Great Prologue

thank you Genesis-Jesse, for this awesome review. You had me very much touched by what you said and i feel you assessed my story very intuitively.

and peterjm thank you too; i used both suggestions as close to how  i could to keeep the flow of my story. good help, i appreciate it a lot.

chris77 i hope you come by, you are welcome any time.

General:
First of all, to call your summary enticing would not be doing it justice. When I read the final sentence concerning 9/11, I literally felt shivers run down my spine.

Plot:
You have everything well planned and laid out, and the amount of thought that you have put into your story is absolutely apparent. The plot is engaging and has mysterious qualities that keep your audience interested in the story. The way in which you have organized the three main rhetorical appeals into your work creates a noticeable "page turning" quality to further expand on an already addicting piece.

Character Development:
Brilliant, clever, and most of all imaginative. It is my personal opinion that you are a genius. Imagination takes more brain power than doing complex science or math, and "Jeopardy MacNaill:The Chair of Release and Remembrance" mangles the imagination with events that you have captured with a different and new spin. You have revealed creativity in your character development. Your characters are alive. Your readers will feel the personality you have employed in each of them, and may I say that Jeopardy is without a doubt, a well characterized individual. Props to you, especially in this department.

Structure:
Structure is easy to follow and allows for your words to flow with elegance and realism. I lose myself in your story which is a quality that is hard to find in many works. I find that I am living out the story in my mind and your characters become near to real, and a great contributing factor in this quality is in fact your chosen structure.

Tone/Voice:
I was always told that this is the most important quality that a writer has, their voice. Every writer's voice is unique, but only a few are blessed with a voice that is seductive to the audience. Your story, despite being fiction, strikes me as REAL. The voice you have applied to your story brings Jeopardy, Isabella, Rochelle, and everyone else to life. You've got something great here.

I've only rad the first few chapters but enjoyed the pace. 

Looking forward to reading on

Can I add a few editting suggestions - "We had gotten rude with each other" - I didn't like the word gottern - try 'We became rude toward each other.'
And
"Both boys were dressed in the same blue velvet short sets I had them buried wearing.  Try "velvet shorts I had them buried in".

I hope you like my suggestions.  

Good luck.

Thank you for the project invite! Looking forward to reading your work! -Chris-