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Project Leader:
KarenGibson
Participants:
The WEbook community
Who Can Write:
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Category:
Fiction
Genre:
Children's
Language:
English

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Kenneth, The Dragon Slayer

When no one else would come forward to slay the terrible dragon, a small boy named Kenneth decided he was brave enough.

A story written many years ago when my son Kenneth was a small boy. Each child got a bedtime story of their very own and this is his.

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sarahdeg100

10/12/2009 7:51 AM PDT

Wow cool! i love this book- it has a magic flow to the words.'

You have my vote, dude!

MaryBiehl

4/20/2009 12:16 PM PDT

Awesome - We love dragons and love the cute ending.

You have my vote!

writer122

4/20/2009 9:42 AM PDT

You have my vote Good luck!

Chelzin

4/20/2009 8:52 AM PDT

I'm so glad I found you to vote 'publish.' I would love to read this to my children!

wenniepoo

4/20/2009 7:29 AM PDT

Nearly missed you, thumbs up again!

nrhatch

4/20/2009 6:35 AM PDT

My favorite verse is the last! ;-D

Great job. nancy

Shardae

4/16/2009 11:47 AM PDT

WOW! This is really good and I especially love the rhythmic flow! You got my vote!

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McZero

4/14/2009 3:29 PM PDT

This is possibly the coolest children's story I've read in awhile.

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CCCWriter

4/11/2009 3:10 PM PDT

Oh and children love to be scared by mythical dragons. Great submission.

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naiveandwitty

4/10/2009 1:04 PM PDT

i wish you success.

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JaneAusten

4/9/2009 5:24 PM PDT

Nice! :D! You got my vote! Cool idea! My dad made up a leprechaun story for my twin and I when we were little! He was mischevous, and, in the story, we were forever trying to keep him out of mischef, and out of school and other little problems! :D

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S_WilsonDisher

4/8/2009 8:31 PM PDT

Very amusing - I can see this illustrated! One embarrassed dragon gets my vote!

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jamesmcshane

4/8/2009 3:20 PM PDT

I forgot you had this one, Karen. Here's another thumb up from me.

Go get 'em, Tiger!

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erikasargent

4/8/2009 10:56 AM PDT

lovely story. please read my story 'my combined children's poem book in children's section.'

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CallumC

4/7/2009 7:18 PM PDT

Karen,
I wish you the best of luck with this one. I can clearly see mothers all over the country, if not wider reading this to their kids. With the right artwork it should be a winner in its genre. A definite yes, good luck.

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mpolis

4/7/2009 9:12 AM PDT

Hey! Fantasic! This is a great story that might also make a great picture book.

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KINGLOVERR

4/6/2009 5:52 PM PDT

You are a very good writer I love your style. I voted for you please vote for my book "King Loverr: Diary of a Philosophical Loner.

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MsOriginality

4/6/2009 4:27 PM PDT

Hey, what can I say..I LOVED IT! Good luck...you gt my vote...I hope you will return the vote. Look under children's books, or short stories.

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LindaVa

4/6/2009 1:50 PM PDT

I think this is a specatacular and well done childrens story!

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thevoice

4/6/2009 10:05 AM PDT

good luck good work god bles mike

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Caz_Steele

11/18/2008 12:35 PM PST

Good luck with the votes! Children will love this story...;)

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GranisGrazin

11/18/2008 6:24 AM PST

THUMBS UP for this special lady and talented author.

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wenniepoo

11/16/2008 10:06 PM PST

I loved it, great work...love Wennie xxxhugs

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danielway

11/14/2008 8:43 PM PST

If there is any child who would read a whole chapter book written in verse then I take my hat off to them.

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TomMcGee

11/10/2008 10:37 PM PST

I liked it Karen. You are a very gifted writer with a great imagination.

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MsPadalecki

11/5/2008 7:02 PM PST

Loved it

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Blake_Madison

11/5/2008 6:15 PM PST

very good. good luck. I have a childrens book called The Sturtles. Please check it out if you have a minute.

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Winterjazz

11/5/2008 4:57 PM PST

Great work Karen - very good luck.

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nrhatch

11/5/2008 9:25 AM PST

Your last stanza is perfectly wonderful!

And if you follow a crooked path,
Over a few hills and overgrown vale,
You'll find a dragon eating soft foods
And tucking what's left of her tail.

Good Luck! nancy

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Shep

11/4/2008 4:33 PM PST

very, very cool Got my vote, best of luck

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jamesmcshane

11/4/2008 9:07 AM PST

Again, I wish you well with this, Karen,

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jamesmcshane

8/1/2008 7:15 PM PDT

I'm a sucker for this kind of stuff. Good luck to you.

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ct36

8/1/2008 8:45 AM PDT

I feel I've read this theme before, like the Hobbit and others. For this theme, it needs to be special/unique to pull it off? I don't quite feel that.

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dropkick687

7/30/2008 1:04 PM PDT

This is good but it seems to me like there are a billion books out there already with very similar story lines.

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peoples_voices

7/29/2008 2:40 AM PDT

its not bad but needs work but
keep it up.... n read n rate mine pleaz

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lindabroer

7/24/2008 4:42 AM PDT

This book is an absolutely gorgeous children's tale. I'm sure children worldwide will love this. It's cute and absolutely perfect.

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Sarah

7/23/2008 9:35 PM PDT

This may need a bit more revision, but it has potential.

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CTPucket

7/22/2008 10:09 PM PDT

Great story. The last stanza made me laugh out loud. I believe it is the first time i have laughed at anything on this website.

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Caz_Steele

7/22/2008 9:26 PM PDT

I love this tale. Awesome! Good luck Karen!

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K_B_Watts

7/22/2008 8:01 PM PDT

This is so cute and I AM ANXIOUS TO SEE THE ILLUSTRATIONS! Cute!

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westwood

7/22/2008 2:04 PM PDT

I'm interested to see descriptions of the projected illustrations included. Good use of rhyme and simple language, though the rhymes feel forced in a few places... which is understandable, given the sheer numbers necessary.

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sped

7/22/2008 9:37 AM PDT

Very Nice! Love it!!!

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gaye

7/22/2008 9:33 AM PDT

Yeah!!!

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youngest

7/22/2008 9:31 AM PDT

Brave Kenneth!

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LeeMaddox

7/21/2008 7:48 PM PDT

Very interesting and exciting reading especially for a childs story.

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TsungChi

7/21/2008 3:30 PM PDT

Enjoy the energy and magic, but I think most lines would flow better with fewer words......the choppy style detracts from the story.

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RosalieHale28

7/19/2008 9:30 PM PDT

Good idea, but the reading was rocky. Make the bouncing of the words match in each stanza. Even if you change the beat from stanza to stanza it will still flow, just make it match for four lines straight.
~Britt~

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Buggaboo

7/18/2008 6:35 PM PDT

Sweeeeeeeet!!!!!!!!!!

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CarlosMeza

7/18/2008 2:58 PM PDT

Karen,

I agree with nr. This story is cute and magical. You can improve the rhythm with a few changes in the wording. With some editing, there is great potential.

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nrhatch

7/18/2008 2:27 PM PDT

Karen --

This is a cute story, but there are some places where the cadence could be improved. Or the order of the words could be changed to make it flow more lyrically.

Also, the hero used magic (spirit based power) in order to be viewed a hero (ego based motivation). I would have enjoyed it more if he was fighting the dragon because he LOVED the townspeople, rather than because he wanted to be adored and revered by a statute in the square.

I love the last stanza, but it is in conflict with the 3rd to last stanza:

"Who through his faith in himself sent a dragon to the grave!" -- this doesn't make sense, since the dragon is still alive 2 stanzas later

Good Luck!

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