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Last Compliment: 7/20/2016

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  • Chapter 1
    The start is good. A bit dark (with the storm and all) but a delicious descripti ...
  • Chapter 1: Lights Out
    General: From who's POV is this told? At first you start with Thomas, but you so ...
  • Chapter Three
    General: I must say: a great chapter. It is clear and it opens up a myriad of po ...
  • Mona Lisa's Smile, A Hypertext of Godly Sins
    I have to be honest: this is good stuff as poems go, though I also must admit th ...
  • My Emotional Foolery.
    First of all, why did he bother to show you the flat in the first place? With al ...
  • Welcome to Harding County High School
    Very good rithm and the rhymes come out just at the right pace. I love it. And I ...
  • Suffocate
    Last paragraph, second sentence: I would add 'the' in front of door.
  • 1. January 2008
    I like the idea, but I miss some live action. There are no dialogues (which make ...
  • 2. February 2008
    Show the pain the girl feels. There is the love: the wish to be near her loved o ...
  • 1. Gail and the Ghosts
    Strong story and very good ending.  To find an illustrator, you have two choices ...
  • 7. Chapter 6
    He was sad. He was mad. He was everything in between.   --> This is so beautiful ...
  • 29. Chapter 23: Donald's House
    The essence of this chapter is that they went inside Donald's / Lucy's home and ...
  • Chapter 1
    While this is the first feedback of mine you will probably read, I want to start ...
  • Chapter 1
    The end is off. I mean, I can see Kelsi respond to her mother like that, but her ...
  • Chapter 1
    Nurses never stay in your room just to keep you company. They don't have the tim ...
  • Chapter 1
    Try to get some logic in your story: ... she could barely speak she was so happy ...
  • Chapter 1
    How would Allie know what happened to Kelsi? She can't know Kelsi tried to commi ...
  • Chapter 1
    A third thing: when you take pills, they don't actually work that fast. Let her ...
  • Chapter 1
    Also, when she wakes up, she is not going to act as if nothing happened. Kelsi t ...
  • 23. Chapter 18: Donald
    "Look, I swear I'm not going to get into any trouble," she promised.    I'm surp ...
  • 22. Chapter 17: Mixed Messages
    I don't mean to say Lori has to do all these things. But you should give Lori a ...
  • LIFE
    It starts with nothing and end with nothing. ;?)
  • 19. Chapter 15: Meeting Owen
    He stopped because Kim had stopped.  "Owen, tell me I want to hear this," moaned ...
  • 19. Chapter 15: Meeting Owen
    "I can't believe I've done that!  The trouble I've had to get out here!"  She gr ...
  • 16. Chapter 13: Out Shopping
    I would delete the sentence: And another thing, where on earth had he ‘found' th ...
  • 8. Chapter 3-Part 3
    This time as well as smiling, her cheeks turned a rosy color. “I wasn’t aware th ...
  • 6. Chapter 3-Part 1
    I love Asha. She makes me think of another female warior: Leia Morgana, straight ...
  • 6. Chapter 6: An Errand
    Great chapter. However, nobody refrained from telling her to hurry up, and soon ...
  • nothing
    Again very good, but again: try using lay out. Create sentences and start a new ...
  • Losing Marbles
    You definetely touch people with this story. When you wonder what is going to ha ...
  • I believe
    Very witty poem. Saying one thing and then opposing it: very well done. I, too, ...
  • 11. Chapter 10
    I'll be waiting too. In heaven, I mean. ;?)  I'm sure I'll learn soon enough how ...
  • 6. Chapter 5
    One small thing: in the last paragraph between the sprinkles and the massive tor ...
  • 7. Chapter 6
    Add more emotion to it. How does Michael feel when he discovers his father? I ca ...
  • There's a ...
    I must admit, you keep me till the end. It is a perfect circle, one that keeps m ...
  • 2. Chapter 1
    Only some minor mistakes.  She had asked this same question everyday, with ever ...
  • 4. Chapter 3
    I'm notsure about the switch between Rose and Michael, but for the moment being ...
  • 5. Chapter 4
    The way you describe everything is simply brilliant. Both Holly and Michael come ...
  • 1. Prologue
    I love the story and I love the setting. A very bright start. I'm sure going to ...
  • 1. Chapter 1: Reuben's Nephew
    It is good, but it needs some thorough rewrites. Your descriptions are very deta ...