sigmundsquirrel's Compliments

Compliments:  42

Last Compliment: 5/29/2015

Enlightening (42)

Submission Reviews

  • Alexandra Penworthy
    A fun, bravura exercise. Really confident writing, Chris.
  • Throne
    This story is one of the best at transition from the opening sentence and incorp ...
  • Tater Tot Tuesday
    Duncan, you communicate the isolation and alienation of Yvonne perfectly through ...
  • First Kiss
    You're a sadistic man, William Stone, to treat poor Peggy-Sue so shabbily. The u ...
  • Eternally Yours
    You pack a lot of emotion in 250 (or 277) words. I agree with Lanette: the "OhGo ...
  • N/A
    Well, that was certainly something. A prose poem of perverse urges. Very well do ...
  • The Games People Play
    I liked the title, and didn't think it gave anything away. I thought the "games" ...
  • Trail of Pilfered Purses
    This is a thoroughly entertaining read from start to finish, never letting up st ...
  • The Mexican Standoff
    Obviously a humorous piece, but I think you handled the action really well too. ...
  • Novel In The Making
    Natural voice, sincere thoughts. The straight-ahead approach. Nicely done. I don ...
  • Scavenger's Breeze
    This was very well written, with fresh description and observation. There might ...
  • A Boat Show Conversion
    This painted a very complete picture and I liked it a lot. Nice, convincing, rea ...
  • 3
    There's not much to say, this is just plain good. You don't just have characters ...
  • introduction
    I've read four chapters so far. The beginning section is so different than the r ...
  • The End of Time
    At first I thought this was going to be too childish and simplistic. But you pul ...
  • One: Ireland and Brooklyn, 1895
    There is a quote by Wittgenstein (I'm not certain of it's original context, but ...
  • See-Worthy
    This entry had almost everything. The narrator's voice, the descriptions and the ...
  • IX
    Your ratcheting up the situation. As I mentioned in my fist comment on chapter o ...
  • V
    The story is expanding out with more settings: the anatomy auditorium and the bi ...
  • IV
    I agree that choosing Damian as the POV was a good choice. It's especially good ...
  • The Magical Ones Get all the Glory
    A very realistic way of killing the dragon without swordplay and heroics. As MLe ...
  • Here There Be Monsters
    I liked the first title more. You could try the old medieval cartographer's lege ...
  • Bang
    This was well-written. I thought the first sentence was a little rough, and "sti ...
  • Rodina
    The voice in this piece is so authentic that I'm not sure if it is your fictiona ...
  • Greater Northern Lizard Troll
    I liked the voice of this.   Your first and third paragraphs are the money winne ...
  • I'll Save Your Picture
    This is rather nicely written. The structure is interesting: I like the long lof ...
  • You can choose how this will end...
    There are many ways to interpret this email challenge too, and I haven't seen yo ...
  • No More Beatings
    This is a nice contemplative scene, a momentary pause in a rugged story. The wri ...
  • Alone
    Even though this is very short, I would make it shorter. I think the final sente ...
  • The Dance
    I think your last paragraph has lost its elegance. And is too explicit. I wouldn ...
  • The Dadaist Breakup
    Hard to make an experiment like this come to a climax and conclusion, but you've ...
  • Desperate Measures
    Hope you won't think me a pest! Now it seems to me like you've explained too muc ...
  • The Saddest Clown
    A sly, bleak Victorian cautionary fable. Perfect. David Lynchian.
  • Poison In My Soul - concluding, but not ending.
    I think the grandiloquence of your last sentence works to close this ending. But ...
  • Poison In My Soul - concluding, but not ending.
    I liked the first paragraph very much, and the detail of the next as it begins. ...
  • Facebook Power
    I do think you're mixing txt and facebook updates a little, but hey, you're maki ...
  • David Brackenby (ending)
    Nice, optimistic and humorous ending. Your dialogue is good, but I had a few min ...
  • Hatred.
    This seems more like a teaser opening than an ending. As an opening, it certainl ...
  • A New Gal in Town
    I agree with several of the commenters. Unless your character has a speech defec ...
  • Players (umpteenth draft)
    Whoa, that's quite a draft revision! Very clear and compelling. Now I'm frighten ...
  • Aqua Net & Cigarettes
    This could be really funny. (Reminds me a bit of the Ben Stiller movie, Duplex). ...
  • Players (umpteenth draft)
    I think the third person impersonal voice is a problem. Especially since you ope ...