Chapter 7: The Stranger Unmasked
Great job maintaining your flow. I loved the detail during the fight and the cha ...
Chapter 6: Into the Woods
Character Development: Love the interplay! How does Marius impregnate his women? ...
Chapter 5: Nineteen Years Later
Character Development: So Dragomir was reacting to the baby the witch was carryi ...
Chapter 4: October, Moment of Truth
General: Your writing is very smooth. The lack of typos and level of polish lead ...
Chapter 3: October, Before Todd's Transformation
General: Very nice. I like the entries. Detached and clinical, which is expected ...
Chapter 2: September
General: Story seems to be a macabre blend of Dracula and Frankenstein... I ...
Chapter 1: The Forced Deal
Plot: You set the scene well, very believable. I want to know what this prophecy ...
Character Development: I like him... can't wait to see how his story develops. I ...
Plot: The back story is important and you've given simple outlines/ teaser to th ...