I really like where this is going. Although some things are unnecessary to put i ...
I think you could really make the reader see more of what's going on. Although I ...
Chapter One~New Beginnings
1st Paragraph: "Noelle's light head rested on the soft leather pantened seat of ...
Chapter Two~Rough Start
ha-ha Good thing I know Spanish ^_^ I only saw one mistake but there might be ...
Preface - Lottie
Wow, I could really see everything in my mind, this is really descriptive and I ...
Pubication would be great ^_^ I would buy it. But you should get as much help/su ...