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If I Fall
Once upon a time
a boy met this unhappy girl
who saw only saddness in all the world
Once upon a time
This boy saved the girl unhappy
showed her a world not quite as crappy
Once upon a time
The unhappy girl gave a smile
her beauty could have stopped the Nile
Things were perfect
But the story is not at a close
Because there is a thorn for every rose
Once upon a time
a deadline came
and nothing would ever be the same
the boy asked the girl to come away with him
but she was tor ... more »
a boy met this unhappy girl
who saw only saddness in all the world
Once upon a time
This boy saved the girl unhappy
showed her a world not quite as crappy
Once upon a time
The unhappy girl gave a smile
her beauty could have stopped the Nile
Things were perfect
But the story is not at a close
Because there is a thorn for every rose
Once upon a time
a deadline came
and nothing would ever be the same
the boy asked the girl to come away with him
but she was tor ... more »
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I'm back to the Book after a long hiatus.Thanks to You and the others for my inbox messages.
I love this-
"The unhappy girl gave a smile
her beauty could have stopped the Nile"
And my mind straight away added this-
The unhappy girl gave a smile
her beauty could have mesmerized the Queen of The Nile
I love this-
"The unhappy girl gave a smile
her beauty could have stopped the Nile"
And my mind straight away added this-
The unhappy girl gave a smile
her beauty could have mesmerized the Queen of The Nile
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This poem sounds just exactly like my own troubles and loss. What man who makes the Queen of the Angels sigh, wants to lose that feeling even for a day or a few hours much less eternity? True there are plenty of fish in the sea but you don't care. To you she's was everywhere and she touched on everything. Why she had to go, you didn't know (You only wanted to cheer her up and be her intimate Lover for ever and Ever). After a while it felt like you're heart was too covered in scars for your Her to even recognize anymore. If your Love could jump over the gap between you two and bridge the Bond that you shared, all would be well. Alas, the closer you try to get to her, the further she tries to be from you. What will become of your future, you begin to wonder. And then as you rebuild your old life, she comes out of the woodwork and holds you close and cries over you before leaving perhaps for the last time. Anything is Possible within this spaced-out dimension so don't fear the future. You may yet find yourself in her arms after all is said and done. You may even have kids. Or perhaps, in time, you will meet another who will not rely on you keeping Her happy quite so much. The next one could be a happy person on her own.
Leaving the the other one behind, you find that she taught you how to be a good Lover so the next one can enjoy a prudent, caring, seasoned Man like you. Yes, I know how it goes sometimes, and I've pondered it all so many times.
May the next one be even better than the Last!
Leaving the the other one behind, you find that she taught you how to be a good Lover so the next one can enjoy a prudent, caring, seasoned Man like you. Yes, I know how it goes sometimes, and I've pondered it all so many times.
May the next one be even better than the Last!
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Like everyone else said the poem was a nice way to snatch your reader into the story...
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WOW!!!!!!!!!!!! the poem is fantastic! cant wait to read your book!!
ily lozzie
ily lozzie
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yeah a very nice piece of poem. I have had the same convincing power but........... it didnt worked out.
very beautifully written
very beautifully written
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this is such a sweet peom, and i like the way it is structured, great job! ;)
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