Nice descriptions. Some grammar/punctual errors here and there. What I want to k ...
I read most of it but am getting caught low on time so I'll leave a comment and ...
Part 1: The Beginning
Nice dialouge! You might want to touch it up a bit, I found quite a bit errors. ...
Chapter 1: In Which Strange Things Are Found in the Snow
I love that "s'' in the beginning! as well as the break line you had there at th ...
I like how one sister works with a doctor. This will get interesting when the li ...
Thank God #1
Awww. Most parents wouldn't really make that a serious matter. Not the crash! bu ...
Good! There are a few spelling errors, such as useing (using), Niether (neither) ...