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In Times of Love There Were.

My poems for the vote.

I hope you all like them! I have chosen them somewhat last minute so it's sort of too late to change what I pick! XD

Winner! This book has been selected to become one of the next published WEbooks. It is no longer accepting new submissions from outside the project team. To contribute to final revisions before the book goes to print, leave your feedback here.

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ElevenEleven

8/31/2009 11:07 AM PDT

Wow. amazing imagery. Definitely yes.

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thevoice

8/29/2009 1:59 PM PDT

Form:
great hot content imagery well written form loves your to
good luck god bless mike

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Unconformity

8/28/2009 8:51 PM PDT

Like every time it was a great pleasure to read each one of those three well expressed poems .

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Niyah_Love

8/28/2009 4:11 PM PDT

All three poems I enjoyed. The last one touched me a bit more. When you can almost hear, taste, feel, see, touch, a writing then you are truly blessed as a poet.

I voted yes

Niyahove

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Vada

8/28/2009 9:54 AM PDT

The first submission is amazing, but I honestly can't decide which of the last two is my favorite. You have my vote and support. Very nice work and best of luck.

Thank you so much for your feedback on my work.

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GeoffreyMe

8/27/2009 9:44 PM PDT

I like that you're a girl,
And that you're a woman.
And love that you're a poet.
Even if your bra doesn't fit.
(My advice: stick with the first three!)
;)

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LODY

8/27/2009 8:29 PM PDT

good job, just think they may have been a bit long..

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ScottD15

8/26/2009 9:44 PM PDT

You have some great imagery in each of the poems. and I love the way your words flow.

About Me was somewhat sad, but in some cases a sad truth.

Touch was just beautiful.

You have my vote.

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ashly_dyan

8/26/2009 4:03 PM PDT

Written with great imagery. Got my vote!

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Armariel

8/25/2009 7:35 PM PDT

Very lovely writing here, unique, striking, musical, daring and fresh. This is some amazing work. Gets my vote!

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Petrin

8/25/2009 2:47 PM PDT

What a great selection. Loved all three with my favourite being 'About Me'.

I will look forward to reading more of your works in the future and may I wish you the very best of luck with the vote.

http://www.webook.com/project/My-3-Emotive-Entries

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Sunyata

8/25/2009 9:30 AM PDT

I love them! Wow publish! Burning Ivy gave me goosebumps and Touch was (or is) just perfect, best of luck, these are great, beautiful

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Night_rose

8/25/2009 7:55 AM PDT

So much emotion, i am now in love with these haha. Well done they were amazing and i loved how you styled them!
You deffinatly have my vote!

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weepingwillow

8/24/2009 1:21 PM PDT

General:
good framework, but it just feels lacking. try to pull more emotion in through images, especially in the first two poems.

Content:
i kind of feel like "burning ivy" is circular. i am not sure that i got that much out of it. it still feels like it needs to be sorted.

Imagery:
the first 8 lines of touch have the most imagery of the collection. i do wish you would use more images, because the ones you select are beautiful and cleverly observant.

good luck!

http://www.webook.com/project/The-Romantic-the-Sucidial-and-the-Tortured-Soul

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Jenny_Moxham

8/23/2009 11:39 PM PDT

Fantastic!

http://www.webook.com/project/Animal-Cruelty

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warriorwitch

8/20/2009 9:50 PM PDT

well done! voted.

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Cwolfe

8/19/2009 2:48 PM PDT

These poems are elctric! The imagery moves me and the rhythmn of each poem is like a song. Really, reallly wonderful!

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tattyhead

8/18/2009 3:50 PM PDT

Hi here's one place I didnt follow you to ha ha.
I voted publish for the one entitled About Me.
I really liked this one the most.
My bra doesnt fit was ace.
Will not leave you a link to mine cos you already bin there.
I wish you success !!

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GaelNiamh

8/18/2009 4:54 AM PDT

I like your poems as well, Grand work, I vote to publish!!

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arceyed

8/18/2009 2:16 AM PDT

Intresting stuff.
Deserves to be published.

please;
http://www.webook.com/project/Born-of-The-Sun

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moxhp

8/17/2009 9:13 PM PDT

Just voted.

http://www.webook.com/project/Top-3-Poems-of-Assorted-Interest

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BrokenPoet

8/17/2009 4:30 PM PDT

Absolutely publish! I loved the one called About Me. Fantastic work. Check mine out if you like. :)

http://www.webook.com/project/Timeless-Trilogy

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Canewen

8/17/2009 1:34 PM PDT

This one is really great....speaks of young love but with a touch of humor!

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NightRoad

8/17/2009 11:28 AM PDT

Very well written Good luck

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ellenc

8/17/2009 11:10 AM PDT

These are clever and well-written, with more substance than first meets the eyes. Good luck!

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Amir_Dez

8/17/2009 12:07 AM PDT

Good luck

http://www.webook.com/project/Oppression-Hope-Freedom

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StanSczbecki

8/16/2009 6:53 PM PDT

There's a personal tone to these poems that makes them stand out from the others I've read in terms of words jumping off the page. Each line, even each word, seems to have a sort of impact with a biting and unapologetic style.

All three are poems that can mean something different to everyone, but really you (the author) only know the true meaning; and that's awesome. To be able to write from the heart like that but keep your work relatable is truely a talent and absolutely deserves to be published.

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beerman

8/15/2009 2:37 PM PDT

loved about me my vote is in

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nrhatch

8/15/2009 12:51 PM PDT

About Me is a wonderful reminder not to ignore the forest because one tree displeases.

Write on!

nancy

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SKYeater

8/14/2009 8:29 PM PDT

very well written and different. will certainly comment more in-depth at some later time. voted!

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wadegroves

8/14/2009 2:45 PM PDT

Good Job Lady, I vote Publish!!

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dnaleristap

8/13/2009 6:51 AM PDT

You have a sharp wit. Keep telling me more. Voted See mine if you have the time

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MidnightAngelCk

8/12/2009 11:56 AM PDT

i wish u all the best

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shahw

8/12/2009 7:10 AM PDT

Voted, Good Luck. Shah. X

http://www.webook.com/project/My-Best-Three-Poems-WEBook-2009

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CretiaD

8/11/2009 10:57 PM PDT

I really like this poem, so full of passion. You are an adorable young lady. Keep up your writing as I see a great future for you!!

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Steve64

8/11/2009 10:41 AM PDT

I think you have a lot of talent here.

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sayitaintso

8/11/2009 9:02 AM PDT

I like this one better than the first. Great job!
;)Brooke

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Poor_Romeo

8/11/2009 7:09 AM PDT

this is absolutely amazing i am impressed upon this magnificent piece of artwork truly fantastic

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Sarmatia

8/10/2009 10:31 PM PDT

You are a true a Renaissance woman and while
comparable to the likes of Shelley and Keats there is a restoration quality writing to the present.
Your writing evokes a golden age of literature
when poets were not afraid to be poets nor to boldly
utilise language.
My compliments Ma'am and my vote along with it.

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xnightsxxbloodx

8/10/2009 8:18 PM PDT

Your words bring pictures to the mind. Original and visionary poetry, my vote is with you.

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symbionticlover

8/10/2009 5:58 PM PDT

very well written, the imagery is there but it's at it's best in about me. very unique.

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S_WilsonDisher

8/10/2009 1:35 PM PDT

I love the refrain ' but my bra doesn't fit' in your second poem. A most original villanelle! Humour pops in between the words!

The other two have powerful themes but your lightness of touch means that the reader is not bogged down in a sludge of angst, so often found in this genre.
You present beautiful images. You have my vote.

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mattj

8/10/2009 1:21 PM PDT

publish!

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limegreenrunner

8/10/2009 11:58 AM PDT

unique poetry! i hope your work gets published!!! thanks so much for your vote!!

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Callisto

8/10/2009 9:53 AM PDT

Loved all your poems, very original.

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RaddHatter_13

8/10/2009 6:45 AM PDT

Your poems are very good, completely unique and interesting. They kept my mind enthralled, wondering with anticipation. You have my vote, good luck.

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Sabrabean

8/10/2009 6:25 AM PDT

You've got my vote!

http://www.webook.com/project/Troubled-Waters-Poetry

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irena_pasvin

8/10/2009 1:20 AM PDT

Voted. I liked all the 3 poems, the irony of About me,
the beautiful flow and images of the Burning Ivy and intimacy of Touch. Very well written.

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LODY

8/9/2009 6:43 PM PDT

the second is very revealing right off the bat. good reads.. voted. :)

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LizHorning

8/9/2009 4:51 PM PDT

General:
Thanks for the vote!

These are great poems, I voted for you!

http://www.webook.com/project/Reminiscences

Content:
all of your poems are very deep and writing about yourself the way you do is not only difficult but sometimes hard to share, great job.

Imagery:
I LOVE 'About me' and the imagery the line 'but my bra doesn't fit' gives but I feel like it was used too often and was distracting. You could cut it down to every other or even every third stanza.

Musicality:
All of your poems have a great flow to them and progress at a good speed with wonderful word choices.

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J_Keith_Haney

8/9/2009 2:14 PM PDT

As I read each one of these poems, it's almost as though I hear a tinkling piano in the background of my mind, playing some lost masterpiece of Beethovan that suggests a rainy day and a rolling river into which the rain falls. My favorite of the lot, hands down, is "About Me", one of the most honest self-portraits I've read of anyone. It speaks of emotions, longings, hopes, dreams, and intensity. It speaks the same message as the Tarot card of the Fool in Pamela Colman-Smith's famous representation, the elegant young person who strides towards the edge of the cliff with the eyes only on the sun. So most certainly you get a YES vote from me.

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NJFemia

8/9/2009 6:06 AM PDT

Burning Ivy is my favorite, you have my vote either way. Your imagery holds hands with the reader. Best of Luck!

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Kate_Avino

8/9/2009 5:22 AM PDT

Thanks you very much for your vote! I love Burning Ivy-so compelling! Great work. If not obvious, you have my vote!

~Kate

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andie64

8/8/2009 9:48 PM PDT

Thanks for the vote and feedback.
Nice job. You got my vote.

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Blakkthought

8/8/2009 5:51 PM PDT

Voted

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spooky

8/8/2009 2:53 PM PDT

Three great poems. Good luck with your work

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Chelsea214

8/7/2009 1:40 PM PDT

I really love your metaphors and imagery!
You have my vote.

Good luck,
Chelsea

http://www.webook.com/project/Chelseas-Poems

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MarkBrad

8/7/2009 7:28 AM PDT

I enjoyed reading these, well done

http://www.webook.com/project/My-Poetic-Thoughts-and-Rambles

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SPMount

8/6/2009 11:11 PM PDT

Burning Ivy was almost erotic but tragic and happy at the same time, I liked the usage of your words; old poetry style - back to front.

I loved the sentiment and originality here, and it flowed beautifully.

I loved the second stanza in ‘About Me’ and I loved the frankness and honesty throughout. There is an underlying statement as to why with everything you have to offer, are you not good enough? Again original work. I enjoyed you being touch with yourself.

Again beautifully composed and ‘nice a natural rhythm seems it’. The alternated senses was a great ‘touch’, my sight me informed, and I could ‘envision’ through fingers mine that my mouth smelled a winner!”

Great job.

http://www.webook.com/project/Quirked

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tsa53

8/6/2009 8:19 AM PDT

All three of your poems are well written and full of emotion.
I enjoyed reading them all, but this one is my favorite.

Good luck!

Teresa

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AkeemH

8/5/2009 1:03 PM PDT

Each piece is interesting and distinct with striking imagery that one would not expect to be given in certain instances.You have my vote.
http://www.webook.com/project/My-Top-Three
By the way my favourite line out of all three pieces is from 'About Me'; 'If I could give you everything I'd give you more.'

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amanra

8/5/2009 11:57 AM PDT

interesting display of emotions, nice work, if I was you I would buy a new bra, I voted yes.

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tuesday_rayne

8/5/2009 7:09 AM PDT

a definite yes, publish!!!!

if you want to find mine:

http://www.webook.com/project/Voodoo-Hearts-My-3-Poems-for-entry-Webook-2009poetryVOTE

thank you.

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RKRickerd

8/4/2009 10:43 PM PDT

General:
The author is telling you all about herself, that is obvious from the discription. The piece is well constructed as are the others as well.

Form:
this young lady has a strong command of the free verse style of writing prose and a very outstanding talent for it. It is quite obvious, that she will in time someday; share the shelves in the major bookstores with the greats of the times.

Content:
this piece is about her hopes and dreams and asperations all of a personal nature but she sees as a major lfaw in herself that her bra does not fit. But she never says whether it is too small ot to large which I fine in its self very revealing.

Imagery:
Because of the accompanying avatar picture and the fact it shows her turned away leads one to believe that she is bothored by her bra not fitting. The imagery is quite vivid it may be that she is much more ware than we suspect. Or just more great building of the image the piece alludes to.

Tone:
this is a very positive hopeful piece very up beat and well done.

Musicality:
I think of mary popins for some reason when I read this piece very well done and need to be published

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Calypso

8/4/2009 7:06 PM PDT

I like 'About Me' the best. This is your strongest. I would like to see me more concrete images in your work.

You have great potential! keep writing and forcing your self to go deep with your metaphors, really push in finding that perfect description!

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