Absolutely awesome, you got me hooked. I'm sorry I'm not better at feedback, I'm really looking forward to seeing what happens next!

This seems a pretty good piece but the only thing is I'm reading books like this everyday and I'm getting bored of them you need to come up with fresh and out of this world pieces so it catches the readers attention more and it will stand out to people and think its different so they'll read it.
hope this helps lol
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Based on the introduction blurb I can't tell if Teagan's secret love is a boy, girl, animal mineral or vegetable. Typically. In terms of the names choices for your heroine, two names with a bunch of vowels can be a little distracting, as sight-reading is based on finding the next consonant, we we don't know the name of your character (unfamiliar with the proper noun you are introducing) until you actually introduce them. Either consider spelling her first name "Tegan," or picking another last name. I will check out the first couple of chapters in the near future.

Also copyright is spelled in terms of your right to copy, not your ability to copy and write. Finally, while effectively imply that your story might be a romance or a coming of age story, it is perfectly acceptable to indicate what genres you mean.

Since this site appears to not allow explicit adult fiction, there is only so far you can go in a purely romantic story (i.e. no erotica).

I love the synopsis and i will carry on reading sounds interesting

and i know this don't mean anything but i think the roman numerals are kinda cool, i never knew past 12 lmao

blh