I really like the idea here. It is well written, however, my honest first impression is that it's too much info all at once. Perhaps slim down the first chapter and add more of the detail later on.

Thumbs up for this, not my usual brand of reading but it didnt stop me and im glad I read it.

The title alone makes me want to get right into reading the book.   Your introduction makes me, well even more so...

sounds great

WELL WRITTEN!!! LOVE IT!

wow!

thumbs up from me. great work.

Got my vote!!

In the very first paragraph you introduced Tommy and Dusty, and silly me I thought that they would be the main characters, yet you then went on to say ( much to a child's delight) how great Mrs Lewis the class teacher is. And truly I would love to see a child's face as they read about the vibrations of love...

thumbs up from me

Tamara, I officially joined your project for "Radio", but don't know how to submit my version of your chapter 1.

Kermit

I read up to about chapter 7, as that's all the time i have right now, but what i've read i really liked. I like the idea of 10 year olds reading about vibrational frequencies.
Good luck, and you got  thumbs up from me.

*writing*

good wring

thanks for the invite.am enjoying your story.thumbs up :)

So far so good, I read all the time and the first chapter already has me wanting to read the next.

nicolev, The story is not as long in the book that is self published. It just looks so long because you are reading paragraphs on each page. There is also a thirty day journal that is at the end of the book that makes it seem longer.

PaulNewlands, Yes that was a mistake when I was copy and pasting the book. There are three pages like that in the thirty day journal that I would have to fix were it chosen to be published. It is locked in right now so I can not correct it. Than you for bringing my attention to it again. Sincerely, Tamara0449

Great! why is it so long and why does it have so many chapters?

You do realise chapter 40 has no writing in it. This may be intentional, but I thought I'd better say. 71% I think your well on the way there to WEbook stardom, best wishes.

a great read that chidren should enjoy for many years to come

offering my support :D happy writting

Very good, very good! Thumbs up for you!

:)

I like this story so far (I read the first 3). In the first chapter, you keep talking about how the students feel strange about the whole "vibrational frequencies" thing, but it makes it sound like they know what vibrational frequencies are, which was confusing to me.
I like the idea for this a lot, and the writing definately has a distinct style. My overall impression is that some editing would be good but the overall concept is very unique and inspiring.

Hi could you please vote for my books no one has voted yet

I voted on the positive side.

vote for tamara

  good luck tamara I voted for your porjects mike

Thank you for the great invitation. as of now I am still working on my own project but I will hopefully be done soon. maybe we can collaborate later. thanks

thumbs all the way up.

Thank you so very much for your invitation and for even considering me to participate in this project. Unfortunately I am currently unable to dedicate the time and attention the project deserves as a whole. My best wishes to you and your project and the best of luck.

This was good, but there were a few punctuation errors.

you got my vote!

I extreamlty enjoy this book and I think it should be one of the first to be published.
Leaf.
XXX

:)

This is truly a wonderful project , I wish you the best of success
in all that you do

Well educated children will be our future leaders. Books like yours lay their foundation...

I feel that his story.. Essay would read more easily if
it were presented in present tense.

Good luck

The teacher went on to say that sometimes you can walk into a room of people discussing something and feel the emotional vibrations in the room.

Suppose that one of the students asks,
what is vibrating for emotional vibrations?

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These vibrations give you the choice to know whether you to choose to stay, depending upon the circumstances.

Do you wish to drop the extra word "to"?

These vibrations give you the choice to know whether you choose to stay, depending upon the circumstances.


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Mrs. Lewis asked us to sit in pairs across from each other to feel the vibrations from the other person as an experiment.

A slip into first person.
Who is speaking?
Or would it be best to keep the remainder of
this chapter in third person?

Mrs. Lewis asked the students to sit in pairs across from each other to feel the vibrations from the other person as an experiment.


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She suggested if we had a thought to see it as if it were a cloud floating by and out of our perception.

"out of our perception" might mean
(1) derives from our perception
(2) is not sensed subjectively

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She then told us to open our hands palm side up on each of our legs and to breathe in deeply holding our breath for a moment, and then release it breathing like this three times softly and deeply. At that time she asked us to raise our hands in the air in front of our heart center with our hands facing the other child.

I did not easily imagine this scene.

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She requested that we hold our hands about two or three inches from our partners hands being held in the same way not quite touching each other. She asked if we could feel tingles or vibrations coming from the other student.

By focusing your attention on one of your fingertips, you can
feel your heart beat.

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Creative and inspiring

I've done my civic duty, Tamara. And a pleasure it is, too.

nicely done again.

Now everyone was beginning to understand the new word ‘vibration’ without any trouble.

How many children had already had music instruction from home or
paid tutors?

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She asked them if they could hear and feel the difference in the ‘vibrational frequencies’ between the drum and the violin.

My understanding of "vibrational frequencies" is:

Vibrational frequency is how fast the vibrating thing vibrates.

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She then bounced a ball unexpectedly across the room to Nicci. As soon as Nicci caught the ball she instinctively bounced it to Tony that was sitting near her.

Suggest changing "that" to who.

She then bounced a ball unexpectedly across the room to Nicci. As soon as Nicci caught the ball she instinctively bounced it to Tony who was sitting near her.

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She finished by saying, “You could have went home and asked who had used your CD, and why it was out of its case.

Minor point of grammar:

Suggest change "went" to "gone".

She finished by saying, “You could have gone home and asked who had used your CD, and why it was out of its case.

I really do appreciate the lesson of peace implicit in this
sentence.


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She then asked them to copy the definitions in their notebook because they would be discussing both of them singly and combined this week both at home and at school.

I haven't yet noticed the definitions explicitly stated in the story.

How could she ensure that the students would discuss these
definitions at home?

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She wrote: vibration – is a quivering or trembling motion or movement, which is also called oscillation. To quiver is an instance of vibration or the action of wavering. It is a periodic motion that may be seen or felt as a distinctive usually emotional atmosphere capable of being sensed by feelings, sound or even by vibrational thoughts coming from the act of humming or singing.


At last I get to see the definition.

I wonder if the story would flow any better if I had
seen this definition, and the definition of "frequencies"
every time the students saw them.

It was Monday and Mrs. Lewis said that she had chosen a topic for them to study and discuss in an open format.

Did Mrs Lewis have to explain to her students what she meant
by "open format"?
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This subject would prove to be much deeper and more inspirational than she thought that it would be as the days went on.

This sentence seems to be more clear if you drop the word "that".

As the days went on, this subject would prove to be much deeper and more inspirational than she had expected.

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She dreaded this week but did not know that the class was in for a treat as they learned more this week through verbal interaction with one another.

My comment about this sentence is that it brought unexpected
emotions to me.  I'm not sure why.

Perhaps it's because such learning experiences should be the
norm, but are quite rare.


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Sorry but I Write Fantasy, sci-fi thrillers and horror but I have always wanted to write a childrens book

I would love to do childrens books.  I have always wanted to do one called Willy The Silly Weiner Dog.

wow... its really good unfortunatly this is my first voting cycle and I am dedicated to another work in this voting cycle. I'll help it out though

Thanks for the invitation. I'd be a bit out of my league to give it a fair review as regards to structure etc, but i can read it and give my opinion. Hope this helps.

thx for inviting me but i'm involved in other things right now, soz.

Thanks for the invitation. However, I am backing another project in the voting cycle on this date so it would not be appropriate for me to join this project at this time. If this project were to be submitted to another voting cycle that does not conflict then I would be happy to reconsider your invitation. I wish you luck.

Hello, Please do not leave poems on this site. This site is for comments only about the novel. I do have other sites that you may leave your poetry on but this one is reserved for comments and votes only about the novel 'I Am a Radio.' Respectfully yours with kindness, Tamara04449

Sorry I have not gone through the chapters as yet but will do that shortly. :)

CHILDREN PLAY
Author: DIAMONDS
Word count: 154

Imagine... Watching The Children Play
Their Laughter So Full Of Joy .
Their Every Move Is Amazing ...
The New Experiances They May Learn ,
Shareing And Careing .

The Little Smiles Upon Their Faces ..
While Playing .Falling Down & Getting
Back Up To Try Again & Again .
The Children Not Knowing It Will Be A
Life Experiance .. To Growing Old .

Those Precious Moments When A Child
Learns To Walk ... Or Talk ...
Their First Word , A Beginning Of Volcabulary .
Again An Experiance To Growing Old .

The Innocence .. The Knowledge They Learn
From Being Taught ...
Its Amazing
To Watch The Children Play ...
It Brings Back Memory's
Memory's You Thought Were Lost

Laura M. Eggebrecht
Copyright ©2008  Laura M. Eggebrecht

12/03-1994c

Sorry, but i respectfully decline (: I barley have the time do even continue with my own work these days, and even then I want to be focused on my work.
Thanks tonnns for the offer (:

wow sounds great and it is so wonderfull that you dedicated it to a real  special
well done : )

                                         "The Garbage Can"

                                          The garbage is over spilling
                                           And if you are willing,
                                            To try and catch the spilling.

                                             The garbage stinks for heaven
                                             knows
                                             To tell you the truth it don't
                                             Smell like a rose,
                                              But if you know how bad it smells
                                              I think you would want to hold
                                              your nose.

                                                 "Life's Roads"

                                                Life with it's twist
                                                And bends in the road,
                                                How do we know which way to go.

                                                If life had road signs
                                                Would we pick our route,
                                                I just wonder what some peole
                                               would do.
                                             
                                                Life with it's twist
                                                 And bends in the road,
                                                 Which sign would you pick,
                                                 And which way would you go.

                                         " Rip Van Winkle Bridge"
                                    
                                    I lived in a house that once was mine
                                      With 13 roms and one was mine.

                                      Every night I would lay
                                      And before I went to sleep,
                                     I'd count the cars that
                                      Went over Rip's bridge.

                                       Then I shut my eyes
                                        And I'd go to sleep
                                        Wake up in the morning,
                                        And imagine, I had seen the cars
                                        Going over the bridge.

thank you for the invite, i'll get round to reading it soon :D

Wow that sounds very cool and heartwarming. Hmm

this book is great, my kids are already too old for this, but I wish a book like this was around when they were younger.
thank you for the invite
chord0

Thanks for the invite, Tamara. I'll give it a read and do it justice.

Good luck to you.

Wow, How good is this book?  You have my vote, Have read some of  it to my daughter tonight and she thought it was wonderful!!!!!!

I just went through your book again (the third time) and I think you’ve got a winner. What you have given from your heart should be served on a golden platter. If I could express myself as well as you do than my mission in life would be so much easier. As you know I have two goals one is to help people find the true successes in their lives and the other is to write a book that I can leave proudly as a legacy for my family and friends. I want to leave my family name in words of value that will live on long after my lineage is gone. Your books will do that for you so don’t be to disappointed if they don’t get published by Webook. It takes pure guts and perseverance and with faith your gift will be a treasure for Gods children. I have faith in you so please have faith in yourself. God be with you.

Tamara I hope you will be published there are a few places that need to be fixed. I hope the Webook editors will let you fix them. You are a great writer and you deserve a break.
I have two projects submitted for publication I don‘t know if I can vote more than once but I‘ll definitely vote for you. I can pick up my votes by campaigning a little bit harder.  Good luck, love, BDC