The title, as AulieZander pointed out, is a little misleading. It makes it sound ...
Very good! This one flows much easier than your other chapters, and I can feel t ...
Good, very good chapter. I like how you ended it, but it feels a little unfinish ...
Much better! It's more of a 4.6 at this point, but 4 just isn't enough, so I rou ...
chapter three [edited]
Very good! It's like you can handle introducing several characters in one scene ...