RJ_Urquhart's Compliments

Compliments:  105

Last Compliment: 9/9/2017

Enlightening (105)

Submission Reviews

  • Hmm...
    I thought at first the whole story was going to be just one kiss. And I liked th ...
  • Delicious - Revised
    characteristically whimsical, or surreal, whiehever you prefer. These cannibals ...
  • Seder
    Hi Duncan, I'm not sure I have any right to critique, since I haven't participat ...
  • The Taste of Grapes
    A nicely spun tale, Duncan. And a very moral one. He's turned to the dark side a ...
  • Prime
    I liked the creativity of imagining a different present and forcing us to imagin ...
  • The Red Line
    Great little tale of alternative history, Chris. There seem to me to be a few mi ...
  • Among Gods
    What wonderful fun! And I love it that you used concupiscence. You don't see a l ...
  • Nevermind
    You found a way not to make it sci-fi, and then you made it sci-fi. Well - sci-f ...
  • Out of Body Experience
    On Wednesday, John Ersatz died, briefly.>>> now that's a masterclass in how to h ...
  • The Way
    Now that is more the kind of work I've come to expect from you than last month's ...
  • Juniper - Edited(Final Draft}
    There's a clear story idea here that takes us from happiness to loss and back to ...
  • Spring Chickens
    Put the chicken head down gently and nobody gets hurt! Right!  A couple of niggl ...
  • The Seasonal Town
    This is atmospheric, thoughtful, and with some very careful wordcraft. The probl ...
  • Unyielding
    A good sci-fi chiller. Touches of Alien without the teeth. I'm not sure what the ...
  • The Dolce Life
    As Alec says, this is more a memoir than a story. It's poignantly written, but i ...
  • Chance Encounter (Revised)
    I was liking it up to this point  "Unlike Angus, however, this is a man who has ...
  • Boston
    Oscar Wilde said a cynic is someone who knows the price of everything and the va ...
  • Brady be damned
    I liked the comment this made. Like Alec. I knew from the beginning this was a g ...
  • Riggs
    Mickey Spillane meets Thumbelina! It has the grittiness of the genre, except wit ...
  • Kitchen Turbulence
    That's very cute. You've given an old trope a harder edge. I think this story wo ...
  • Christmas Eve with Grampa
    I think that's much more powerful.  Just one niggle  peeling white paint glared> ...
  • Ein Weihnachtslied
    I loved this story. Seventy years on we're able to see the world through the eye ...
  • Carol Kringle
    I'm not sure this is a story, tony. I liked the theme of a female Santa, and I l ...
  • Chapter Twenty Seven
    Beautifully written psychedelic scene. I really liked Lucy’s evolution. But the ...
  • Chapter Twenty Five
    Ahh. This wasn't the end. It's only as far as you've written. The repair was pre ...
  • Chapter Eighteen
    Tension flags a little bit in this chapter.The wedge of suspicion between the Li ...
  • Chapter 1--The Museum
    I'm afraid I'm another wrinkly, and not the intended audience for this, so I can ...
  • I don't think we're in Zork anymore
    Great fun. Real nostalgia. I lost more days of my life to games like this than I ...
  • Snowflake
    Well done Anthony. I agree with the others. This is your best entry yet. It's mu ...
  • Jerome Sanders
    I'm a Brit and I got it, Chris. A lovely little pierce, motivated wholly by the ...
  • The Silver Arrow
    Hi Ernest. This was well-executed, but it has one problem, well two really. The ...
  • x
    I'm afraid I have not a clue what this is about. I looked up 55 to see if it wou ...
  • Beyond the Prism
    This is lovely Duncan
  • Burden of Truth
    Well. that took me by surprise.And it's a very brave theme to choose. However, g ...
  • Chapter Thirteen
    Wow! Twists within twists as the mysterey begins to unfold. The writing in this ...
  • A Long Drop and a Sudden Stop
    Yup, reading extended dialogue (with or without tags, but with no narration or a ...
  • The Cave Doctor
    I agree with Alec and Duncan about the lack of a twist. What Alec describes as a ...
  • A heart stopping Valentines Day
    Welcome to Webook. As Chris says, this is a really great community of readers an ...
  • The Sumerian
    I liked this a lot. Duncan is right, this is mainly about the homo-erotic vampir ...
  • Over the Trope
    I really liked the humour of this. I now realise it's very close to my own submi ...
  • Bestiary
    For me, this had a hypnotic literary feel to it, I love bestiaries, so I was a s ...
  • Victim of Reality
    This is a sort of retelling of the Christmas Carol. It's well-written and well-p ...
  • Victim of Circumstance
    Another yarn of sea-faring folk from your pen is always welcome Ernest. I wasn't ...
  • Confronting the Empath
    I loved the idea of the empath/sociopath confrontation. That's a real cool basis ...
  • Think of the Children
    This is a great idea! Exploring the mind of a school shooter in a way that makes ...
  • And then there was Schrödinger
    I loved this whimsy. Of course, with more words, I would have wanted to know wha ...
  • Cure for the Itch
    Well written Duncan. A thoroughly enjoyable whimsy. I liked the work you had put ...
  • Edge
    This is beautifully written. It took me right into the world of these two and th ...
  • Hex Nihilo
    After your comment on my piece I came back here to check. There is no reference ...
  • Small Miracles
    Smart move Duncan getting this psychological nativity story in first. That niche ...
  • The Butchers Son
    Congratulations on placing in the final six
  • Raunchy Night
    For me this doesn't seem to be a story. Nothing happens. They wake up drunk afte ...
  • Elegie
    Just wonderful Duncan. This is beautifully written and the ending was a total su ...
  • Undead Beauty Part 2
    This ending tails off a somewhat from the off-beat whimsy of the beginning. You ...
  • Belle
    I'm not quite sure what Grimms' tale this is, but as a werewolf story it has the ...
  • Never Did I Want to be Here Again
    Alec's point about over-writing resonates with me, There is no question that you ...
  • Death's Messengers
    I'm not sure what fairy tale (if any) this is. It's beautifully melancholy. I li ...
  • Everybody Needs A Bosom For A Pillow
    Now that is darker, and less ribald, than your previous version. Dark probably m ...
  • x
    I get the idea of Rapunzel 2, and the Prince's disillusion with Rapunzel 1 becau ...
  • Snow White
    Well, it's dark enough. Death will do that. And it echoes two fairy tales.Perhap ...
  • Chapter 3:  Captain and Crew
    This, to my mind, is the real beginning of your story, A boy begins his journey ...
  • No Safe Corner
    Great descriptive writing for the urban landscape. The evocation of magic and da ...
  • Left on Main
    Great story, as ever. And it seems to touch all the bases including fantasy.  Th ...
  • Refreshing the Tree
    The fantasy is there, but I'm not sure it covers the urban poverty and the teen ...
  • The Pearl
    I liked this a lot. If I was to try and find things to improve in it, I might po ...
  • Freedom's Call
    This works well. I was left unsure though whether you wre portraying him as an h ...
  • x
    It's a cute idea. but the speech and the conclusion don't really seem to match. ...
  • At Sea (Revision #?)
    This now seems to me to fulfill the brief of the challenge. You've cleverly used ...
  • Doppler Feelings Log, January 12, 2013(Revised 6/23/14)
    Cogito ergo sum. If he can think, they got him back. Otherwise an entertaining s ...
  • A Rather Curious Garden
    It's great to see you back. Your voice is unique and identifiable. It has someth ...
  • Taste My Fist, Wizard
    There are some nice uses of words here. I particularly liked "Chocolate lingered ...
  • Coffee (Revised)
    With this challenge, I really don't think it matters if you break the rules (unl ...
  • Lily's Dream
    This is a well-rounded story. The dialogue is wholly believable, and the connect ...
  • Walls
    I've read this three times and I'm afraid I still don't understand it. It's atmo ...
  • Chapter Three
    I know what you mean about pre-planning. When I plan writing too much it's more ...
  • As Luck Would Have It
    When Titanic hadn't appeared I guessed how it would end. But it's a lovely dark ...
  • Bitter Lemonade
    That turnabout is quite simply wicked. Well done. And I agree with Kimberley, do ...
  • Libido Ergo Sum
    An interesting exploration, but the contest words sit a little uneasily in the t ...
  • The Super-Secret Misadventures of Agent Dareo Hithun
    It's still quite cryptic, but I found that part of its charm in the first versio ...
  • The Super-Secret Misadventures of Agent Dareo Hithun
    A neat little tale.  Just one niggle: The string of curses he wanted to say were ...
  • Marmota Monax
    I also commented when you first posted this one, and I liked it better. Though i ...
  • Jumper
    I wasn't clear why your character would jump just because of unrequited love. Th ...
  • A Boy, Waiting
    Some great descriptive passages here, evoking the place. The story didn't work s ...
  • Twenty-eight
    The sentences are overlong for my taste, cramming in too much to the 28 sentence ...
  • Mr. Brightside
    An interesting theme, which fits well with the rebirth focus of this month's cha ...
  • Enya
    The writing is good. The repetition of "her name was Enya" introduces each inexo ...
  • The Three Musketeers
    I read this first just after you posted and didn't comment. I thought then it wa ...
  • Mike's Dream (Revised)
    I read the first version and didn't comment, because I shared exactly the same f ...
  • A Town of a Thousand Names
    Skillfully done. An entrancing use of words, that create the dreamy, 1001 nights ...
  • The Crowning
    I liked the beginning of this. Joseph's desire to have his wife. I had kind of h ...
  • The Nothing Blonde
    I normally am not reading submissions that violate the 750 word count, but somet ...
  • Visiting Lilly
    This is a great setup. I don't agree with the comment that there isn't conflict. ...
  • Angels in the Crosshairs
    Tightly written and an intriguing setting. It left me wondering where this was g ...
  • Songs from the Minaret
    I think if the narrator is a character, you have to give him or her a little mor ...
  • Unmoored
    This is great. You pack a lot of atmospheric descriptive writing into a short sp ...
  • Scorched Earth
    A nice exploration of the contagion and outcast theme. The ambivalence of the lo ...
  • An Ancient Evil
    I think you're right. Horror is not your genre. It feels less certain than the o ...
  • Chapter Twenty
    General: The revelation about who Luca is is terrific. The span of ages, the lin ...
  • Chapter Fifteen
    General: And there it is at last. A chapter of pure romance, without intrusion o ...
  • Chapter Sixteen
    General: This is a sweet chapter, engagingly written as they all are. But given ...
  • Chapter Fourteen
    General: You have a very sure voice. The writing is always light and humorous. A ...
  • Chapter Eleven
    General: Fantastic plot and character development here. At last we know about Gi ...
  • Chapter Ten
    General: I like this chapter a lot. Five stars! It’s beginning to show the compl ...
  • Demure
    Good atmospheric buildup and a nice unexpected twist in the tale.
  • Chapter Five
    General: The pace really picks up in this chapter, full of portent and threat. I ...