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  • Down Texas Way
    5 Star  A western. A cowboy read. I enjoyed this - it drew the reader  in and th ...
  • Snow-blind
    5 Stars  This drew me in. The reader wanted to see where it would lead.  Comment ...
  • Necronomicon
    5 Stars  Futuristic - Scene setting vivid - Dialogue that gets the Reader emotio ...
  • Darkness
    3 Star   "Don't hurt me! I-I just want to go home." the girl cried with fear. "I ...
  • Surgery
    -a needle piecing an apple - piercing? - the gas mask prevents  - gas-mask? - od ...
  • Forsaken State of Unrest
    - a black phone sitting on a table stand up against the wall  - table-stand?  -H ...
  • They Buried Him in a Box?
    5 Star - The director too his seat.  - took? - cutting knife from next to - layi ...
  • Sleeping like a baby
    I liked the visuals. The rubbery pavement, the moustache and Krow-Man.  Seemed B ...
  • Relevance
    -  and peaked - peeked?  Oh what a sad tale!  The writing was very good indeed. ...
  • Where the Flames Glow Blue
    The pacing and action within this tale was very good and gave the story 'movemen ...
  • Poirot's Fantasy
    - possible expelled - possibly? - anticiagulant.- anticoagulant?  Ha Ha ..now I ...
  • The secret the storm hides
    Title - The secret the storm hids? - clean crips - crisp? -  as the my master - ...
  • Epiphany
    -   Mrs. Finklemeyer,” 42  - missing speech mark? - “it's too much. - missing sp ...
  • The Least Fictional Thing
    This made me chuckle, particularly to the 'tastes of chicken' comment. Too funny ...
  • x
    I don't understand what the Writer is trying to do. I think the reason I 'don't ...
  • Prologue
    In friendship: remember that, if praise is silver, feedback is gold.  Do You Nee ...
  • Anger Redirected
    Dr. Sara Shelby has a 'service-user' to protect and rehabilitate into the commun ...
  • The Silver Arrow
    5 stars from Dol.!  Suggestions (ignore, use in part?): -  contained an enormous ...
  • Burden of Truth
    Hi DaisyBug, Paragraph Structure  For my education and awareness - and sheer cur ...
  • Confession of a Victim of Rape
    Welcome to WeBook, PhillippaS,  Some speech marks are missing at the end of conv ...
  • I Lived
    Welcome to Webook Sam,  Tip1: Copy and Paste the Feedback you receive into a New ...
  • The Sins We Carry
    Welcome to Webook ,AnnaLee  Tip1: Copy and Paste the Feedback you receive into a ...
  • A Yarn of Confessions - Revised Aug 20
    Oh I liked this. The last sentence brought it all together.   The little girl, w ...
  • Chapter 2
    General: In friendship: remember that, if praise is silver, feedback is gold.  S ...
  • Son
    The challenge? Met for sure. She confessed that the other child was his.  Some s ...
  • The Truth
    5 Stars from Dollys,  I have returned to see how this work is evolving...and it ...
  • Let Me Count the Ways
    Poor Lem.  Didn't his Mother tell him: 'Treat 'em mean, keeps 'em keen.' What a ...
  • Endurance
    The more Readers can identify with characters in your tale the better they will ...
  • The Truth
    The story-telling: Perhaps, in the first part of this writing, you could remove ...
  • Heat
    - He ensure I have - ensures? -my only compaint - complaint? -tear sained face - ...
  • Timothy took his time to school
    This was such a good read. It started with a normal setting and launched into a ...
  • Thana's Plea
    I liked the tone and mood of this tale. I think English is not your first langua ...
  • Taking After My Old Man (Revised)
    This was an interesting tale. You are a good story-teller.  Watch out for Repeti ...
  • Family Times
    I woke up.  As I got up and stretched  - repetition of UP?   stay on though the ...
  • Chapter One
    There was it. - There it was? Another scar in the body - Another scar on the bod ...
  • Family Christmas?
    The Writer’s Goals could be to make the Reader: feel scared, cry, laugh, sympath ...
  • Gimme Shelter
    Gripping and Tense. A strong 'Thriller' theme. This captivated. The writing desc ...
  • Gimme Shelter
    A Runner up for the Monthly Challenge - That's Great!  Dollys
  • Small Miracles
    I will cost me my willpower - It?  Poignancy, reflection and appreciation. Most ...
  • Party time
    This was like overhearing a chavvy-dude on their mobile to a mate. Gritty, aggre ...
  • The Pearl
    Oh this was lovely, poignant,  I didn't expect the 'happy-ending' ..and I liked ...
  • The Apple (Draft 2)
    - I observation the tiny operation - unsure? observe? -the eldest among I have t ...
  • The Librarian
    Oooh, cautionary tale of ambition, greed and lust.  Some spelling/typo errors, e ...
  • The Troublemaking Scheme of the Mad Ruffian Professor Rhamsbottom!
    -can be scared before    -can be scared of before ? -her head their sticks   - t ...
  • Freedom
    What a rousing 'end-of-term' speech - well done!  The tone and mood of the piece ...
  • The World Without Cats
    - ended in blood shed.  - bloodshed?  I understand that you are attempting a com ...
  • Bluster and Bravado
    - that could probably spit acid or something. - Remove 'or something'?  -kept bu ...
  • Adulthood is Overrated
    -their laugther - laughter?  I liked the flow of this piece and the speech was h ...
  • Ultimate Freedom (revised 7/29/14)
    -came close to the eart - earth? -or as I written - I'd written? -they're are sq ...
  • Little Girl Lost
    Hello Trish,  I re-read your story and your explanation to me that: I thought it ...
  • Little Girl Lost
    This is so much better - and well done you for taking the Hints/Helps from fello ...
  • Pleasurable Pain (Revision 1)
    BDSM and erotica are right up my alley. The 'safe-word' is sacrosanct and protec ...
  • Little Girl Lost
    I had heard his car pull up.- SOUND? The door swung open and there he was.- SIGH ...
  • Loss of Sense
    -I was hard to  - It? - fingers, mixed with something very thick and wet.  I fle ...
  • August 29th, 1916.
    -layed - laid or lay? -landed on my tounge, - tongue? -yet I still felt burning ...
  • Trapped (Rev 6 - 15 days left)
    Oooh trapped, hurt, in some metal dungeon or pit.  The fear and panic came throu ...
  • Dark Gift (Revision 1)
    -I knew that the hand; - I knew that hand; ? -I'd went to a dark place.- I'd gon ...
  • Taste My Fist, Wizard
    I liked this tale from the witches point of view. Original and well described, l ...
  • All By Myself
    5 Star Oh I didn't expect the 'punch' in this - Tales of the Unexpected!  What a ...
  • Coffee (Revised)
    -The sweet sent - scent? -beer being sereved - served? -Entiwined with the punge ...
  • At Sea (Revision #?)
    -Nothing came but a bile taste  -Nothing came but a bile tang....? (tasted and t ...
  • The Door to My Destiny
    -in Mazatlán, Mexico..    She - should there be 2 Full Stops? -dress and heels ...
  • A Painter's Plight
    Oh, this was a good tale of the door and the reason for it. I never thought of i ...
  • Behind the door.
    -All I knew what there it  - that? -what drew me too it,  - to? -I slowly approc ...
  • Walls
    -a haunting song greats my rupturing  - grates? - Like the purr of headlights - ...
  • Chapter Zero
    Copy and paste the Feedback you receive from all webookers into a Word Document ...
  • Chapter 3
    In a novel, long scenes of daily dialogue end up being boring. Readers want to h ...
  • When Boots Are Too Big
    With some tweaking this could be really good.  I think you should keep this - an ...
  • Georgia
    extreme frees  - fees? knicked them - nicked? Let's look at you know, - now?  Oh ...
  • Garden of Eden
    her breathing as prepared to - she? eyes gazing into the clods. - clouds? He he, ...
  • Balderdash
    you are my rapsallion  - rapscallion? and something about that made  - you? ryth ...
  • Madeline’s One-Night Stand
    - No chip manicure,- 'Non-chip' ? -piercing pairs of eyes.- pair? -in a minute.” ...
  • As Luck Would Have It
    -come to terms with idea  - the idea?  Oh I liked Edwina. Your description of he ...
  • 3AM
    Very spooky and atmospheric.  Whilst I knew something paranormal was going to oc ...
  • Staged Beauty: Hamlet's Ophelia
    -exhasperated manner - exasperated? -the mirror illunimates - illuminates? -a sm ...
  • Love, Lust, and Padded Bras
    Ooh, a married woman has her 'bit on the side'. Easier than dealing with a bad m ...
  • It's All in the Details
    The 200 year old entrepreneur want to find the genie and have a few more wishes. ...
  • Half-life of the Heart
    -the pastery  - pastry? -face of couriosity - curiosity? -said in hope in her - ...
  • Rahab
    Oh I enjoyed this!  The opening paragraph 'hooked' the Reader and each subsequen ...
  • Hope
    -She had been woken her from her slumber, - rework? -She wrapped her arms around ...
  • The Pink Ballerina Room (Revised)
    A Cancer-Patient tale is very touching and most people would show understanding ...
  • Asha
    -starring - staring?  Repetition: Check to see if any word keeps appearing over ...
  • Over
    Yep. There's someone else. Sure as eggs is eggs!  What a sad monologue.   If the ...
  • One Hundred
    -I could try to block out of my memory  I could try to block it out of my memory ...
  • Grievance
    -whole life, though has only been few weeks whole life, though it has only been ...
  • And then I became Job
    This, after some editing, could be a gem.  Google 'Show, Don't tell'.....then ap ...
  • It's What's on the Inside That Counts
    Your homage to Tom Kelly was lovely.  I paid homage to a 'real person' in last m ...
  • Angel of Death
    -"Hopelessly devoted, that's  - missed quotation/speech mark?  -"Please God, I p ...
  • Kudos Thomas
    I am confused with this tale. I am also delighted by it.  The two record albums ...
  • Love In The Snow
    -The girls made fun of her, having taking of her appearance. The other girls mad ...
  • Hushabye Mountain
    - my guilt wash away - washes? -and soon hear a raspy voice - and hear my raspy ...
  • Becoming Myself
    The writing drew this Reader in straight away - hooked.  The pace and descriptiv ...
  • Different
    General: 5 Star - Chilling, Original, Alien Contact  In friendship: remember tha ...
  • Soldier
    Be careful with (adverbs) words ending in = LY or ING...seek them out in your wo ...
  • Mother (Revised)
    Much smoother read now - without losing the Horror (I believe it enhanced the pi ...
  • Mother (Revised)
    - Mother’s of the word today?  - world?  OH MY! This was GRITTY and GRIPPING. A ...
  • A writer's rebirth
    -but therein lie his downfall - lay?  I liked the originality of this piece - we ...
  • A Modern Day Christmas Carol
    -money grabbing fiends was flying in - friends? were?  - He had asked grace to - ...
  • The Gift of Christ
    -took a deep breathe. - breath?  I particularly liked: The snow flurries lashed ...
  • Unrequited
    Oooh  G R I P P I N G!  Page Turner..Oh yes, you bet.   This could be spine-ting ...
  • Halo (Chapter 1)
    Original and humorous - I liked this.  The dialogue between the parrot and Bonni ...
  • The Sleeper King
    This re-write is a definite improvement and captivates from the start.  Well Don ...
  • Beyond Belief - Closing Chapter
    The pace was good and dialogue effectively painted the characters - this was tot ...
  • Black Diamond's last chapter
    What a good imagination you have - and well done for posting your first story he ...
  • How we became Gods
    This may help? - if not, then disregard:  Do You Need a Prologue?  Simply ask: ...
  • Magic Incident Zero
    Ooh This was a pleasant surprise!  Captivated and drew this Reader in straight a ...
  • Chapter One
    General: 3 Star - Domestic Abuse, Growing-Up, Teenager  In friendship: remember ...
  • New year, new boy
    -shinny hair - shiny? -remember the past - remembering? -Elena put a shorts, - p ...
  • How we became Gods
    This was good story-telling. The First Person writing is believable and the tone ...
  • The Visit
    I have trouble with the Font editor here too. Go to FaceBook and tell themabout ...
  • Myth: A Heroes Awakening
    -moon light - moonlight? -dark - repetition - find an alternate? -the moon gappe ...
  • In which Solomon Fierce receives an offer he can't refuse
    -confiedence - confidence? -It was all bullshit - repetition? -there - their? -I ...
  • Zombies in the Mist: Memoirs of a Zombie Nymphomaniac
    Oh I enjoyed this. Don't quite get when Jeff became 'infected' - He seemed okay ...
  • excerpt book 2, 'Subtleties of the Blood',
    -into their mist, - midst? -the black pole he had welded. - wielded?  -Check to ...
  • Bizarre
    Oh This was a Blinder - SO GOOD!  Captivated and Hooked to the last word.  The d ...
  • Stormbird
    Punctuation needs some attention - EL has already shown you where to look.  Reme ...
  • Chapter 1
    General: 5 star - Inheritance, Decisions, New Life  In friendship: remember that ...
  • Songs from the Minaret
    The writing is delicious - specifically selected words and phrases to paint a pi ...
  • The Grim
    The environment/scene setting, dialogue and tone/mood was very good - drawing th ...
  • 27. Chapter 27
    The dialogue flowed well and moved the story along.  Environment/scene setting w ...
  • The angels have left.
    Oh this was chilling!  The Killer is a Nutter! His Diary Note shows how his mind ...
  • PICA
    -I couldn’t put any weight on my left leg, so I slowly limped forward - If the l ...
  • Scorched Earth
    -different question that the one - than? -bodily out the - out of the?  Oh this ...
  • Through the Lych Gate
    - to rest in peace again now.- sounds clumsy, rework?  I like this. I agree with ...
  • DUDE
    I think I understand your goals/aims for this writing and as a writer you will w ...
  • The "Calm" Before the Storm
    -The party was dead immediately. - feels clumsy,perhaps The party was over.    T ...
  • Scabbard
    -She was 30ish, with - in her thirties (numbers look odd)? - Plain - repeated tw ...
  • The "Incident"
    First sentence = the word down repeated 4 times. Perhaps re-work? -being taught ...
  • As If
    The pupil writing BDSM or Erotica in a class essay must have made the teacher su ...
  • Illusions
    I would suggest removing the last big paragraph = Peering past Mindy... Use the ...
  • First Kiss
    -to her and that wasted time - to her and that that wasted time?  -lost in anot ...
  • Chapter 16
    5 Star - Action - Threat - Chase   In friendship: remember that, if praise is si ...
  • First Kiss
    Does he love me after this?  This story tells of betrayal or something similar. ...
  • x
    -skeletal check,- unsure? -part of his plants - plans -streets with a came. - ca ...
  • First Kiss ®
    as I stuggled with the language - struggled?  New life - New Country....missing ...
  • I See Bluebells
    This was lustful, passionate and daring. Enjoyed it.  There are some technical w ...
  • The embrace.
    This was endearing...a gentle picture...lovely.  Sure, there are grammatical and ...
  • Eternally Yours
    Spooky!  Oooh...this was a chiller!  Agree that 'wooden legs' jars the piece  .. ...
  • Dinner in Damascus
    - The only god here is me, he thought. -That was getting annoying, Laurentis th ...
  • Iron Dog's Arctic Rescue
    -he growled bearing his fangs.  - baring? -smelled - smelt?  The writer conveys ...
  • The strange box
    A good start. Now let's do some editing!  -and the two big bottle that - bottles ...
  • Drinking Games
    Oh this was fab!     Macabre and  Comical - such fun!  I think you only need to ...
  • No Easy Terms
    Breaking Up - Caring - Lusting over other people.  Check out: -dragged down into ...
  • The "Great General"
    The story-telling was captivating and touching. Nice!  The Reader identifies thi ...
  • Gettysburg Witness
    Atmospheric, Tender, Haunting....  This Reader interpreted that the bump to her ...
  • Chapter 1
    General: 5 Star- Thieves - Mysterious Societies - Teens!  In friendship: remembe ...
  • Skittle to Seattle
    Wow! I didn't see that ending coming!  The similes/analogies over-drenched the s ...
  • S.O.B.
    Good story-telling.   I wonder what the era is?  Robin Hood (Folkelore 1200 - 14 ...
  • Say you`ll stay
    Charming, Young Love, Romance!  snores fills the room - fill? His gavelly voice ...
  • A Little Experiment
    Good storytelling - enjoyed it.  Some spelling errors and some words missed out: ...
  • 20. Departure
    General: 5 Star - Marriage proposal - Vampires - Danger Ahead.   In friendship: ...
  • Joy Ride
    General: 4 Star = Car Crash - Drunk Driver - Tension !  In friendship: remember ...
  • *Chapter ONE*
    5 Star - Magic Books - Great Hook - Heroine - Mystery!  In friendship: remember ...
  • chapter 2
    General: 3 Star = Sex Tease - Complications - Embarassment!  In friendship: reme ...
  • 01: Awakening
    General: 5 Star = Mystery - Burial - Suspense - Good Opening Chapter.  In friend ...
  • Loving Blood OLD VERSION
    General: 3 Star = Beliefs, Healing, School-Setting - A good tale!  Friend: Rem ...
  • Chapter One- That Red Stuff
    General: 3 Star = A Fight, Revenge, Hunter - Good stuff!  In friendship: remem ...
  • I Can't Do It, I am Sorry, Jaiden.
    3 Star!  How Selfish!    It's all about how Lily feels..and sod poor Jaiden's ...
  • James Goes To Sacremento
    4 Star  Oooh A Hitman on a mission!  One small thing: This sentence felt cl ...
  • eight
    4 Star  This is Travel!  Sleeping at the Wheel - Oh No! That's scary.  One ...
  • Intimacy
    4 Star  Ooh - I liked this.   Not sure about a 'clock ticking in her left wr ...
  • In the Dark of the Night
    5 Star  I liked this.  The travel aspect is here - from bedroom to kitchen. ...
  • The LaGrange Point
    5 Star.  Oh Wow - Soon we could look into the eyes of Caesar!  Eloquent and ...
  • Down the Line
    4 Star.  It looks like the Sandman may have got to Johnson first!  Oh yes, h ...
  • Rapturing with Wretchedness
    Un-Starred - will 'Star' when at 200 words.  Suggestions: Make the Font Size ...
  • The Giant Falcon Pub
    5 Star  The doctor seems to be travelling from a cave to the hospital and then ...
  • For Andrew
    5 Star. This is a travel scene with anguish - good stuff!  Some small points: ...
  • Crab Cake & Lemon Pie Filling
    5 Star = Direct, No Messing and Humorous!  Enjoyed the 'pregnant woman' quip. ...
  • Seriously though, your feet do stink
    Poor Tiala!  Just to Mention: to a bamboo with severe diarrhea - Bamboo is a ...
  • Murp Big Eye
    5 Star = Sassy, Hilarious, Colourful, Energetic - Fab!  A Fast paced romp, stu ...
  • Chapter 5: PART 1: The Jookas (13th Draft)
    General: 5 Star = Subversion, Corruption, Spies - Good Stuff!  In friendship: ...
  • Chapter 1: Dreams [Revised]
    General: 3 Star = Vampires, Gore, Love Interest = A Good Story!  In friendship ...
  • Knives & Pie
    General: 3 Star = Gorey, Sinister - This could be Fun!  Friend: Remember, if P ...
  • Knives & Onions
    General: 3 Star = Dead Body, Mystery, Onions - Fun Stuff!  Friend: Remember, i ...
  • Chapter 4: PART 1: Paths Cross (13th Draft)
    General: 5 Star = Assassins, Enemies, Betrayals - Good Stuff!  In friendship: ...
  • Alternate Warning ((Preface))
    3 Star = vampire, Undead, Grief - Touching stuff!  Friend: Remember, if Praise ...
  • At last, love
    3 Star = FanFiction, Vampires, Love-making - Romantic!  In friendship: remembe ...
  • First Sight.
    1 Star = Boy meets Girl tale,   Vampire, Schooldays - What Fun!  Friend: Remem ...
  • Chapter Four
    4 Star = Unspoken Love, Lunar Colony, Red Tape, Tabloids -   In friendship: re ...
  • September 29th
    General: 4 Star = Car Salesmen, Wagers, - Could be Fun!  In friendship: rememb ...
  • Warning ((Preface))
    General: 3 Star = Vampire Coven, Capture, Thoughts - Interesting Stuff!  Frien ...
  • Chapter Two
    General: 5 Star =Astronaut Candidate program, New Love - Good stuff!   Friend: ...
  • Chapter One
    General: 5 Star = Lunar Colonies, Miltary Defence - Good Stuff!  Friend: Remem ...
  • Chapter 9 A Test of Magic (Part 2 Revised)
    5 Star = Tenderness, Magic, Old Friends - Great Stuff!  Friend: Remember, if P ...
  • Chapter 1: Departure
    3 Star = Hotel Rooms, Sexual Affair, Tantrums n Tears! - Hilarious!  In friend ...
  • Chapter Two
    5 Star = Noises on the Floor above, Empty Buildings - Fab Stuff!  In friendshi ...
  • Chapter One
    General: 4 Star = Nightmare, Menace, Killers - Gripping!  In friendship: remem ...
  • Chapter 8 Missions (Part 2)
    5 Star = Desire, Lust, Craving and a CliffHanger - Fabulous!  In friendship: r ...
  • Chapter 8 Missions (Part 1)
    5 Star = Siblings, Kayera, female warrior - YUMMY!  In friendship: remember th ...
  • Chapter 7 The Spiked Ladder (Part 1)
    5 Star = Revelations, Emotional, Vengeance - Good Stuff!  In friendship: remem ...
  • Part Nine
    5 Star = Banquets, Dreams coming True, The Calling - Fab!  Friend: Remember, i ...
  • Part Seven
    5 Star - Action -,Rage -, powdered bones - Good Stuff!  Friend: Remember, if P ...
  • 1. Intro-duck-tion
    5 Star = Sassy, Refreshing, Mischevious - Great!  In friendship: remember that ...
  • 14. Chapter 14 The funeral
    General: 2 Star = Funeral scene, Vampires - Could be great!  In friendship: re ...
  • 1. Chapter 1 A whisper in the wind
    General: 4 Star - Vampiress, Pain, Rooftops - Lovely!  In friendship: remember ...
  • 2 ... being lilly
    General: 3 Star = Racy, Erotic, Visual - What a Romp!  In friendship: remember ...
  • The secret life of Sara James
    General: 3 Star = Sensuous, Erotic, Role Play - Lovely!  In friendship: rememb ...
  • Introduction
    4 Star = Action Packed, Atmospheric, Ghost Riders - Great Intro!  In friendshi ...
  • Preface
    General: 5 Star = Funeral, Loss, Grief - Powerful Imagery!  In friendship: rem ...
  • 06. Crumbling
    General: 4 Star = Machines, History, Melancholia - Good Stuff!  In friendship: ...
  • Later in this book (teaser)
    General: 5 Star = Jealousy, Skullduggery, Hate - Such Fun!  In friendship: rem ...
  • 05. Ties
    General: 5 Star = Unrequited Love, Friendships - Lovely  In friendship: rememb ...
  • 04. Lavender
    General: 5 Star = Sun-Block, Friends, Humour - Lovely!  In friendship: remembe ...
  • 03. Change
    General: 4 Star = Realisation, Fear, Domglory - Good Stuff!  In friendship: re ...
  • 02. Hints
    General: 5 Star = Principal Lecture, Parents Concern - Intrigue!  In friendshi ...
  • 01. Rage
    General: 5 Star = Sensitive, Humorous, Interesting - Good Stuff!  In friendshi ...
  • Between all things... (Revised)
    General: Friend: Remember, if Praise is silver, Feedback is gold.  Chapter Ove ...
  • Chapter 1: The Rain
    General: 4 Star - Theft, A Chase, A new friend - Good Stuff!  In friendship: r ...
  • 1. Chapter 1: The Hunter
    5star =  The writing piece moved me in some way -  kept me in suspense!  Lik ...
  • Chapter 3: Apology
    General: 4 Star = Arguments, Fairys, Conflict - Good stuff!  In friendship: re ...
  • Chapter 2: The Escape
    General: 4 Star = Raging Storm, Teenagers in a Fairy Kingdom - Great!  This Re ...
  • 4. Chapter 4
    General: 4 Star - A romance, a new beasty and more Magic - good stuff!  In fri ...
  • Chapter 1
    4 Star = A story for 9 to 12 year olds...  Friend: Remember, if Praise is silv ...
  • 1. The Dungeon Master's Pet
    5 Star = Dungeons, Elves and Shapeshifters - Fab-U-Lous!  It is so pleasing to ...
  • The Tits Come First.
    General: 2 Star = DragQueen, Captive, Humour, Escape - What Fun!  I think I un ...
  • Ryan
    General: 1star = Friends meet in the garden, they go inside and have sex.  Lik ...
  • Blue-Washed Chronicles #1- Bonnie's Dress
    General: 2 Star - Old ladies and shopping - what fun!  Friend: Remember, if Pr ...
  • Revenge
    General: 2star  = House Raid, Murder, Violence - Gripping Stuff! Was interested ...
  • 12. Showdown
    5 Star = Murder, Rescue and Action. A Dramatic ending- Great!  12 Good Chapter ...
  • 9. Gathering Storm
    General: 5 Star = A Kidnap plan and suspense is built up - Great!  This chapte ...
  • Author's note part 2
    W H O AAA !  Now I am confused!  In friendship: remember that, if praise is ...
  • 26. Chapter 26 book two chap 2
    3 Star = Chapter Two - ooh, lots of drama here!  Many names have not started w ...
  • 2. Chapter 2
    General: 4 Star = More is revealed about the nature of Angela's power.  Friend ...
  • 6. Chapter 6
    3 Star = Escape and Freedom?- Great!  Friend: Remember, if Praise is silver, F ...
  • 3. Chapter 3
    4 Star = Action and Fighting - Goody, Goody :)  This was an action and drama p ...
  • 4. Chapter 4
    3 Star = Emotions and suspense build up, Great!  Friend: Remember, if Praise i ...
  • 5. Chapter 5
    3 Star = Prison Break in the offing? - Great!  Friend: Remember, if Praise is ...
  • 1. Travelin' Around
    3star =  Enjoyed the writing piece - conveyed some good ideas.  (understood go ...
  • 4. Revenge
    = 3 Star  Oooh She's turned into a complete nutter, ain't she? ha ha ha Love ...
  • 7. Warning
    General: 3 Star = The chapter is interesting,  with a little revision, it could ...
  • 8. Decisions
    'Still working on this one' I never think it a good idea to post your work unle ...
  • 1. The Beginning and The End
    = 5 Star  I read your profile. I gather from it that writing in a serious way ...
  • 8. Chapter 8
    5star =  The writing piece moved me in some way. Liked the characters, Liked t ...
  • 7. Chapter 7
    5star =  The writing piece reveals some more secrets, great!  Liked the chara ...
  • 6. Chapter 6
    5star =  The writing piece was a shower scene, yummy!  Liked the characters, ...
  • 4. Changed
    hello GreenRubyLeo  If you have a story welling up inside you..put it down in ...
  • 3.  Dying, Part 2: Paris
    4star =  The writing piece entertained me - ooh, The Feed!  Liked four of the ...
  • 2.  Dying, Part 1
    4star =  The writing piece containe suspense and action, Great!  Liked four o ...
  • 1. Prologue: Memories
    4star =  The writing piece entertained me - what an interesting Chapter. Make m ...
  • ‘Water’ Shame
    5star =  The writing piece is well written and humerous, great!  Liked the ch ...
  • 4. The day with Vince
    3star =  Enjoyed the writing piece - story unfolds.   Liked three of the foll ...
  • 3. The party
    3star =  Enjoyed the writing piece - Beach Parties, Fab!  Liked three of the ...
  • 5. Chapter 5
    2star  =  Was interested in the writing piece (understood goal of writer)  Li ...
  • 4. Chapter 4
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  • 3. Chapter 3
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  • 1. Chapter 1
    5star =  The writing piece held me - the normality then the dragon!  Liked th ...
  • A Low Tide
    5star =  The writing piece moved me in some way -  kept me in suspense - spook ...
  • Moon Light
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  • The Specialist - 17th Challenge
    = 5 Star  spelling? hits the tire - tyre?  This felt racey and pacey to me- ...
  • Chapter Five(3rd)
    5star =  The writing piece reveals more - lovely!  Liked the characters, Like ...
  • 2. Chapter Two(4th)
    5star =  The writing piece was action packed - kept me in suspense!  Liked th ...
  • Train Wreck
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  • Choices
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  • 9. Chapter 7 "Trampling the grapes"
    5star =  The writing piece moved me in some way - more interesting characters r ...
  • 4. Chapter 3 "Watching the stars"
    5star =  The writing piece entertained me - Clean Up Squads for 21st century va ...
  • 3. Chapter 2 "Contemplation"
    5star =  The writing piece developed the story - it unfolds, great!  Liked th ...
  • 2. Chapter 1 "Natalie"
    5star =  The writing piece entertained me - introduced Natalie.  Liked the ch ...
  • 12. Silver Council
    5star =  The writing piece interested me in some way - The characters are deve ...
  • 5. Chapter 5 Greatest Show On Earth
    5star =  The writing piece captivated me - Fantastic.  Liked the characters, ...
  • The Loneliest Moments
    OOOh Gritty Stuff!  I like your ideas and the writing is very "street" - nicel ...
  • 13. Chapter 12 - Hope
    2star  =  Was interested in the writing piece (understood goal of writer)  Li ...
  • 12. Chapter 11 - Anthony
    4star =  The writing piece entertained me.  Liked four of the following:  th ...
  • 4. Chapter 4 Ann's Big Adventure
    5star =  The writing piece moved me in some way -  Erotic threesomes, dildo's ...
  • 8. Martha's Morning
    5star =  The writing piece moved me in some way - Fast and Pacey!  Liked the ...
  • Hill's Return
    5star =  The writing piece moved me in some way- suspense and sex, yummy!  Li ...
  • 22. Chapter 23
    5star =  The writing piece moved me in some way - love the details! Liked the ...
  • 2. Methy Martha and Four Fingered Johnny
    5star =  The writing piece moved me in some way - Gripping! Liked the characte ...
  • 6
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  • Dream Scaping
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  • Who's the bitch now?!
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  • 2. Hospital
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  • Remains
    3star =  Liked the writing piece (understood goal of writer) Liked  three of t ...
  • Monarch Butterflies
    This was lovely.  Your paintings look very good, too.  Enjoy your projects. ...
  • New Magic
    I like this story. Will follow it.  A few sentences may need proof reading: " ...