Great idea!!!

I love spy books...

To all those who love espionage books i would suggest reading the Gallagher girls series. It is a great insparation if  you are writing a detective/espionage story and it has a little bit of everything in it like humour, romance, action and stupidity.

XD. lol

Very good you given me lots to think about for my story.

VERY good on the detail short and sweet it wanted me to read more plz write more

Sorry for any wording or spelling mistakes. I was kinda paying attention to what I was correcting instead of the actual feedback.

Sammi_Alice,

 You've got the car driving rolling, but let's add on a radio, air conditioning, better mileage, ya know all that stuff. Here are my comments (I didn't want to annoy you with a thousand separate ones) :

In 2. Chapter 1,
"the pure concentration on her face" Is it he or her? I can understand the story either way, but I am mostly curious on what you you are speaking of.

Love the preface. It is like the opening or preview for the show.

I think you should describe Eddie Grant more. I know that he doesn't talk about himself in 3. Chapter 2.  Yet, still describe his figure, it would be best to get it out later and if you mention it later, the reader won't be confused.

In 2. Chapter 1 (I believe), you seem to summarize her running experience and focus more on the guy watching her.
You should write more about how running cures her stress.

Very lovely novel. Please continue this WeBook.

kind of like Cody Banks? lol. I'm interested. I've been reading alot of books about espionage and i'm curious to find out how you'll fair. good luck!

James

lol. I like da pic sweetie

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Well, feel complimented - I wouldn't use it unless I thought it would make you look good. :) lol

I should have it copyrighted

Stealing Sara's last name now, are we? HMMM!!!! lol


Like the story idea though... xxx