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Inferno's Labyrinth
"My memories were fractured. I couldn’t recollect what had happened. I couldn’t even recall myself. It seems a void inside me had covetously swallowed the reminiscence of the moment that damned me. I am absolutely fine with that; I never want to evoke what had happened on that day. Never. Yet, the instant I flicked open my eyes the nightmare came rushing back, in currents stained by blood. "
Scorpio had never wanted to be the son of the head of the DeMaetrix Family.
He never desired ... more »
Scorpio had never wanted to be the son of the head of the DeMaetrix Family.
He never desired ... more »
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10/12/2011 12:49 PM PDT
The writing itself is good and I like the handling of the altered state of consciousness portions, but I'm confused. Why are you jumping back and fort between first and third person? Am I missing something? Why not do the whole thing in one of the other--close third person...or all first?
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10/10/2011 5:08 PM PDT
Over all i must say that what i've read so far is definately starting off to be something impressive indeed. I defiantely like the mood and feel, of course then I myself am a Sci-fi/fantasy author so i'm not sure i can comment on that without being somewhat prejudice but i've read several genres and critiqued a few in my day so i try to judge with an open mind.
Plot seems pretty interesting, I definately wanted to read more on what was happening you really caught my attention from the beginning to the end. The plot and structure seems very sound as well as it appears to be flowing all in the same general direction. I had no trouble what-so-ever following what was happening or being able to understand what you were trying to get out.
However, now that i have mentioned the positive, time for me to add a little creative feedback. Since i didnt read any dialogue, i can't honestly comment on any of the character development or the tone and/or voice of the characters. Though from what i read the main character sounds interesting, i couldnt really get to know him cause he wasnt interacting with anyone or anything, just kinda inner monologuing. Beyond that though i would definately give this 3 stars. I'm big on dialogue and watching characters develop that's why 3 so dont feel bad about that.
Over all, I might just buy your book! Hope that is helpful. Take care!
Plot seems pretty interesting, I definately wanted to read more on what was happening you really caught my attention from the beginning to the end. The plot and structure seems very sound as well as it appears to be flowing all in the same general direction. I had no trouble what-so-ever following what was happening or being able to understand what you were trying to get out.
However, now that i have mentioned the positive, time for me to add a little creative feedback. Since i didnt read any dialogue, i can't honestly comment on any of the character development or the tone and/or voice of the characters. Though from what i read the main character sounds interesting, i couldnt really get to know him cause he wasnt interacting with anyone or anything, just kinda inner monologuing. Beyond that though i would definately give this 3 stars. I'm big on dialogue and watching characters develop that's why 3 so dont feel bad about that.
Over all, I might just buy your book! Hope that is helpful. Take care!
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