AlinaVoyce's Compliments

Compliments:  74

Last Compliment: 10/24/2017

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Submission Reviews

  • Body of water
    I'd love to know the back story here, because shooting/drowning your son because ...
  • Dark Places (2)
    Atmospheric, with rich, visual descriptions. Can't say that I completely underst ...
  • Taste of the Faerie's Banquet
    Ooh, as rich as chocolate cake, Chris!  I loved the 'legend' style of this piece ...
  • A Slice of Life
    Ooh, I like this much more! There's a better flow and clarity to the sequence of ...
  • Jawing With Jesus
    I thought this story was really well imagined, and I thoroughly enjoyed the idea ...
  • Frankenstein Immortal (fragment)
    Wow, a tormented, man-made monster, hell-bent on getting what he believes is his ...
  • Pebble (Try Number Two)
    Bizarrely--I rather liked this. I missed your earlier sub, so can't equate with ...
  • Chapter one: Coming to town.
    Second Section to End of Chapter:  Okay, so I started out doing a line-edit, in ...
  • Chapter one: Coming to town.
    First Section:    You hooked me in from the first line, which was excellent.  I ...
  • Chapter one: Coming to town.
    “Got to honor the Dead.” I said. >> general points on punctuation within dialogu ...
  • Brown Bread
    Firstly, apologies for this feedback topping the word count of your sub!  I've r ...
  • Brown Bread
    I had to read this through a couple of times before I 'got it'.  I took this to ...
  • Endurance
    I agree about the tone. Definitely too old for a child, and yet, it flows well. ...
  • The Moment that Never Happened
    I agree with Duncan.  I think there needs to be more of a tie-in to the fantasy ...
  • Man's Best Friend
    First off:  All the feedback below is to be taken as suggestions only.  Feel fre ...
  • Perfection
    Wow.  A roundhouse kick, Ken.  I know precisely zero about sword making, but I d ...
  • Hungry
    Well written, but no surprises there.  A nice variation of 'the devil on my shou ...
  • My Affliction
    Yup, I've read this through a few times now, and I still love the slightly crazy ...
  • Long Winter's Night
    I really, really enjoyed this.  There's enough left unsaid about the people you' ...
  • Heart of a Hustler
    This really caught my attention, and held it. A beautiful introspection, by a ch ...
  • Never Did I Want to be Here Again
    Wow. This is beautiful, and atmospheric, Calcifer.  Loved it.  As with last mont ...
  • x
    This is an interesting sub and a unique 'trial' - I must admit, I was wondering ...
  • The World Without Cats
    I wouldn't class this as outright comedy, but there were moments where I laughed ...
  • Trapped (Rev 6 - 15 days left)
    This is great.  Trapped, with no vision or sound to give a point of reference. ...
  • Orpheus and Eurydice
    Loved this!  Well written throughout, but that ending... a very nice twist!   Th ...
  • Chapter 01
    Very good, Adam - just a few minor 'queries' that you might want to consider, bu ...
  • Over
    The baldly stated events, for me, added resonance to this submission.  Yes, ther ...
  • Soldier
    Firstly, I thought this was a good concept, and an interesting one.  This sub ac ...
  • Nowhere to Nowhere
    Having read this through a couple of times, I have to say that I agree with a lo ...
  • The Escape Claus
    Oh my... you never fail to make me laugh, Kim!  And thankfully, after three year ...
  • Prologue
    Hmm, well, I'm breaking my illness/Christmas induced absence from WEbook by taki ...
  • The Guardian
    You've certainly changed this A LOT since I read this sub last. The beginning is ...
  • excerpt book 2, 'Subtleties of the Blood',
    This is a very visual and dramatic submission, and it certainly grabbed my atten ...
  • The Goddess of Miami chapter one
    I liked this.  You have some good imagery and, although there were a few grammat ...
  • 6. Marta
    Believe it or not, given the length of feedback below, I really DID enjoy this c ...
  • Fragile Sanity
    This is one of the scarier subs I've read because here you portray someone causi ...
  • 2. Reuven (revised)
    He had planted 50 rows of corn. >> not sure if this is right, but I was taught t ...
  • The Witch and the Fool
    Excellent sub, engaging story and in true flash fiction style, a heck of a lot m ...
  • x
    I read this story a couple of days ago but didn't have time to leave feedback. ...
  • Venus' First Kiss
    You have some excellent world building here but, unfortunately, no first kiss. ...
  • Venus' First Kiss
    Woo Hoo!  Great re-write, Ken.  You're obviously having problems creating paragr ...
  • First Kiss
    Loved this!  You've taken the frog-prince idea, turned it on it's head and added ...
  • First Kiss
    I like how you've changed what most would consider a 'last' kiss into a first ki ...
  • DNR
    I kind of got where you were going with this, but I found the plot development c ...
  • Lonely Julie from the Western Sky
    After reading your June challenge submission, I was straight over to your profil ...
  • Surrogate
    As you know, I enjoyed the first read through of this, but you've really improve ...
  • Time Traveling Muffins
    This is great, Princess_Lirael!  I loved the whole concept and I thought the sto ...
  • Profile
    You've improved and refined your original entry (and I've upped my star rating a ...
  • Chapter 5
    Another good chapter - I get the feeling that the comic story and the four broth ...
  • Chapter Eleven: Preperations
    Stubborn woman... but good on Griffith for recognising that this is something sh ...
  • Chapter Ten: Face Off
    I have read this through three times now - the first two times I got called away ...
  • CHAPTER SEVEN: MOTHER SUPERIOR
    This is a great chapter.  I love the intrigue you are building around Sleigh's p ...
  • CHAPTER FOUR: EXPOSED
    Oooh... this is getting really GOOD.  Just one thing I noticed - you sometimes s ...
  • CHAPTER THREE: DRAWN
    Excellent, as usual.  I really do admire your descriptions, but the one that sto ...
  • Shards of Glass and Cotton Balls
    Great imagery - as with a lot of your work, this had a 'dark' feel to it, but yo ...

  • I'm with Misunderstood (apart from the bit about her not being a very good poet ...
  • Morgan
    Four words that send a shiver down my spine.  This is a statement of simple fact ...
  • Red Liquid
    Now this I REALLY liked, especially for its versatility!  This first sentence co ...
  • Birthrite
    I liked this, it caught my attention nicely.  Personally, I would lose the 'and ...
  • Chapter Sixteen
    Oh no... Ivor's Dad turns up NOW?!  That can't be good - he's not going to be pl ...
  • Chapter Eight
    Wow - so although Les is an overbearing skunk, it wasn't him that killed those p ...
  • Chapter Two
    You know what?  Your writing just gets better and better.... I love this story a ...
  • 16. Medium
    Poor Andy - he must be feeling so lonely and confused and 'frustrated' at this t ...
  • abielski1392
    I agree - I've already nominated her, but she deserves as many 'votes' as possib ...
  •   PLEASE STAY
    So easy to do - a parent torn between wrapping their child in a 'cocoon' of love ...
  • 14. Healed
    Beautiful.... Emotions captured perfectly.  Nothing else I can say really - you ...
  •    Good and mad
    I know what you mean - neglect of the ones we love is a terrible thing.  Luckily ...
  • 4. Curiosity
    General: Liked the pace and flow of this chapter - you are managing to keep it g ...
  • 3. Falling
    General: I enjoyed this chapter - it 'flowed' well and I was at the end before I ...
  • Silence Pondered
    I really liked this - it's the sort of thing I'd like to be able to write.  Flow ...
  • Three
    This is new territory for me - Usually I have to at least 'like' the main charac ...
  • Chapter Twenty
    Well, I thought this was excellent ! (though my pov is probably not that importa ...
  • Chapter Nine: Interloper
    Next chapter please!!! :)
  • Chapter Five: Circumstances
    Think I'd be bowled over by three dozen red roses too!!!  :)