Sprayoncrayon's Compliments

Compliments:  50

Last Compliment: 11/3/2017

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Submission Reviews

  • Bad Smells
    The story is rather matter-of-fact, and didn't really capture what it is to be A ...
  • Taphophobia
    You story is now pared down to the point where too much is happening within the ...
  • Mental Klinikiphobia
    What do you mean by, "The night didn’t allow recognizing what kind of stare that ...
  • Dark Places (2)
    This is much clearer than the previous story, although I kind of miss the part a ...
  • There's a first time for everything...
    A few years back, there was a flash fiction challenge to write a "First Kiss". ...
  • Table for 3.14159
    All this world-building that you worked so hard to make believable turned out to ...
  • The  Mouse Princess
    Cute story, but with a couple of niggles.  One - anyone who has to clean, and wa ...
  • Clammy Shades
    The poetry itself is descriptive and visual, but I was somewhat thrown by the am ...
  • Traditions
    If Lincoln had been assassinated before his election, would he really have been ...
  • Shipshape
    I feel somewhat lost, or (perhaps more aptly) washed ashore by this piece.  Ther ...
  • Depths
    I feel like I've read this somewhere before, but I just can't put my finger on i ...
  • Captain Who?
    Out of curiosity, why would they be trying to make a man invincible, and then te ...
  • The Party
    Well crafted little scenes, but I can't help but feel that the third one doesn't ...
  • Evil Clouds - Revised 1
    I know some authors here don't like the narrator death in a story.  Personally, ...
  • Party On
    I feel that there are too many switches in perspective, from the furnishings, to ...
  • One Beyond Doubt
    Interesting story, and I like the characterization.  Overlooking the weird scien ...
  • The Silver Arrow
    I was rereading and had a question, Lionel: how tall do you imagine Robin to be? ...
  • I Lived
    The first phrase promises something that the story doesn't deliver.  You start w ...
  • Patuxet
    I'm not sure I'm catching the twist here?  Is it that, instead of being outraged ...
  • The Color of Light
    Wait, where's the lip ring and nose stud in your drawing of Oliver?
  • my special ed class teacher
    Brilliant - you have captured the remembered essence of this woman.  I especiall ...
  • Victim of Reality
    I think that you have somewhat exhausted the dream sequence as a story reference ...
  • Cronic Dystopia
    Don't you have to be born on US soil to be eligible for the presidency?  I would ...
  • I will forever regret
    Short, simple and to the point, but the challenge specifically states that there ...
  • Edge
    I have always seen it noted as CTRL+Z, but I guess if you're transliterating... ...
  • Salvage! Chapter Three
    You know your stuff, that's for sure.  Hopefully by this point in the novel, the ...
  • Grey
    Interesting exercise in painting a picture of this particular urban life.  Just ...
  • The Apple (Draft 2)
    You have some great characterization here, and really provide a feel for who the ...
  • The Uprising
    Hi Trish,      You have created a stark and gritty world that is very well expla ...
  • Pride & Envy
    Very accurate, Chris.  The protagonist doesn't even need to reflect the intentio ...
  • x
    With respect to the setting of the story, it is not clear in this story who is t ...
  • One man's freedom fighter...
    History is always written by the victors.  Imagine how Washington would have bee ...
  • Mad Marta
    I understand a speech to be a one-sided delivery of an argument in order to sway ...
  • Pride & Envy
    I don't know about that, Chris.  I think there are plenty of angry young black p ...
  • Pride & Envy
    True freedom for black Americans will be when people stop comparing them to whit ...
  • Little Girl Lost
    I think a lot of it has to do with the psychology of how we relate.  Husbands ne ...
  • Stripped Vanity
    "This month, we are challenging you to write a story using taste, touch and smel ...
  • Pure
    WEbook does have some difficulty with showing formatting, but I think your submi ...
  • NFW
    Interesting story and well told, but there's no "rebirth" that I can discern.
  • Bella
    That was an interesting story - the preacher determined to take out as many of t ...
  • Chapter 1
    You have done a good job of setting up Jerek Tyler as the megalomaniac despot ru ...
  • The Long Black Train
    I received notice that a new chapter had been added and came back to the project ...
  • Venus' First Kiss
    Great submission, with a few technical errors (besides the formatting/browser co ...
  • Double Suicide Kit
    Wow, talk about a one-eighty.  Well done.  I know it took a moment for the reali ...
  • Chapter I
    There is a lot going on in this chapter and a lot of it is confusing.  Some unex ...
  • ~ Chapter I ~
    This is a little too short of an intro to really get a fell for the book.  So fa ...
  • Chapter one
    I like the direction this story is taking, but the chapter needs a quick review. ...
  • Prologue
    Intriguing prologue.  It makes me want to know more about the story, so you have ...
  • Chapter One
    Good start tot he story, but needs refinement.  Aside from some grammatical erro ...
  • Prolouge
    General: You seem to have an interesting premise to build on - a prophecy, two p ...