Wow, almost missed these ...

Fantastic!

http://www.webook.com/project/Top-3-Poems-of-Assorted-Interest

A good effort. Voted.

If you have the time...

http://www.webook.com/project/Animal-Cruelty

you have my vote.

These are really interesting! You have my vote!

http://www.webook.com/project/In-Times-Of-Love-There-Were

First, in response to your feedback.

I appreciated your honesty on my project, but I must confess however that after reading your poems, your feedback is slightly hypocritical concerning what constitutes poetic content.  I take most of what you said as well-informed, honest feedback.  So I thank you for that.  Calling my rhyming couplet childish at the end was a bit funny however seeing that Shakespeare makes great use of them. 

Critical feedback is wonderful, but anyone who starts preaching about what poetic content IS tells me that the person may be slightly narcissistic, especially seeing that we both employ imagery, and various other devices of poetry.

I see dashes in your work as well as mine, I aspects of your work that you claim is poetry but seems more prose-like, similar to poems in my project.

But this is not about me, this is about your work:

I enjoyed the last two poems.  Nothing much else to say.

The first one makes you a tad hypocritical because the style resembles my poem, but somehow yours is poetic, and mine is not.  I consider your work to be "poetic" under my guidelines, but it seems less poetic under your own guidelines.

I'd give you a yes, but your hypocrisy upsets me a little.

well done

http://www.webook.com/project/Webook-poetry-contest

YES! Brilliant writing, and so very meaningful!


http://www.webook.com/project/Timeless-Trilogy

you get my vote these are excellent well done







http://www.webook.com/project/My-Poetic-Thoughts-and-Rambles

I can not offer a powerful enough yes vote to express my support of your writing.  I've mentioned before how "The Greatest Distance" moved me immediately to tears (a very rare occurence) and the piece on Ty Cobb is brilliant!  My vote comes with all my best wishes for wherever your writing takes you.

i prefer the last 2 poems... much more emotive and telling of whats inside your head... i like that.
YES!!!
good luck!

to find mine:

http://www.webook.com/project/Voodoo-Hearts-My-3-Poems-for-entry-Webook-2009poetryVOTE

thank you!

good poetry.  i hope you can get it published!

http://www.webook.com/project/Three-Poems-From-My-Freshman-Year-In-High-School

I really, really like Green Monsters.  I feel that's your strongest submission and would love to see it make the cut and get into the poetry book.  The other two don't seem as strong.  I wish I had found this before the voting started in order to critique them fully, but I didn't, sorry.  However, even your weaker poems are above the majority of the poems submitted in this voting round, imho.  You have skill, m'dear.

These are fantastic.  I especially like "Green Monsters." CF

You have my vote!

http://www.webook.com/project/Chelseas-Poems

You've got my vote.

http://www.webook.com/project/My-Poetic-Trilogy

A yes vote.

This is still my favourite.

General:
It is a poem about baseball heroes specifically, and whilst I could not comment on the heroes who play a grown-up form of rounders, it also covers the universal of sporting heroes generally.  I am sure that I will miss some of the allusions, but it is a worthwhile poem even taken out of the specific context.

Form:
It is written in slightly irregular stanzas of four lines, that do not rhyme but still function as quatrains.

Content:
The writer captures the essence of frozen moments in time that reached the hearts and souls of thousands, perhaps millions, of sports fans in the USA.  Now we do not have 'warrior' heroes for bards to sing of and create as mythological figures the sporting heroes take on the characteristics of the archetypal hero.  This is shown clearly by this poem, although I cannot tell whether the author intended it or not.

Imagery:
I am sure that it is very evocative to fellow baseball fans.  To me it carries hints of that but I have to transfer the images to rugby, cricket or soccer.  However some of the connotations echo throughout the psyche.

Tone:
The writer has captured an essential feel of the sporting character and 'time slices' that make particular instances stand-out to all who were there.

Musicality:
This flows quite well but it isn't in a standard metre.   It is almost matter-of-fact prosody.