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Project Leader:
RobSandman
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Participants:
The WEbook community -
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Category:
Poetry -
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General -
Language:
English
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From the Heart to the Page
This is a chance for us all to show what we've got inside,I will be putting up full songs of mine,pre written lyrics,poetry and some "off the top" stuff,I encourage everybody to do the same
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i have a song called " back bitaz " that will feature the o.j's. And it begins like. intro: dey smile in yo face-echo delay-dont ,dont,dont,dont,dont,-don't-[what dey do]-2 voices tracked.-repeat for a total of 4 bars. hook:[ dey smile in yo face]-3 voices tracked all da time dey wanna take yo place, dem back bitaz,[back bitaz]-3voices tracked. bridge:" when i'm walkin down da street, i'm seein dem back bitaz, and when i'm trying to eat, i'm hearin dem back bitaz,maybe when i go to sleep, continous back bitaz,and if i deal with a freak, entourages of back bitaz. repeat hook. verse one: never in my life have i been around so many hataz,/ dey tryna knock me off, and eat me like a pack of gators /[ chump!,chump!], i don't know why, maybe cause i'm the besta,,/ dey like da adams family ta me, wit uncle fester. I'm a typa guy,,/ dat'll give my shirt off back a,/ it ain't enough cause dey keep comin around me,/ when dey smoke dat cracka,/ i think dese people are sick, even demented,/ now dey loosin all dey strength,,/ like popeye witout his spinach. recite second hook-a total of 4 bars-
Thanks everyone for the feedback. I will lay off the symbols a bit and will chk out deleting 'now' also. Not sure yet. Thanks for reading and responding. I appreciate it. Vinita
ooooooomg, i love this poem! i just, for the life of me, want to know why you have the word "now" at the end of "let me sleep". i read it once with the "now" and once without the "now" and i liked it better without. but that aside, this was amazing!
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