison (Draft 4 Version 2)
    I think you've got a couple of endearing characters here but (and I know this fr ...
  • The Assassination
    Hi Jesk, it's Saturday afternoon and I'm nursing a hangover so bear with me, for ...
  • The Assassination
    Okay, Jesk, there is plenty of steampunk fashion, kinda, though it could quite e ...
  • The Assassination
    Okay, I have just tuned in, Jesk, and the first thing I notice is the amount 'se ...
  • Alvin and Harrison (Draft 4 Version 2)
    Steampunk without a doubt to my mind but it does need another edit.  For example ...
  • War Pigs
    No expert on the subject, Kelby, but i don't think this is steampunk.  Of course ...
  • Darkness falls
    Japanese steampunk, that's pretty darn cool, bro. So cool, in fact, that I may s ...
  • August 29th, 1916.
    Hi Shai,  Although your writing of the scene is quite powerful my main concern i ...
  • The mind's eye
    Is there a little bit of cheating going on here RJ?  I know you're implying a me ...
  • Taste My Fist, Wizard
    I enjoyed this, AD, though I did find the use of taste repeatedly a bit over the ...
  • Hay Fever's a Bitch
    Pretty gross and if I may use a football analogy: He shoots, he scores...but no ...
  • Pleasurable Pain (Revision 1)
    Joking aside, this is really good and, as far as I can see, sticks to the constr ...
  • His Sensual Touch
    "Collin." A sensual whisper was said in his ear, her voice so tantalizing and to ...
  • Bound
    nathan, you were doing so well...  'She could hear someone, seemingly...'  You m ...
  • At Sea (Revision #?)
    Hi Pam,  I know this is pedantic but you can't watch (no sight)...  'We watched ...
  • Yet Another Door
    Kelby, would it be rude of me to say 'Were you trippin',?'  I'm thinking asylum, ...
  • Trap Door
    Last month it was critters from the sea, this month you're picking on Bambi?  Al ...
  • The Door
    Hi Dollys,  I have read this several times and I too hold some of the concerns o ...
  • Nut Job
    Oh yeah, I think I may be lying about not using capitals to signify shouting. I ...
  • Nut Job
    Sorry about that Jane, where was I?  I am a bit concerned about how Dillon 'push ...
  • The Bridge
    Hi Southernbelle,  In general I enjoyed this, though I think the title pretty mu ...
  • Oak Door! (Revised2)
    Hi pdsa1,  May I first congratulate on writing, that's a hard step to take and a ...
  • Blue Sky
    I like this Caitlin, a good sci-fi use of the image that most have used for 'hor ...
  • Circe
    Enjoyable, well written tale in which the ending was not a foregone conclusion.. ...
  • Orpheus and Eurydice
    Yup, I like this, enjoyed it throughout.  Especially the 'nagging cow' aspect, g ...
  • Chapter Zero
    You have a wealth of advice in the comments below, all of which should be taken ...
  • The Long Winter
    Clever joke at the end. I will have to accept your accuracy of it, as I'm not br ...
  • Blood for a Stone
    Good use of the inner monolgue and your desperate willingness to please/impress ...
  • In April
    They tried to teach me to appreciate poetry when I was at school but they lost m ...
  • When Boots Are Too Big
    And while I'm here, the 'long weight' thing was always going to be trouble, to m ...
  • When Boots Are Too Big
    Funny how history repeats itself isn't it?  My mum told me when I was a kid, h ...
  • Identity In Crisis
    Excellent, I almost chringed with embarrassment with you. Though I have yet to h ...
  • The perfect Tardis and a Silver Dalek
    I liked this but I would liked it more if I was given more interaction between M ...
  • Asha
    Okay before I start in with my venomous assault (I'm joking) I would like to say ...
  • Marmota Monax
    So, Duncan, with just under a week to go it looks like this one has been chosen ...
  • Grievance
    Maybe a little predictable but it took me along for the ride easily enough, whic ...
  • Stanley the Gentleman (Revised)
    To be honest I'd still like to see more examples of Stanley's life - I have no d ...
  • Stanley the Gentleman
    This appears to be a personal piece but it is written in such a way that I think ...
  • Product Love
    May I humbly suggest you use some paragraphs, as this massive block of text is a ...
  • Space Robot Five
    Take no notice, I reckon he knows exactly how quantum entanglement works and is ...
  • Stranded
    Excellent story telling in such a limited space. A vivid complete 'movie'.  I ...
  • It's What's on the Inside That Counts
    An interesting take on the challenge. May I suggest another read through to chec ...
  • Burn, baby, burn (revised Jan 17)
    I won't repeat what has been said before mainly because I'm not bright enough to ...
  • The Lazarus Effect
    Back again Duncan, which shows you have my interest.  Much better, in my humbl ...
  • Dream Wiser
    Would it be too harsh of me to say: 'Man up, and grow a pair of nuts!'  Joking ...
  • Mother (Revised)
    Creepy indeed and I can think of a few kids that could do with some help from 'M ...
  • Nowhere to Nowhere
    Have you tried looking at writing this in a poetic form?  I sense a catharticn ...
  • Dog-like
    I like the angle you've approached the challenge from and the writing is good, b ...
  • Mike's Dream (Revised)
    Wow, no flies on you is there, Lanette. This has got to be a sub in record time. ...
  • And the Angel said... "Hiya!"
    Hi Sue,  Haven't read this properly, nor all the way to the end, yet but can I ...
  • Night of Falling Stars
    And a Happy Christmas to you too, Duncan.  Excellent writing as usual mate and ...
  • The Vampire's Tutor
    Not sure but I have afeeling this may be just over the 750 word limit.
  • Black Diamond's last chapter
    Dollys,  I don't want to start a punch up - well I do but not with you, some b ...
  • excerpt book 2, 'Subtleties of the Blood',
    Hi Will,  How ya doin', mate?  Okay my thoughts...which, as you know, are fe ...
  • High Moon
    Good read but can I just raise one thing that tripped me up, and it's just a per ...
  • Bleeding Souls
    Hi Kim,  I know I'm labouring a point here but if I don't mention it I think I ...
  • Generation Gap
    Fun read and so close to the magical number, go on throw in two more words and g ...
  • The Walk
    I'm going to confess I've got a bad habit I need to get rid of, - well, I've got ...
  • N/A
    Still brilliant, still need a thesaurus, still think I should get a better educa ...
  • * Poveglia Island *
    Good traditional ghost tale from around the campfire.  Couple of typos...(whic ...
  • The Night of the Wolf-Doctor
    Rather damned good, sir, rather damn good indeed.  Creepy, atmospheric, chilli ...
  • An Ancient Evil
    I like this, the personification, the union, the fact that their love means pain ...
  • Another Lost Soul, Another Lost Sale
    Aftab, I liked this, nothing like a bit of good old fun poking at death to start ...
  • First Kiss
    Jesus, even I fancy this bloke by your vivid description, have you got his numbe ...
  • Cool Blue Ion Trails
    Alright Kai, you've certainly got a good voice.  Small point, 'She was the fir ...
  • Demure
    Alright Duncan, how's things in my colony? Said 'Hello' to Dave for me yet?  I ...
  • First Kiss
    Okay, so one of us is tripping, William...and I think it might be me, man.  I ...
  • Flea Market Treasures
    I liked this but I do have a question, if Joey had placed the capsule '...in a d ...
  • The Love that Kills
    Way to go with the slashing and now...you need to do 90 words more. The piece is ...
  • The Love that Kills
    Oh yeah, I suggest you stop repeating '...thirty years...', got it the first tim ...
  • Hoi Polloi
    Very impressive, your crackin' descriptive voice had me travelling with the Mala ...
  • N/A
    As 'The brat' said it does feel like part of a longer work and the fact I did wa ...
  • The Games People Play
    Nice one, I too did not see the ending coming.  However to make it less obviou ...
  • Gainings.
    I'm really not sure about this and to blunt it's the style of layout that is rea ...
  • Arnie Plumpton and the Vending Machine Bandit
    I liked the writing style of this piece, easy and relaxed though I did beat the ...
  • Say you`ll stay
    Nice little 'will they...won't they?' piece of writing.  She stole the cash fr ...
  • Leprechaun Libation
    I liked this Sue and I think I can see where you were going with it.  I would ...
  • Chapter III
    Again I think this is too busy, too much happening in too many scenes. Break the ...
  • Chapter II
    Again this chapter is moving things along nicely but at a pace that is too fast. ...
  • Chapter I
    It has potential to move forward in a nice arc but a few things did stand out to ...