This is in poem format, right? You did a good job; I like it! There are just a ...
Chapter 3: School
General: Hmm, the confrontation was different than I thought it'd be (both of th ...
Chapter 2: Shay
General: ( :D OMG their names rhyme!) Okay, so are they twins who were separate ...
Wow, I didn't see that coming! BTW, I like how you added some info about his f ...
Good job! :) I liked the real-life feel to this, like it was actually happening! ...
Love it! Can't wait to see where this is going. What was wrong with John? Cance ...
Oh! I was so confused for a second, I thought it was still Chrissy's point of vi ...