The_Dragon's Compliments

Compliments:  40

Last Compliment: 6/23/2016

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  • Chapter 2: Missing Child
    The start is very good... And then you toss it all out with the next paragraph. ...
  • 1. Prologue
    I would delete the entire first part of your story and start with:  The wind rus ...
  • Pills
    I love the way this text flows. There is the message and the song. Kids will mos ...
  • 31. Chapter 24: Back to School
    It took me a while to realise what you tried to do here. The history lesson is i ...
  • 6. Chapter 5
    That first letter Rose wrote... Was it actually written to Holly? I just realize ...
  • 6. Chapter 5
    The first paragraph doesn't convey the anxiousness that you would like it to con ...
  • 4. Chapter 3
    I love the way you give Rose a body and a soul. She is tormented and yet she tri ...
  • 4. Chapter 3
    Very emotional the feelings for Holly. There is but one question that remains wi ...
  • Chapter 1
    When Kelsi awakes in that bed, she hears noise. The curtains are down and the do ...
  • What's Wiping the Lichen Off Compared to Losing a Child?
    Faith,  A great letter, but I'm sure you could personalize it even more. This is ...
  • 24. Chapter 19: Another Photo
    Well, there isn't much to say about this chapter. Great dialogs, though. I love ...
  • 2. Chapter 1
    It was the voice old ladies reserved cute, sometimes naughty, and often stubborn ...
  • On Romeo
    Go after him, then. ;?)
  • 4. Chapter Three
    I'm not sure this was intended, but this sentence is really funny: As I got clos ...
  • 4. Chapter Three
    Great start. You make it a bit too obvious that it isn't a dream. I wouldn't let ...
  • 3. ChapterTwo
    This actually sounds funny: YOU are not my daughter. YOU are your mother’s daugh ...
  • VIRGIN
    Very good and touching poem.  Great!
  • 2. Chapter One
    Great first chapter. It has a definite flow and you actually feel what the girl ...
  • 1. Introducing Birchmount High: The Hell Hole
    Very nice writing, I have some remarks, though.  1. The things you say, you ofte ...
  • 1. Chapter 1-Revisedx2
    As usual, well written. The description is there, the creation of the world, of ...
  • A Life
    Life to its fullest. I can add no more.
  • 11. Chapter 9: Lucy
    I loved this chapter. The way you mingle the flow of the story with background s ...
  • 10. Two: Jack
    Great chapter.  It is only sad that you break the interest you had builded up in ...
  • 8. Chapter 7: The Crypt
    The descriptions here fit very well! Not too long, not too short, so precisely t ...
  • 2. The Dream
    I would change the I dream it, to I dreamed it again.  Now the second part: afte ...
  • 2. The Dream
    Why don't you tell us more about how she feels about that dream? She talks to he ...
  • 2. The Dream
    It is certainly better, but let us start with the beginning.  “No .. No .. No .. ...
  • Idiot
    I like this one much better than My Yellow Raincoat because this one is full of ...
  • 12. Chapter 11
    Hmmm... How much time has passed since Michael left and the moment Holly went to ...
  • 8. Chapter 7
    The emotions are real here. Very well done!  I can see why Holly would want to h ...
  • 9. Chapter 8
    A great description of Michael's feelings towards his father. Very real and trut ...
  • 2. Chapter House
    Very powerful start. I can easily relate to Tomas, which is great. It has just t ...
  • The Husband
    It generally is true, too. LOL.
  • 2. Chapter 2: Lori
    If you changed it in the mean time: your time period is quite clear. You have ca ...