I'm back to the Book after a long hiatus.Thanks to You and the others for my inbox messages.
I love this-
"The unhappy girl gave a smile
her beauty could have stopped the Nile"

And my mind straight away added this-

The unhappy girl gave a smile
her beauty could have mesmerized the Queen of The Nile

I love how you started the story with the poem!(:

Sorry I didn't proofread my comment much.

This poem sounds just exactly like my own troubles and loss. What man who makes the Queen of the Angels sigh, wants to lose that feeling even for a day or a few hours much less eternity? True there are plenty of fish in the sea but you don't care. To you she's was everywhere and she touched on everything. Why she had to go, you didn't know (You only wanted to cheer her up and be her intimate Lover for ever and Ever). After a while it felt like you're heart was too covered in scars for your Her to even recognize anymore. If your Love could jump over the gap between you two and bridge the Bond that you shared, all would be well. Alas, the closer you try to get to her, the further she tries to be from you. What will become of your future, you begin to wonder. And then as you rebuild your old life, she comes out of the woodwork and holds you close and cries over you before leaving perhaps for the last time. Anything is Possible within this spaced-out dimension so don't fear the future. You may yet find yourself in her arms after all is said and done. You may even have kids. Or perhaps, in time, you will meet another who will not rely on you keeping Her happy quite so much. The next one could be a happy person on her own.
Leaving the the other one behind, you find that she taught you how to be a good Lover so the next one can enjoy a prudent, caring, seasoned Man like you. Yes, I know how it goes sometimes, and I've pondered it all so many times.

May the next one be even better than the Last!

Like everyone else said the poem was a nice way to snatch your reader into the story...

~t.

WOW!!!!!!!!!!!! the poem is fantastic! cant wait to read your book!!
ily lozzie

yeah a very nice piece of poem. I have had the same convincing power but........... it didnt worked out.
very beautifully written

this is such a sweet peom, and i like the way it is structured, great job! ;)

I love the poem... (^_^)

This sounds soo good, I love the idea of a poem for the pitch. I'll definitely be coming back for the first chapter later sometime tonight!