Dollys's Compliments

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Last Compliment: 9/4/2016

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  • Movie Star
    5 Stars  The tone/voice and emotional feel of the chapter and of the characters ...
  • Carol's Swansong
    5 Star from Dol!  I don't know about ships or sailing but I certainly felt the s ...
  • Paint the Tiger Purple
    5 Stars from Dol! Comedic, Well-Written, Totally-Bizarro!  I thought it was clev ...
  • One Beyond Doubt
    OH I liked this science-fiction tale. I was drawn right into it. Very good story ...
  • The Chest
    5 Stars from Dol! This is enigmatic and mesmerising - drawing the Reader into th ...
  • Chapter 1- A beginning
    3 Star: Fantasy, Lovelorn, Romance, Thriller !  -Prolouge - Prologue? -Cradle ro ...
  • Full Circle
    5 Stars from Dol!  Powerful Drama here - well written.  Imagery flew from the pa ...
  • Oh, Shooter...
    - with high-end condos overed by a  - covered? - of his work as somehing that - ...
  • Collateral Damage
    5 stars from Dollys  Straight away the reader is drawn in to the scene and can f ...
  • Confession of a Teenaged Grog-Slinger
    5 Stars from Dollys  I liked the way this story illustrated how a random inciden ...
  • Case Closed!
    5 Stars from Dollys  What a web of lies and deceit! This held the Reader's atten ...
  • Case Closed!
    5 Stars from Dollys  Your wordcraftery wonderfully describes the atmosphere and ...
  • Chapter 1
    General:  In friendship: remember that, if praise is silver, feedback is gold. ...
  • Corina
    5 Stars from Dollys  I loved this sentence: 'She stood when he gave his greeting ...
  • Monopoly
    You’re taking the feedback critiques and applying them to your writing - this is ...
  • If I kiss you where it's sore
    A Runner up for the Monthly Challenge - That's Great!  Dollys
  • Think of the Children
    The detailed descriptions and pacy story-telling are so gripping that this drew ...
  • Bang
    OOh thanks re the word count Kristy...I have to withdraw my comment about The Ch ...
  • Time is Silent
    5 Stars...Love your writing, the poetry within and the breathtaking descriptions ...
  • Master Perkin's Slave Plantation
    You are only fifteen...and this is a good submission from one so young.  It is w ...
  • Climb
    5 Stars from Dol.  This showed the little boy develop through to adulthood and s ...
  • Cannabis Blues
    "I was seized by a coughing fit as gravity pulled the residual gunk to the botto ...
  • untitled
    I always enjoy your writing - and this hit on so many levels.  I have met many o ...
  • Hunting
    5 Stars from Dol.  This futuristic tale of dating was fascinating. Checking comp ...
  • Long Winter's Night
    I enjoyed this...it drew me in straight away...but then your writing usually doe ...
  • For the Love of Christmas
    Poignancy, reflection and appreciation - the challenge was met, fer sure.  I rea ...
  • Boots of Spanish Leather
    I really enjoyed this - what a fabulous submission,  The story-telling, through ...
  • Drifting
    Particularly liked: But it's too late. We've been drifting too long.  We chose t ...
  • The Cateyville Baptist Church Brawl
    Oh I enjoyed this !  Pacy, Farcical, Energetic - well done!  The visuals flew fr ...
  • Act of Remembrance
    Oh I liked this. The tone, the gentleness...then the by-chance meeting of two pe ...
  • Mud
    Having just finished reading 'Fall of Giants' by Ken Follett I was totally capti ...
  • The Butchers Son
    Oh I loved this!  The tone and mood were excellent.  A cautionary tale - just th ...
  • Split
    Congratulations on your work being selected as a runner-up winner in the monthly ...
  • Grains of Sand
    Whooot Whoooooo!...The WINNER!  Well done and well deserved!  Dollys
  • Walled and Bounded
    Congratulations on your work being selected as a runner-up winner in the monthly ...
  • Slenderella
    Slenderella's snapped and now torturing her vile step-family...Good On Her!  The ...
  • Snow White
    Gritty, Shocking..Grimmmmmm  I enjoyed this and was surprised at the 'carvery sc ...
  • Looked Down From a Broken Sky
    -journies  - journeys? -aspault - asphault?  Remember the 5 Human Senses in your ...
  • Hoodie (revised 09/29/14)
    Oh this was original and refreshing..made me grin throughout!  Yes. There are so ...
  • Grains of Sand
    I finished this with a GRIN!  Original, Sassy, Fast-Paced, Supernatural vibe, Gr ...
  • Split
    Echo earlier comments. The dialogue drew this Reader in.   Characterisation very ...
  • Falling Without a Sound
    This was an engaging sub - and I echo what others have said in terms of the gent ...
  • No Safe Corner
    -and spraying water - sprayed? -Mikeala was too familiar  - spelt earlier as: Mi ...
  • Jessie's Smile
    Well written, Interesting, Broken Hearts, Loss, Struggle...and Steam Punk.  The ...
  • All Fools' Day
    Oh I enjoyed this. The town in festival mode and the Lord Protector disguised in ...
  • Alvin and Harrison (Draft 4 Version 2)
    The story-telling is original, energetic and imaginative.  What Fun!  Alvin has ...
  • Choice
    5 Stars - Powerful imagery and content.  Poor woman, going it alone, and even he ...
  • Freedom's Call
    5 stars from Dol. met the challenge!  The writing was clear and the thoughts of ...
  • Mad Marta
    5 Stars from Dol.  Loved this!    The writing was fluid and each paragraph moved ...
  • Pleasurable Pain (Revision 1)
    Congratulations - a Runner Up!  Well Done!  Dol.
  • A Dreamer's Summit
    5 Stars from me.  This reader felt that they got to know the Main Character..it ...
  • Hay Fever's a Bitch
    Repetition: Pain  Must be the first 'Snot-Tale' I have read on WeBook....made me ...
  • Still
    Original - Fresh - Well Written - Delightful - Intriguing  My favourite so far - ...
  • Enough to get by
    -Blue crystalline facets - SIGHT? -Eyes upon eyes, - SIGHT? -Lights filtered thr ...
  • The mind's eye
    This is a well written tale with good use of language and word-choice.  But - I ...
  • A Passing (Revised)
    Oh I liked this. I have had the privilege to be nearby when someone passes on... ...
  • His Sensual Touch
    This month, we are challenging you to write a story using taste, touch and smell ...
  • Bound
    -fibers of - fibres? -barreled - barrelled? repetition - frantic?  A kidnap - th ...
  • A Friend Like No Other
    Tender and Endearing.  The language and word-choice were perfect for this piece ...
  • The Joke
    There was a forest on the other side of the door. - Perhaps use an alternate to ...
  • Behind Closed Doors
    Repetition: Check to see if any word keeps appearing over and over. Be careful i ...
  • The Twilight Doorway
    How had she got here? She couldn’t remember… she didn’t recognise anything—every ...
  • The Needed
    Oh Wow! This was excellent!  The writing clear and contains a rhythm drawing the ...
  • Schrödinger's door
    -inside. Insid?  There - Inside?  Ooh I liked this. Each paragraph moved the sto ...
  • Marital Shame
    When the 'Boys-in-the-Barracks' go AWOL....there's always mayhem and a chuckle! ...
  • A Retelling of an Old Navy Tale
    This is so believable. How cringeworthy for the poor lad!  Enjoyed the tale - we ...
  • Cat Walk
    5 Stars from me - loved it.  The Reader likes the chatty, matter-of-fact tone an ...
  • Surface Mail
    This tale sped along at a jolly speed and the descriptions enabled visuals to fl ...
  • You Can't Polish a Turd.
    This was Excellent!     5 Stars  Anyone that effectively uses the words 'gusset ...
  • Word Warrior on a Deadline (Revised)
    This was UNIQUE and REFRESHING!  I am not a poetry fan - but Limericks, yes some ...
  • Sexual Healing
    5 Stars from me - captivated from the start.  The characterisation is so good. T ...
  • Statistical Probability
    Oh I liked this.   LV - your writing always has something to delight and enterta ...
  • Love, Lust, and Padded Bras
    I preferred this version.  The lustful passion and the intention to enjoy every ...
  • N/A
    LV never fails to delight - and is a name I make a bee-line for on the monthly c ...
  • Shopping Can Change Everything
    I liked the chatty, up-beat feel to this piece.  Two friends shopping - with per ...
  • Where There's Smoke, There's Fire
    -Linda through her whole self into her role - threw?  made me chuckle throughout ...
  • A Falsie in a Cafe
    I am terrible at writing dialogue. I make myself do it - just in the hope that i ...
  • Clueless
    Ha Ha Ha! Comical story - entertained here !  I liked the way the writing made t ...
  • Hope
    Oh this revised version is simply lovely.  Met the Monthly Challenge? Yes...you ...
  • Pure
    -sqeezing  - squeezing?  This short piece was full of feeling and warmth. The mo ...
  • N/A
    Short, sharp, with urgency - this piece rattled off the page. The battlefield sc ...
  • Stanley the Gentleman
    A warm smile and a glass raised here.  This was lovely.  Be Well,  Dollys
  • Aerial Clash
    Ooh this was full of energy!   The writing was very good indeed. The description ...
  • Beating Hearts
    I counted 28 full stops...:)  - jaunty heads to her n greeting - in?  OOh a piec ...
  • The Hardest Task
    OOohh! I enjoyed this. The Queen wants her King to demonstrate, through discomfo ...
  • Be Mine...
    -glanced off my head -  alternates: knocked, tapped, ricocheted, bounced? Just a ...
  • Eloise
    Ooh. Eloise has made herself all pretty for the arrival of the salvage expert. ...
  • Twenty-eight
    EXCELLENT!  I have to agree with thebrat and Alina - This is good.  Your talent ...
  • Boundary Dispute
    I liked this until the last sentence - it doesn't feel right - too abrupt - too ...
  • Sister Rivalry
    -I can still her her - hear? -try to reaffirm her believes - beliefs? -stand her ...
  • Vincent
    The song by Richard Thompson, Vincent, played through my mind as I read this.  T ...
  • The Magic Of The Stage
    So Grandfather and grandson are sitting in the Theatre - waiting for the show to ...
  • N/A
    Organ Donation - Please register.  Oh this was so sad - you really tugged at thi ...
  • Snow
    This was a sweet tale of new love and challenges.  Falling in love with a woman ...
  • Mike's Dream (Revised)
    This gets a 5 star from me...  The work was thoroughly edited and an 'easy-read' ...
  • The Christmas Sting
    Oh I liked this. The Ghosts a con - to reek revenge and kill Scrooge. An imagina ...
  • 'Twas the Night Before Christmas
    Brit here..the reason I say so is because, to me, it rhymed throughout.  The rhy ...
  • THE STORY OF CHRISTMAS(IN MY OWN WORDS)
    WeBook = a place to develop writing skills with other aspiring authors.  The Mon ...
  • Joulupukki
    The Monthly Challenge? In 500-2000 words, create an alternative version of a tra ...
  • Different
    General: 5 Star - Chilling, Original, Alien Contact  In friendship: remember tha ...
  • We Need to Talk About Rudolph
    Rudolph, in getting his own back on the bullies, ends up causing Prancer's demis ...
  • Hark now hear the angels sing
    Oh this was lovely. Short. Simple. Filled with awe and wonder. Hallelujah indeed ...
  • A Charming Tale
    - fall flat on his face as his first went straight - fist? -cooed - repetitive? ...
  • One born every minute
    The writing fluid and well paced.  The opening was a total surprise - I had to r ...
  • London Nativity (A Love Story for Christmas)
    Brilliant! I loved this.  The pace was fast and action described well - visuals ...
  • Night of Falling Stars
    The writing and creativity, as always, 10 outa 10 here. A great job, SC.  But th ...
  • No Room at the Inn
    This was a good demonstration of what The Christmas Story means to different gro ...
  • The Crowning
    The writing was good and the emotions of the parents were well described in the ...
  • A Town of a Thousand Names
    But she was warm and loving and proudly displayed the erasures of an adolescent ...
  • The Vampire's Tutor
    oooh yummy! So much better.  Me and my bloke had no trouble on the kitchen floor ...
  • Untouchable- The End
    This mentions a race called the 'anun' and infers the characters had some journe ...
  • The World of Abalah
    Oh this opening packed a punch! Straight into the action of a skidding car and a ...
  • True secrets
    Some clumsy sentences?  Example: The sun uncovered its skin from the Earth's und ...
  • An Android in Love
    -The calm detached tone of my in the murky silence of the apartment android part ...
  • Here and Now: The Beginning of All Beginnings
    Ooh a Medium - I like a ghost story.  Be careful with words ending in ING and LY ...
  • A Game of the Gods - end of chapter 1.
    Imagery is very good - this is because you write about environment/scene to good ...
  • The Sleeper King
    Oh this was good on many levels.  Sentence construction: Fluid, specific languag ...
  • The Other Side of Freedom -- a coming-of-age novel
    This was well written and the descriptions enabled images to fly from the page. ...
  • A Prize of Sovereigns: Chapter 1. Byrom
    The descriptions conjured great visuals. The language and word choice specifical ...
  • Shifting Sands
    -caried a lurking  - carried? -another rman - typo?  A story about Saddam? - now ...
  • Outpost
    Cheeky Git ! Ha Ha !  This was Good - But I suspect you know that already!  I ad ...
  • The Adventures of Mr. Pibb
    Killer-Thriller, Sassy, Up-Beat, Fresh - This is good!  Some of the paragraphs/s ...
  • Krissy Kringle
    Oh, This IS Original!  Could become a Christmas Best Seller!  I think children w ...
  • Smell the Sea and Feel the Sky
    The idea is a GEM - Love it!  Enjoying the sassy, up-beat delivery - quirky styl ...
  • Suspension of Disbelief
    Quirky, Bizarre and Entertaining - Great!  The MC is a bit of a lad (we don'y kn ...
  • Portals of Paradox Chapter One
    Oh this was Original, Fresh and Well Written.  The Reader could FEEL Penny's con ...
  • Full Circle
    'Five years' appears several times and can 'jar' a little bit?  The tension and ...
  • The Goddess of Miami chapter one
    -dolls with a cigars - cigar? - sprits may spoke in - spirits, speak? -encounter ...
  • Victoria
    Oooh the Demon drink - waking up in bed with a piece of jewellery from  a Ghost! ...
  • Generation Gap
    OOh Damian (The Omen) and his Dad (The Devil).  Original, Insightful (Fathers & ...
  • Plastic
    The writing was superb!  Your work is Refreshing, Unique and Very Entertaining. ...
  • The Gilded Mirror
    -her feline eyes - her large orange eyes? -The recent rain - Recent rainfall? - ...
  • Bad Necromance
    The tone and mood of this piece drew this Reader in - thanks!  Oh, hey - and Wel ...
  • The River
    - It’s not good for one’s ego.- that made me chuckle! -it was going to be a dead ...
  • Fragile Sanity
    Oh this was CHILLING!  The Killer's voice and intent sending waves of horror thr ...
  • HOWL
    This was action packed and well described - visuals flew from the page.  When Da ...
  • Micahton High--Chapters 1 &2
    General: 2 Star - A tale of Growing Up, of Life Choices  In friendship: remember ...
  • Lupe Lumina
    What a fabulous read!   Original, Well-Written, Descriptive, Interesting - visua ...
  • The American Zombies
    This work has been well crafted and showed total consideration to the Reader. Yo ...
  • Luna's Reaper
    Oh this was Moody and Enigmatic.  Language and word choice were well thought out ...
  • Dark of night
    -my familiar features was gone - were?  Ooh the son was lured away from camp to ...
  • N/A
    I'm so glad Liza shat on that bullying rapists grave.  Language and word choice ...
  • The day God came to school
    - immanent - imminent? - They boys all hung - The?  Oooh I love a tale with a tw ...
  • On the Other Side of the Mountain
    This is lovely.   The rhythm and language is well chosen - it makes the Reader c ...
  • Millenial Kiss
    Romantic - Tender - Imaginative  Pure escapism - loved it!  'Couldn't they see h ...
  • 26. Chapter 26
    I really enjoy your dialogue.  The Reader  get's to know the characters and can ...
  • Young Love, Sponsored By Doritos
    Chatty - Current - Humorous  The Reader could picture the scene with ease - this ...
  • The Witch and the Fool
    Oh I loved this. A witch and a fool - brilliant!  Yes, there are some technical ...
  • Chapter 1
    General: 3 Star = Super-Healing Powers - Mysterious Strangers  In friendship: re ...
  • First Kiss
    Imagery - wow this made me reflective - made me smile.  This was lovely !  Be We ...
  • Venus' First Kiss
    Another WeBooker is having the same problems as you Ken . The editor is not work ...
  • Act 1 Scene 5
    Superb!  This captivated - Loved it!  Be Well,  Dollys
  • First Kiss
    ooh..chilling - dark - sinister!  That certainly hit my spot!  Thanks for sharin ...
  • First Kiss
    beautiful repeated in the same sentence - feels clumsy. unto the floor - up off ...
  • N/A
    OMG - JACK THE RIPPER!  Necrophillia - I LOVE THIS GRUESOME PIECE!  TOP MARKS! ...
  • 25 Year Old Virgin
    I like the chatty feel of this piece. It's like having a natter with a mate over ...
  • Hope
    An 8 year old Auschvitz survivor calling out for her mother.  The soldier - all ...
  • Sacrifice
    I liked this - it was different.  There are some spelling errors and some awkwar ...
  • N/A
    This Reader was whisked away to a parallel universe where modern and mediaeval f ...
  • Changing Skies and Exploding Amulets
    Your work is Refreshing, Unique and Very Entertaining.   An engrossing tale with ...
  • Chapter 17
    General: 4 Star - Murder, Bereavement, Shock !  In friendship: remember that, if ...
  • Fisticuffs
    This was fast-moving and descriptive. The Reader had no trouble visualising the ...
  • Forever Mine
    Reflective and touching - guess we will all look at life in this way if we reach ...
  • Escape
    5 Star - Attempted rape - Female Warriors - Telepathy!  In friendship: remember ...
  • Escape to Freedom
    Action - Drama - Threat!  and dangaling from - dangling? making me weez from - w ...
  • Just Business
    IT get ALL the blame...(smirks) Of course the Business Partner with the purse st ...
  • It's All an Illusion
    Share your ideas. Share your writings, too.  The WeBook community in the past... ...
  • Me and Not Me
    Reflective-Insightful-well written.  The rhythm and mood of this piece is enchan ...
  • Resurrection
    Yes. This is what WeBook is all about!  I enjoyed this piece...it echoes my thou ...
  • N/A
    Made me smile!  Particularly liked: "Think of the gas you’ll save cultivating vi ...
  • 23. Chapter 23
    General: 5 Star:   In friendship: remember that, if praise is silver, feedback i ...
  • Old York, I love you.
    General: 3 Star = Futuristic, Soldiers, Interesting - Could be fun!  In friend ...
  • The Drink That Ends It
    5 Star.  There is an 'acceptance' and 'this is what you get if you break the r ...
  • The Desert's Slap
    5 Star.  The severe heat of the desert in contrast to the cool trip on the aer ...
  • Unlucky in Ireland
    5 Star.  Ha Ha This IS a travel experience - very real.  Hope you found the ...
  • A trip to die for
    5 Star.  A Gangster 'send-off' ..Ha Ha - Neat!  Loved the way the first sent ...
  • Quite Drive
    4 Star.  Bill has had a 'Hissy Fit' and murdered his wife!  Enraged, he take ...
  • The Great Escape
    5 Star  Beautifully written.  The different sentence lengths gave the piece an ...
  • A River Voyage
    5 Star  And the newly dead cross the River Styx to the afterworld - if they pa ...
  • Seeing Rutur Stan
    5 Star  Saint Peter guarding the Pearly Gates? Looks like Jaimie will be allo ...
  • Midnight Swim
    5 Star  Oh...So Poetic, So Dylanesque...  The Reader particularly liked: -s ...
  • Dinner
    5 Star - Oooh! Gory!  Ha Ha Loved it!   Who was the traveller? Morris,  the m ...
  • Transcendental Travel
    5 Star = Transporters and New Worlds  You really captured the sense of movemen ...
  • Forget me my Flower
    5 Star = Rapist, Chilling, Touching, Predatory - Good Stuff!  The Reader liked ...
  • Chapter 8: PART 1: Low-Born (14th Draft)
    5 Star =   In friendship: remember that, if praise is silver, feedback is gold ...
  • Chapter 7: PART 1: A Few Kuldurn Ships (14th Draft)
    5 Star = Insectoids, Fighting, Action, Drama - Superb!  In friendship: remembe ...
  • It's Me, Not You, Me
    3 Star = Sweet and Tender.  Damien wants to end it on 'best friends' basis - a ...
  • Get Lost Loser
    5 Star - Clever, Original, Witty  Loved the idea of 'Chinese Whispers' and how ...
  • Up Yours Most Sincerely
    5 Star!  Misanthropic and vitriolic - all in one bite!  Hilarious.  Partic ...
  • Moving to China Without You
    You are but a teenager and you encapture a mood then portray it this well, alrea ...
  • Where's My Bra?
    Hilarious!  Especially the line: I hope it hurts.  'Lesbian Lurve' has its p ...
  • Chapter 6: PART 1: Traju's Dagger (12th draft P.O.V. edit)
    General: 5 Star = Lizard Draksils, An angry Imshira, Neeku -in-Training!  In f ...
  • A Wretchedly Vile Life
    5 Star = Castles, Flashbacks, PastLives - Spooky - What Fun!  Good use of Lang ...
  • Chapter 1: Dreams [Revised]
    The Reader is IMPRESSED with your Rework - so much better - don't you think, Ali ...
  • (OLD) Chapter 3: Everything's Different
    General: 5 Star = Political intrigues, Revenge, - Good Stuff!  In friendship: ...
  • Chapter 2: The Strife
    5 Star = Neeku's journey continues - This is good Stuff!  In friendship: remem ...
  • (OLD) Chapter 1: Filching Fruit
    General: 5 Star = Colourful, Escapism, Action, Humour - Brilliant!  In friends ...
  • The Button
    5 Star = Believable, Supernatural, Eerie - Good Stuff!  The Reader knows that ...
  • 1-  Regret
    General: 3 Star = Teenage Angst, Abuse, Relationships - Good Ideas!  Friend: R ...
  • Firestorm Chapter One
    General: 5 Star = Hunter and Hunted, Terror, - Gripping start!  In friendship: ...
  • Chapter 18: The Mad Prophet
    5 Star = Sadistic, Torture, Menace, Vengeance - Gripping Stuff!  Friend: Remem ...
  • Chapter One "Teron-9"
    General: 3 Star = Teenage pranks, Electrical Fire, Angry Father - What Fun!  I ...
  • Chapter 13: Fire and Ice
    5 Star = Enemies, Plotting, Resentments - Good Stuff!  Friend: Remember, if Pr ...
  • Chapter 8: The Intruders
    5 Star = Submission, Control, Trust, Erotica, BDSM - Sublime !  Friend: Rememb ...
  • Opossum K.O. (P'Silean Nadepo)
    General: 3 Star = School Bullies, Telepathy, Teen Angst - Growing Up pains!  I ...
  • Chapter Three
    5 Star = Job Offer, Lunar Colony, Attractions - Good Stuff!  Friend: Remember, ...
  • He's a... a what????
    1 Star = Sighing Teenager, A Brawl, a school - heyHo!  Friend: Remember, if Pr ...
  • What he did to me...
    1 Star = Lovers, Passion, Making Plans - Good Ideas!  Friend: Remember, if Pra ...
  • What is UP WITH ME?!
    General: 1 Star = School Canteen, Sighing Teenager - Drab.  Friend: Remember, ...
  • Beginning
    General: 1 Star - Teenager, School, Vampire - Such Fun!  Friend: Remember, if ...
  • Eutharian, the Noble...
    1 Star - An enemy, a new vampire, a threat - Good conflict.  Friend: Remember, ...
  • 1. In the beginning...
    General: 4 Star = Teenage Angst, Stroppy Teenager - What Fun!  Friend: Remembe ...
  • 2. The beginning of creepiness
    General: 3 Star = Bus ride, falling Over, Meeting a Stranger - Interesting.  F ...
  • Part Ten, Epilogue
    5 Star = Endings, Tender Moments, Farewells - Lovely!  Noticed a typo’/spellin ...
  • Part Eight
    5 Star = Fickle Novice Were, Concerned Best Friend - Fabulous!  Friend: Rememb ...
  • 1. Ally (Revised 04/15)
    General: 5 Star - Vampires, Victims, Dominatrix - Great Stuff!  In friendship: ...
  • Around the World ... in Haiti Lays?
    General: 5 Star - Entertaining, Humorous, Unique - A Fan!  In friendship: reme ...
  • 4 ... meeting Daniel
    General: 3 Star = Engagement, Hidden Past, Hidden Lover - Oooh Trouble brewing! ...
  • 1. By Way of Introduction
    General: 3 Satr = Sassy, Humorous, Vampires - Such Joy!  In friendship: rememb ...
  • 1. Welcome to my world
    5 Star = Words spoken to you alone - Chilling!  In friendship: remember that, ...
  • Chapter 1
    General: 5 Star = Horses, Rodeos, Accidents - Interesting Storyline.  In frien ...
  • 1. Prologue: Semper Fidelis
    5 Star = Molesting Priests and Innocent 14 year olds - Gritty!  In friendship: ...
  • The Girl in the Red Bow
    General: 5 Star - Siblings, Sensitive, Touching, Breakups - Good Stuff!  In fr ...
  • 3. Chapter 3 (1st Edit)
    General: 5 Star - Sarcasm, Humour, Beasts and Friendships - Fab!  In friendshi ...
  • Prologue
    3 Star = Government, Philosophy, Our World - Heavy Stuff!  Friend: Remember, i ...
  • 12. Chapter 12: The Forger Expected
    General: 5 Star = Castles, Kingmakers and Tarot Cards - Yummy!  In friendship: ...
  • My Friend Mark ch. 1
    General: 5 Star - Rapist, Dark, Violent, Gripping - A Thriller!  In friendship ...
  • 5. Root Man
    5 Star = Visions, Understanding and a Mission - Fab!  He must go to Sonora to ...
  • 3. Joshua's Entourage
    General: 5 Star = A Shaman.  Beautiful Women and a Rock Star - Wow!  This is w ...
  • 2. The Last Bash
    General: 5 Star - Drugs, Illness and a Remedy? - Good Stuff!  It is so nice to ...
  • 1. Last Concert
    General: 5 Star = The Performance, Rock Band, Audience - Great!  In friendship ...
  • Bishop Odo
    5 Star = Humorous, Bawdy, Atmospheric, Irreverent - Fab!  I chuckled once, twi ...
  • Carson Gets His Car Washed
    General: 5 Star = Horror, Thriller, Drama, simply captivating.  A simple car-w ...
  • Last Lie
    General: 5 = Oh I so enjoyed 'the twist'. Liars eh?,  Short, bubbly, well writ ...
  • The Director
    General: 5 Star = Dark, Macabre, Horror - what Fun!  The writing piece  - kept ...
  • 7. Joey
    General: 5 = Berloomin Marvellous! A chase and a Squiffy Pie - Brilliant!  Thi ...
  • 10. Battle
    General: 5 Star = Energetic. Action Packed. Horror Filled. Fabulous!  Oh Amber ...
  • 1. Chapter 1: Cry
    General: 4 Star = Breaking Up is hard to do. Well written, emotional.  Caleb, ...
  • 4. Chapter 2: (Continued)
    General: 5 Star - Finally we meet Aunt Millie - Great!  Humour and exhasperati ...
  • 6. Spells
    General: 5 Star = A Thriller! This story weaves and bends like a Pole Dancer! ...
  • 9. Help
    General: 4 Star = Horror. Exploding Heads. Fantastic! Now this IS entertaining. ...
  • 5. Farewells and Greetings
    General: 5 Star = The story unfolds and leaves some more crumbs for the Reader t ...
  • Hotdogs, Homeruns and Hemlock
    General: 4 Star = Original and humourous, what Fun!  You may want to check for ...
  • 4. The Dreams
    General: 5 Star = Horror" Yummy. This chapter was old fashioned Horror, good an ...
  • 3. Justice
    = 3 Star  I think I understand your goals for this chapter. If you wrote your ...
  • Dr. RudeDude (Or How I Learned to Get Off the Couch and Love Getting Laid)
    I Know this Man!  ha ha ha   Great Opener here.  Well, written. Gritty.  C ...
  • 4. Chapter 4
    5star =  The writing piece was tender and gentle, I liked it.  Liked the char ...
  • 3. Level Three: One Way Out
    5star =  The writing piece is such a pleasure - Humerous, Contemplative, well w ...
  • 6. The truth
    General: 4star =  The writing piece reveals the feelings growing between Kelsy ...
  • 1. And so it begins
    Hello Amber  I agree with Mike, You've done a good job with your revised Chapt ...
  • (Not So) Pig Ignorant
    5star =  The writing piece moved me - poor old Sadie, No Family, No companionsh ...
  • 5. The kiss
    4star =  The writing piece has become more interesting, Great!  Liked four of ...
  • 1. And so it begins
    3star =   You have adopted some of the changes/Feedback tips.  Good! This is ...
  • 1. Level One: Search and Destroy
    3star =  Enjoyed the writing piece - recognise the character, scary!  Liked t ...
  • 2. Level Two: Failing/Falling
    4star =  The writing piece entertained me - I like Dr RudeDude in this Chapter. ...
  • 1. And so it begins
    3star =  Enjoyed the writing piece  (understood goal of writer)  Liked three ...
  • Story 1 - The Best Friends Forever
    5star =  The writing piece was so entertaining - enjoyed it!  Liked the chara ...
  • Revenge
    5star =  The writing piece kept me interested all the way through - Fab!  Lik ...
  • A Shadow of a Magnitude
    5star =  The writing piece moved me in some way - I felt I was there, your stor ...
  • 6. The Whole Of The Moon
    5star =  The writing piece - kept me in suspense! Plus that tune bring's back h ...
  • 2. Chapter 2
    5star =  The writing piece kept my interest in some way - loved the banter bet ...
  • 8. Chapter 8
    5star =  The writing piece moved me in some way. are the relationship cracks s ...
  • 7. Chapter 7
    5star =  The writing piece moved me in some way. Recognise the arguments - lol ...
  • Special Guest
    UNIQUE!     Ha Ha Loved it!  How refreshing, Sir!  Yor sense of the ironic a ...
  •   Temporary Satisfaction
    5star =  The writing piece moved me in some way -  kept me in intrigued!  Li ...
  • Stereotype
    5star =  The writing piece moved me in some way.- Lonely vibes.  Liked the ch ...
  • Love, War, And Freedom In la la Land
    I am so sorry - I am not educated in poetic understanding or principles so I can ...
  • Mona Lisa's Smile, A Hypertext of Godly Sins
    I am so sorry - I am not educated in poetic understanding or principles so I can ...
  • An Elegy of Yesterday, As You Became She To Me
    I am so sorry - I am not educated in poetic understanding or principles so I can ...
  • Two-Fifty
    4star =  The writing piece entertained me...intrguing. Liked four of the follo ...
  • 3. Old Friend
    5star =  The writing piece moved me in some way. Liked the characters, Liked t ...
  • Chapter 4
    5star =  The writing piece kept me intrigued. Liked the characters, Liked the ...
  • Imaginations
    4star =  The writing piece entertained me. Liked four of the following:  the ...
  • Choices
    1star =  Liked the writing piece (understood goal of writer) Liked one of the ...
  • Changes
    1star =  Liked the writing piece (understood goal of writer) Liked one of the ...
  • Lythucius
    5star =  The writing piece moved me in some way. Liked the characters, Liked t ...
  • 1. Prologue
    Ooh? What happened? Why did he hurt you?  Would like to read more....  Spell ...
  • 4. Chapter 2, Part 1
    Well, now I want to know more. Good stuff! Well done  Dolly
  • 1. Prologue
    I enjoy dragons,and I enjoy battles (Love my Xbox and Viking of Asgard ha ha). ...
  • Stardust and Moonlight
    This really holds the attention of the reader. Sentence - Liked: Particles of ...
  • 4. Melissa
    I found the sentence structure and conversation flow really appealing.  I felt I ...
  • The Housemate Script episode 1
    I thought it was great. The characters were humourous, I like that. Sentence - ...
  • 16. Back On Course
    Methodical in detail, it kept my interest, thanks! Sentence-Liked: She floated ...
  • The road home
    My you are imaginative aren't you? Another good read.  Thanks! Dolly
  • Fly on the wall
    Made ME chukkle. Was an easy story to follow, I like that, I got hooked straigh ...