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BLINK
I want to stay away from becoming a monster, but I’ve already done so. I’ve transformed what I knew, whom I was and became this creature of the night stalking people that may or may not be one of THEM. I am overwhelmed with the decay of my psyche, as each monetary death nibbles and erodes my emotions down to bare a flavorless soul. So I do this job of mine not for me, but for the human race. Is it so wrong to want human beings to exist? There will always be problems and killing, but not from thi
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11/5/2011 12:30 AM PDT
WOW. thiz iz incredible.
but sadly i dun quite like reading crime and horror >..< [coz i get nightmares easily TAT]
i will try to read it thou~
oh WOW you get it published? that's really awesome.
nice work. keep it going~ ^__^
++E. Shadow. X++
but sadly i dun quite like reading crime and horror >..< [coz i get nightmares easily TAT]
i will try to read it thou~
oh WOW you get it published? that's really awesome.
nice work. keep it going~ ^__^
++E. Shadow. X++
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8/9/2010 5:48 PM PDT
Woa! This sounds good? Is it available in the UK? I want to buy this book ha ha but I guess I'll stick to reading it from here when I get time! This sounds really cool. xx
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4/26/2010 1:20 PM PDT
Yo your plot is cood but im thinking you may want to tone down the Element of Emonism. Only the twisted minds will read this book. It seems like you are going on a CLIVE BARKER route. Keep doing it, but maybe change the style a little you are not the devil so try not get people to think you are
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4/9/2010 7:56 PM PDT
wow... so it's finally done and published! I'm so happy you got it completely done. I'm leaving webook, but I'm just going into private writing for a while. Your talent was long recognised, and I feel that you deserved it over anyone else on here. But keep in touch, I might be leaving soon, within a few weeks. But I have taken time to refine my skills, and I've found myself writing hells better. I'm writing at least four times longer chapters, and I feel I'm very ready to put together a more descriptive book. Again, keep in touch. :)
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3/9/2010 9:28 PM PST
Congrats, glad u finally got it done and published!
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3/6/2010 8:34 PM PST
Congrats on getting this published, man!
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2/6/2010 5:34 PM PST
I won't join the project as I'm bogged down as usual, but good luck - it looks great!
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1/26/2010 11:06 AM PST
So i haven't yet read any of the chapters, but already i am interested. this sounds so interesting and really cool. i look forward to reading it. :)
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1/26/2010 2:08 AM PST
General:
I love the use and depth of emotive words within this little blurb you could say. It draws the readers in without giving away too much about what's going on. I love how you get a little insight on his modesty, I love the line
"...there is nothing super about me...all I know is how to pull the trigger."
Tone/Voice:
Even without you indicating at the bottom of the blurb, you can tell that this book is a very dark-filled story.
It's almost like poetry written in story-form, without using the usual formats for poetry. Very interesting.
I love the use and depth of emotive words within this little blurb you could say. It draws the readers in without giving away too much about what's going on. I love how you get a little insight on his modesty, I love the line
"...there is nothing super about me...all I know is how to pull the trigger."
Tone/Voice:
Even without you indicating at the bottom of the blurb, you can tell that this book is a very dark-filled story.
It's almost like poetry written in story-form, without using the usual formats for poetry. Very interesting.
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1/17/2010 4:52 PM PST
gripping. I love your depth of description and prose although my preference would be to hold it back, using simpler language for a time so that when u unleash ur talent it holds more power. I also found it a little distracting from what was actually going on, sometimes confused in time and space. I noticed a few spelling and grammar mistakes that on revision u will no doubt correct yourself. Ur imagination and perspective of horror are a revelation, i love to read an evil main character and the internal struggle gives him more depth and even (gulp) a little sympathy. I want 2 know more of this reality, and if the apparitions are real or in the mind. Would love more of main characterr background to, altho im sure its in pages to come, or missing 4 a reason. (sory bout txt language im on my phone). The introduction is wonderful and definately gets u in rite away. No real critisism, only preference.Loved it, u do certainly have talent, especially with the macabre. :).
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1/13/2010 4:58 AM PST
Oh GAWD~your words are riviting and so smoothly evil. I want to write like this when I grow up.
Wow!
Wow!
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12/14/2009 2:43 PM PST
You had me at the picture, will be sure to read a few chapters after work, im sure its a beautiful written book, cannot wait.
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12/6/2009 4:52 PM PST
I also love the title, I think its stricking, a blink, with one blink you can miss the whole world. Thats what the tital resembles to me,
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12/2/2009 3:42 PM PST
Wow, very creative... my whole family thinks I'm weird because I actually like scary dark things like this. haha, I've actually been in the mood for something like this. Thanks for the invite.
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12/1/2009 3:11 PM PST
The title is what really pulled me in. I can't wait to read it!
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12/1/2009 10:44 AM PST
I like the sound of this...and I can't wait to get started.
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10/5/2009 2:59 PM PDT
^ the above sounds really good and also, quite frightening. and im not usually into scary books but im gonna take a look at the first chapter anyway. haha.
good overview, i like it.
good overview, i like it.
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9/29/2009 7:15 AM PDT
A really interesting concept. Can't wait to read it :)
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9/28/2009 12:45 PM PDT
wow that picture is really scary i love it
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9/25/2009 12:06 PM PDT
Very interesting inner monologue but not what I would consider a summary or synopsis to your story.
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8/23/2009 10:29 AM PDT
your picture is faggy.
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7/28/2009 7:37 PM PDT
Scary!
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6/30/2009 8:51 AM PDT
mee too defenitley gonna read this..
ohhh yyeeeaaaa lol=)
ohhh yyeeeaaaa lol=)
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6/19/2009 9:24 AM PDT
the word blink is a great impact, I am so gonna read.
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6/14/2009 10:32 PM PDT
wow thats is riviting. will read more. the pic is a little disturbing lol
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6/8/2009 3:13 PM PDT
sounds really good, I've got to read it!
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5/30/2009 5:18 PM PDT
sounds awesome!!!!!!!!!!!!! And scary! Bonus! I can scary my sister=]
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5/27/2009 5:33 AM PDT
very catchy. I like it.
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5/13/2009 10:32 PM PDT
wow, this is realy good
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5/12/2009 9:11 AM PDT
oh my:)
your writing is really good..!
please keep it coming.
your writing is really good..!
please keep it coming.
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5/12/2009 8:57 AM PDT
omg. ur so right about all of it u should keep goin
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5/10/2009 1:01 PM PDT
In the book, each death is supplied to and circulates in the economy like money.
5/8/2009 9:55 PM PDT
interesting
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5/7/2009 3:55 PM PDT
This sounds really interesting...I have to keep reading.
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5/7/2009 3:16 PM PDT
monetary death made me wonder if you are talking about finances or is it a typo? I guess I'll find out if I keep reading!
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5/7/2009 3:02 PM PDT
Yes someone drew this... a friend.
5/6/2009 1:29 PM PDT
The blurb should be more concise, and should be in the third person, even if the rest is in the first. The goal of writing a blurb is to name the main character and identify a conflict. It's very similar to what good writers do within the first page of the story itself. Also, most of this is passive. "I do" (active) "I am done unto" (passive)
It's a good plot idea, and I like the inner struggle of the character. Once you fix the perspective and switch it to active it'll be shorter, faster paced, and that will really hook the reader.
-Towefin
It's a good plot idea, and I like the inner struggle of the character. Once you fix the perspective and switch it to active it'll be shorter, faster paced, and that will really hook the reader.
-Towefin
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5/2/2009 7:24 PM PDT
summary is extremely detailed
good job lol
good job lol
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5/2/2009 7:23 PM PDT
stupid question but did you draw the picture kinda looks like something someone drew....
if you did thats cool
if you did thats cool
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5/2/2009 7:21 PM PDT
sounds scary. you have my interest....
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4/24/2009 3:36 PM PDT
Sounds good. Where's the picture from?
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4/24/2009 2:51 PM PDT
Sounds like a cliff-hanger type novel.
I like those. :)
I like those. :)
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4/2/2009 10:18 AM PDT
Dude thats koo. >:}
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3/17/2009 8:52 AM PDT
Sounds like my sorta thing...;)
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3/11/2009 11:21 AM PDT
Sounds amazing. I need to get into it and I'll read away. Hope you're up for a hard core review. X
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3/9/2009 4:23 PM PDT
Make that three occasions.
"I am neither of these things; "
"I am neither of these things; "
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3/9/2009 4:22 PM PDT
Okay, first of all, you asked ME to review it, so be warned that if I'm in a good mood I am a freak about proofreading and I noticed that on two occasions just in this paragraph you have used commas where there should be semicolons.
the decay of my psyche;
and
I am not a hero;
And I've noticed one other thing, although this could stay, it doesn't have to change. It's only a matter of opinion.
When you use the phrase "but not from this invasion of evil, infestation of monsters" I think you should choose one or the other. It just sounds wierd with both of them together like that.
Otherwise, it sounds great, I can't wait to read the rest!
the decay of my psyche;
and
I am not a hero;
And I've noticed one other thing, although this could stay, it doesn't have to change. It's only a matter of opinion.
When you use the phrase "but not from this invasion of evil, infestation of monsters" I think you should choose one or the other. It just sounds wierd with both of them together like that.
Otherwise, it sounds great, I can't wait to read the rest!
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3/9/2009 4:13 PM PDT
Is this the one?
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3/8/2009 2:12 PM PDT
Wow. I really like the sound of the overview. I will get onto reading it soon, but judging from this, its going to be cool.
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2/28/2009 6:30 AM PST
sounds good.
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2/27/2009 3:38 PM PST
Sounds good :)
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2/26/2009 12:51 PM PST
LOL...Yes that's the one...But, now I have read the first chapter...No, it is nothing like I Am Legend...I think this book has lot's of originality...Very cool!
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2/26/2009 1:07 AM PST
this is going to be a very good book and you have a very good talent on writing books so when we vote i will vote 4 u !!!
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2/25/2009 10:24 PM PST
NO its nothing like I am Legend. (the book I am legend is 100 fking times better then that poorly made movie!) lol but ya this is nothing like that... no disease... no zombie vampires... nothing technically wrong with the world. Just Blink sees whats wrong. everyone else does not.
2/25/2009 9:40 PM PST
Cool...This sorta reminds me of that Will Smith movie...I can't recall the name at the mo. Good storyline and great title.
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2/22/2009 10:32 AM PST
My, my, my, the way you word things gives me chills.
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2/19/2009 8:20 AM PST
really good idea...i like the idea...very good.....
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2/18/2009 10:54 PM PST
I like the brackets it tells you that this man, almost any man but this man in particular is brought into this strange world, almost saying he didn't choose to be there. nice
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2/10/2009 2:41 AM PST
Take out "a certain man" and just have BLINK. The brackets are not needed.
Good idea so far.
Good idea so far.
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