Sprayoncrayon's Compliments

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Last Compliment: 11/1/2017

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Submission Reviews

  • Where Monsters Dwell
    Aside from the overuse of the word "hobo", this is a strong story; however, the ...
  • The Last Halloween
    A phobia may not have been named, but it is every parent's concern - rational or ...
  • Prologue
    Historical fiction isn't really my genre, but in reading this, I was looking for ...
  • The Abyss
    Not a lot of clarity on what's going on here.  Also, the story just sort of ... ...
  • An Evening Affair
    Nicely done.  I'm glad you didn't bother trying to disguise what was going on, a ...
  • Posh Nosh
    Brilliant writing; the back-and-forth is quite clever and really captured the pe ...
  • Jawing With Jesus
    A little ham-handed on the morality tale.  I would have liked to see it more of ...
  • Timex
    Neat perspective from a dog, something I have tried myself.  I would have liked ...
  • Not all There
    As Alec pointed out, you've put your readers on to the idea that he was already ...
  • I Liked Us Better Then
    Suffice it to say, Tony, that the original sub stuck with me long enough that I ...
  • Peaceful atom
    To add to the comments and suggestions, you may wish to go back and review what ...
  • The Distance
    This is like pickles.  You don't get a pickle from setting a cucumber in brine. ...
  • Writer's Block
    I feel like the character being introduced at the beginning of the narrative is ...
  • The Dream Seller
    It's a well-crafted story, and the universe is unfurled in such a way that nothi ...
  • Pirates in New York
    "I was told we'd cruise the seas for American gold we'd fire no guns, shed no te ...
  • A Damn Mess
    Must have been a slip of the keyboard, Tony, as my comment and your response wou ...
  • Hauntings
    I feel like you have a round story you want to tell, and are trying to squish it ...
  • Caverns of the Night
    So much of the story was taken up with the "How we got here" that the rest didn' ...
  • Casino Ad Val
    At the writing prompt, I had the same idea - learner's license to kill.  Makes m ...
  • Restorations
    Well, that was refreshingly different.  The number not being a person or a chara ...
  • Resonance Rush
    I think this ticks the boxes for a vignette, and after Alec's feedback, I see yo ...
  • The Forge - my ocean
    Much more descriptive than your usual fare, and this captures the simplicity of ...
  • Granada
    Your comment stream is just begging for Alec to pop in with something inappropri ...
  • Day Seven
    The thing about this piece is the realism of the narrator.  He is not pretentiou ...
  • Delilah
    Er...what?  I read the opening paragraph, which was a dense info dump, and skipp ...
  • New Life
    Don't scrap this unless you come up with a better idea.  You know, because somet ...
  • The Peephole
    Trish, there's something that still bugs me about "Surely Frank would recognise ...
  • Of Dreams and of Memory
    You have an idea here - a world eternally at war - and a character - the diarist ...
  • Affection
    Feeling a little terse there, Dave?  A thousand words and you're barely over hal ...
  • A Journal of Blank Pages
    I thought at first this was going to be a bit more meta-story - a tale about a c ...
  • Bloke Bird
    Sadly, a comic piece very rarely ended up in the top spot, but at least you made ...
  • Snowflake
    Hey Anthony, I'm pretty sure when the judges for the September challenge wrote, ...
  • Wardrobe Shaped Boxes
    Well done, Sue.  Both of my grandfathers died with Alzheimer's and would forget ...
  • Such Pain
    A well-earned place in the winner's circle.  Don't let anyone ever tell you agai ...
  • Where the Flames Glow Blue
    I think, if you really want to polish this submission, that you should focus on ...
  • Party On
    I see how you have changed the story to explain the damage to the building, but ...
  • Where am I?
    Nice, Tony.  Well done.  I spotted the rogue 'r' that Alec pointed out, as well ...
  • Snowflake
    If I was trying to pinpoint what made this one better than previous submissions ...
  • Snowflake
    Jack calls the ambulance, and with it come the police to investigate the hit-and ...
  • Such Pain
    I see that having won the poetry challenge, you've been able to carry that forwa ...
  • A Paranoid Pair
    Well deserved placement.  Quirky, humourous, and very, very human.
  • x
    I'll be honest, I have no idea what the story being told here is.  It seems to b ...
  • Blue
    Chilling but very real tale.  Not sure what you meant by, "The sun shined down t ...
  • Chilli Cheese Dogs
    Ronnie, if it was named for what went on it, it would be a KY Dog.  But, back to ...
  • Case Closed!
    Read this a few times.  It now reminds me of the confession that ends "And Then ...
  • Divorce Confession
    I see what you are getting at with the dichotomy of Hank's character.  Honestly, ...
  • Corina
    Typhoid Mary revisited?  I really enjoyed the atmosphere, and of course, you are ...
  • Monopoly
    I have to admit, when I started reading this, I thought it was going to be anoth ...
  • The long wait.
    Yeah, those development software suites can be pretty expensive.  I guess Aaron ...

  • I think the twist is that he never caught a feminine 'bird' down at the beach, d ...
  • Keeping Up With the Joneses
    Interesting turn on the story.  The parents, portrayed as altruistic in the stor ...
  • A Cautionary Tale
    If not for the challenge of there being a twist, it would not have been so predi ...
  • Soldiers of Destiny
    Non stop action with no backstory.  You've certainly met the criteria for this m ...
  • The Cold Can Burn Like Fire
    Such depth of description even in the middle of what can now be seen as a clear ...
  • The Woman in the Black Suit
    Have to agree with Alec on this one.  One big flurry of action and then a lot of ...
  • Doom and Keys
    Definitely a heart-pounding action sequence, but unfortunately, there really isn ...
  • More Than A Pretty Face
    Action packed, and you do a very good job of defining Leigh as a character, so t ...
  • Click! (Reviewed)
    Ten years old and already an adept killer - not only that, but able to pull off ...
  • Solstice Sacrifices
    Hi Leelah.  I started reading this and had to stop.  I wish there was a kinder w ...
  • Summit
    It's taking a long time to shut this business down.  Que pasa?  I see that you a ...
  • Bestiary
    Not your fault.  The story is so good, Webook had to count every word twice.  Ch ...
  • The World (an autistic view)
    Having a child on the autism spectrum, I can identify with the sentiment, especi ...
  • Parts of my Necromancer Project
    Two different projects - 1000 words a day.  Awfully ambitions, aren't you.  Tryi ...
  • An Evening View
    See, all there really is to this poetry lark is to write without thinking about ...
  • Nightfall
    You don't need anyone to tell you how good a writer you are - but it feels good ...
  • man in the window
    Simple, down-to-earth poetry.  Not really a whole lot to be said about it - your ...
  • If I kiss you where it's sore
    If any one sub deserved runner up, this is it.  Congrats!
  • Time is Silent
    No surprise to see your name in the winner's circle this month.  A very well don ...
  • Bang
    Okay, how about, "I could tell I hadn't done a good enough job disguising the tr ...
  • Pawn
    I like the idea that the killer accepts the offer not out of fear of dying.  I t ...
  • The Gods Must Be Angry
    Not exactly sure why Eanhere waited so long to point out the problem he had spot ...
  • Bad News
    I'm glad that you took this as constructive criticism as opposed to a bunch of w ...
  • Timothy took his time to school
    Quantum entanglement, space-time distortions, a looming event horizon, this was ...
  • Cannabis Blues
    Nice.  Love the stream-of-consciousness parade through a comedy of errors.  I es ...
  • Alone
    I like the re-write.  Your opening is much stronger.  Not only that, but you div ...
  • Climb
    I always thought it was Sir Hillary that gave the "Because it was there," commen ...
  • To Light, Ignite... And Bring To Life
    I too thought it was going to be a smart phone.  Anybody else surrounded by Cand ...
  • Once a Year
    Somewhat like a slasher flick, the bodies keep piling up, but all we get about e ...
  • Two Festivals
    Yeah, Black Friday and Cyber Monday are starting to creep north, although I hear ...
  • If I kiss you where it's sore
    My wife has many friends in the LGBT community, and so I think I can sympathize ...
  • Promontory
    Cliff's edge, contemplating suicide, God speaking in obscure ways.  What the hel ...
  • The Hit
    Aside from the occasional typo (and everybody has them), this is a strong narrat ...
  • Sweet Dreams
    While an interesting, albeit not unique story (see the submission Demon of my Dr ...
  • Common People
    I was so engrossed in the storytelling that I didn't realize how long this was u ...
  • Fairy Tale
    More than the tale told, the interaction between the brothers steals the show. ...
  • Dark
    Spooky.  I skimmed this the first time, and missed the blue liquid "reset button ...
  • The Hook
    Five stars, Ken.  This is awesome.
  • Crow
    An altogether entertaining blend of several mythologies with a suitably disturbi ...
  • Grains of Sand
    Congratulations. This one stood out in my mind from the first read. So much goin ...
  • Grains of Sand
    Wow, that was a rollercoaster.  Ticked all the boxes for the guidelines, and the ...
  • Split
    Brilliant and touching.  The fantasy element really sets the backdrop for the mu ...
  • No Safe Corner
    Urban teen fantasy?  You bet.  Not sure where the poverty angle plays out, aside ...
  • The Pearl
    Spellbinding.  Full of emotion and reality.  This is a stand out submission.  Th ...
  • The Librarian
    I have to admit, I have never seen a story where one character usurps the narrat ...
  • All Fools' Day
    So I see you too are deciding to break the mould for this genre.  Steam power wi ...
  • Freedom's Call
    Fantastic.  Well-written, well thought out, and utterly hopeless.  American poli ...
  • Mad Marta
    An interesting tale, liberally borrowing from Jeanne D'Arc, but less of a speech ...
  • Marcus Speaks
    Having missed out on the whole Lifelights thing (aside from the Lucy/Liam love s ...
  • Freedom of Stupidity
    Awesome.  I too am speechless.  That was awesome.  Just one correction: "I had e ...
  • Loss of Sense
    I agree with Trish, I would think that as a married man, the narrator would have ...
  • The mind's eye
    Nah, the challenge says, "You should completely omit the usual sensory descripti ...
  • All By Myself
    I would say that the rewrite works well, and it was meant to be a compliment tha ...
  • Trapped (Rev 6 - 15 days left)
    There comes a point EJ, where something seems overwritten.  Not every action req ...
  • Training
    Who cares if it breaks the rules.  The whole point is to challenge us to write s ...
  • A Rather Curious Garden
    I would keep the line about the traffic because it is all about the scent of die ...
  • Into The Mist
    Oh those pesky consciences, reminding us that the grass only seems to be greener ...
  • A Friend Like No Other
    Beautiful.  You have the sense of relationship - that place where desire becomes ...
  • N/A
    Well, you can't win 'em all.  I like how the snake oil salesman calls it a numbe ...
  • Service
    This is a bit of a departure for you, Finn.  Not that I'm unimpressed.  The imag ...
  • Shopping Can Change Everything
    Don't worry about the flow - the dialogue seems a very natural back-and-forth. ...
  • A Falsie in a Cafe
    Interesting interpretation of the word.  I think the rules are that you have to ...
  • The perfect Tardis and a Silver Dalek
    Interesting story, and as you can read from the comments on the book home, there ...
  • The Pink Ballerina Room (Revised)
    Thank goodness men's cancers aren't as painful to test. As awkward, yes. As unco ...
  • Eloise
    Realism vs. clarity in dialogue? Go with realism. Dialogue that is only there to ...
  • N/A
    What is going on with your quotation marks?  They're breaking formation faster t ...
  • Love In The Snow
    Hi QueenSam, thanks for sharing.  I see that you had commented on prior challeng ...
  • Over
    Short, sweet and succinct.  There isn't a whole lot to the story, but it's a cir ...
  • Boundary Dispute
    You have an interesting submission - a character study of the Big Bad Wolf, that ...
  • The Price
    Shades of Pet Semetary - well done, with the same slow build towards desperation ...
  • Sam's Letter to Jim
    FYI, this submission doesn't show up in Internet Explorer for some strange reaso ...
  • Snow
    So, having read all the submissions this month several times over, I can only sa ...
  • From the Ashes (revised - slightly)
    Whether autobiographical or not, the narrator has an authentic tone that carries ...
  • Nowhere to Nowhere
    Nice rewrite - you don't lose any of the stream-of-consciousness narration that ...
  • For War
    All about character, and you do a wonderful job of presenting how Frankie emerge ...
  • N/A
    A brilliant submission that captures the melancholy and grief of losing a much-h ...
  • The Eternal Heart of Darkness
    Interesting read - temptation and addiction coupled with juvenile experience and ...
  • Nowhere to Nowhere
    Paragraph breaks, please.  You have a lot of good ideas that seem to be loosely ...
  • Snow
    With all of your enduring style and characteristic panache, you present a fictio ...
  • Interstices
    Interesting, and reminds me somethat of the mythos behind the Myst series of gam ...
  • Frostmortem
    Slow build to the finish.  Took a long time to understand what was going on here ...
  • Frostmortem
    This is one of my top picks for the month - not overly melodramatic and moral, n ...
  • The Caroler of Wall Street
    Let me know when you've got the rest of the story up - a longer telling might gi ...
  • Sugarplum Fairies
    Sweet, touching and sentimental - everything one expects from a made-for-TV Chri ...
  • X-mas Eve
    Well, that's an interesting, macabre retelling of a classic.  Just a couple thin ...
  • Prophetic Times
    While you have presented an interesting picture of the events surrounding the bi ...
  • Luna's Reaper
    Congratulations on winning the October challenge.  Considering the quality of th ...
  • Smell the Sea and Feel the Sky
    Good, captivating start.  I think your Lincoln Bright should meet my Solomon Fie ...
  • The X
    Great voice, your narrator paints a picture of the physical surroundings as well ...
  • A Prize of Sovereigns: Chapter 1. Byrom
    Interesting opening, and clearly a pivotal moment for Byron.  Medieval fantasy p ...
  • The Visit
    Awesome character and voice.  We really get a feel for who Dolly is, as well as ...
  • Outpost
    Good gods, Finn, do you have to write such good prose?  I mean, zombie novels ar ...
  • The Grim
    You have a great story with a lot of plot threads that could lead to dangerous e ...
  • Same old John
    Great job keeping the reader on the edge, where it keeps appearing that somethin ...
  • Bad Necromance
    I like this story - temptation, addiction, and a supernatural element that keeps ...
  • Hell's Breath
    Looks complete to me; although there are a few typos.  Interesting story.  While ...
  • The "Incident"
    Loved it.  The slow buildup to the reveal, the early warnings that something was ...
  • Recognition
    Improving? Alina, you've been at the top of the challenges for months.  One of t ...
  • The day God came to school
    Interesting tale, and a peculiar twist.  One phrase that stuck out as awkward wa ...
  • Lessons in Human Interaction
    Having been there - overanalyzing everything before taking action - I can readil ...
  • Peer pressure
    I agree with Alina, you don't need 'filing...single file."  It's redundant.  Als ...
  • It took you long enough
    Brilliant imagery, and you've captured the voice of the speakers.  The historic ...
  • Young Love, Sponsored By Doritos
    Nice.  Perfect capture of the voice for the character. Too bad he came out in su ...
  • The Witch and the Fool
    What a neat idea - I loved it.  “No man can survive the kiss of the witch. Perfo ...
  • N/A
    Wow, that was...beautifully perverse, for lack of a better description.  There a ...
  • Act 1 Scene 5
    Wow, talk about minimalist storytelling.  This is brilliant, and complete as it ...
  • Temptation
    Brilliant and touching, with just the right touch of melancholy at the end to se ...
  • Eternally Yours
    I sure hope that your Word count is accurate, because there are very few that yo ...
  • For the Next Five Hundred Callers...
    Sign me up, I'll take two.  Can one of them be gift wrapped for a friend?  I e ...
  • N/A
    There is no quick fix to word counting issues - it all has to do with the design ...
  • Chapter 1-Adulterated
    Great writing.  You really capture the essence of his trip (including all the el ...
  • Chapter 1
    There is a lot of showing here (this happened..., that looks like...) without a ...
  • Antiseptic Silence
    You have a phenomenal grasp on spoken language.  The words people use or choose ...
  • Chapter One
    General: I chose to read this after visiting the website and seeing that it was ...
  • In the End
    General: For a novel (or novella) exploring the relationships of three friends, ...
  • Prologue-
    Intersting premist - I want to see where this story goes.  I do see a lot of unn ...