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2 Words
this project was inspired by WelshPoet and his "two word" poem. it's fun word play in poetry. you can use this project to talk about anything. anything goes.
GIVE FEEDBACK
4/17/2010 10:16 PM PDT
Or do you prefer simply........................
I am
I am
4/17/2010 10:13 PM PDT
No sleep
More time
Less patence
constant rage
sleep walking
Shattered mind
More time
Less patence
constant rage
sleep walking
Shattered mind
4/1/2009 11:11 PM PDT
i love............ugh!!!
it should have been 3 worlds
now you will never know what i love
it should have been 3 worlds
now you will never know what i love
11/17/2008 2:00 PM PST
I voted for this earlier in the week. At that point in time, I was not providing written feedback unless my vote was a resounding "publish," because it appeared that many of the project leaders did not want to hear anything other than, "this is great!" or "this is the best!"
At this point, I don't recall which specific poems I read, I just know that I saw quite few typos that I had to stumble over before deciding to move on to the next project on my reading list.
In a collaborative effort such as this, you have a wonderful opportunity to provide feedback on each other's submissions BEFORE the vote to ensure that you are presenting EACH AND EVERY poem in the anthology in the best light possible. Poems by authors who refuse to revise to meet the standards set by the Project Leader should be REMOVED before the vote.
From my review, it is clear that the contibutors to this project failed to provide the necessary feedback and support to one another before this was submitted. For example, there is no reason to have typos and punctuation/spacing errors in a 20 word poem, such as Whispers:
Whispers their -- should be they're
just whispers
now.Not -- need a space
too load, -- should be loud
but quiet
enough,to -- need a space
live with.
With appropriate editing and revision, this anthology might be a winner. I will leave that decision to more poetically minded writers. nancy
At this point, I don't recall which specific poems I read, I just know that I saw quite few typos that I had to stumble over before deciding to move on to the next project on my reading list.
In a collaborative effort such as this, you have a wonderful opportunity to provide feedback on each other's submissions BEFORE the vote to ensure that you are presenting EACH AND EVERY poem in the anthology in the best light possible. Poems by authors who refuse to revise to meet the standards set by the Project Leader should be REMOVED before the vote.
From my review, it is clear that the contibutors to this project failed to provide the necessary feedback and support to one another before this was submitted. For example, there is no reason to have typos and punctuation/spacing errors in a 20 word poem, such as Whispers:
Whispers their -- should be they're
just whispers
now.Not -- need a space
too load, -- should be loud
but quiet
enough,to -- need a space
live with.
With appropriate editing and revision, this anthology might be a winner. I will leave that decision to more poetically minded writers. nancy
11/16/2008 9:40 PM PST
thumbs up!!!love Wennie xxxhugs
11/16/2008 2:56 PM PST
I agree with lightbrite. In its truest form this could be very good but I feel that poetry is more than a sentence broken down into lines of two words.
Anyone can
Do that
and make
something look
like this.
Two words per line, but is it poetry?
Anyone can
Do that
and make
something look
like this.
Two words per line, but is it poetry?
11/16/2008 5:34 AM PST
I like the idea of this project..votes in.Good luck.
11/16/2008 12:22 AM PST
Yeah, yeah....
Enough already!
Please put
your words
to work.
Go to
Volume 2
Maybe you'll
vote for
yourself next!
Is it
really that
easy, you
ask? Yes!
It is.
Being ascerbic
has it's
benefits! Right?
Enough already!
Please put
your words
to work.
Go to
Volume 2
Maybe you'll
vote for
yourself next!
Is it
really that
easy, you
ask? Yes!
It is.
Being ascerbic
has it's
benefits! Right?
11/15/2008 2:57 PM PST
you have my vote
11/15/2008 2:56 PM PST
the best idea ever!!
11/14/2008 11:52 AM PST
you have my vote =]
11/14/2008 7:29 AM PST
you have my vote
11/14/2008 7:28 AM PST
you have my vote
11/13/2008 6:49 PM PST
argh typos "may" and "your"...lol
11/13/2008 6:48 PM PST
Now despite how some of you my read the words here, I am not trying to be mean or vindictive, so please reserve you judgment until you have read what I have to say.
A poem is defined as something more than line breaks, it encodes information. “Poetry often uses particular forms [like meter] and conventions to expand the literal meaning of the words, or to evoke emotional or sensual responses. Devices such as assonance, alliteration, onomatopoeia and rhythm are sometimes used to achieve musical or incantatory effects.” –the Wikipedia entry on poetry.
The meter chosen, words used, and choice of line break often encodes more rhetorical information or dramatic tension than the words themselves, for example “Did she . . .” This two word line pulls the reader to the next line and makes them assume many things about the woman in question. It is obvious that the intent of this project was to engage the poets in this type of exercise, to encode as much meaning as possible into the structure of tiny lines.
Some poets have, in my opinion, done this very well, but I think (and have been pondering this for many days) that many of them do not.
It is an excellent talent and the gift of a poet to be able to make fine use of extremes, to capture a storm in the blink of an eye, or to expound a glance into a maelstrom of feelings and in most cases this is done, ironically, within a structure or in opposition to a structure to encode, yet again, a higher amount of information. It benefits ALL poets to have an encyclopedic knowledge of these many forms and structures so that they may encode as much information as possible, or understand the irony at play by avoiding such structures.
That is how I feel about it. I invite anyone who disagrees with me to contact me for a civil conversation.
A poem is defined as something more than line breaks, it encodes information. “Poetry often uses particular forms [like meter] and conventions to expand the literal meaning of the words, or to evoke emotional or sensual responses. Devices such as assonance, alliteration, onomatopoeia and rhythm are sometimes used to achieve musical or incantatory effects.” –the Wikipedia entry on poetry.
The meter chosen, words used, and choice of line break often encodes more rhetorical information or dramatic tension than the words themselves, for example “Did she . . .” This two word line pulls the reader to the next line and makes them assume many things about the woman in question. It is obvious that the intent of this project was to engage the poets in this type of exercise, to encode as much meaning as possible into the structure of tiny lines.
Some poets have, in my opinion, done this very well, but I think (and have been pondering this for many days) that many of them do not.
It is an excellent talent and the gift of a poet to be able to make fine use of extremes, to capture a storm in the blink of an eye, or to expound a glance into a maelstrom of feelings and in most cases this is done, ironically, within a structure or in opposition to a structure to encode, yet again, a higher amount of information. It benefits ALL poets to have an encyclopedic knowledge of these many forms and structures so that they may encode as much information as possible, or understand the irony at play by avoiding such structures.
That is how I feel about it. I invite anyone who disagrees with me to contact me for a civil conversation.
11/13/2008 1:19 PM PST
fun stuff
11/12/2008 11:05 PM PST
I also Loved some of the wordplay for just using a 2 word format I experimented with 4 word poems so I know how difficult it is to find the right words to fit a format I saw alot of talented writers, everybody keep it up and keep writing
11/12/2008 11:03 PM PST
I really liked this poem and under the circumstances and format it turned out really good, keep writing
11/12/2008 8:30 PM PST
I think this is creative
11/12/2008 12:30 PM PST
Great poem tells it just like it is
11/12/2008 10:20 AM PST
hell yeah.
11/12/2008 9:28 AM PST
Some of these are strong, most of them just don't dig deep enough to make them meorable. Better imagery would help, stronger word choice, and of course, the lack of spell checking only diminishes the overall impact - for something to be prepared for publication, too many spelling errors is simply unacceptable given that there is a spell checking tool right on WEbook.
I suggest that if this is not chosen, you keep developing this, push each poem further, and submit again next time. The format has potential, the writing just has to be strong enough to carry the apparently lightness.
I suggest that if this is not chosen, you keep developing this, push each poem further, and submit again next time. The format has potential, the writing just has to be strong enough to carry the apparently lightness.
11/12/2008 6:41 AM PST
I love this form,quickly read and such variety!
11/11/2008 3:10 PM PST
Go for it!!
11/11/2008 2:30 PM PST
Thank you all for your comments. I noticed the wheeping but it was too late to fix it. And for those who don't like it, not everything is roses and sunshine. I like it and really that's all that matters. B
11/10/2008 8:11 PM PST
This is amazing, yet so simple. Good work. I would still reconsider the period. You got my vote!
11/10/2008 6:19 PM PST
very good i did a piece like that interesting
11/10/2008 6:11 PM PST
It's pretty good. Try and use some more interesting words, though. And spell check. But overall, good.
11/10/2008 4:37 PM PST
dont like
very sorry
not me
very sorry
not me
11/10/2008 2:51 PM PST
Oh, sorry:
yuck, yuck!
that fits
somewhat better
yuck, yuck!
that fits
somewhat better
11/10/2008 2:50 PM PST
Yuck!
11/10/2008 1:52 AM PST
Sorry - this isn't my thing. I tried to read it but my eyes kept doing a boogie all of their own.
It is an interesting concept though and I applaud your creativity.
It is an interesting concept though and I applaud your creativity.
11/9/2008 4:02 PM PST
bit harsh elf!
11/9/2008 3:22 PM PST
Two Words
Spell Check
Spell Check
11/9/2008 5:34 AM PST
My two words..
Fucking awesome
Fucking awesome
11/8/2008 9:19 PM PST
Soul hallow,
Mind to follow,
Phobia grows,
Everyone knows,
Insanity thrives,
Suffering arrives,
Heart splintered,
Love scattered,
Malice rising,
Blood rushing,
Blade cold,
Reasons sold,
Struggle useless
Body lifeless,
Essence absent,
In this moment
this is poetry
Mind to follow,
Phobia grows,
Everyone knows,
Insanity thrives,
Suffering arrives,
Heart splintered,
Love scattered,
Malice rising,
Blood rushing,
Blade cold,
Reasons sold,
Struggle useless
Body lifeless,
Essence absent,
In this moment
this is poetry
11/8/2008 8:59 PM PST
very good!
11/8/2008 5:07 PM PST
2 words
per line
great read
per line
great read
11/8/2008 1:42 PM PST
awesome
11/8/2008 1:18 PM PST
keep doing what you are doing and that is writing great stuff. don't stop
11/8/2008 6:12 AM PST
Good Luck!!!!!!
11/7/2008 1:07 PM PST
good luck two words
11/7/2008 1:15 AM PST
Go For It
11/6/2008 11:40 PM PST
Told by Welshpoet to check this out, excellent...never seen two word poems before
11/6/2008 9:37 PM PST
a vote for you,
I always enjoy your work
good luck
mel
I always enjoy your work
good luck
mel
11/6/2008 4:23 PM PST
wow
11/6/2008 2:36 PM PST
This is a great idea. I think that I am going to get started right away on this project.
11/6/2008 12:18 PM PST
This is amazing!! I love the idea, and really, two words is all you need somtimes...
11/6/2008 7:24 AM PST
vote vote vote vote, can I only vote once?, oh well VOTE VOTE VOTE!!!!!!!!!!!!!
11/6/2008 3:27 AM PST
beatiful
11/5/2008 8:13 PM PST
Fun.
11/5/2008 7:28 PM PST
LOL
11/5/2008 7:27 PM PST
hope this gets published
11/5/2008 3:47 PM PST
you got
my vote
great peace
no joke.
my vote
great peace
no joke.
11/5/2008 1:56 PM PST
On to a winner here, got my vote
11/5/2008 1:39 PM PST
put it
out there
the world
may find
this a
page turner
out there
the world
may find
this a
page turner
11/5/2008 9:02 AM PST
U got my vote as well, even though I was too late to contribute to this one :( Good luck
11/4/2008 7:41 PM PST
I believe that this is one of the pest pieces of work that the Webook community has done. Well Done.
11/4/2008 6:17 PM PST
Keeping my fingers crossed...go, baby, go!
11/4/2008 4:56 PM PST
I hope it publishes! *w*
11/4/2008 4:16 PM PST
Got my vote, best of luck
11/4/2008 1:58 PM PST
Good project, and very popular it seems!
11/4/2008 12:39 PM PST
very cool!
11/4/2008 11:40 AM PST
Wow! Nice project.
11/4/2008 11:27 AM PST
It's good
11/4/2008 11:26 AM PST
I'm into this!
11/4/2008 11:03 AM PST
I voted!!!
11/4/2008 10:04 AM PST
I love this idea. An inspiration.
11/4/2008 9:57 AM PST
Great project !!
11/4/2008 8:02 AM PST
well done great job
11/4/2008 7:46 AM PST
This is awesome!! *thumbs way up* haha!! =3
11/4/2008 7:31 AM PST
This was a good idea, as well as fun to read
11/4/2008 7:15 AM PST
I LOVE THIS GUY KEEP UP THE GREAT WORK!
11/4/2008 5:41 AM PST
i love this book as it sooooo different!
11/4/2008 3:26 AM PST
Another vote
11/4/2008 2:30 AM PST
Very Very Good
11/3/2008 5:17 PM PST
three years
memories here
cant remember
why im
not there
miss her
love him
forgetting them
regretting move
why not
go back
its not
impossible yet
they might
remember still
and love
and miss
and care
i feel
too lost
im here,
not there.
memories here
cant remember
why im
not there
miss her
love him
forgetting them
regretting move
why not
go back
its not
impossible yet
they might
remember still
and love
and miss
and care
i feel
too lost
im here,
not there.
11/3/2008 2:27 PM PST
Intense. . . . Shy
We met
Through friends
Many conversations
Became Intimate
Our love
We consummate
Honest, caring
Beautiful, kind
I'm glad
Your mine
My lover:-
It's true
I love...
Love you
We met
Through friends
Many conversations
Became Intimate
Our love
We consummate
Honest, caring
Beautiful, kind
I'm glad
Your mine
My lover:-
It's true
I love...
Love you
11/2/2008 12:20 PM PST
Small paws
white fur
blackspot tuft
He ran
He played
He ruled
his kingdom
The king
is dead
long live
the king.
white fur
blackspot tuft
He ran
He played
He ruled
his kingdom
The king
is dead
long live
the king.
11/2/2008 12:12 PM PST
This sadness
breaking time
leaving me
stranded forever
of mistakes
long past
haunting me
and back
the past
that presence
that's got
me mad
breaking time
leaving me
stranded forever
of mistakes
long past
haunting me
and back
the past
that presence
that's got
me mad
11/2/2008 11:41 AM PST
He saw
me stand
He said
What's up
I thought
he's kooky
He left
still wondering
I left
quite relieved
me stand
He said
What's up
I thought
he's kooky
He left
still wondering
I left
quite relieved
11/2/2008 11:40 AM PST
reassuring face
comforting words
so sorry
i regret
more sedatives
less happiness
crying alone
i'll sleep
forever without
a life
i never
knew you
comforting words
so sorry
i regret
more sedatives
less happiness
crying alone
i'll sleep
forever without
a life
i never
knew you
11/1/2008 7:46 PM PDT
dark abyss
shadowed face
fright ensues
terror night
creaky boards
who arrives?
feet numb
cant run
body tremors
heart skips
alarm rings
I awaken
shadowed face
fright ensues
terror night
creaky boards
who arrives?
feet numb
cant run
body tremors
heart skips
alarm rings
I awaken
11/1/2008 6:39 PM PDT
sorry
11/1/2008 6:39 PM PDT
Oh Pagan:
What sighs
In thou
comes from
the devil
for you.
What delivers
was hidden,
but sooth;
you’re given
the hours
to choose.
What sighs
In thou
comes from
the devil
for you.
What delivers
was hidden,
but sooth;
you’re given
the hours
to choose.
11/1/2008 6:34 PM PDT
Oh Pagan:
What sighs
In thou
comes from
the devil
for you.
What delivers
was hidden,
but sooth;
you’re given
the hours
to choose.
What sighs
In thou
comes from
the devil
for you.
What delivers
was hidden,
but sooth;
you’re given
the hours
to choose.
11/1/2008 1:07 PM PDT
Morning alarm,
wake up.
Get dressed.
Make breakfast.
Go work.
Work hard.
All day.
Run errands.
Come home.
Fix supper.
Wash dishes.
Do laundry.
Clean house.
Take shower.
Bed time.
Womans life.
Repeat tomorrow.
wake up.
Get dressed.
Make breakfast.
Go work.
Work hard.
All day.
Run errands.
Come home.
Fix supper.
Wash dishes.
Do laundry.
Clean house.
Take shower.
Bed time.
Womans life.
Repeat tomorrow.
11/1/2008 12:25 PM PDT
The fourth line should be spelling sounds, I added an extra word woops.
11/1/2008 12:23 PM PDT
Running hard
A new
take down
spell the sound
along the
darkened ground
Here we
spill our
energetic gray
that binds
us in
the skyline.
A new
take down
spell the sound
along the
darkened ground
Here we
spill our
energetic gray
that binds
us in
the skyline.
11/1/2008 3:02 AM PDT
Dawn of
a
new beginning
Head spinning
Stuck in
a rut
Gave up
Feeling free
All about
me
Feeling cheer
Have no
fear
Body dances
Forward prances
Tears of
smiles
Have come
miles
Music sounds
like laughter
Heart beats
faster
Feeling fine
Eye lock
with mine
Night of
fun
Up comes
the sun
Could run
for miles
Stay for
smiles
Dawn of
a
new beginning
Head spinning
I’m insane
To
love again
a
new beginning
Head spinning
Stuck in
a rut
Gave up
Feeling free
All about
me
Feeling cheer
Have no
fear
Body dances
Forward prances
Tears of
smiles
Have come
miles
Music sounds
like laughter
Heart beats
faster
Feeling fine
Eye lock
with mine
Night of
fun
Up comes
the sun
Could run
for miles
Stay for
smiles
Dawn of
a
new beginning
Head spinning
I’m insane
To
love again
10/31/2008 7:42 PM PDT
Write words,
Speak them,
Run verb
greet them
stunned crowd
eat them
shunned mouth
impeach it
Done now?
No secret
somehow wow
say encore
repeat then
recieve gift
read this
right here
write where
night air
is crisp
i dare
to stay
I say
incredible explanation
explaining creation
expanding frustration
universal foundation
formulate contemplation
content content
complex notation
concept convex
common sense
on probation
ignorance is
pro hatred
pro racist
program ran
quid pro
quotation carried
unmarried men
women know
no patience
house broken
open to
personal interpretation
my basement
different topic
case closed
bold statements
Speak them,
Run verb
greet them
stunned crowd
eat them
shunned mouth
impeach it
Done now?
No secret
somehow wow
say encore
repeat then
recieve gift
read this
right here
write where
night air
is crisp
i dare
to stay
I say
incredible explanation
explaining creation
expanding frustration
universal foundation
formulate contemplation
content content
complex notation
concept convex
common sense
on probation
ignorance is
pro hatred
pro racist
program ran
quid pro
quotation carried
unmarried men
women know
no patience
house broken
open to
personal interpretation
my basement
different topic
case closed
bold statements
10/31/2008 6:47 PM PDT
My Back
Severe Pain
Quack Doctors
Pills Pills
Hurting Badly
Five years
Quack Doctors
scratching head
finally Find
Super Doc
Surgery comes
Surgery goes
Less Pain
Physical Therapy
One year
to go
Hopefully I
Will be
without alot
of severe
back pain
Severe Pain
Quack Doctors
Pills Pills
Hurting Badly
Five years
Quack Doctors
scratching head
finally Find
Super Doc
Surgery comes
Surgery goes
Less Pain
Physical Therapy
One year
to go
Hopefully I
Will be
without alot
of severe
back pain
10/31/2008 1:21 PM PDT
Hey everybody...bring it to two words part two!
link below
http://www.webook.com/project/2-words-part-two
link below
http://www.webook.com/project/2-words-part-two
10/31/2008 3:31 AM PDT
Talk Talk
Cobra posture
Spitting poison
Verbal venom
Viscious rumor
Cobra posture
Spitting poison
Verbal venom
Viscious rumor
10/30/2008 5:12 PM PDT
Cocktail Party
Cold emotion
Words unspoken
Cracked ice
Silence broken
Fears melting
Smiles warming
Mild flirting
Party over
Cold emotion
Words unspoken
Cracked ice
Silence broken
Fears melting
Smiles warming
Mild flirting
Party over
10/30/2008 2:35 PM PDT
i slip
you trip
we stumble
down
d
o
w
n
steep hill
there's blood!
police arrive
they talk
broken neck
you're gone
but why?
you trip
we stumble
down
d
o
w
n
steep hill
there's blood!
police arrive
they talk
broken neck
you're gone
but why?
10/30/2008 11:32 AM PDT
Love is
Love isn't
Lustful feelings
Intimate stealings
Of souls
Bound forever
In silence
And carelessness
I'm dizzy
And yourself?
Love isn't
Lustful feelings
Intimate stealings
Of souls
Bound forever
In silence
And carelessness
I'm dizzy
And yourself?
10/30/2008 7:56 AM PDT
We met
We drank
We laughed
We cried
We talked
We danced
We kissed
We pined
I ask
A plea
I hope
You nod
We plan
For life
We wed
Thank God.
It's good
It's fun
It's hard
It's tough
I can't
You won't
You call
My bluff.
A step
A slip
A ruse
A lie
And all
That's left
Is say
Good bye.
We drank
We laughed
We cried
We talked
We danced
We kissed
We pined
I ask
A plea
I hope
You nod
We plan
For life
We wed
Thank God.
It's good
It's fun
It's hard
It's tough
I can't
You won't
You call
My bluff.
A step
A slip
A ruse
A lie
And all
That's left
Is say
Good bye.
10/30/2008 12:46 AM PDT
As she
Turns her
face away
she thinks
was it
really worth
it she
sheads a
tear and
has no
choice but
to hang
her head
in shame
Turns her
face away
she thinks
was it
really worth
it she
sheads a
tear and
has no
choice but
to hang
her head
in shame
10/29/2008 9:52 PM PDT
Oh my
What world
What worth
The sun.
What was
Its gaze
On me.
And so
The body
Travels on
And light
Reach out
Be free.
What world
What worth
The sun.
What was
Its gaze
On me.
And so
The body
Travels on
And light
Reach out
Be free.
10/29/2008 8:37 PM PDT
scenic views
seem to
lose you
between seams
lost dreams
are found
seem to
lose you
between seams
lost dreams
are found
10/29/2008 10:36 AM PDT
Two words
left hanging
left bleeding
causing pain
and suffering
to all
to you
They break
They crumble
They crush
the self
they kill
the individual
of all
of you
Two words
impacted
in cards
on notes
in emails
but rarely
phone calls
faces
cause cowards
spit forth
these
two words
I hate
you
I love
you
left hanging
left bleeding
causing pain
and suffering
to all
to you
They break
They crumble
They crush
the self
they kill
the individual
of all
of you
Two words
impacted
in cards
on notes
in emails
but rarely
phone calls
faces
cause cowards
spit forth
these
two words
I hate
you
I love
you
10/29/2008 8:23 AM PDT
I CAN'T,
I DON'T
I MAY,
I WON'T
JUST WAIT
AND SEE,
I GUESS
MAYBE,
YOU LAUGH,
I CRY,
I SMILE,
YOU SIGH,
I WALK,
YOU RUN
WE PLAY
HAVE FUN,
WE SPEND
SOME TIME
IM A
FRIEND
YOU ARE
MINE.
I DON'T
I MAY,
I WON'T
JUST WAIT
AND SEE,
I GUESS
MAYBE,
YOU LAUGH,
I CRY,
I SMILE,
YOU SIGH,
I WALK,
YOU RUN
WE PLAY
HAVE FUN,
WE SPEND
SOME TIME
IM A
FRIEND
YOU ARE
MINE.
10/28/2008 5:05 AM PDT
tell me...
why, why
you left
without notice
without warning
tell me...
tell me...
how, how
can you
do this
to me
i believed
i trusted
i loved
only you
tell me,
how, how?
this heartbreak
this desperation
this lie
hopeless, hopeless
words cannot
words never
are enough
to express
this longing
for you
why, why
you left
without notice
without warning
tell me...
tell me...
how, how
can you
do this
to me
i believed
i trusted
i loved
only you
tell me,
how, how?
this heartbreak
this desperation
this lie
hopeless, hopeless
words cannot
words never
are enough
to express
this longing
for you
10/27/2008 8:55 PM PDT
i run
towards it
tragic heartbreak
i fly
then crash
you're there
to bring
me back
push me
up high
remind me
of our
magical divinity
when my
heart heals
i will
meet you
there
towards it
tragic heartbreak
i fly
then crash
you're there
to bring
me back
push me
up high
remind me
of our
magical divinity
when my
heart heals
i will
meet you
there
10/27/2008 6:57 PM PDT
i inhale
to take
you out
of my
life; to
escape the
pain that
prevents me
from feeling
free . . . free
like before
you came
into my
life.
You have
proven to
be a
waste of
time. Time . . .
time is
what I
lost by
investing so
much of
it into
your deadbeat
ass.
You have
definitely been
a waste
of time,
so I
inhale and
blow you
away.
to take
you out
of my
life; to
escape the
pain that
prevents me
from feeling
free . . . free
like before
you came
into my
life.
You have
proven to
be a
waste of
time. Time . . .
time is
what I
lost by
investing so
much of
it into
your deadbeat
ass.
You have
definitely been
a waste
of time,
so I
inhale and
blow you
away.
10/27/2008 1:43 AM PDT
I lie
in bed
every day.
I love
your perfection
and doubtlessly
your words,
I say.
I sneeze,
I circle
my teeth.
I blink.
I sleep.
I lie
every day
in bed.
in bed
every day.
I love
your perfection
and doubtlessly
your words,
I say.
I sneeze,
I circle
my teeth.
I blink.
I sleep.
I lie
every day
in bed.
10/26/2008 8:32 PM PDT
The Earth
stands still
my heart
pounds faster
and faster.
with darkness
fades solace
and time
has yet
to resume
i look
to see
what is
the forthcoming
pain surround
everything that
i know
yet i
am unfazed.
stands still
my heart
pounds faster
and faster.
with darkness
fades solace
and time
has yet
to resume
i look
to see
what is
the forthcoming
pain surround
everything that
i know
yet i
am unfazed.
10/26/2008 7:44 PM PDT
I sit
we sit
together here
quietly staring
willing words
none come
limpid eyes
once bright
now dead
take in
every movement
I try
to talk
to hear
you out
I can't
no more
we cry
I turn
it's done
we sit
together here
quietly staring
willing words
none come
limpid eyes
once bright
now dead
take in
every movement
I try
to talk
to hear
you out
I can't
no more
we cry
I turn
it's done
10/26/2008 7:39 PM PDT
drink start
comin', goin'
vodka rum
in my tum
bad desicions
damn she
looks bangin
but one
big problem
shes my
manager whos
with the
chick we
work with...
drinks keep
comin', goin'
the keys
end up
in my
hand somehow...
im drivin
back to
her place...
her hand
on my
lap the
whole time...
drinks keep
comin', goin
we get
to her
place... me
her and
her girl
friend...
their bed
what a
night...
comin', goin'
vodka rum
in my tum
bad desicions
damn she
looks bangin
but one
big problem
shes my
manager whos
with the
chick we
work with...
drinks keep
comin', goin'
the keys
end up
in my
hand somehow...
im drivin
back to
her place...
her hand
on my
lap the
whole time...
drinks keep
comin', goin
we get
to her
place... me
her and
her girl
friend...
their bed
what a
night...
10/26/2008 6:44 PM PDT
sad poems
so strong
so angry
and freeing
love poems
feel wrong
hallmark's morphine
treats wounds
too deep
to see
i see
his soul
love blossoms
overcomes us
still love
feels odd
broken hearts
battered minds
temper emotions
vigilant fear
past betrayal
present consequence
overcoming pain
learning trust
carrying on
moving forward
together hoping
love lasts
this time
so strong
so angry
and freeing
love poems
feel wrong
hallmark's morphine
treats wounds
too deep
to see
i see
his soul
love blossoms
overcomes us
still love
feels odd
broken hearts
battered minds
temper emotions
vigilant fear
past betrayal
present consequence
overcoming pain
learning trust
carrying on
moving forward
together hoping
love lasts
this time
10/26/2008 6:29 PM PDT
this is
so cool
i like
what's new
to me
i hope
to make
words dope
so cool
i like
what's new
to me
i hope
to make
words dope
10/26/2008 6:13 PM PDT
him, me
him, her
him, her
him, her
when will
it be
just me
and him?
him, her
him, her
him, her
when will
it be
just me
and him?
10/26/2008 6:08 PM PDT
the only
new things
are those
which have
been forgotten
new things
are those
which have
been forgotten
10/26/2008 6:06 PM PDT
Will I
ever be
the apple
of your
eye kept
in sugar
until the
time is
ripe? Will
I ever
be the
firework that
stains your
sight? Or
am I
a pumpkin,
destined to
shrivel, leave
at midnight?
Am I
the leaves
you gasp
at in
flight? Or
kick at
with cold
impatient feet?
ever be
the apple
of your
eye kept
in sugar
until the
time is
ripe? Will
I ever
be the
firework that
stains your
sight? Or
am I
a pumpkin,
destined to
shrivel, leave
at midnight?
Am I
the leaves
you gasp
at in
flight? Or
kick at
with cold
impatient feet?
10/26/2008 4:30 PM PDT
The Only
Reason I
Wear These
Glasses is
so I
can stare
and admire
your smile
and you
wouldn't even
notice.
Reason I
Wear These
Glasses is
so I
can stare
and admire
your smile
and you
wouldn't even
notice.
10/26/2008 2:22 PM PDT
I miss
your smile
your laugh
your walk
watching you
get ready
in the
misty morning
walking you
to class
hope that
you're thinking
about what
we'll be
doing when
you get
home finally.
your smile
your laugh
your walk
watching you
get ready
in the
misty morning
walking you
to class
hope that
you're thinking
about what
we'll be
doing when
you get
home finally.
10/26/2008 10:34 AM PDT
I you
you me
together we
will always
forever be.
you me
together we
will always
forever be.
10/25/2008 10:23 PM PDT
I drink
to forget
your eyes.
Sadly they
grow even
more grey
with each
bourbon downed.
The joys
of growing
up broken.
to forget
your eyes.
Sadly they
grow even
more grey
with each
bourbon downed.
The joys
of growing
up broken.
10/25/2008 5:44 PM PDT
I wonder
what on
earth I
was thinking.
what on
earth I
was thinking.
10/24/2008 5:51 PM PDT
Hey Thx 4 the invite
two words
ponder amlessly
wonder confusingly
dream endlessly
just breath
live laugh
have fun
:)
two words
ponder amlessly
wonder confusingly
dream endlessly
just breath
live laugh
have fun
:)
10/23/2008 6:45 PM PDT
Shush, quiet,
Shut off
that music,
Listen here,
stop fidgeting,
quit making,
your excuses,
sit down,
focus, relax,
Now that
we have
your attention,
watch me,
look into
my eyes,
Do you
Always do
what you
are told?
Stop it!
creativity is,
not what
we used
to remember.
Do your
own thing,
stop following.
Makeupyourownmind, writeyourownway
Shut off
that music,
Listen here,
stop fidgeting,
quit making,
your excuses,
sit down,
focus, relax,
Now that
we have
your attention,
watch me,
look into
my eyes,
Do you
Always do
what you
are told?
Stop it!
creativity is,
not what
we used
to remember.
Do your
own thing,
stop following.
Makeupyourownmind, writeyourownway
10/23/2008 9:56 AM PDT
thanx 4 d invite bro, dropped one already, be back 4 more.
10/22/2008 6:31 PM PDT
Cellar Door
"This famous linguist once said that of all the phrases in the English language, of all the endless combinations of words in all of history, that Cellar Door is the most beautiful. "
-Donnie Darko
"This famous linguist once said that of all the phrases in the English language, of all the endless combinations of words in all of history, that Cellar Door is the most beautiful. "
-Donnie Darko
10/22/2008 1:54 PM PDT
holding back
hurts when
all you
want to
do is yell.
i cant
tell if
you really
care or
if you
just want
your fair
share of
me well
baby its
not that
easy i
wont give
it up
not anytime
soon so
walk away
now before
you hurt
my fragile
heart again.
hurts when
all you
want to
do is yell.
i cant
tell if
you really
care or
if you
just want
your fair
share of
me well
baby its
not that
easy i
wont give
it up
not anytime
soon so
walk away
now before
you hurt
my fragile
heart again.
10/22/2008 1:45 PM PDT
eat dog
laugh loud
pass dog
scream out
blood stained
toilet bowl
hit floor
ice cold
tears burn
streaked eyes
ass worms
real surprise
laugh loud
pass dog
scream out
blood stained
toilet bowl
hit floor
ice cold
tears burn
streaked eyes
ass worms
real surprise
10/22/2008 7:52 AM PDT
Good bye,
Say hi,
Don't die.
Why cry,
Over love,
When we,
Mean so,
So much.
Say hi,
Don't die.
Why cry,
Over love,
When we,
Mean so,
So much.
10/21/2008 7:28 PM PDT
I stumbled upon this page, and saw this and thought it was neat, because i wrote this poem years ago... It doesn't quite follow the rules all the way through, and it's a little far away from being PG, sorry!
Stress pain
Hate insane
Life sucks
He f*cks
Your friend
Its the end
Cheap thrills
Coke kills
Drift away
Its your last day
You wanna fly
But you die
Smokin sh*t
Wrists to slit
Street whore
On your floor
She's screaming
You aint dreaming
Knife twist
Tight fist
Last night's hazy
You're going crazy
Blood on hands
Punk bands
In your head
You find her dead
Guns blast
Die fast
Acid trip
Makes you flip
Smokin weed
'Cause you can't succeed
Sniffin coke
'Til you choke
Mushrooms
Magic fumes
Esctasy
Come on with me
Doin drugs
With your thugs
End your life
With a knife
Heart break
'Cause it was fake
F*ck this
And feel death's kiss
Stress pain
Hate insane
Life sucks
He f*cks
Your friend
Its the end
Cheap thrills
Coke kills
Drift away
Its your last day
You wanna fly
But you die
Smokin sh*t
Wrists to slit
Street whore
On your floor
She's screaming
You aint dreaming
Knife twist
Tight fist
Last night's hazy
You're going crazy
Blood on hands
Punk bands
In your head
You find her dead
Guns blast
Die fast
Acid trip
Makes you flip
Smokin weed
'Cause you can't succeed
Sniffin coke
'Til you choke
Mushrooms
Magic fumes
Esctasy
Come on with me
Doin drugs
With your thugs
End your life
With a knife
Heart break
'Cause it was fake
F*ck this
And feel death's kiss
10/21/2008 5:43 PM PDT
Stop fighting
Don't Breathe
Give Up
And Die
Forbid Me
From salvation
My woebegotten
unforgettable love
Don't Breathe
Give Up
And Die
Forbid Me
From salvation
My woebegotten
unforgettable love
10/20/2008 7:52 PM PDT
Fire. lives
breathes, eats
hates. Black
breathes, eats
hates. Black
10/19/2008 8:13 PM PDT
yeah ppl bring it inside
10/19/2008 8:13 PM PDT
lol
10/19/2008 8:10 PM PDT
there's a
nifty lil
button up
there in
orange common
click it
you know
you wanna
and start
your own
nifty poem
outside the
overview of
the project
lol
nifty lil
button up
there in
orange common
click it
you know
you wanna
and start
your own
nifty poem
outside the
overview of
the project
lol
10/19/2008 7:59 PM PDT
fires burn
when touched
lovers leave
if untouched
when touched
lovers leave
if untouched
10/19/2008 7:08 PM PDT
Ridiculous Red
10/19/2008 1:56 PM PDT
No perception
Depth deception
No dreams
Only screams
Depth deception
No dreams
Only screams
10/17/2008 7:56 PM PDT
startling grievance
magnified discontinuity
magnified discontinuity
10/17/2008 1:25 PM PDT
critically ashamed
10/16/2008 3:18 AM PDT
This looks cool...I think this will b fun and interesting 2 do. Thanx 4 the invite :D
10/14/2008 5:27 PM PDT
this is gonna be fun!!!!
thankx for the invite!
-Karma
thankx for the invite!
-Karma
10/13/2008 4:39 PM PDT
seriously joking
10/13/2008 4:39 PM PDT
blinding darkness
10/13/2008 4:28 PM PDT
Silence Spoken
10/12/2008 12:16 AM PDT
i like this challenge :D
10/11/2008 6:07 PM PDT
soft sound
your voice
says goodbye
I dream
you return
in time
your voice
says goodbye
I dream
you return
in time
10/11/2008 5:27 PM PDT
This sounds so challenging...I'll try.
10/11/2008 1:37 PM PDT
appriciate the invite
10/11/2008 5:04 AM PDT
Hmm.. This is new =O
Now you shall face my long words =]!!!
Now you shall face my long words =]!!!
10/10/2008 9:58 PM PDT
Thanks for the invite, this is a fun project. I'll be back to write more.
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