FinneanNilsen's Compliments

Compliments:  46

Last Compliment: 8/28/2015

Helpful (46)

Project Reviews

  • Please correct me
    We are experiences in Project Management, Should be: experienced in Project Mana ...

Submission Reviews

  • Confession of a Victim of Rape
    Hey there PhilippaS, as the others have said: welcome to Webook. I'm not terribl ...
  • N/A
    spoons,stepped - missed a space. The Cajuns loved their Bayou voodoo and he was ...
  • Chapter 15
    stepping up to the table and next to Laurie, 'You had me worried for a minute. ...
  • Chapter 08
    There were fondling and kissing heavily as the doorbell rang. - They were fondli ...
  • Chapter 14
    he manually unwound the window and hung out of it, hoping for a clearer image. I ...
  • Chapter 10
    Chapter thirteen.
  • Where There's Smoke, There's Fire
    A cool little story. Lost me a bit in the telling of the back story. I don't kno ...
  • Libido Ergo Sum
    He couldn't bear the thought of creeping back onto the the bed - double "the" A ...
  • Asha
    the warmth reached her skin, but not her soul - I'd remove the comma. It's more ...
  • The Lazarus Effect
    Davis glanced over his shoulder, "No one asked you to come along." - period inst ...
  • Chapter 1 - The End of the Start
    Hi TJ, Just from the first chapter and synopsis I'd say this has a strong, inter ...
  • Songs from the Minaret
    I thought this was mesmerizing. The only thing I noticed was the use of present ...
  • The Adventures of Mr. Pibb
    Ah! LV - my Forbidden Flower... This was a very good opening, though there was o ...
  • Salvage! Chapter 1
    Now, the example below was meant to show that for every single rule there is som ...
  • Dark of night
    Nailed the word count flat out. Boom.  I will say - while I liked the piece over ...
  • Elmer
    I really liked this.  It was very sweet and the little bring it around I found c ...
  • 25 Year Old Virgin
    Different.  I'm starting to see a pattern of gay and lesbian subs in the challen ...
  • Stepping Into the Air
    Okay, I just got through the transition.  There's not many typos or misplaced pu ...
  • Chapter 2-Phoenix
    Again: changing tense like crazy: Paragraph 4: “These spics get everything so go ...
  • Shelby
    Okay, I'd start here: It’s not every day you find yourself stealing from your mo ...
  • Advice...
    If you have the story in your head, my advice is: run with it.  It couldn't hurt ...
  • Kindar's Cure Query Revised
    Ok, in my own, personal opinion, you need to spice this up some.  Where's the ac ...
  • Firewalkers  (FIRST VERSION)
    Summary  There are over three million walking the earth, unrecognizable to those ...
  • No Matter Where [Poem]
    Okay, then go to: I will be there to help you through any situation and put it i ...
  • Life
    I wrote this entire review, and then went back and re-read this several times, a ...
  • Sometimes [Poem]
    Now let me start by saying that the closest thing I've ever written that could b ...
  • Being Bompsy Carleffa - First Page
    For starters: Now you see what I was working on when you thought I was slacking ...
  • THE SICKNESS
    Okay, you've been very thorough with your reviews, so I owe you nothing less.  I ...
  • The Flashover
    You built a nice scene in just 149.  I don't quite get the "launched with improb ...
  • Pumpkinhead
    This is pretty original.  The pumpkin isn't doing the scaring, although you coul ...
  • Night.City
    You've got a serious run-on going in the second paragraph.  Gotta go through and ...
  • Night.City
    I'm going to try to show you how this should read without changing the style or ...
  • Night.City
    jesus, I forgot the "dark" right off.  Goods thing a put in the qualifier "hopef ...
  • Night.City
    That's a pretty sleazy thing to say Delaney... It's called civility, learn some. ...
  • Just a Little Understanding
    First sentence, end it at jaw.  New sentence. Put and before smiled, new sentenc ...
  • Just a Little Understanding
    This was cool, but you put it up too fast, need to go back through and add comma ...
  • The Bounty Hunter
    "high-school Jimi Hendrix wanna-bes who picked it up in highschool" is a little ...
  • First Impressions
    General: I'm giving this a four because I know it will be when you've changed th ...
  • Chp 1 - Dissection #1 -
    Small editing is all this needs.  In one spot you said started back instead of s ...
  • A Wretchedly Vile Life
    A lot better this time.  No doubt.  ;)  This is the only one I've seen where the ...
  • The Tribunal's Reasoning
    There's been something wrong with the word counter on this pretty much since the ...
  • Confession
    This was fun.  She seems to have a little trouble with the truth.  There's a few ...
  • A Courtroom Fib
    Not sure who's lying here.  I think the actual liar is supposed to be revealed. ...
  • Set of Queens
    Pretty good.  I would have liked a little more dialogue and a little less descri ...
  • No One Wants to be a Zombie
    Funny, lighthearted, different.  I'm getting kind of tired of the zombie thing, ...