Good. Still love your voice. It's awesome. And the plot is very good; you're sti ...
With the feel you're giving this story, you could do much better than this. I sa ...
The story seems good but I find it very hard to read because the wording is chop ...
Much much much better! I love the new ending, it's brilliant. I can see you tryi ...
General: The only thing that keeps this story from being five stars would be two ...