Plzz continue writin..........I thought it was interesting!!I want Cal and Alex together, I luv romance so it would make it even better!!lol! Anyway you did a great job!!

this sounds very interesting!

Definitely checking this out--sounds fun! :)

General:
Great general summary.

Plot:
This seems a good start, definitely something I will read further when I have the time to do so.

Character Development:
You have an adequate hook. This is easily relatable to most readers, and your readers will appreciate a plot to which they can recount their own experiences in life.

Structure:
****line 4
"As she moves through life, she learns things that only one could, at sixteen."
try:
"As she moves through life, she learns things that one could only learn, at sixteen."
*****line 5
"But everything seems to happen, with the beginning of school."
try
"But everything seems to happenat once when school begins."
******line 6
"She seemingly stumbles across two people who, become the best trio of friends."
try
"She stumbles across two people and the trio quickly become the best of friends."
**********line 10
"realization"
***********line 11
"...isn't meant to always be taken seriously."
try
"...isn't always meant to be taken seriously."

Tone/Voice:
You have a moderate hook, which is a good thing, but it could be stronger. Play around with it until you think it's right. Your voice is a bit general and doesn't say much about you as a writer. It seems you like using "safe" language to keep your readers from misunderstanding exactly what you mean, but don't be afraid of speaking a bit more eloquently. In all actuality, your readers don't matter as much as your own voice in the matter of your writing. Be a little surprising and even repulsive in accordance with today's society. It really will make your writing better, not to say this isn't a great start or that it won't be better in later chapters, as this is as far as I have read. Just a bit of foreward advice prior to further education on the matter.
I am a learning writer, myself, and my earlier works show this as I did not practice what I have just preached to you. Forgive me for babbling and for any misinterpretation of my critique due to miswording on my part.

Hello Dear,

I hope you are well.

Some other Webookers touched on this, but your overview needs some serious TLC... the hooker too... (the bold part above summary)

Readers, me as a reader anyway, are looking for what's new in a book... They're asking of all the thousands of fiction novels why should I read your book... that's where the hooker and "summary" Which I prefer to call a teaser, come into play... you have their attention for a few well written sentences and that determines whether they will read on or put your book back on the shelf... I suppose my point is... this is important though many writers try to ignore it or put it off... work on it it's a process... and it is difficult to write a good one, but once you do it will surely pay off...

Imma break it down now:

Your hook:
Teenage fiction in a high school setting with some serious plot twists.

This doesn't scream "I'm an interesting, original, intriguing novel that you will be so hooked on you won't be able to put it down." For several reasons

First: You're not showing off your writing potential here (at least I hope you're not).... there is no spunk no pizzazz in the writing nothing giving me a reason why I should read on... Step the writing up a notch to show off your potential as a writer... Every and anything you write is telling the reader what kind of writer you are...

Second: You're telling me this is a story with plot twists instead of SHOWING me... that's just like telling someone they will enjoy the novel... you don't know that... your job is to show your reader what they're about to experience and they decide if they like it... they decide if there are really plot twists or if it's just like any other high school experience.

Third: This hooker makes me ask the question who cares? You need to dig deep and find something that your reader could care about... we care about the character and her main issue and how she overcomes it...

The teaser...

There is no need to say "our protagonist" we'll get it as we read...

It's kind of all over the place with its structure... It seems to skip around and that makes it confusing...

This is the format I use to start my teaser:

5 sentences:
- intro (set the story up... ie... high school girl no friends, absent mom, etc)
- conflict 1 (????)
- conflict 2 (?????)
- conflict 3 (????)
- ending (What she learns)

The specific conflicts that bring her to her conclusion are kind of oblivious to me... try and think of the three pivotal moments in the story and fill them in to the conflicts...

If you put the issues out there we will care and will want to know how she over comes these issues...

The point is to Show your reader what the story is about to entice them to "turn" the page and read on... For the first couple chapters you are writing to keep pages turning... once the readers fall for your characters they'll want to know how the story unfolds...

Good luck keep writing,

~t.

I encourage you to continue on with your  works. I see great potential in this idea as well your writings. Keep on going and i will be sure to read more of your work.

I'll give it a go and if i like it, i like it. if i don't, i don't.
for use of better words ^_^

~Beth xxx

^_^ I'll give it a read!

(Y)

Book Overview.

The above Book Overview is supposed to be similar to the words on the back of a paperback book.

It is supposed to Hook the Reader. It is what you would want to see on your book sleeve, on the shelf in the bookstore.

Is the above what you would really want to see on the cover of your book?  What dya think?

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A published writer gave me the following tips for a book overview that you may find useful?

Create three or four questions, to hook the Reader:

Example:-
Why did Humpty Dumpty sit alone on the wall?

What had happened to Humpty's friends?

Will all the king's men manage to put Humpty together again and is Humpty willing to pay the price?

Was Humpty pushed?

Can Humpty climb back on the wall?

Can Alex and her two best friends complete this school year without receiving  black eye's and a bloodied nose?

Hope This Helps,

Be Well,

Dollys

I'd like to encourage you to go into a little more detail in your summary. I know you're not supposed to tell the reader the entire plot but a little more description wouldn't hurt.