Congratulations to you!

you have my vote.

Every womens heartache.  I can definitely relate.  It's simple yet able to capture the readers emotion, as it did mine.

oops i just realised i couldn't comment on each one separately!

She Wept was really sad and very well written.

Routine was really dreamy and trippy right until the end which i liked!

Something Beautiful is like reading my thoughts/feelings in a poem. xo

aww this is really sad =( very well written! x

Excellent Work.

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Interesting….a yes vote from me!

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Routine was breath taking and heartbreaking.

Something Beautiful was truly something beautiful.

She Wept was masterfully constructed and the reptition played well to convey the message you gave.

All three are wonderful choices.  You have my support and vote.  Truly- best of luck!

She Wept was well written and had a very good flow to it.

Something beautiful was very sweet, and made me smile =)

Routine was very well written as well, although it kinda made me feel somewhat sad, nice job though :p

Publish!

Voted....shah. X

if you have time?

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Routine!

Very much enjoyed your poems. You have my vote!

Anna

Loved the last line of Routine . . . "I smile and slip into routine."

It reminded me of diets started and stopped dead in their tracks with a big slice of cheesecake.

She Wept had a pleasing pace to it.

Write on!

I liked this very much and I wish you good luck.



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If you have time.

i love this collection. you have managed to get across something that is truly heartfelt. most people will take for granted the ability to put words across that people not only understand and see, but something that that feel to the depths of their soul. no not everything feels good and while this was not something that pushes the 'feel good' across it definitely reminds, well me at least, of places i have been in life. once again i love this collection, thank you for sharing, you have my vote.

Met-

I am not crazy about the repeating portions of She Wept. It makes the poem sound simplistic, but the woman, and the feelings, you're describing are not simple things. Try taking those lines out and see what its like.

I am crazy about Something Beautiful. Watch your spelling - I think "sooth" should be "soothe."

BUT your best piece here by far is Routine. So powerful! A REAL materpiece. It is so short, but says so much. I felt this one in a big way. Really good work!

Your precision is a virtue metric man.  Honoured to vote in your favour.

I liked you poetry. I felt for your pain!
Maybe you should put a little bit more
variety? But liked it the same.

interesting...maybe you should try a freer style next time

I chose maybe.
I would have liked to see more in-depth pieces like the first of your poems, "She Wept."

Great job though! I am glad that I looked at your submission!

~Kate

Musicality:
i voted for u!

Voted Yes!
She Wept is my poem of choice. (Many can relate to the topic, too)
Good luck in the vote:)
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I thought I had voted already right here!!!
well, then, lets say a bit PUBLISH!!!!

if you want to read me:

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thank you.

Voted good luck. Liked 'She Wept'

I really liked "She Wept" and "Routine" I vote yes.  Nice rhythm.  In Routine I enjoyed the positive message

Heartfelt poems.  good luck with all your work

Hi there, actually I have made my vote yesterday, sorry for the late feedback. And another thing, nice work.

good luck

very good i enjoyed them

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such heartbreaking writing.. it reminds me of my own at some points..

I appreciate the sentiment in the three poems, they seem hones and from the heart.  Of the three, I would say "She Wept" has some redeeming poetic quality, like the use of repetition of the verse in the first and last line of each stanza, except for the third, where you broke that pattern thust halting the nice rhythm you had built.  The other two lack form, and appear more like quick thoughts written down, but with some rework they could become poetry.  I would say you move along the lines of what you did with "She Wept" and don't be afraid to use a Thesaurus to add more shades of meaning to your poems.

She wept - a nice poem, but like some others here, I feel it needs a little bit more work so it fulfills its promise.

The other two poems made me smile with recognition. Its always interesting to read your own thoughts in some one elses work.

You get my vote.

Voted, good luck!
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I like the sentiment of all these poems but I feel they lack any depth. You could go so much deeper by adding some more description and imagery to describe exactly how you are feeling. I just find them a little bland without any embellishment.
They are a good start though, they just need a little work.

very nice i like the first one the best. They are all wonderfull u have me vote!

Great work...sad and deep. Creativley striking.
You get my vote.
xx

well done!

very nice job! got my vote.

Very nicely done,
The use of rhymes in the second paragraphe are used quite well to express the feelings encountered in the poem.
Congratulations.

Sublime sadness, gathered in words.  Concise, melodic and enchanting.

i like these poems, you get a vote my friend

You are really great.  I enjoyed your poems.

thank you for this extensive feedback, i disagree but i welcome the critizims.

General:
Ah, this stirs a little in me, but I fail to convert a casual "oh lookie" into an actual conveyance of emotion.

Form:
The traditional dededee poem is kind of droll, you could interprete it into a piece with a bit more expansion. The main thing is the complete lack of pure description.
HOW did she weep? What was the darkness LIKE?
THe repetition of the same lines is unimpressive.

Content:
The content is a area with little fault to be found in, I suppose I am not particularly concerned with the actual story behind it, rather to the way it is executed.

Imagery:
I find little to see here, no solid images formed, merely two dimensional sketches. You need more ADJECTIVES! really push it home!

Tone:
I don't like the way you have written this, in a sort of childish rhymeing form, yet without the rhyme, the iamb is not the commandment remember.

Musicality:
This is really in line with what  I mentioned over the tone.

Conclusion: NEEDS MORE WORK!

I cannot give you a vote based on this poem, it is too rudimentary. Sure, it has some potential, but it is unimaginitive as it is, all I see is a woman in the dark, no creeping shadows and slow sliding teardrops cascading towards the abyss. No, none of that, just a woman crying in the dark.

Final verdict: Unimpressive.

(Keep in mind this critique is for your own good.)

Awesome job!  These are really.  They all flow smoothly and invoke the feelings you describe.  Good luck!

These are very sweet poems.

Great poem! I realy liked it.

Youre poetry amazes me, how do you come up with this? Brilliant. Well Done. :D

deffinatly YES. atm this poem relates to my life so much its almost creepy. Well done, i loved the repetition in it, really emaphsised what you were trying to say.

Great pieces  voted, plz return the favor

I used the word dirt to try to make the imagery seem kinda like a grave being filled in, thanks for the advice though.

The word "dirt" seems a little bland. Try using a word that sounds negative (ex. grime).

i love this.  yes

Thanks for the read, Metric, good words, good work.

Three very good poems - a yes vote.
Best wishes,
Mike.

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These poems are very good—and I enjoyed them. You have a "Yes" vote from me. Please have a look at my vote project if you have not already. Thank you in advance and good luck.

Keep up the awesomeness, indeed.

i love this very well written