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  • Where Monsters Dwell
    I've read this through a couple of times now, and have to say: You've got the fe ...
  • Serendipity
    Serendipity Not Welcome? Oh, come on, Chris... Serendipity is what gives my life ...
  • Madman across the Water
    Really enjoyed this, and apart from a stray speech mark where there wasn't any s ...
  • Sophia's Saviour
    It took me a while to get my head around what was happening here, but when I did ...
  • The Abyss
    This gave me shivers down my spine. The idea that something is there, just out o ...
  • COP TALK!
    Oh, very good! I'm giving it 5 stars because I'd hate to get into trouble with t ...
  • There's a first time for everything...
    Very, very good, with an excellent twist. I absolutely loved this story--and the ...
  • Roller coaster
    Aww, Lou, this is SO lovely!  You had me right there with Magnolia, standing by ...
  • A Lethal Dance
    Wow, this was great. Fantastic pace, which never flagged through the fighting an ...
  • The Spoon Prince
    I agree with the feedback below, you have the beginnings (or perhaps the middle? ...
  • Patupaiarehe
    Loved this story. Beautifully realised.  I did smile at 'seemed to hold a flute ...
  • Murder in the Tower
    I enjoyed this take on a 'romantic dinner for two', and didn't see the end comin ...
  • Posh Nosh
    Well written, entertaining, and I couldn't find a thing to critique. Thanks for ...
  • A Slice of Life
    The only thing that *threw* me! (would love to be able to edit feedback when I r ...
  • Sleep 2
    I still think this has potential--if Mark has been mostly asleep for three days ...
  • Sleep 1
    I've read this several times now, and wasn't sure what to make of it, until I sp ...
  • Red
    Very nice, NJ. Just one thing I noticed—tense switches. I've messaged you, but b ...
  • The Vinaigrette Vignette
    Er... Not sure I know WHAT to say about this. Except... no, still no words! Oh, ...
  • Fair Light (an adaptation of an old poem).
    I really liked this. Love the words you use: spuming, drek (or should that be dr ...
  • Finit en Avance
    Glad you gave the story without the french below... I was just wondering if I co ...
  • REVISED EXCERPT - IMPERFECT HUMAN HEART
    Wow... I knew there was a reason I'd decided sea-travel wasn't for me. Excellent ...
  • Who can really say?
    The wisdom of Lyuda's father...   As with a lot of your writing, I slipped into ...
  • A Man of Reason
    I like this one better than your other sub. There's more of a story to it, and Z ...
  • Knock on Wood
    Oh, very good. It took me a while to get into the flow of this at first (there a ...
  • Spring’s Golden Rules
    Lol. This is funny. I too read it that Sonora had already been on the date and t ...
  • The Chrysalis
    A creepy/sad/intriguing end, but beautifully written, Chris. I can see me coming ...
  • Evil Coltneivel
    Oh, this is fab! I really enjoyed it, mayham (mainly because this is the kind of ...
  • Unyielding
    Excellent. I did wonder when the 'spring' was going to come in, and I liked how ...
  • A Beautiful Day
    Wow. See, this is what I admire about your writing, Chris. You regularly think o ...
  • Hotel d'Amore
    Wow.  You've done something here that I have yet to master, Ronnie; you've writt ...
  • Blindfolded Truth
    Oh, this is creepy!  A dark and disturbing tale that gave me a shiver down my sp ...
  • Routine
    Like Lightningpastry and Alec, I was thrown a bit by the fact you have a 'previo ...
  • DEAD CATS
    Oh, very funny, Chris.  My favourite line:  If Hannah was behind this, her choic ...
  • The Visit
    Oh ghost story for Halloween--excellent, Dollys.  And you've left me with a head ...
  • I don't think we're in Zork anymore
    Good grief, this brought back some memories! (about how rubbish I was/am at comp ...
  • Beyond the Prism
    Congratulations on the win, Duncan!  Fantastic sub.
  • Epiphany
    Great fun, Chris. And, as a techno-dunce, I even empathised with 42!  Not sure i ...
  • The Herald
    Like Alec, I was convinced the trumpet was going to end up 'literally' flat, tha ...
  • The Least Fictional Thing
    Oh, very good!  Made me laugh, and all the sci-fi jargon was believable (always ...
  • Guys
    No comment... literally.  And I'm still sticking 5*s on this, in payment for the ...
  • Jerome Sanders
    I liked this, Chris.  You've given the reader two clear-cut characters: 1. The c ...
  • Anger Redirected
    This is an emotional read.  When I started to realise what was going on and what ...
  • x
    I'll be honest... still having trouble deciphering this - but at least I was bri ...
  • Hannah
    I loved how this sub gives the reader a window onto this couple's married life/l ...
  • Beyond the Prism
    Okay, so you made me tear-up. I have absolutely no critique for this. It's beaut ...
  • Collateral Damage
    This is a great story, Keberly. I read this earlier today, then came back for mo ...
  • The Truth
    Really enjoyed this.  Well, everything except that 3rd person ending, but as tha ...
  • It
    This is amazing.  I read the earlier version, but then didn't comment because I ...
  • A Cautionary Tale
    I actually like the alternate ending the best. I was kind of expecting that the ...
  • Great Expectations
    Loved the name!  And really enjoyed the twist.  Good work, as ever, Duncan.  Ju ...
  • The Look
    As already said: A fairy tale - and you carried the twist at the end well. Reall ...
  • Revenge 2 (The Outstanding Balance)
    The whole Nordic noir thing?  Remind me NEVER to go see an action film in that g ...
  • In Case of Emergency
    Well, that certainly filled the brief! High action and plenty of drama.
  • The Woman in the Black Suit
    Phew!  I was a little nervous about suggesting such a big edit, but I'll relax n ...
  • The Woman in the Black Suit
    Juliet, I've read this over several times, and I like it--but after reading the ...
  • Revenge
    Ha!  I totally understand why I got Chris Hemsworth in my head, as the lead in t ...
  • Rough Justice
    Wow.  This is a strong story and I didn't see the end coming at all.  Were you i ...
  • It's a Sin To Kill
    This is much better, Tony.  Easy to follow and tighter overall.  I had a few pau ...
  • Portrait of a Lady
    This is beautifully written, a sub that held my from beginning to end, and I thi ...
  • Ender's Game
    And the first story I've read in the challenge is everything I've come to expect ...
  • Sleep, Alexander
    Just beautiful, Josafat.  I opened this sub up, and found myself reading your po ...
  • Window
    Ha!  Brilliant, Alec. I read all the way to the end, liked the wording but... I ...
  • my special ed class teacher
    Such vivid pictures, flying out from the lines of this poem. It left me wanting ...
  • man in the window
    As others have already said, he's more than okay.  Loved how the lines formed a ...
  • What My Mother Lost
    Beautifully done.  Not a lot more to say, other than 'I loved this'.  Thank you. ...
  • Through the Window
    Sharp, a strong sense of entrapment/internalised frustration/building claustroph ...
  • Windowless
    Well, I certainly did appreciate it, but it's nice to know what you were thinkin ...
  • Windowless
    I've read this through a few times and I could, of course have got it entirely w ...
  • Mermaid Wishes
    Like others, 'Her laughter would bubble and pop' was my favourite line in this. ...
  • Tales Aboard the Chronicle
    Well deserved, as ever - congratulations on your place on the leader board... Bt ...
  • From India, with love
    I can't write poetry, Ruchira, but I enjoy reading it... especially over a cup o ...
  • The Colour of Happiness
    Congratulations on winning the challenge, Nina. Well deserved!
  • Cure for the Itch
    This was just... a pleasure to read.  Original, funny and not what I expected to ...
  • The Colour of Happiness
    This is beautifully written; there are so many lines that I re-read just because ...
  • Spirits - Revising
    Ah, I misread 'revising' as 'revised'... I'll keep my eyes open for when you re- ...
  • CASA
    A story about addiction itself/addiction personified - now that's a clever angle ...
  • Falling Without a Sound
    Very nicely done, Mellony.  Ignoring the discussion on the best way to break and ...
  • Hex Nihilo
    Wow. Now that's the sort of ending I personally have trouble delivering.  A kind ...
  • Behaving Badly at Christmas
    Congratulations on being in the top six, Ernest!  It obviously pays to be grumpy ...
  • untitled
    Hmm... My raw, gut reaction to this, is that you've given us a victim's portrait ...
  • So This Is Christmas
    Congratulations on being in the top six Dollys!  :)
  • The Right Kind of Whispers
    Love it!  This is the sort of poetry I'd love to be able to write... but fail at ...
  • My Affliction
    Love this scene/story.  As Neil says - it's great fun (and probably something mo ...
  • Chronic Distortion Perversion Compulsion
    You take no prisoners when showing the full horror of what body image distortion ...
  • Hunting
    I really liked this.  Creepy, and triggering some of the negative responses I ge ...
  • Lot 254
    Okay, so this was a little dark for my tastes - but that doesn't mean it wasn't ...
  • Behaving Badly at Christmas
    Ha!  If I had to cope with someone like this, I'd like to think I'd be able to r ...
  • The Scorched Earth Experience
    Should I be commenting on this?  You did something rather admirable, Duncan... ...
  • Star
    This completely captivated me.  There's just something about this story that app ...
  • Once a Year
    A dark, comedic Christmas?  Because, despite the tragedy unfolding, this did mak ...
  • Kristday
    Thoroughly enjoyed this story, Nina_Lee.  Original, evocative and it held my att ...
  • A Very Mr. Darcy Christmas
    You know, I read this, loved it and then just had to go down the feedback and se ...
  • On the possession and ritual slaughter of hermaphrodite pigs
    Well, I think this is an EXCELLENT dish!  Cooked to perfection in my humble opin ...
  • Step by Step
    Congratulations on a top six placing!  :)
  • Drifting
    Yay!  Congratulations on a well deserved win!  :)
  • Two Festivals
    I rather like this.  There's a somewhat bald narration style going on that compl ...
  • So This Is Christmas
    Love this, Dollys. Read it, re-read it, read it again... because it's just lovel ...
  • Small Miracles
    In a word: Perfect.  What else can I say, when the writing is this good and the ...
  • Spin
    You know how I feel about this story alread... but as I've finally caved and tak ...
  • Say Something
    Such a lot that I liked about this sub. Poignant, certainly... but I'd like to t ...
  • ONE
    I've just realised what time it is here (bedtime!), and I'm afraid I'm going to ...
  • Drifting
    Really not a lot I can say about this. It's golden from start to finish, with so ...
  • Tiny Dancer
    This is one of my favourite scenes from your story.  I thoroughly enjoyed gettin ...
  • Death's Messengers
    If there's a prize for 'most times on leader-board' I reckon you have it in the ...
  • The Princess
    Congratulations on making the top six, Dollys!  :)
  • Common People
    This is great, and ignoring the word-count, which I'm sure you'll fix, I loved t ...
  • Goodbye Blue Sky
    :)  I'm always so much happier when I feel I've been useful!  And wait 'til I te ...
  • Goodbye Blue Sky
    Okay, first off, I LIKED this, Will. There were a few 'pause' points (some may b ...
  • Step by Step
    This has changed since I read it earlier - then it had a naked little girl surro ...
  • The Three Little Men
    Amazing.  I wouldn't know where to start trying to write something like this, bu ...
  • Death's Messengers
    Wow... this is wonderful, Duncan!  It delivers shivers, a strong story and a ver ...
  • Snow White and the Sudden Divorce
    I loved this, Alec, and I wasn't the only one!  I saw that you'd posted whilst m ...
  • In Plain Sight
    Another well-deserved placing on the leader-board, Will.  You're giving us all s ...
  • The Princess
    I agree about foreshadowing the violence, but other than that, I thought this wa ...
  • Revised, Mary`s Child
    Interesting... and rather depressing too!  Definitely dark. I also liked how you ...
  • Ella
    Another excellent sub.  The standard is HIGH this month, with some truly dark ta ...
  • Refreshing the Tree
    Well, I rather like the idea of someone who can control electricity like that... ...
  • Escape from Stalag-Luft XV
    Congratulations on hitting the top 6 July submissions list!  Great story and wel ...
  • Ash and Rain
    Okay, so THIS is the Nyree I know, and the sort of story that tugs at my imagina ...
  • Nail Polish
    I liked this, Dollys.  Horribly depressing because it gives no indication of an ...
  • Father Through Son(Mirror)
    Really liked this, Anthony, and only found one 'nitpick': placed in on the sidew ...
  • Left on Main
    Loved this, Duncan.  Urban fantasy for sure and you brought a smile to my face - ...
  • Those Magnificent Men...
    Congratulations Dollys!  Love seeing your name in that top six - always well des ...
  • Darkness falls
    Congratulations, Duncan!  :)
  • Cupitorverum
    A lot to enjoy in this story - and even though I can understand what Duncan has ...
  • The Assassination
    I think Aftab has given you a good idea for this.  I too was thrown by the lack ...
  • Honorable Men.. revised.
    Hmm... I actually don't know what I think of this.  It's a story that kept my at ...
  • The Librarian
    Definitely read this with a bit of a 'this is a bit predictable for Tony' attitu ...
  • The Uprising
    Whoa... I actually felt my eyes widening as I read this!  You've got an amazing ...
  • Archimedes Claw
    The beginning of this sub was a little 'clunky' in places.  If I had more time ( ...
  • All Fools' Day
    Loved this sub, Neil. Though, truth be told, I'm always drawn into your fantasy ...
  • Darkness falls
    I liked this, Duncan. As ever, your writing is strong and eminently readable.  Y ...
  • Freedom's Gate
    Congratulations on hitting the top 6 submissions list for July, Will.  I'd say y ...
  • Choice
    Congratulations on winning the July challenge, Dexter!  A tough read, but a grea ...
  • Aces and Eights
    I liked this, and I had no problem with the western setting because the groundin ...
  • Those Magnificent Men...
    I really liked this, Dollys!  The descriptions and progression pulled me along f ...
  • Songbird
    Bit of a psychopath then... this sub is really imaginative, well written, and I ...
  • Freedom's Gate
    You really know how to create subs with an interesting slant on the challenge re ...
  • The lion's roar
    I confess, I had to have the author explain this a bit to me, but once they gave ...
  • Close your eyes and think of England
    Excellent - and good for her!  Sad and uplifting all at the same time.  Not a sp ...
  • Blackbriar
    This is an excellent sub, Cesidio, with believable scene setting and strong char ...
  • Cobras and Pit Bulls
    Loved this, Dollys.  It's a distressing and difficult subject to put into a spee ...
  • Freedom's Call
    I won't even begin to pretend that I understand all the ins and outs of the Amer ...
  • Mad Marta
    You know... I really should have read the feedback below before offering my inte ...
  • Mad Marta
    This is great.  It has a weight, and sense of solemnity that added to my enjoyme ...
  • Little Girl Lost
    Congratulations on being in the top 6 for June!
  • Pride & Envy
    There was certainly a lot of emotion coming from this sub - hatred being the ove ...
  • It's About Remembering What Came Before You...
    I smiled when I read this yesterday, and came back for another peek today.  Very ...
  • Freedom of Stupidity
    Brilliant - and not much more I can say about it because the typos I picked up o ...
  • The price of freedom is being free
    Excellent, Duncan.  I figured that if anyone could do this, you could.  5 stars ...
  • Genesis
    Another very nice sub, Cesidio. Your name is another that I've come to expect a ...
  • Suburbia's Vice
    This is rather depressing, but still an excellent sub. And, as mentioned below, ...
  • Practicing Pretend
    I have to give this a 5 because it is so incredibly well written.  But... it's o ...
  • A Rather Curious Garden
    Must be my third or fourth read-through of this, Aftab. Just love it... it keeps ...
  • Drifter (Revised)
    Okay - first off, I really liked this!  But I'll be honest, I didn't realise thi ...
  • The Tango
    I read this on the day you submitted it, left you 5 stars and then carefully com ...
  • At Sea (Revision #?)
    I've read this a few times now, but been called away from the computer before I ...
  • All By Myself
    A dark and rather twisted tale... Have to say, you write them exceedingly well! ...
  • Poggy Strankfelder is a Dead Gnome Walking
    The title of this sub has been taunting me for the last 4 days, and I was determ ...
  • Lily's Dream
    Okay... you got me, girlie! I sighed, my heart melted into a puddle, and I grinn ...
  • Trap Door
    Well, safe to say, I didn't expect to come across a sub that had me humming THIS ...
  • The Door
    Ah... NOW I get it!  Sorry for being a bit dense on the first read-through, Doll ...
  • Blue Sky
    Ha! Reading the comments below, I had to smile... I too have a love of italics t ...
  • Convergence
    Still loving this, Cesidio!  In fact, liked it even better with this read throug ...
  • Nut Job
    Heck... NEVER would have thought of this plotline for a solitary door in the woo ...
  • Going Bush
    Really enjoyed this, Dexter! Although... it did bring back memories of Girl Guid ...
  • Convergence
    Ooh... Dr Who!  I really liked this.  Took me a bit to figure everything out, bu ...
  • What Lies Beneath
    Really liked this!  Disturbing and filled with both human and paranormal creepin ...
  • Just words
    Read this through a couple of times - and it made me smile.  There’s a sense of ...
  • Fool In FoodLove
    LOL - and there at the end was the obligatory 'share' on the internet!  :)  I th ...
  • The Challenge
    Congratulations, Ernest!  :)
  • Mid-century Teenage Drama (Revised, again...again and again)
    Followed the link from the home page.  First time I'd read this sub, but really ...
  • Sexual Healing
    Congratulations on making the top six!  :)
  • Love, Lust, and Padded Bras
    Congratulations, Adam!  Good to see your name in the top six!  :)
  • As Luck Would Have It
    Congratulations, Kim!  Top six yet again!  You are, as usual, writing circles ar ...
  • The Naked Aphrodite
    Congratulations, Aftab!  You made the top six again!  I think Kim's right... you ...
  • That's Stupid
    Oh, this made me LAUGH (and after the horror that was this week... I really need ...
  • I win
    You've nicely summed up how I feel about celebrity worship... in just 4 words. ...
  • Romancing the Throne
    Brilliant, funny, believable, and yet totally disgusting at the same time!  This ...
  • Memories of Army Sniper School
    I liked this... and although I understood that the guy was foolish for giving hi ...
  • Fish Faced
    Err... surreal and strangely engaging!  I knew there was a reason I shouldn't tr ...
  • A Fool For Love
    It's romance, Kim, but not as we know it...   This is a great sub - funny, full ...
  • Pollocks
    The title of this grabbed my attention first - and it was a fishy tale indeed! ...
  • Word Warrior on a Deadline (Revised)
    As others have already stated, I too am not a poet (a fact readily pointed out t ...
  • The New Girl
    Simple, GOOD, made me LOL, LV!  I could definitely picture this, and cringe for ...
  • Secrets of the Samurai Squid
    *peace NOT peaced!  Really wish we could edit our feedback sometimes!  :)
  • Secrets of the Samurai Squid
    LOL. This sub is... bizarre!  The sheer insanity of the premise left me more and ...
  • The Defiant
    You left me wanting to know more - of the history behind the war, AND what happe ...
  • Special Time with Hanna
    I hadn't noticed that, but my understanding is that it should be 'lying' because ...
  • Special Time with Hanna
    Not sure if it's the edits you've made or the fact that I get something a bit mo ...
  • The Challenge
    I read this sub earlier in the month, but didn't have time to leave feedback.  R ...
  • Special Time with Hanna
    I read this the other day and didn't quite 'get' it, so came back today to see w ...
  • The Naked Aphrodite
    So good, I came back for a second read... Can't up my stars from 5 though!  ;)
  • Jack
    Really enjoyed this, Dollys.  Loved the fact that you gave the POV of both Jack ...
  • The Deal
    Lol!  The further I got along with this, the more I giggled, until the belly lau ...
  • Where There's Smoke, There's Fire
    Like others, I found the jump from present, to past and back to present a little ...
  • Libido Ergo Sum
    Wow - from the words given, I really didn't expect such a deep, serious, charact ...
  • The perfect Tardis and a Silver Dalek
    You kept my attention from start to finish with this story.  Very unusual and it ...
  • No Insignificant Skin
    I enjoyed reading this story - there were points where I felt that some of the d ...
  • The Wait
    Great story and it definitely tugged at my emotions.  When I started reading thi ...
  • Movie date
    Loved this... mainly because it kind of reminded me of a few occasions from my o ...
  • Once-Was
    I've read this through a couple of times now, and thoroughly enjoyed it.  I also ...
  • The Painter Boy
    This is a very rich piece of writing.  I like descriptive prose and there's a lo ...
  • Rant
    Finn, that's... Priceless!!  :D
  • Rant
    Oh dear... I got so sidetracked by the feedback below/busy trying not to fall of ...
  • Pure
    This completely captivated me - I think it will do the same for most mothers, ho ...
  • I got twenty-eight problems but a... Oh, never mind...
    Ha!  I read this a few days ago, but yet again didn't have time to leave a comme ...
  • The Pink Ballerina Room (Revised)
    I found this well written and I'm going to explain exactly why: the oddly detach ...
  • Sin Eater
    Wow.  Wonderful sub, Dolly's.  You had my imagination in full throttle, picturin ...
  • Deadly Angel
    Really loved this, Kim!  And although I'm not sure I liked the 'rat' being free ...
  • Only One Way to Go
    Oh, very good!  This is cleverly written and engaging.  Nothing to offer as cons ...
  • Be Mine...
    Loved this, NJ!  Well written, full of great characterisation and it definitely ...
  • The Many Virtues of Water; or The Treachery of Mothers-in-Law
    Well, whatever tiny glitches this sub 'had', they're gone now.  This was another ...
  • A Boy, Waiting
    Whoah... Travis and Auntie May weren't the only ones crying by the end of this! ...
  • Milo and the Junior Hi
    Loved this!  Pacy, funny and a story in very few words.  Excellent!  :)
  • Marmota Monax
    As I already commented on this when you first posted it, all I'm going to say on ...
  • Chapter 4
    Good grief, can't believe how time has slipped by - feeling a bit guilty about t ...
  • I'm Sorry
    Excellent!  Really nothing else to be said.  Well done indeed!  :)
  • Stranded
    Yeah... what Kim said.  Two entries in and so far this challenge is producing so ...
  • Chapter 4
    Aaaargh!!! I have just spent the last hour or so going over this, then I copied ...
  • Story
    Very, very clever.  I enjoyed this so much, I read it through twice. The first t ...
  • Past Lives
    Yes!  The friendship is back and I love how you keep the connection to  Barbara ...
  • NFW
    I liked this.  I spotted a few niggles that I should really go back and pick-up ...
  • Past Lives
    Oh heck, I feel like what I'm about to say has the potential to invite a heap of ...
  • A Town of a Thousand Names
    Congratulations, Aftab - another runner up place in the Challenge!   :)
  • The Three Musketeers
    Aw, heck... Finn makes me laugh and then you make me cry!  Girlie, this was love ...
  • Lucky Man
    I was going to close my computer for the night, but when I saw that you'd put up ...
  • Past Lives
    I like the way you've strengthened the link to Ann, and thanks too for explainin ...
  • The Legend of Lizzie Dearheart
    Whilst I can see where some of the comments about the narrator are coming from, ...
  • Past Lives
    I'd have liked to read on... and I think the word count for this month's challen ...
  • The Lazarus Effect
    Oh, I liked that!  Very clever... and darkly funny too.  Looking at the feedback ...
  • The Eternal Heart of Darkness
    Oh heck, Finn... you surprised a laugh (several actually) out of me with THIS. ...
  • Used up
    Really enjoyed this story, NJ!  Well written, with good characterisation, pace a ...
  • Dog-like
    Oh, wow!  This had me smiling by the end of it, because I think you did a great ...
  • Interstices
    I really, really loved this RJ.  Right up my reading street, as it were... You c ...
  • Mike's Dream (Revised)
    This was so full of 'character' (and not just from the people). I could picture ...
  • Chapter Three
    Ha!  I was feeling so good after I finished that last chapter that I was all rea ...
  • Chapter Two
    Really good chapter - you had me from start to finish and the only things I coul ...
  • Duality of Fate
    Thoroughly enjoyed this!  So glad I got to read it before the month's end and I ...
  • The Christmas Deal
    Aww... that really, really made me SMILE!  Such a lovely, sweet story with a goo ...
  • Professor Moore
    Wonderful sub, NJ!  You've written a story to be read in front of a roaring fire ...
  • A Silent Night
    Well... there has already been some fantastic examples of storytelling in this c ...
  • Lord of the Christmas (Lord of the Rings parody)
    This is excellent, Lanette!  Like Duncan, I wish there was more...  I loved all ...
  • OSC Genesis
    Hi Dollys - I'm on my lunch break at the moment, so have only had time to skim t ...
  • OSC Genesis
    Absolutely loved this - and I've read it through several times now!  Nothing to ...
  • Night of Falling Stars
    Excellent.  As Aftab has already said, this has the feel of a political thriller ...
  • Halo (Chapter 1)
    Kind of relieved that I aren't going mad here - I left feedback on your original ...
  • N/A
    Can't really add anything to what's already been said.  I thoroughly enjoyed thi ...
  • Becoming (Prologue)
    This is excellent.  Unusual, engaging and... I LOVED it!  There are some extreme ...
  • How to build a castle in seven easy steps
    Well, I don't belong to jottify, so I can't comment on there officially... but I ...
  • The road to Zepheral
    I liked this - formatting issues aside, which are obviously not your fault, this ...
  • Linda Alverson and the Unicorn
    I loved this - and though it probably isn't aimed at a middle-aged English woman ...
  • The Nothing Blonde
    This is why I wait for your subs to appear in the challenges - excellent writing ...
  • Aylis of the Rock  -  Chapter One  -  YA novel
    I liked this - I'll admit that it took me a few paragraphs to get into the flow ...
  • A Prize of Sovereigns: Chapter 1. Byrom
    Well, you know I'm a fan of this - and I'm really glad you chose to go with this ...
  • The Guardian
    Okay, let me just push my chair back and.... give you a round of applause, NJ! ...
  • Last Chapter -16: The Gathering
    Brilliant, Dollys.  There was some great description here and a beautiful flow t ...
  • The Guardian
    Hi, NJ - sent you some edits. Hope some of them are helpful, but feel free to ig ...
  • Angels in the Crosshairs
    Wonderful, Bob.  These characters are intriguing and you write the scene with a ...
  • Salvage! Chapter 1
    Loved the tone and characterisation of this sub - sorry, but I have zero knowled ...
  • Cassia
    As you know, I'm already a fan of your character driven storylines - you have a ...
  • Bella
    Wow... that's an intense story!  Although I REALLY wanted to know more about you ...
  • Same old John
    I really enjoyed this story - fast-paced, good dialogue and humour... with that ...
  • Chapter One
    LOL - that's a relief!  When I come across a word I'm not familiar with I usuall ...
  • Revel
    I came back for another read, because I was short on time earlier.    Below are ...
  • Pandora's Damnation
    It's clever - and I like that you've tweaked that sentence with equal intelligen ...
  • Pandora's Damnation
    I really liked this, Lanette.  I also think, with the mention of fruit such as g ...
  • The Stars
    Some good advice from Dollys already.  I agree with everything she's put and wou ...
  • The Stars
    Sorry, reading back my feedback I realised I'd made a mistake - I meant change ' ...
  • Unmoored
    I've been waiting (impatiently) to see what you'd come up with for this challeng ...
  • The Beginning
    Really enjoyed this.  Creepy sci-fi that has a ring of 'on the horizon' about it ...
  • I am you, you are me
    I rather liked this!  I think you could work on some of the phrasing to tighten ...
  • The Moon in Exaggetarius
    This is a well written and thought provoking sub that made me smile.  The portra ...
  • 6. Jyoti (revised)
    I've read through the other chapters, liked the changes you've made and didn't f ...
  • The Gilded Mirror
    Wow...you certainly have the atmosphere box ticked with this sub!  Apart from th ...
  • Bad Blood
    Wow, NJ, just Wow... you've reworked this like a pro!    Like LV, I've read this ...
  • Throne
    Really enjoyed this - and I've read it through a couple of times.  You have a fl ...
  • Folklore, Maybe
    This is an interesting and imaginative sub.  Some wording issues/typos, but all ...
  • A.I.
    Read this a couple of days ago and loved it - now I'm coming back to leave feedb ...
  • Hallow Be The Eve
    I llike this so much better than your original sub.  Proper spooky and the baddi ...
  • 13
    Hi Tony - I've sent some suggestions via PM.  Some of them may be useful...other ...
  • 5. Aurthur (revised)
    Plot wise, there's not much going on in this chapter, and yet there's a fair few ...
  • Bad Blood
    I read this when the original went up but didn't have time to leave feedback.  R ...
  • Its Just the beginning
    Whoa... this sub is full of heartwrenching emotion that's understated, yet all t ...
  • John Turns Potty in Fifty Shades of Twilight
    What can I say?  Freud would have a field day with this!  Definitely different, ...
  • The Holy Cemetery (Written for The October Challenge)
    Great imagery and intriguing plotline. This held me in 'thrall' and was a real p ...
  • Witches Brew
    Hubble and bubble with not so much trouble!? ;)  Phew...is it hot in here?  So m ...
  • The "Calm" Before the Storm
    The 'visuals' of this scene came through loud and clear.  I could picture the ch ...
  • Brainiacs
    Read this through a few times now - and I still chuckle at the same lines!  A st ...
  • Luna's Reaper
    Beautiful and thought provoking.  LV has picked out the 'most' before 'soaked in ...
  • My Apologies...Edgar Poe
    Wow!  I think I need to read this through a couple more times to pick up on all ...
  • The Walk
    This was a great story.  Ghostly visions and spirits that come to take vengeance ...
  • Brainiacs
    I'll get back to this, but just wanted to say: Ha! Yes! She shoots, she scores, ...
  • Trick or Treat
    How did you manage to turn a halloween challenge into a comedy? :)  This sub had ...
  • Dark of night
    I think this is the best thing I've read of yours to date.  Intriguing, then puz ...
  • Candleburn
    This is a cool story and I thoroughly enjoyed it.  Layers of emotion, good chara ...
  • Chapter One
    Hi, NJ -   Right I've gone through this and done a line-by-line proofing.  Overa ...
  • Stupid Monkey  -  Revised
    Excellent rewrite, Devi.  Nothing else to say really - this has evolved beautifu ...
  • The Oldest Kid on the Block
    Loved this - not least because a 70+ friend of mine has recently started a maste ...
  • FOUR
    Whoa... think I'm going to have to re-read this, but after the first run-through ...
  • Romeo
    Yet again, you had me laughing from the very first line.  This sub is filled wit ...
  • Lily
    Wonderfully written and filled with raw emotion. There isn't a thing to find fau ...
  • My First Love
    Absolutely loved this.  Fun, surprising, well written and error free.   The love ...
  • Stupid Monkey
    Read it through again and I found a typo: Fourth-graders are supposed to know to ...
  • Stupid Monkey
    This is clever and harsh all at the same time. I think 'place' is the key here a ...
  • Dos
    Oh, this had me laughing! (and I needed it after doing multiple edits on my comp ...
  • 4. Brondah (revised)
    You're really doing a good job showing the nasty character of Byrom.  This chapt ...
  • 3. Byrom (revised)
    This is what I'd call a 'meaty' chapter.  Lots of statesman talk and, as a resul ...
  • Survival 101
    A powerful story, William.  The stuttering, the bullying, the retaliation of a c ...
  • Standing Up
    All I can do is agree with the feedback already left.  This is a brave recountin ...
  • The Pull of the Sea
    I really liked this, Neil, it had a rhythm to it that seemed to match the simple ...
  • Lemon Sherbet
    The imagery in this is wonderful and keeps me coming back for another read.  I l ...
  • Lessons in Human Interaction
    There's just something about your writing...hooks me every, single time!  Pretty ...
  • The Best Days
    Just when I think I 'might' have started to get a grip on characterisation...I r ...
  • The Assembly Hall
    Okay, first I want to say that I loved the descriptions in this.  The colour of ...
  • On the Other Side of the Mountain
    I read this through three times to see if I could come up with anything 'constru ...
  • Confidence is thinking you’ll wake up tomorrow
    This is a strange sub, in that the actual story is a tale of twisted justice (to ...
  • Detention
    Thoroughly enjoyed this and, yes, I laughed at the 'fallacies with panspermia th ...
  • First Admission of Pain
    What happened the night before?  Intrigued reader wishes to know... which makes ...
  • Dark With Wrath, Full of Rage
    This is a disturbing read and affects me on several different levels.  It may on ...
  • Millenial Kiss
    Very nice, V.  Didn't expect to see a story like this...but then, this is your a ...
  • First Kiss
    I really liked this.  Looks like I got the benefit of the spelling checks mentio ...
  • The End
    This was sad for the obvious reason, and frightening too, but it was the sentenc ...
  • A Heartmost Kiss
    This had me blinking back tears...for a number of reasons.  Your writing is full ...
  • FIRST KISS
    I agree with LostViolet, this reads much smoother than the first version. Still ...
  • Double Suicide Kit
    Excellent!  Loved how you turned this from a potentially dark tale into one wher ...
  • A Time to Remember
    This is a great sub - a whole lifetime in only 249 words!  I liked how you showe ...
  • First and Last
    I never find anything to 'critique' in your subs.  You always entertain me with ...
  • Ladybird
    Oh, this made me SMILE.  Just as your July entry did.  The rate you're going, yo ...
  • N/A
    Whoa!  Gruesomely brilliant sub.  Sent a shiver down my spine.  Wait until the h ...
  • First Kiss
    The change makes the meaning of this line so much clearer - and your word choice ...
  • First Kiss
    And let's not forget 'Mr Johnson'...LOL
  • First Kiss
    Oh...not sure I can leave feedback...when I'm LAUGHING!  This is wonderful and p ...
  • First Kiss
    What a horrible boy...and totally believable!  I wonder how long it took Amelia ...
  • Casaterra
    Excellent Finn!  Taking the first kiss and turning it into a lick that tastes th ...
  • Demure
    Oh, yes!  I LIKE this! - Very clever, Sprayoncrayon.  You twist the reader's per ...
  • First Kiss
    Perfectly captures the heady, carefree abandon that summer's heat often brings o ...
  • The Gypsy's Touch
    Excellent, Lanette!  LOVED it.  Permission to go all girlie and *sigh* over this ...
  • Hard Luck
    Excellent.  You made me smile and laugh out loud - and that's a talent in itself ...
  • Iron Dog's Arctic Rescue
    This was an adventure story and although it took me a little while (and a re-rea ...
  • The Bear
    This was brilliant, and I loved that it was all dialogue. Probably enjoyed it ev ...
  • Dinner in Damascus
    Excellent read, which comes as no surprise.  Just getting to read the July chall ...
  • Last Words
    Last words, indeed.  Love it when a piece of writing is a pleasure to read, but ...
  • The Curse of Pandora's Purse
    Completely unexpected storyline and a pleasure to read.  I particularly liked th ...
  • Skittle to Seattle
    Very deep, with layers and layers of meaning and very well written.  I liked the ...
  • Fisticuffs
    Yes!  This how the English know and love Skittles...rather than those chewy, fru ...
  • Skittles
    If Atrees is a genius, do I get to be one too?  I DID mention the chaise lounge, ...
  • Tea for Two?
    That's the first time I've finished reading a story and wanted to slap BOTH the ...
  • Skittles
    Wow - This was FUN, whacky, cute, read like a dream, a writer's imagination, and ...
  • Under the Radar
    This was intriguing, exciting and tension filled, not to mention a great plot to ...
  • Optimistic Americans
    Yeah, had me convinced this was going to end on the Skittles line too.  VERY fun ...
  • From the Bottom Up
    Really, really liked this - kept guessing at things throughout and then, when yo ...
  • Big Fish
    Didn't see that one coming AT ALL!  Was wondering how anyone could use that last ...
  • A Small Gesture
    Glad you thought some of my suggestions were helpful, Jamie.  Truth is, it was a ...
  • You Can Deal With This or You Can Steal That.
    Absolutely brilliant.  Like Bob, I've never been around drug users, but this pie ...
  • Little Secrets
    I really liked this piece and I read it through a couple of times.  I agree with ...
  • Pick Me Ups
    No problem, Erik.  I didn't exactly shine in my English exam either - it was the ...
  • A Small Gesture
    You know...there's something about this piece of writing that has me absolutely ...
  • Little Bastards
    Lots to like in this sub - especially the oh-so-cool yet slightly awkward MC.  I ...
  • Pick Me Ups
    Nasty twist on the drugs angle - the fact that the habit is being passed along f ...
  • Tha Angel of Retribution
    Interesting story idea, but as you haven't used the sentence: 'It's not every da ...
  • 08: Vincenzo
    Glad I could offer something of use!  I like how you've reworded the first secti ...
  • Gainings.
    Excuse any mistakes in this feedback - I'm typing on my phone!  Wow, you've exte ...
  • The Picket Fence
    This made me smile...and then laugh out loud!  I have a younger brother, and I c ...
  • Gainings.
    Hi Poetlife.    Right...firstly, this submission DID have a strong moral tale an ...
  • The Middle Child
    I don't think you're that far over the thousand are you?  I know there's an extr ...
  • 07: Captivity
    I had a feeling that Vincent was going to turn out to be 'one of them'  :)  This ...
  • Surrogate
    Really, really liked this.  Unusual and fun to read!  My biological curiosity pl ...
  • The Middle Child
    Still loving this submission and I'm glad I stopped by to read the revisions.  B ...
  • Family Key
    I loved this piece of writing...Full of description and it flowed beautifully, b ...
  • Shelby
    I really liked this.  I think, if possible, you could weave the theft in a littl ...
  • The Mexican Standoff
    You've taken a scene of gratuitous violence and turned it into a comedy!  Excell ...
  • The Middle Child
    Wow - now THAT was a fantastic character piece.  Something I believe I need to p ...
  • *Chapter ONE*
    Your story was recommended to me - I now understand why.  Very unusual and you h ...
  • 06: Underground
    First things first:  Wow, standing ovation for this chapter, Mr Adamo!!  Serious ...
  • Just Business
    The sharp writing echoed the sharpness of your character.  Very clever.    The p ...
  • Writing Needs Work
    As FinneanNilsen has already commented, 'This was fun.  Illuminating.'    Not mu ...
  • 05: Susan
    So strange, seeing a chapter with my name as the title!  I'm looking forward to ...
  • 3: The Great Nero Palace
    Part 3:  Hmm... not sure I trust that King Marcus - something decidedly 'odd' ab ...
  • It's All an Illusion
    Don't give up on WeBook, Glasseye.  As Moonstone said below, it's a great place ...
  • 02: Hunger
    If someone had told me that today I'd find and be enjoying reading a story that ...
  • Give Feedback
    Excellent!  I loved the Spelling Errors!  :)
  • So, Yeah, I Was Like, OK, What The Fuck. No, Really, What The Fuck???
    THIS is EXCELLENT.  Made me laugh out loud and shake my head indulgently in turn ...
  • N/A
    Excellent.  What are we without our inner voice?
  • F U Fukushima
    That definitely qualifies as DEEP - not to mention disturbing.
  • F U Fukushima
    That definitely qualifies as DEEP - not to mention disturbing.
  • The Facilitator
    Every time I think of being overly PC - I'll think of this!  Way to go SP!  VERY ...
  • The Facilitator
    Every time I think of being overly PC - I'll think of this!  Way to go SP!  VERY ...
  • 27.   Game, Set & Matching Ensemble
    One thing I've come to realise with your writing SP is that NOTHING should be ta ...
  • 27.   Game, Set & Matching Ensemble
    One of your many strengths as a writer is your observation of character traits a ...
  • 26.   Three Cups of Coffee
    This is one of my favourite chapters - it had everyone in it!  :)    From the mo ...
  • 25.   Law & Disorder
    My 'wicked' laugh was out in force for this chapter!      There's a wonderful de ...
  • 24.   Fly Me to the Moon
    Wow.  C-Throo's impression of a telly was certainly different - great party tric ...
  • 23.   Careless
    LOL!  I loved this chapter.  Especially the fact that Shona is uncomfortable wit ...
  • 22.    Room with a View
    LOL, yeah it's not good for us Aliens to lose sight of the human race for too lo ...
  • 22.    Room with a View
    Hmm... time to be 'selfless' I think (not easy - because I really love this stor ...
  • 22.    Room with a View
    Well... this chapter had 'everything'.  I laughed at the marshmallows, shook my ...
  • 21.   No Service Cafe
    To be honest, that's the first name that jumped into my head... but only because ...
  • 20.   The Not-so Evil Twin
    Excellent... when I finally got enough time to read it through properly!  I real ...
  • 21.   No Service Cafe
    ROFL... Could this get any better?  The new, improved Shona Clancy and Dolores, ...
  • 19.   No Place Like 'ome
    You know... I've been wracking my brains to figure out who the man is... and the ...
  • Chapter Thirteen: Revelations
    Wow... that was a bit of a stunner!  Great chapter.  I didn't see the grandmothe ...
  • 19.   No Place Like 'ome
    Oh 'rats'... managed to delete my feedback again! :(   (my fault this time) I'll ...
  • 18.   Pub Trek
    Even though I know what's coming... it's the suspense of wanting to witness Arch ...
  • 18.   Pub Trek
    Nooo!  Where's the next chapter? That's just mean...   This was probably the mos ...
  • 18.   Pub Trek
    Very funny... ye silly sod!   Hadn't realised about the 'go' shoappin being the ...
  • 17.   Relative Strangers
    Also, I don't know if it made a difference to me 'getting' it, but I was definit ...
  • 17.   Relative Strangers
    No... I figured that out after I wrote the feedback and had had time to think ag ...
  • 17.   Relative Strangers
    ROFL - 'The only other thing, after searching their family histories, that they ...
  • 16.   Saying it with Flowers
    I know what you mean.  I have to remember to copy back my WEbook edits - otherwi ...
  • 16.   Saying it with Flowers
    Oookay... well, wherever they went, I want them to pay for what they did to Sadi ...
  • 16.   Saying it with Flowers
    Promise you won't laugh?  I was thinking about the photos changing (which is a p ...
  • 16.   Saying it with Flowers
    Mindst you.... he usually gets her back by reminding us all that it was a 'toss ...
  • 16.   Saying it with Flowers
    Yeah, my Mum swears my Dad is turning into an 'awld git' and he's always been a ...
  • 16.   Saying it with Flowers
    Hmm... there's more to Sadie's memory of that goat - I even looked up the origin ...
  • 9.   The Walrus and the Eel
    I love Sadie Wallace, but then, you know that already.  Sorry, but I think her p ...
  • 15.   Charmed
    Mrs Hume sounds like a wonderful lady and that penultimate para just ups the int ...
  • 15.   Charmed
    Thanks for telling me that SP - it gives another dimension to this story and exp ...
  • 15.   Charmed
    Yes, I was wondering about those photos... I'll wait with my usual impatience fo ...
  • 15.   Charmed
    5397 words... that's quite a chapter, and yet, it slipped past.  Whatever you're ...
  • 14.   By Any Other Name
    Beady eyes?  Sadie?  or someone else?  Oh SP... how come you always do this to m ...
  • 13.   Pompeii, Machu Picchu and ... Brussels?
    I also liked that Archie's parents were including the other children in 'his' ed ...
  • 13.   Pompeii, Machu Picchu and ... Brussels?
    Ha.... boy, did a 'voice' come over in this... with a set of opinions and views ...
  • 12.   Mind Games
    As I haven't read the original, I can't say for sure, but I do think the 'less i ...
  • 12.   Mind Games
    Right... This is my SECOND attempt at a review for this chapter, because after h ...
  • 11.   The Big Bang Theory
    Oh no... Archie in the orphanage!  This could get tricky for his family - I don' ...
  • 7.   Witch or Alien?
    Hmm... you know, having 're-read' this chapter (and the following one), I've got ...
  • 10.   The Island
    You know, the thing I like about this story is the frequent changes in pace.  In ...
  • 10.   The Island
    Oh, sorry, forgot the single 'nitpick' I found - it's a good thing you don't min ...
  • 8.   Lipstick on a Donkey
    Hmmm.  This was an odd mix for me.  I think that Sadie is fantastic, in fact, sh ...
  • 7.   Witch or Alien?
    You know... I did spot the whisky/whiskey but I was really good and didn't menti ...
  • 7.   Witch or Alien?
    This chapter was a wonderful introduction to Sadie Wallace's character.  You dre ...
  • 6.   Wish You Weren't Here
    You are entirely welcome SP - My family tell me that patience 'isn't' one of my ...
  • 6.   Wish You Weren't Here
    Sigh... you really do have a way with words SP - I now have a perfect picture of ...
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    Sigh... you really do have a way with words SP - I now have a perfect picture of ...
  • 5.   The Missing Link
    So... the german town hall was demolished by a case of bad parking?  ROFL!  This ...
  • 4.   Old Flames
    Well, rest assured that your late night/early morning working on this chapter wa ...
  • 4.   Old Flames
    It's a good job I know that an 'Auld Wife' is a small straw effigy burned on New ...
  • 2.   Twice in a Blue Moon
    Ooh, I'm looking forward to finding out more... and I didn't get to see the Auro ...
  • 2.   Twice in a Blue Moon
    You're right, I did relate to a lot of the vernacular.  My Grandad was very 'bro ...
  • 2.   Twice in a Blue Moon
    "Size o’ a baby's arm." ?!  You've GOT to be joking SP!  The thought of this bro ...
  • 3.   Face Like a Melted Welly
    This chapter was short and sweet...my Son was still hanging around, so I was ins ...
  • 1.  Twenty-two New Year's Eves
    Hmm, just popped back to this chapter to see what comments had been left before ...
  • 1.  Twenty-two New Year's Eves
    Ahh, SP - this is great!  :)  Prickly Scots could take over from Warped Mirrors ...
  • Acts of Indiscretion: Sleeping on the Job
    Very good ~t.  I liked the twist!  Just one thing I noticed...  'Rhyn slipped a ...
  • Acts of Indiscretion : New York Subway
    I love stories that throw the characters a loop and gets them to behave drastica ...
  • CHAPTER NINE: SLEEPY HILLS
    Loved this chapter - it hints at even more layers to this story.  There is defin ...
  • CHAPTER EIGHT: GRIFFITH
    Hmm, so now Griffith knows how the bodies were left - and that bit of informatio ...
  • Information re: Warped Mirrors
    Nah - I never begrudge paying authors for their hard work.  I know what it takes ...
  • Information re: Warped Mirrors
    Been and gone and bought it SP...  How else am I going to find out what happens?
  • Free Radicals: Chapter 2 - Crufts, Codes & Cops
    Considering that this is the first time I've read a story of this genre, I'm imp ...
  • Loving Blood (revised) Chapter 1
    I liked this story idea.  I especially liked the premise that the spirit within ...
  • 4.   The Femme Fatale
    Ahh, you have a way with our language SP, no doubt.  There was so much that I en ...
  • No Matter Where [Poem]
    I liked this.  At first, I had to read it through a couple times, to get the wor ...
  • Sucky Poetry for Y'all
    ROFL!!!  Well, I don't know about anyone else, but I'm SCARED now!!  I've given ...
  • removed
    Big smile SP!!  This is my first 'read and rate' for a while... Loved the descri ...
  • Removed
    This is a 5 even with the couple of lines I think need 'fixing' when you get hom ...
  • Flashback
    I can tell you write poetry from this sentence.  Excellent.  :)
  • Removed
    I'm supposed to come up with some in-depth, scintillating feedback here, to show ...
  • Morgan
    Four words that send a shiver down my spine.  This is a statement of simple fact ...
  • Morgan
    Sorry, just noticed.  It needs to be Sundays, not Sunday's.
  • FREE RADICALS
    I can't sleep, so I came to read and rate...and this just blew me away.  I'll be ...
  • CHAPTER ONE: SLEIGH
    I already like your MCs - but the thought of those women and the babies... eww. ...
  • Love..
    Nice 'set-up' sentence.  It immediately sparks four questions...   Who is 'I'? ...
  • Chapter 10: ...Yet Nothing
    Yes, there are a few typos, but nothing too distracting... This chapter was 'imm ...
  • Chapter 9: What If's Change Everything...
    This chapter was, as usual, very moving and the description was spot on.  I can' ...
  • Chapter Two
    Yep - does it for me!  :)
  • Chapter 8: Alone in a Crowded Room
    Extremely good chapter... I know the angels needed to make sure she hadn't been ...
  • Red Liquid
    Now this I REALLY liked, especially for its versatility!  This first sentence co ...
  • The Hole
    Wow... not sure what else to say about this one.  Just that it got to me...
  • Trick Of The Mind
    Woah... that's DEEP!
  • Madness
    Ooh... super creepy!!
  • Chapter Nineteen
    As I said at the end of the previous chapter, you have dealt well with the death ...
  • The Operation
    Your last sentence was about madness... but this sounds like it would qualify fo ...
  • Madness
    Ooh... super creepy!!
  • Chapter Eighteen
    This was hard for me to read - I myself am a twin, whose sibling died at birth. ...
  • Chapter Seventeen
    Glad Ivor has finally seen what's been staring him in the face... One thing worr ...
  • Bullet Holes
    This was amazing - my jaw dropped and stayed there!  So much devastation and dea ...
  • The Loss
    Yep, that would be a great line to open with...
  • Change
    Beautiful - this is another one of your 'poetic' sentences, that makes me want t ...
  • Survival
    Like this!  :)
  • Survival
    Like this!  :)
  • Change
    Beautiful - this is another one of your 'poetic' sentences, that makes me want t ...
  • Birthrite
    This sentence captures the scene in just a few words and 'flows' well.  No wonde ...
  • Soulless Beauty.
    Hmm... 'for a living'.  I find the wording interesting.  Would that be naked 'li ...
  • czobermier
    You should also try Coven - it's my new favourite by this author!!
  • Chapter Eleven:
    Whoa!  This is REALLY going to have Ivor convinced that Silva's pack are evil, m ...
  • 12). Burning Veins
    Great fight-back, but reckon that's going to thrown up more problems than it sol ...
  • 26. Seek
    Thanks for responding to my 'confusion' in the last chapter - so it WAS Kyle (it ...
  • Chapter Nine:
    I wonder if Les is attempting to build his own pack and take over Jeff's... that ...
  • Chapter Five
    Another great chapter - the song lyrics worked really well to help built the ato ...
  • 21. Silver Swords
    Really like this chapter - and I agree with Crystalna, the title fits perfectly. ...
  • 15. Death
    So sad, I feel for Andy, having to cope with not only the loss of his Sister but ...
  • Chapter Twenty One: EPITATH
    Wow.... this chapter had SO much going on in it!!  I loved it!  But, boo hoo... ...
  • The Tenth Legion
    Excellent - I like this prologue even better than the one I rated on Page 2 Fame ...
  • Chapter Twenty: Her Nightmare descends
    I'm so glad that Jubilee was able to save Jeannie from Renaldo and he's finally ...
  • Chapter One
    Looks like I'm in for another treat - I love your stories! :)  However, will hav ...
  • Chapter Seventeen: She Encounters the Devil
    Good grief - THIS is BRILLIANT!!!  I really got Jubilee/Jeannie's emotions flood ...
  • kreeves106
    I agree!!!  kreeves is one of my favourite authors here on WEbook - her romances ...
  • 27. Awkwardness
    Another extremely well written chapter.  Thomas is seriously giving me the creep ...
  • Day Five
    This chapter, for me, falls into two sections.  The first couple of paragraphs s ...
  • 25. Ella's Client
    So it's Dylan!!! :)  Not who I thought... but I think it's rather sweet that he ...
  • 10. Social
    I know I'm supposed to be doing 'pre-holiday' housework/washing and ironing... b ...
  • Chapter Twenty One
    Oh yeah!!! THANK YOU!!  I got to read the ending of this before I go on my trave ...
  • Chapter 7: Inside Burning Out
    Whether this story goes the way I think it should or not, there is one thing I a ...
  • Chapter 7: Inside Burning Out
    WOW - LOTS going on in this chapter!  My head is still spinning from all the inf ...
  • Chapter Twenty
    Next chapter please!!!  That was great - I just need Charlie to get that damned ...
  • 9. Dream
    Oooh... I REALLY want it to be Ben! :)  I know he hit Emmalynn and has epic mood ...
  • 16). Poltergeist Parlour Tricks
    Wonder what he did to warrant THAT?!!!  NOW I get the 'feather head' nick-name! ...
  • 15).  Snapped
    Oooh - that's SO mean!!  I'd NEVER leave my readers on a cliff-hanger like that! ...
  • 14). Encased
    Rating bar still not working! :(  But - 5 stars again!  You really do have some ...
  • 13). What's Wrong?
    Urgh... The rating bar isn't working! It didn't work on the last chapter either! ...
  • Chapter Nineteen
    Hmm - me thinks some SERIOUSLY strong juju is about to take place!!   Next chapt ...
  • Chapter Sixteen
    Oh dear, this day just doesn't get any better, does it?  You are really setting ...
  • Chapter Fifteen
    The words I want to say about Jackson are not for polite company - But I am SO t ...
  • Taylor_James
    I agree - wholeheartedly!!!   Well worth a read - hope she posts more soon...
  • Rant #1
    You are so right - vampires are not meant to be pets! Btw - has anyone read any ...
  • Chapter 6: Listen to the Silence
    This was a really great chapter.  Very well written and very atomospheric and th ...
  • Chapter Fourteen
    I loved this chapter - Alex so determined to do 'the right thing' and Charlie ju ...
  • REEVERA
    I loved reading 'Yours For A Day' !  Now, apart from waiting for her to start th ...
  • ImaginaryAngel
    I have just started to read Devils Wings - and am completely hooked!  (Mara is s ...
  • A Few Tips For Women When It Comes To Men
    THIS is where I will come for a laugh - when I get down about my own writing! ...
  • Chapter Thirteen:
    Ah, so he WAS only a 'half leopard' when he rescued the boy... which means that ...
  • Chapter Ten
    Melting into a puddle here... This was a great chapter and your description of t ...
  • Wandering Touch
    This was amazing and distressing... Poems (for me) should 'speak' in a way that ...
  • Imaginary Angel
    I agree, Devil's Wings is a great read and 'Jack and Jill' looks set to be just ...
  • Chapter 5: Angel N' the Demon
    Yay! you're back!!  I'm with ReeVera - this was definitely worth waiting for.  I ...
  • Chapter Twenty Five
    Spectacular ReeVera - I'm a VERY quick reader, but I can't read fast enough for ...
  • 24. The Start of Something Else
    I have enjoyed reading this story so far.  I have my theories about who the son ...
  • Opposites
    Loved this - it doesn't just hold a story in the 'here and now', but gives the r ...
  • Author's Note 3
    Yay!! :)  The Lancasters return!!!  I will TRY to be patient.... Sounds great so ...
  • The Intimacy of Strangers
    Very well done - gave me hell of a shock, not to mention a shiver!!  This really ...
  • Chapter One
    You know, your powers of description never fail to amaze me...  This chapter was ...
  • Sneak Peak of DW; Halo of Flames Anyone?
    I would too!!!  Keep me posted!  :)
  • Chapter Eight
    I am really starting to fall in love with this story - BIG time!! :)  Glad it wa ...
  • Chapter 12
    Great chapter - I love the whole idea of the OPCD.  Onto the next chapter... :)
  • Chapter Five
    I really, really liked this chapter.  The description was great (as usual) the f ...
  • Chapter Six
    Wow - you certainly know how to tell a story and capture my imagination!! :)  I ...
  • KREEVES106
    One of my favourite writers too - along with yourself!! :)
  • Authors Last Note
    Wow - I'm on the shout out list!  Made my day!  Congratulations again on finishi ...
  • 33). The End
    Ok - you hooked me from the first and I ended up growling at my family when they ...
  • 31). Thunder and Lightening
    Gabriel is dead?  Just like that?  Hmm....  Great action scene btw!
  • 30). Careful [Revised]
    Then all hell broke loose - LOL (what else would I expect?)
  • 29). Not Giving Up
    Ok - Cambell isn't so bad after all!  Think I have trust issues after Gabriel... ...
  • 25). On the Bridge
    No, not working for me - now Cambell is pals with her dad?  Oh well, guess I'll ...
  • 24). Angel of Death
    I think there's something fishy going on here.  I don't trust Cambell - sorry!! ...
  • 20). Siblings
    Wow - next chapter NOW I think....!
  • 18). Breathtaking
    I always think that kiss scenes are some of the most difficult to 'get right' - ...
  • 17). Picnic
    Looks like Gabriel has competition and Cambell a touch of the green eyed monster ...
  • 1). Big, Black Iron Gates.
    Keep seeing your name crop up on the 'wonderful webook writers' page - and now I ...
  • Chapter Fifteen: She is Discovered
    You have got anxiety inducing writing well under your belt!  I was beginning to ...
  • Chapter Twenty Three
    Great chapter - but bring on 24!!!  I can't believe that Kiley's Mum can be so c ...
  • The Stalker - Chapter Four
    I love the way that you are building up the layers of mystery around your charac ...
  • Chapter Thirteen: She Plays the Game
    Poor Jubilee/Jeannie - having to live among a collection of creepy people like t ...
  • Chapter Ten: She meets the Family
    Really good chapter - 'Uncle Ren' is super CREEPY (must run in the family) :)  T ...
  • Chapter Nine: Her Run goes Awry
    Right, this is REALLY beginning to freak me out - because I CAN understand what ...
  • Chapter 4: The Beginning of the Immortal War
    This is great - Like ReeVera, I  didn't expect to read something that would actu ...
  • Chapter 7
    Really like the diary sections.  This is great writing - you're giving depth to ...
  • Chapter 4
    You are doing absolutely nothing to soothe away my fears about this whole 'reven ...
  • Epilogue
    I know that this is the first of a series of three.  I hope you'll send me an in ...
  • Epilogue
    I agree with ReeVera - the success of Twilight makes similarities between that a ...
  • Chapter 12
    Loved this chapter - and I have sympathy for poor Robert!  I've never been on a ...
  • Chapter Eight: She is Contacted
    You're giving me goosebumps!! :)  This story just has me tied up in knots - I re ...
  • czobermier
    This writer has a talent for bringing unlikely situations up close and personal ...
  • flyergoal
    ReeVera sent me the link to this book and I am now totally hooked!!  I HIGHLY re ...
  • Chapter Twenty Two
    Absolutely fantastic - so Stone is an ex-mercenary and Ira knows about Lola AND ...
  • Chapter Thirty five
    Sounds like Jay knows that Jonathan is a slime ball too....  Wish Ashley would s ...
  • Chapter Thirty four
    What on earth have Jay and Ashley's Mum done?  Pretending to be MARRIED was a re ...
  • Chapter Thirty three
    I REALLY don't like Jonathan - he's a slime ball, despite his good looks... firs ...
  • Chapter Thirty Two
    Ha ha ha, LOL, ROFL.... this story just gets better and better... I knew this wa ...
  • Chapter Thirty one
    Now THAT was fantastic!  Go Ashley!!! :)
  • Chapter Thirty
    And there it is... in black and white....  “The craziest thing I’ve done to get ...
  • Chapter Twenty nine
    Excellent - even the elements are on Jay's side! :)
  • Chapter Twenty eight
    Whoah!! :) Whose breakdown in communications?  Chan Sook's? I think not!  More l ...
  • Chapter Twenty seven
    Hooray!  Back from work and reading..... You must have gone through an intern pr ...
  • Chapter Twenty six
    Hmmm... not completely up on Vegas marriage laws, but suspect that there is a re ...
  • Chapter Twenty five
    Oh, way to go Ashley - putting poor Sam in a position like that, when I suspect ...
  • Chapter Twenty four
    Ok - have to say, this is what I expected/suspected, looks like Jay really works ...
  • Chapter Five: Her Encounter
    Wow!!  Go girl!  This is great - you have set the pace just how I like it and ar ...
  • Chapter Four: She is Confused
    Liking this more and more - Kellen is going to be a tough man to crack though! ...
  • Chapter Three: She Awakens
    Or has she?  The title of this story fascinates me...  There is obviously so muc ...
  • Chapter Two: She is Remembered
    Scary stuff!!  Grief is a terrible, life altering emotion that has the potential ...
  • Chapter One: Her Accident
    What can I say?  The crash scene was unbelievable!!  Excellent!  The descriptive ...
  • Five
    Like this!  :)    Miriam is turning out to have more than a few chinks in her ar ...
  • Six
    Your characters continue to develop nicely in this chapter.  Dexter obviously is ...
  • Chapter 3: Standing on the Edge
    I continue to find this story an entertaining read and the characters still hold ...
  • Four
    So, the vicious ice queen has feelings afterall does she?  Good!  This has alrea ...
  • Chapter Thirteen:  Aftermath
    Yey!!! Damian's back!!  :) - So, do they get to give Simon some serious grief no ...
  • Chapter Twenty One
    Right - didn't see THAT coming!!  With Kiley's Mum in hospital and now this, aft ...
  • Chapter Twelve: Ritual
    Right - warned you! A puddle of tears it is! :(  That said - this was very well ...
  • Prologue
    This is very Good Aiden - the first two paragraphs catapulted me straight into y ...
  • Chapter 2: Apparitions of the Past
    I think the same as ReeVera - great that Raven is her sister and that she has go ...
  • Two
    Wow - Miriam must really be a nasty piece of work to have everyone being so vind ...
  • Chapter Fifty four
    Absolutely stunning chapter - I haven't left much feedback since chapter thirty ...
  • Chapter Fifty five
    THANK YOU!!!!!  Now THAT was what I needed to read - FINALLY, some sense!  Loved ...
  • Chapter Fifty six
    Simply Brilliant!!!!!! Well done you! :)
  • One
    This is brilliant - I can almost see the comic scenarios lining up with this sto ...
  • Chapter Five
    Very, very funny!! :)
  • Chapter Seven
    You have a great writing style and a natural talent for humour!  Best line in th ...
  • Chapter Eleven
    Hmmm, something seems off, but not sure about the 'Gold digger' idea?  To me, if ...
  • Chapter Thirteen
    Yes, her mother kissing Jay on the cheek is definitely 'odd', and I for one thin ...
  • Chapter Fourteen
    Excellent writing - On to the next chapter!.... :)
  • Chapter Fifteen
    I think Ashley's Mum is being rather devious..... :)
  • Chapter Sixteen
    Yep - there is absolutely NO way that Ashley's Mum would send her new husband of ...
  • Chapter Seventeen
    Yeah!!!  My spider sense is definitely on top form! :)  Mum obviously learnt her ...
  • Chapter Eighteen
    And now begins the slow transformation of Ashley into a cook and respectable wor ...
  • Chapter Nineteen
    Oh, no, it's a motorbike isn't it?!!!  The cookery lessons are coming along a tr ...
  • Chapter Twenty
    Well, I've always thought that honesty is the best policy - and telling the inte ...
  • Chapter Twenty one
    WOW - I am SO glad I overcame my reservations about the title of this story (wha ...
  • Chapter Twenty two
    Aww - as my kids would say 'SWEET'!!  The spoiled brat is actually learning to t ...
  • Chapter Twenty three
    Nah, everything is fine... he's just being a bit overly protective - but then he ...
  • Chapter Two
    Very good - this is building into a truly nightmare situation for Ashley.  Can't ...
  • Chapter One
    Have to say, I'm hooked!  Kept seeing this on the Romance listings and then real ...
  • Chapter Eight: Intruder
    This is good! :)  I'm going to message you with my thoughts because it would tak ...
  • Chapter Nineteen
    Brilliant! :)  Your characters are driving this story forward at a nice, quick p ...
  • Chapter Eighteen
    Great chapter - Really like the way that you are continuing to develop the chara ...
  • Chapter 1: Rebirth
    I'm with ReeVera on this - an amazing start!  Excellent action and emotion backe ...
  • Chapter Four: Choices
    Very nice - I like the interaction between Sam and Aislin, I could really feel A ...
  • Chapter Three: Haunting Angel
    Well, I'm speechless (and as my family will confirm, that doesn't happen very of ...
  • Chapter 5: Deep in the Mile
    Great!  Loved the characters you introduced in this chapter and your writing had ...
  • Epilog
    Just the pay-off I was after - a happy ending with the promise of an even happie ...
  • Yesterdays - Revised
    I like this very much - your talent for beautiful descriptive passages hasn't de ...
  • Prologue: Art of Love
    This really seems to stack up as an impossible scenario!  I've read through this ...
  • Acts of Indiscretion : The Business Woman & The Broom Closet
    Hmm, I told you recently that I believe all authors put a bit of themselves into ...
  • Dreams, SAM chapter
    Oh no!  I didn't think that I could ever feel anything nice towards Sam, but I w ...
  • Book One: Scorched ~ Part 3: Smoulder
    Very good - I like the way that this story is showing what is really important i ...
  • Chapter 4: Leading the Lamb to Slaughter
    This story was good before - but you just raised the bar as far as 'attention gr ...
  • Chapter 3: Almost Doesn't Count
    Hmmm, definitely more to 'GlenForGod' than meets the eye!  He's not quite as goo ...
  • Chapter 2: The Book
    You write about Rose's struggle against what she perceives to be sinful extremel ...
  • Chapter 1: Fallen
    Beautifully written, just like the other work I've read of yours.  What can I sa ...
  • Selfless Pleasure: Final Encounter
    Have read all three sections of this story and have to say, I really, really lik ...
  • Desire's Way: Katari ~ The Legend Begins
    Amazing writing - and a fantastic idea!
  • Chapter Ten: Rekindled
    Right, where to start with this chapter?  I suppose with the fact that I really, ...
  • Chapter Six: Alliance
    This chapter flowed the best out of those I have read so far.  The relationship ...
  • Chapter Eight: Ancient
    OOOOH!  This just gets better and better!!!  You really are getting into the flo ...
  • Chapter Two: Intervention
    This is continuing to grab and focus my attention.  The pace and tone are great ...
  • Chapter 10
    I sympathise totally with Maggie's fear of needles, although I'm pretty sure tha ...
  • Chapter 9
    This is a very, very twisted plot!  Just how I like it.  Talk about mental tortu ...
  • Chapter 6
    My initial theory?  Dimitri to the rescue?  Guess I'm going to have to read on t ...
  • Shadow Life
    Really like this, your descriptive passages are fantastic!  And you get the read ...
  • Silenced - Chapter Fifteen
    Thank goodness - talk about leaving it until the last second!  Very good though, ...
  • Silenced - Chapter Twelve
    WOW!!!!!!!
  • Silenced - Chapter Ten
    'The African print wrap seemed a bit over the top, but who was I to say?  I was ...
  • Silenced - Chapter Nine
    Very atmospheric.  I particularly liked the description of the waitress 'Maggie' ...
  • Silenced - Chapter Eight
    Oh no!  I've run out of chapters to read and I was really enjoying this project! ...