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Project Leader:
Kayzzaman
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Blue Hyacinth : A Tugging At The Heartstring
A plain man can only live plain and think plain. And plain thoughts just flow from the streams of a plain heart that embarks on a virgin land to say a few things with flowers. When this so sometimes happens, poetry is apt to play ducks and drakes with the caustic reality of everyday nature and those everyday realities tend to fall an easy prey to sarcasm of reality. Sarcasm of realism is what I tend to define as surrealism.
Here I will present a collection of poems as they come out of my encage ... more »
Here I will present a collection of poems as they come out of my encage ... more »
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I love your poems and the growth in your writing. I think one day you will be famous. Keep writing. This collection is encaptivating, spell-binding. Every word is packed with emotion. I love it. J
I love your poems and the growth in your writing. I think one day you will be famous. Keep writing. This collection is encaptivating, spell-binding. Every word is packed with emotion. I love it. J
that is a sweeeeeet piece of writing right there. the ebb and flow is graceful. nice work
I found this one to be very intense. Had to read several times and still not quite sure what your meaning was. I will read a few more maybe I'm just dense today.
oh wow! I cannot say how bewautiful these poems are!! Blue Hyacinth has it for me...probably shows in everyone else by the amount of comments you've got...must get a bit tiresome after a while...thanx for the msg. I know ur a friend! XX
From where I sit your poems are powerful, thought provoking, philosophical, and gripping. It is a pleasure to read each. E
Thanks for the invite to read your work. I dived into a couple of poems, well written but boy are you intense! It is going to take more than one reading of each poem for me to try to correctly interpret your messages. Your work is good, flows well and maintains interest. I will read some more and try to get on track with you. Keep writing.
Very atractive opener here. I will read some random pieces get a feel for it then come back to it. I have been asked by over fifty people to read their stuff, it has been quite enjoyable I must say. Yet I see a LOT of coments here already, I'm sure mine can't be that important.
I like it, it's really good. But I would change out that one sentence, When this so sometimes happens, to What sometimes happens.
Your works are extremely well written and interesting. You have a very special gift for writing and should be published and not just online.
Sorry it took me so long to comment on your work. This is very interesting. Just a few things. "When this so sometimes" you don't need the so.
"prey to sarcasm of" - I would think about putting a "the" before "sarcasm" it might sound better.
Otherwize it seems very cleverly written and has a nice flow. I am not much for poetry really. I wish you good luck on this.
"prey to sarcasm of" - I would think about putting a "the" before "sarcasm" it might sound better.
Otherwize it seems very cleverly written and has a nice flow. I am not much for poetry really. I wish you good luck on this.
Yes you do seem to more paint with your words lol if that makes any sense... painting a picture rather than a lot of direct description. Direct description isn't needed in poetry.
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you definitly have a talent, i would say you more paint with your words than you do write
thats a compliment btw
thats a compliment btw
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What I am having trouble with is, you keep popping up all over the site apologising that you'er doctor says you cannot read anyones long prose. And yet you seem to do very well in writing your own and wanting us to give you feedback, expecting none in return. Just how long, does a piece have to be before you cannot read it? Or does that only apply to that which you have not written. No offense, intended I just wondered and felt you would not mind answering.
As it was you that brought it up to begin with.
As it was you that brought it up to begin with.
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You scare me...what kind of poet comes up with these?! Accolade my heart continuously!
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wow.....you write with so much emotion! i really dont know what to say..its beautiful..i rarely read poetry since its not my thing, but i do sometimes make exceptions for a few..whose words amaze me...you weave your words beautifully..
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very well written.
i am very excited about reading more of your work:)
tisha
i am very excited about reading more of your work:)
tisha
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Very intriguing..
i love how you described it as silver lining darkness, really paints a picture for me as a reader. I love super realism, my reality is my dreamland when i sleep at night, not my reality but my get away i guess...I am definitely looking forward to reading more into your project, I'm very interested in how you are going to express surrealism knowing that anyone attempting to do so will always be original and unique. Nicely written introduction,you sucked me in =)
i love how you described it as silver lining darkness, really paints a picture for me as a reader. I love super realism, my reality is my dreamland when i sleep at night, not my reality but my get away i guess...I am definitely looking forward to reading more into your project, I'm very interested in how you are going to express surrealism knowing that anyone attempting to do so will always be original and unique. Nicely written introduction,you sucked me in =)
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Pretty good, different from what I'm used to but good.
-Skyla
-Skyla
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I really like your work I would definitely buy it when it gets published .
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As you said different but nice...your writing is full of great visiual art, that's it your an artist that uses words instead of paint.
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Hi! I read it, it is a good reflection of the panoramic template that overwhelms the genre and the type of writing as it is. I think it's smart, although writing is always the trails that a writer leaves after the voyage for a perfect piece. Keep writing, you are great!! Any time you want me to read your stuff, please tell me without modesty.
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If ever published, this collection of classical yet abstract poems will fly from the shelves and send tremors of interest and critique throughout the world! Beautifully written, intricately schemed, what's not to love?
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Definitive, yet ambiguous. I fell off a cliff when I read this!
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W-O-W. You are freaking amazing. I love the flow of rhythm of your writing. It's like music, you use wonderful imagery. Your style of writing is so unique and beautiful, never give up on it. Keep it up, wish I was as good as you! lol.
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Wow. You are very well-versed with this. You are very, very descriptive in your writing style here. I really look forward to reading your poetry.
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its amazing. i love the concept behind the beautiful words. and it flows so effortlessly - its too powerful and beautiful for me to even to begin to describe further.
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Fantastic,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,what else can one say?eccept love and light coming your way from jazzyzazzy
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After reading and re-reading your introduction I am beginning to understand that your words are not to be taken literally, but as notes on a score of music. They produce imagery and emotion. Judging by the number of comments your work has elicited, you are doing a good job. It seems that your words either resonate or cause discord in the emotions of others. This is my first exposure to an author using poetry in this fashion. Your work is unique and I appreciate your originality.
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Hello. You asked me to take a look at your book and "be nice". I must warn you that i am not nice at all, I will review your poetry with an iron grip that does not go lightly on silly errors. I dislike obvious errors.
But from what I have seen, the blurb is well-written and catches your attention straight away. The imagery is very strong and says a lot for you.
Wonderful.
But from what I have seen, the blurb is well-written and catches your attention straight away. The imagery is very strong and says a lot for you.
Wonderful.
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Hey there, nice to meet you on Webook.. I have a great love for India.. and love the intro to your book. I will stick around and read more thanks for the invite.
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i feel that honesty is the best policy in being productive with criticism. i did not think of much of the poems. your images were, good and everything, but it lacked something. at parts it sounds like you copy it from a biology text book. your views on love are strange with the sexual references you use. the flow of your poems is non existant, and i do not mean to offend but i personally do not like them, even though, granted i said they were good, that was more politeness than honesty. now i have decided to tell my real opinion and hope that you can at least respect it, if you are unable to accept it.
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"silver lining darkness". Awesome phrase. I'll check out your poems here. They're...deep.
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lol .. they're right .. the title strikes me the most .. its pretty unique
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Wow. You're writting makes me feel really inferior. How long have you bee here?
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What a different title to this project! Can't wait to read this stuff!
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This is some fine work you have goin on. I can't wait to start reading.
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