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I am new to Webook and thought I'd jump right in to reading some peer's fiction. I really enjoyed your story and left, what I hope anyway, was some specific criticism/suggestions/oberservations.
I am wild about your "book cover" - wondering if you are an artist as well? Very nicely done!!
I'm writing YA fantasy as well and would appreciate any feedback you have for me. It's Where the River Meets the Tide (here's the link: http://www.webook.com/project/Where-the-River-Meets-the-Tide) . It's the story of a river merman who falls in love with a human girl, set (of all places) where the Neuse River pours into the Pamlico Sound. The main house in the story is a real house in New Bern, NC.
It's a little longer, but I'd sure appreciate what thoughts you might have.
Keep up the great work with your story - I am curious about what happens to Lottie and Kay next!
I hope it's not lost, but any hoo thank you very much! I'm off to read yours now.
If you'd like to also read mine, and give me feedback I'd love to hear your opinions too!