AlinaVoyce's Compliments

Compliments:  258

Last Compliment: 10/22/2017

Motivating (258)

Submission Reviews

  • The Last Halloween
    Ooh, creepy!  As soon as the old man appeared on the scene, I was thinking 'Chil ...
  • Underground Railroad Adventure
    This is really good, Shana. You had me completely hooked into the story, and I l ...
  • A Poem for the hell of it
    Brilliant, Tony! :)
  • Last Date
    I really liked this. A very different 'love scene'. I do, however, also have lot ...
  • Table for 3.14159
    Excellent. I absolutely loved this. The science/tech was believable, and the 'bu ...
  • Red
    Haha, thank you, Chris! 'Dragged in' sounds about right! I've had computer troub ...
  • Locked Doors
    I liked the distinction between the brightness and laughter outside this room an ...
  • Resonance Rush
    Lovely. As someone who loves music, this really caught my attention and held it. ...
  • Liberty Rose
    Lovely, emotive piece of writing. The transition to motherhood is always an enor ...
  • Day Seven
    One word: excellent.
  • Cara's Tale
    Interesting. It took me a couple of read-throughs to get into the flow of the wo ...
  • Stephanie the New Accountant (Song Link at end of song)
    Love the new line!  :)
  • Montana Weather
    Reading the feedback below, I gather some people wanted more drama in here, but ...
  • New Life
    Oh, very good! Love the way you play with the idea of universe and what it might ...
  • The road to Rasoul (version 2)
    This really is good, Neil. I've read it a few times now, and either I'm seeing t ...
  • Chapter 1 - Waking to a Nightmare!
    Okay (cracks fingers) - I'm short of time up until mid-November, but you need so ...
  • Hotel d'Amore
    Have you (or anyone else) seen the film Memento, Ronnie?  My son recommended it ...
  • Bloke Bird
    Absolutely brilliant.  I nearly fell off my chair laughing at the thought of boo ...
  • Where the Flames Glow Blue
    You've had some excellent feedback below, and I can't really add to it. My input ...
  • Seriously!
    I really liked this - especially the way you ended a lot of the paragraphs with ...
  • Full Circle
    This is well written, deftly fulfills the challenge brief, and kept my attention ...
  • The Silver Arrow
    Excellent retelling of a well-known tale - and (for the record) I agree with lig ...
  • Oh, Shooter...
    Really enjoyed this, and glancing at the feedback below, I see that Ernest_Lee h ...
  • Corina
    Ha! Duncan said exactly what I was thinking: 'Typhoid Mary'.  Cleverly written, ...
  • Step 0
    I'm wondering if you've added that last sentence recently? Because THAT surprise ...
  • Chapter Sixty-Five
    Definitely an action scene!  And you do those SO well!  Bet this was a walk in t ...
  • White Knight
    Excellent.  Got to be a front runner for this month's challenge winner.  As usua ...
  • Soldiers of Destiny
    This is well written, and I'm giving it 5 stars for that, because my only real p ...
  • Straight Out of Hell
    I really liked this, and to be fair, I was quite relieved when all that was at s ...
  • A Listless Carol
    Wow, this is good, and DARK. I need to take notes on how you've managed it, beca ...
  • The Shelter
    This is lovely!  Always like it when the bad guys get their comeuppance...and it ...
  • Nightfall
    Clever and beautiful.
  • Alohomora
    I feel a bit of a fraud even attempting to comment on this month's challenge, bu ...
  • Listen
    I really enjoyed this, Kristy.  A strong poem with a clear message, that even a ...
  • The Ghost's Lament
    Excellent.  Ghosts that can't go through glass so have to plan their route to re ...
  • Bird Watcher
    A lovely poem, ultimately filled with pathos.
  • The View from the Admiral's Table
    Light and funny!  Perfect for the content.
  • While angels weep
    This is the kind of poetry that intimidates me.  It's not that I didn't enjoy it ...
  • If I kiss you where it's sore
    Congratulations on a top six placing!
  • If I kiss you where it's sore
    Good...no, excellent, but you wrote this a bit TOO well, and I ended up all tear ...
  • Tales Aboard the Chronicle
    Oh, I loved this, Aftab.  The tone, the plot, the fact I got the ending I was ho ...
  • Edge
    You had me from start to finish - a character driven story that slips along smoo ...
  • Reason #666 Not To Do Meth (Revised)
    This is nasty... In a good way, which is something I personally cannot write.  I ...
  • Cannabis Blues
    Another good read, Ernest.  A darkly funny and fascinating character study that ...
  • Climb
    Lovely story that had me completely hooked... to the point that I didn't see the ...
  • The Hit
    Excellent.  Never mind Lana, this sub has an edginess about it too.  Tense, dark ...
  • Salvage! Chapter Three
    Well, I really liked this!  I've come across snippets of 'Salvage!' through the ...
  • A Shadow Walks Alone
    Okay, so I finally couldn't resist taking a peek at this challenge.  Skimming th ...
  • Identity
    I love your medieval story... but this is something so entirely different to tha ...
  • Raunchy Night
    This is a funny read, but confusing at the same time.  And NO (holds up hand) I ...
  • If We're Sinners
    I read this yesterday night, but was too sleepy to put the words together for a ...
  • Snow White
    Congratulations on the win, Aftab - and take note: Your talent for writing doesn ...
  • Fairy Tale
    This was really lovely, LostV. That's not to say it wasn't dark, sad and a touch ...
  • Split
    Congratulations on making the leader-board with this sub, RainbowBlight.  :)
  • Grains of Sand
    Congratulations, LostV!  This is an outstanding story, and a well-deserved winne ...
  • Walled and Bounded
    Congratulations on making the leader-board with this sub, girl-bird.  Well deser ...
  • Crow
    As others have already said, this story has the Grimm's fairytale feel and was n ...
  • Grey
    Wow.  Okay, Dorchadas... pretty sure I've seen you on the forum pages, but not r ...
  • The Apple (Draft 2)
    Much better, Jack, and I like the new ending.  You've kept the grit, but smoothe ...
  • No Safe Corner
    This is probably going to sound really strange (I do live with a daughter who's ...
  • Walled and Bounded
    I did! - please keep me posted/send me an invite for when you get the project up ...
  • Walled and Bounded
    This whole piece had a poignancy about it that was very well done, but not overp ...
  • Split
    Nothing I can say that hasn't already been said.  Dialogue, characterisation, th ...
  • Grains of Sand
    Brilliant, LV - from the moment Crack said "He had a gun, Reef" I was thinking.. ...
  • Escape from Stalag-Luft XV
    Ah, Ernest, you never disappoint!  This sub has humour, a stirring speech and... ...
  • Party time
    Well, you told me you'd write a sub that wasn't medieval in flavour... and you k ...
  • The Pearl
    Yes!  Thank YOU, JP.  This had the grit, but it had the happy ending too... and ...
  • The Marching Man's Son
    Ah, you see, now you've gone and disappointed me... I was SO into this story tha ...
  • Just hanging (revised)
    Having fun reading some of your poems, after you were kind enough to leave feedb ...
  • Freedom
    This is a well written sub and I enjoyed the way you communicated the emotions f ...
  • Bluster and Bravado
    girlbird, you have surpassed yourself!  This had me laughing out loud and callin ...
  • Suburbia's Vice
    Congratulations on being in the top 6 for June!  :)
  • The mind's eye
    I liked this story, especially how the lack of sight allowed for one person to t ...
  • Pleasurable Pain (Revision 1)
    Well written, and an unusual take on the challenge.  No sight or sound, and you ...
  • Bound
    This is truly horrible... but good too - if that makes sense?  Seems like you're ...
  • Orsinium
    As others have said: Wow!    This is wonderful, intriguing, and left me with a w ...
  • Schrödinger's door
    Another excellent challenge entry.  I always know that I'm in for a good read wh ...
  • Walls
    Whoa...  Got to the end of this and read it through again... and again.  Didn't ...
  • Moriarity Strikes Again
    Congratulations, Tony!
  • Cat Walk
    Very funny - I enjoyed the whole thing, but those last two lines were what reall ...
  • Pray-A-Weigh
    I really liked this!  There are some great lines in here, that made me laugh!  : ...
  • Surface Mail
    Brilliant! (and yeah, I cringed for your MC) This had good pace and engaging cha ...
  • You Can't Polish a Turd.
    See... THIS is he sort of sub I wanted to write, but didn't have a clue how to! ...
  • Sexual Healing
    Wow. I LOVED this -  great characterisation and an entertaining story of the sin ...
  • N/A
    Just beautiful, LV!  Rich in description, atmosphere and characterisation - I'm ...
  • Service
    All I can really do is echo what others have already said.  I read this yesterda ...
  • Shopping Can Change Everything
    Very nicely done!  Loved that last line too, because it took all the emotion and ...
  • The Naked Aphrodite
    Job's a good un, Aftab - it may have been an ordeal, but I think it still works! ...
  • The Naked Aphrodite
    Loved this.  As others have already said, elegantly written... but oh, so funny ...
  • Hope
    Lovely. At first, it made me think of a similar sub from a previous month (about ...
  • The Engagement
    As you comment below, perhaps it's not such an easy decision to make from the 'i ...
  • Huck and Lolita
    Really liked this, Tony.  Kept me amused from start to finish! In fact, probably ...
  • Secrets
    This made me feel frustrated - at the bullies, the world in general, that there ...
  • Read Me
    Erm... usually I'm a fan of stream of consciousness pieces, but this just didn't ...
  • Twenty-eight
    When I first saw this I thought 'no way...this can't be just 28 sentences!' but ...
  • Boundary Dispute
    Okay, this may just be me being a bit thick, but I found this really confusing a ...
  • Burn, baby, burn (revised Jan 17)
    Okay, so I'm a sci-fi fan - though usually Earth-based and closer to our present ...
  • Vincent
    Well, well, well... who'd have thought it?  I've been utterly captivated by a st ...
  • The Magic Of The Stage
    I really liked this.  Took me a little while to get into the flow and get the 'v ...
  • N/A
    So sad... this was beautifully written, but certainly never 'over done' and I th ...
  • Snow
    Well... if anyone thinks they can beat this... let 'em try.  This. Is. Fabulous. ...
  • The Christmas Sting
    As already said, this is a great twist on the Scrooge tale and very well written ...
  • We Need to Talk About Rudolph
    Wow, this is pretty impressive stuff!  I was intrigued when you said that you st ...
  • 'Twas the Night Before Christmas
    Really loved this!  You had me grinning from start to finish and, just like Erne ...
  • One born every minute
    I read this a couple of days ago, but didn't have time to leave feedback.  It's ...
  • Ex Maria Virgine
    This is well written and, controversial retelling aside, that comes through clea ...
  • White Cells (YA)
    Really nothing to critique on this sub - it is, as Aftab has already said, 'perf ...
  • A Game of the Gods - end of chapter 1.
    Good submission - I enjoyed it!  I did spot one or two typos/grammatical errors ...
  • An Android in Love
    I enjoyed this.  Plenty of intriguing questions left in my mind about where this ...
  • Visiting Lilly
    I really liked this - you've left me with a lot of questions churning around my ...
  • Suspension of Disbelief
    You've obviously weeded out all those tags now, because there was absolutely not ...
  • Outpost
    LOL - Loved it!  And how very... YOU, Finn!  ;)    Well, you know I think this i ...
  • The Visit
    Oh dear... now my family are wondering what I'm up to at my computer because I w ...
  • *The Devil Will Cry*
    I've read this before and it's just as I remember it - well written and intrigui ...
  • Portals of Paradox Chapter One
    I was squirming at this scene.  I hate the feeling when I go to get something an ...
  • Songs from the Minaret
    Well, having read the sub AND the feedback already left - I don't think there's ...
  • Bleeding Souls
    Yet to beat any of us?  So...when you were listed in the top six entries for 'Fi ...
  • The Sapling
    Interesting and unusual plot (always appreciated).  The only spelling issue I fo ...
  • Generation Gap
    I like the reword!  If I remember rightly though, rubbing his 'hoof' against a c ...
  • Generation Gap
    Just spotted this sub as I was about to turn off my computer - you had me laughi ...
  • Plastic
    Insanity in a nutshell!   Though madness, in its many forms, will obviously be a ...
  • The River
    I've read this multiple times already and really love the lightness and humour o ...
  • Bad Necromance
    Thoroughly enjoyed this, Brad.  Your writing is well paced and engaging and I li ...
  • * Poveglia Island *
    Plenty of atmosphere in this sub!  A true, evil vampire tale, complete with scre ...
  • A.I.
    Just reading the other feedback left on this and I had a thought:  She hesitated ...
  • Chapter 1
    Firstly - this made me SMILE!  A great premise IMHO and you immediately have a w ...
  • Trust Me
    This is a creepy, horrific story that really gave me a 'shiver down the spine'. ...
  • N/A
    Excellent, LV.  This had power and rich, visual descriptions that held me spell- ...
  • Prologue-
    I've given this a four because there were some sentence structure issues, but yo ...
  • As If
    Excellent sub, expertly written, that was a pleasure to read.  Really can't thin ...
  • Last Request
    Meant to say: Looking forward to reading more of this story.
  • N/A
    Well, wow, that was...pretty amazing, actually!  I read this through and then im ...
  • The day God came to school
    This was a unique twist on the challenge and definitely had an original plotline ...
  • 1. Byrom (revised)
    I'm going to come back to this...but even though I'm trying to get the first dra ...
  • It took you long enough
    Excellent - if this is a taste of your historical story telling:  more please! ...
  • Young Love, Sponsored By Doritos
    Perfect.  You captured the scene and made me feel for Jonas AND Brad.  Seriously ...
  • Temptation
    Oh...Atrees.  You need to start exploring this talent you have for a romantic sc ...
  • First Kiss
    Like the rewrite - very nicely done.  I enjoyed the second read through too.
  • First Kiss
    As commented below - this is an incredibly romantic first kiss.  Had a hint of l ...
  • Hope
    This is a very moving piece of writing and the story it tells, just as Lanette s ...
  • 25 Year Old Virgin
    I thought this was well written.  There was a 'detached' feel to this sub, which ...
  • Skittle to Seattle
    Just read this through again - good job. I thoroughly enjoyed it AGAIN - and a d ...
  • Gettysburg Witness
    A very different story and clever too.  I liked how you wrote about a physical t ...
  • The Empty Hole
    One word for this: Creepy.  You did an excellent job of creating atmosphere and ...
  • Forever Mine
    Absolutely beautiful, Finn - this is the sort of thing I love to read... and wri ...
  • HEROIN(E)
    Something about the way you write really appealed to me.  This flowed and had an ...
  • Change of Life
    Oh...(insert deep belly chuckle here) this was GOOD, Mr T.  Well crafted, you ke ...
  • Bokeh of the Galaxy
    Right - well, way to blow my socks off!  THIS has got to be a top contender in t ...
  • S.O.B.
    I thought this was very smooth and an excellent, entertaining read.  There were ...
  • A Life With More Daylight
    Really liked this - My only real gripe is that you didn't give the reader any in ...
  • A Little Experiment
    This is much cleaner now.  I like that you simplified the description of the Coa ...
  • Trail of Pilfered Purses
    Ooh, the nasty, arrogant jerk... and the Cop!  Honestly didn't see that one comi ...
  • CHAPTER 1 – THE WOUND
    Hmm...for a man with child-like drawings as his Avatar, this story has a level o ...
  • 03: Haven
    Again, nothing to critique on this chapter.  Really enjoying this!  Have you got ...
  • 01: Awakening
    Wow.  You really can turn your hand to different genres.  This was GOOD!  One ni ...
  • The Old Ship Rises
    Fantastic! - Imaginative, well written and bang on target for the challenge.  No ...
  • Stars
    Ooh... issues, much?  Why do I get the feeling that this is an embellished versi ...
  • Chapter 2
    This carries on the promise of the 5 pages on PTF.  VERY nicely written Sheri.
  • Chapter 1
    This shows a lot of promise - and yeah, I'm a huge romance fan, so I DO know wha ...
  • Chapter One
    This is not your usually style, and is definitely disturbing.  You've captured t ...
  • EPILOG
    Sorry it took me so long to read this... but I loved it!  You've left this one w ...
  • God's Love!!!
    This is what I strive to remember daily - with varying degrees of success...  Th ...
  • CHAPTER FIVE: CHOICES
    Personally, I hope Griffith is fighting a losing battle with his attraction to S ...
  • Loving Blood (chapter 6)
    This explains a lot.  I was wondering how the 'loving blood' that Joseph had cre ...
  • Loving Blood (chapter 4)
    This was a very informative chapter.  You give the reader a clear picture of jus ...
  • Loving Blood (chapter 3)
    Again, I think that this is a definite improvement - I'm going on to the next ch ...
  • Loving Blood  (chapter 2)
    Yes, I think that it does read better.  The info on the chakras is well defined ...
  • Loving Blood  (chapter 2)
    I've given this a 5 after debating between a 4 and 5 for quite some time.  I REA ...
  • Removed
    You have a knack of getting me to read stuff that I wouldn't normally go for.  I ...
  • Children's Story (MG) WIP - Second chapter
    I'll look out for 'Schooled'.  Thanks for the recommendation.  :)
  • Children's Story (MG) WIP - Second chapter
    Well, if this is a kids book - I've decided I must be seriously infantile.  I re ...
  • Children's Story (MG) WIP - First chapter
    I liked this.  You show good characterisation and I can see Will developing a ki ...
  • Removed
    Hmm... this is SO well written, I could swear I've read it somewhere before...th ...
  • Removed
    This took a while for me to ease myself into...the wording used and the in-depth ...
  • Auld Lang Syne
    Really liked this.  You have crafted the story well and your characters are rela ...
  • The Loss
    Yep, that would be a great line to open with...
  • A Mark Of Power
    Firstly, I liked the way that you used the correct medical terminology - in keep ...
  • The Weight of Glass - First 5 pages
    Read this again on my Kindle (yes, I was one of your Amazon customers) and I've ...
  • Removed
    This project is introducing me to styles/genres that I've not read before and I' ...
  • Being Bompsy Carleffa - First Page
    Liked the premise and liked your style of writing.  This first page has a very ' ...
  • Heartsouls- Five Page Challenge
    I actually rated this entry in PTF and gave it a 4 (and I was one of those who r ...
  • Prologue of Smaller Than Life - 5 pages
    Loved this - as I've said before, I'm not good enough at the mechanics of Englis ...
  • The Other One - Five Page Challenge with Extended Sample (First Chapter)
    Not sure where this story is going yet... it seems to be heading towards romance ...
  • Prologue of Smaller Than Life - unsubmitted one page
    Right... It's a 5 and this time I'm not going to apologise and wonder if I'm bei ...
  • Removed
    Truthfully, I would have given this a 4 if I'd been given it to rate - because i ...
  • Removed
    From the heading 'Chapter One', this story was smooth, had good characterization ...
  • Act one: My Last Day.  Chapter one
    Confused has hell - but what does THAT matter?  This piece of writing was all ab ...
  • To Stand Alone
    Extremely moving...and heartwrenching to read.  Very good.
  • Cold Christmas
    This is great!  I think the telling section is 'like the surgeon's knife.' rathe ...
  • Wanted.
    Really like this.  It gives the reader/writer a couple of options for the direct ...
  • Soulless Beauty.
    Hmm... 'for a living'.  I find the wording interesting.  Would that be naked 'li ...
  • Birthrite
    This sentence captures the scene in just a few words and 'flows' well.  No wonde ...
  • Birthrite
    I liked this, it caught my attention nicely.  Personally, I would lose the 'and ...
  • Trigger Finger
    Excellent first sentence... this fires up the reader's imagination immediately! ...
  • A Weighty Issue
    I really liked this - well done!
  • 28. Savior
    Sounds perfect to me...  :)
  • 11). First Class
    Oooh - the plot thickens.  Just who or what is Gabriel?  Still keep thinking of ...
  • 22. Help
    There was so much going on in this chapter, what with the necklace and Andy hope ...
  • 17. Nightmare
    This was a harrowing chapter to read.  The details of Emma's abduction, torture ...
  • Anger
    I agree with Mikihara - Wow.  This is a fantastic poem - there is a tense edge t ...
  • 'Finally, I'm Free'
    This poem makes me want to applaud and cringe at the same time.  'Bitter Sweet' ...
  • Best of me
    Just.... Wow.  A poem that manages to communicate a world of thoughts and feelin ...
  • The Tenth Legion
    Excellent - I like this prologue even better than the one I rated on Page 2 Fame ...
  • 12. Paper
    SO glad Benjamin chucked Kyle out - about time!!  :)  The story of how Emmalynn ...
  • 8. Confusion
    Still don't like Kyle - first he runs when the police arrive and abandons Emmaly ...
  • 7. Punished
    General: Really good - you had me running the whole gamut of emotion - from worr ...
  • 1. The Beginning
    I like your style of writing - and I'm intrigued enough by the characters to rea ...
  • Chapter One... Dinner Time
    WOW!  This was really brilliant - and everything 'true' vampires should be - SCA ...
  •    Good and mad
    This was SO good!! :)  'As long as it's not dishes dear, there's nothing I won't ...
  • Day Six
    This was a really lovely chapter.  I enjoyed it! :)  WOW a boat for christmas?? ...
  • The Poet's Tale
    This certainly raised a smile from me!!  I even read it out loud to my family - ...
  • Who Needs Words to Gossip?
    Really liked this - I could have been sitting in the classroom watching the two ...
  • Chapter Twenty Four
    You lady, can write up a storm!!  WOW!!  I was almost in tears at the tenderness ...
  • Chapter Twenty Six
    Well - I hope you are proud of yourself...  Not only have you turned me into a V ...
  • One Defining Moment
    I really liked this.  It has a good pace and I think that the to and fro between ...
  • Day Four
    I agree with czobermeier - this chapter 'flows'.  I liked the way your character ...
  • It's Only A Game
    Loved this piece - very nice flow and you keep the reader guessing about exactly ...
  • Deaf End
    Very good...
  • My Life, In Seventy-Four Words
    This is amazing!! Great writing - puts what I WAS considering posting to shame! ...
  • Chapter 13
    I like the way that you show Beth's struggle against her feelings.  She acknowle ...
  •   Dues to pay
    Aaah... extremely good!  (and very true)  :)
  • In My Chair
    This brought tears to my eyes...
  •   Cringable Comforts
    Yeuk! (and funny).  I liked this! :)
  • 3). The Devil Child
    Wow - the description of those eyes is amazing.  Gabriel sounds like he has 'mys ...
  • 2). Wanting to Run
    This is still holding my attention - great attention to detail.  You really let ...
  • 5. Friends with Benefits?
    Right, first I have to say - you have a beautifully smooth and flowing style of ...
  • 3. Re Acquainted
    This is turning into a beautifully crafted observation of how a family 'fits' to ...
  • 2. Same House
    I like the way that you are building up the characters within this family.  Ther ...
  • Day Two
    Another good chapter - you have a neat line in 'unique' descriptions! :)  E.g. ' ...
  • The Stalker - Chapter One
    Have just rated this to go through to round 3 of page to fame (and read the exte ...
  • Chapter 10
    So Beth's name was her Grandmother's name - and I could have cried when the diar ...
  • Author's note
    Me too!  :)
  • Chapter 8
    Oh no!  I've run out of chapters!  Where's 10?  I liked this line - 'I tend to c ...
  • Chapter 3
    I thought the scene with her mother's car was heart-wrenching.  Very, very well ...
  • Prologue
    And so the story begins - with more baddies!!! :(  I don't like the idea of Cree ...
  • Chapter 17
    Still chewing me up... but, like Beth, it's getting easier to focus.  The thing ...
  • Chapter 16
    I AM SPEECHLESS....  But I can still type! :)  THIS was one of those chapters th ...
  • Chapter 14
    Extremely good chapter, but I still can't wrap my head around what a complete an ...
  • Chapter 8
    I don't think I've mentioned this before, but I really like the way you have Bet ...
  • Chapter 5
    Better and better.... You have a wonderful talent for storytelling!  But I think ...
  • Chapter 3
    An hour or so ago, ReeVera sent me a link to this story because she thought I wo ...
  • Prologue
    Well - 'thank you' to ReeVera for recommending this story to me!  (She was right ...
  • Chapter Seventeen
    I LOVE this chapter!! Talk about Laughing Out Loud!  You have a fantastic way of ...
  • Chapter Sixteen
    This is REALLY Good!  I don't know if I can put the 'why it is' into words but I ...
  • Chapter Fourteen
    Excellent!  You are building the relationships between your characters well and ...
  • Author's Note
    I can see how you could stretch this story out to 50 chapters because of the num ...
  • Chapter Twelve
    Brilliant chapter - very well written and good pace.  Only one problem - you are ...
  • Dreams, Paris chapter
    Urgh!!!  I have come to the conclusion that you enjoy torturing your readers - t ...
  • Dreams Chapter 11
    ooh, tough call!  I can see why Mia wants to be cautious and doesn't feel like s ...
  • Prologue
    Excellent!  You have set the scene well and have already started drawing the rea ...
  • 1. Chapter 1
    Well, if this is what you are creating at age fifteen, you stand every chance of ...
  • Chapter Seven: Revelations
    Excellent!  Keep it up!  i'm onto the next chapter now... :)
  • Chapter Eleven
    This is a beautifully written chapter that does an excellent job of building the ...
  • Chapter Ten
    Great chapter, love the way the two plots converge here.  The characters are con ...
  • Chapter 4
    Brilliant.  I love your style of writing and this was definitely the best chapte ...
  • Chapter Eight
    Yes, still loving this storyline - and have no idea where its headed.  A lake an ...
  • Chapter Seven
    Great sub-plot, but cann't believe that's it so far!  I need to find out what ha ...
  • Chapter One
    Love your style of writing - if only I could say that my efforts were half as go ...