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A discussion to stoke your writing fire.
Posted: 7/19/2010 1:19 AM PDT
I tend to start with something or someone else then have my character consider it: 'City Grey 11 is my home now,' - 'Something else smashes against the wall,' - '"...Three months he has had over thirty-six attempts,"'
Posted: 7/18/2010 11:58 PM PDT
Personally, (although this is purely objective), I would go with the
'It all started with broken glass...'
It keeps the reader more interested - obviously they'll want to know why shattered glass plays an important part in the next sequence of events. Did he break a jam jar on someone's head?
The other opening line is less intriguing.
Posted: 7/18/2010 6:11 PM PDT
fantasy/action romance, though trying to get away from that... what first line would create more suspense/more original?
It all started with broken glass...
I remember every step that led me here. If I must die, I am ready....