Hi, I'm a teenage writer,
and I'd really appreciate any feedback or critiques at all. This is the
third chapter in a novel I'm attempting to write, and I'm especially
interested in character development and plot. I'll read anyone's story and give my unbiased un-glossed thoughts :) http://www.webook.com/project/The-Music-in-Him-chapter-1
This is my story, it's not for everyone, and contains some (a lot) adult material, but I'd still appreciate anything. Thank you so much!