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Dark Fantasy Poetry
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8/27/2009 10:10 PM PDT
"Princess" is exceptional in its imagery.
I sort of wished you had done more with "Puppet" because I think so many good images could have been pulled into it.
Good luck!
http://www.webook.com/project/The-Romantic-the-Sucidial-and-the-Tortured-Soul
I sort of wished you had done more with "Puppet" because I think so many good images could have been pulled into it.
Good luck!
http://www.webook.com/project/The-Romantic-the-Sucidial-and-the-Tortured-Soul
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8/26/2009 2:37 PM PDT
I did vote for all three just the same; good luck1!
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8/26/2009 2:35 PM PDT
I like the first two poems a lot more, but the latter kind of left me in the dark, but some-what sad.
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8/26/2009 6:50 AM PDT
Three very good entries that provide a wonderfully descriptive narrative giving excellent imagery.
The very best of luck for the vote.
http://www.webook.com/project/My-3-Emotive-Entries
The very best of luck for the vote.
http://www.webook.com/project/My-3-Emotive-Entries
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8/24/2009 9:43 AM PDT
you are one of the best in imagery I have read wonderful
http://www.webook.com/project/Three-for-the-vote
http://www.webook.com/project/Three-for-the-vote
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8/22/2009 6:37 AM PDT
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8/21/2009 10:25 AM PDT
I loved this stanza:
This castle has no space for time
Which is the elements greatest crime
Centuries pass by like the rising sun
Who resides in the glorious west
I really enjoyed the story of Princess Chained Up in Misconception, until the bloody and gory part of it that is. Good use of imagery throughout it.
This Puppet wishes to dance was well written as well, although it made me feel slightly sad in reading it.
Misty Glade was also well done, I really like these lines:
Asking for the answers we know
We sit within natures circle
The whole poem seems wise, and serene.
Publish! and Goodluck
This castle has no space for time
Which is the elements greatest crime
Centuries pass by like the rising sun
Who resides in the glorious west
I really enjoyed the story of Princess Chained Up in Misconception, until the bloody and gory part of it that is. Good use of imagery throughout it.
This Puppet wishes to dance was well written as well, although it made me feel slightly sad in reading it.
Misty Glade was also well done, I really like these lines:
Asking for the answers we know
We sit within natures circle
The whole poem seems wise, and serene.
Publish! and Goodluck
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8/21/2009 7:24 AM PDT
Noname: The Lesbian undertone was not intended in Princess chained up in misconception, I can see now how you saw that.
Can't blame my subconcious for what it does ;-)
Can't blame my subconcious for what it does ;-)
8/21/2009 2:32 AM PDT
Yes vote from me good luck :)
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8/20/2009 12:18 AM PDT
The best of luck my friend
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8/18/2009 1:21 PM PDT
this good that on the fairtail with a lebian under tone
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8/18/2009 10:31 AM PDT
great form and content.
i vote publish.
i vote publish.
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8/18/2009 2:13 AM PDT
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8/15/2009 11:08 AM PDT
I stand corrected. You did enter, and rightly so. Thx for the read.
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8/14/2009 5:12 PM PDT
"Across the rolling Exmoor hills
The castle built from local stone "
Dear Jenna,
A friend of mine who resides at Seaton once sent me pictures of Exmoor on Facebook and i wrote a comment ...
From the album: SVKumar Thila
By Vasanthakumar Saminathan
Exmoor, Somerset
What a pastoral beauty she is! I'm at loss for words indeed. I wish I was Somerset Maugham.
Had I known you earlier I would have quipped ... indeed I wish I was Jenna
Your Poem is so picturesque , once again I'm ...
" Oh! England never once have I touched thy shores
Yet I'm walking through thy meadows forgetting my chores"
(from my poem ...MY Mind's England)
You have my vote as a toast to your talent!
The castle built from local stone "
Dear Jenna,
A friend of mine who resides at Seaton once sent me pictures of Exmoor on Facebook and i wrote a comment ...
From the album: SVKumar Thila
By Vasanthakumar Saminathan
Exmoor, Somerset
What a pastoral beauty she is! I'm at loss for words indeed. I wish I was Somerset Maugham.
Had I known you earlier I would have quipped ... indeed I wish I was Jenna
Your Poem is so picturesque , once again I'm ...
" Oh! England never once have I touched thy shores
Yet I'm walking through thy meadows forgetting my chores"
(from my poem ...MY Mind's England)
You have my vote as a toast to your talent!
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8/14/2009 7:14 AM PDT
No problem Wade, thank you for your comment.
Also thank you ever so much to everyone else who has left feedback, it's so interesting to know what people think.
Jenna
Also thank you ever so much to everyone else who has left feedback, it's so interesting to know what people think.
Jenna
8/14/2009 6:03 AM PDT
The Puppet was the best of the 3. Best of luck with the vote. L :)
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8/13/2009 8:09 AM PDT
ooops , comment is on misty glade not all three. sorry.
8/13/2009 8:08 AM PDT
Short, questioning and expressive.
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8/12/2009 8:22 PM PDT
I loved this poem! It was so beautifully sad...
http://www.webook.com/project/Logical-Mind-Irrational-Heart Would you mind reading some of my poetry, if it's not too much trouble? Please and thank you...
http://www.webook.com/project/Logical-Mind-Irrational-Heart Would you mind reading some of my poetry, if it's not too much trouble? Please and thank you...
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8/12/2009 8:20 PM PDT
This is very good! It kind of.. gives a bit of insight to how life doesn't always make sense, and how it's not always perfect. I really like it.
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8/12/2009 6:01 AM PDT
this is great work, you get my vote, well done
http://www.webook.com/project/My-Poetic-Thoughts-and-Rambles
http://www.webook.com/project/My-Poetic-Thoughts-and-Rambles
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8/12/2009 3:55 AM PDT
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8/11/2009 10:21 AM PDT
I loved this puppet wishes to dance the title alone in my opinion should be enough to put it through.
Publish webook!
Publish webook!
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8/10/2009 12:53 PM PDT
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8/9/2009 6:39 PM PDT
Blindfolded by insanity... aren't we all! I love this poem (This Puppet Wishes To Dance) You've definitely got my vote.
http://www.webook.com/project/In-Times-Of-Love-There-Were
http://www.webook.com/project/In-Times-Of-Love-There-Were
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8/8/2009 12:42 PM PDT
A thumbs up from me. Particularly liked the fairy tale quality of the first one.
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8/8/2009 10:12 AM PDT
General:
I enjoyed Misty Glade -- short, sweet, and mysterious.
Imagery:
My favorite line: "The truth behind our reflection."
Good Luck.
I enjoyed Misty Glade -- short, sweet, and mysterious.
Imagery:
My favorite line: "The truth behind our reflection."
Good Luck.
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8/7/2009 2:13 PM PDT
My favorite is this puppet wishes to dance <3 i thought that it had amazing flow and i could totally relate.
All three painted aesthetically macabre pictures [my favourite kind] <3
All three painted aesthetically macabre pictures [my favourite kind] <3
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8/7/2009 12:39 PM PDT
I enjoyed reading your poems, you get my vote.
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8/7/2009 9:40 AM PDT
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8/7/2009 5:57 AM PDT
Excellent work - very well done...
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8/7/2009 5:09 AM PDT
Voted! Hope you do well!
~Kate
~Kate
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8/6/2009 7:22 PM PDT
Imagery:
'Princess chained up in misconception' I could see, feel, hear, smell and taste the words you put together. Love is something we crave and the fairy tale of the "prince will save us" is one we all dream about. Yet most of the time our prince is nay a prince but something sinister. I love how you wrote this and how the ending turned out as something one can relate to in life. Your other two poems are just as well written and I hope to read more from you another time. You have my vote! Good luck
Niyah Love
http://www.webook.com/project/Pain-of-another
'Princess chained up in misconception' I could see, feel, hear, smell and taste the words you put together. Love is something we crave and the fairy tale of the "prince will save us" is one we all dream about. Yet most of the time our prince is nay a prince but something sinister. I love how you wrote this and how the ending turned out as something one can relate to in life. Your other two poems are just as well written and I hope to read more from you another time. You have my vote! Good luck
Niyah Love
http://www.webook.com/project/Pain-of-another
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8/6/2009 4:03 PM PDT
very good! my favorite was This puppet wishes to dance! a most definate yes vote!
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8/6/2009 3:35 PM PDT
Voted
Good luck
Good luck
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8/6/2009 2:49 PM PDT
General:
vote submitted...
Content:
My favorite is " Misty Glade "
vote submitted...
Content:
My favorite is " Misty Glade "
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8/5/2009 12:27 PM PDT
nice poetry! i hope you can get your work published!
http://www.webook.com/project/Three-Poems-From-My-Freshman-Year-In-High-School
http://www.webook.com/project/Three-Poems-From-My-Freshman-Year-In-High-School
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8/2/2009 6:36 AM PDT
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