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brussel sprouts and strawberries

heartfelt poems of inspiration, beauty, love, hatred, disappointment, pain, and strength from my life and what i've observed of others' lives.

A collection of poetry written over two years.The collection is meant to bring beautiful pictures of life through some poems, or raw feelings of hurt in others. Some of the poems are stories. Some are prophecies. But each bear uniquely different qualities: just like brussel sprouts and strawberries.

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RenesmeBBF

8/11/2009 6:29 AM PDT

Youve got some true talent here :)

Aziza_7

8/1/2008 11:58 PM PDT

That was really beautiful. I loved it. Thank you.

Brightside

8/1/2008 6:53 PM PDT

When I read your poetry, i don't notice anything else, it makes me feel like I'm in the poems. I love them

hoop_t_star

8/1/2008 3:59 PM PDT

Great!

Love the structure of it, and especially the final piece of parenthetical
(I need to light the world)

Well done!

ACreativeSense

8/1/2008 2:51 PM PDT

But this got me hooked :)
"I need to melt the ice that my feet have become and let
the fear subside so I can be something more than still."

ACreativeSense

8/1/2008 2:46 PM PDT

Wow! Amazing poem! I love this. While reading it I kept thinking which line I like the most (because there were so many!), but then finishing till the end, I felt all of the words come together perfectly into a powerful touching poem. Good for you! You are already lighting the world :) thanks!

pastelspring

8/1/2008 2:38 PM PDT

I read it twice and still am finding more to ponder]

good stuff

lilmissme

8/1/2008 2:02 PM PDT

I Agree i wouls like to do the same.

BrandNewBoy

8/1/2008 1:47 PM PDT

I need to light the world is a great one! It's very unique, and speaks to readers a lot.

juanferus1n13

8/1/2008 1:44 PM PDT

This one touched a soldier's heart

juanferus1n13

8/1/2008 1:41 PM PDT

Refreshing

talisha

8/1/2008 8:52 AM PDT

Your poetry is bueatiful. You have a true gift. I wish you luck. You have my vote.

maninthemoon

8/1/2008 7:22 AM PDT

i loved this....going to share this page with others....nice work...

joyce

8/1/2008 5:33 AM PDT

I wish you all the luck. You are a great writer

silver_jem

8/1/2008 12:15 AM PDT

Liked your works! These are the types of reading materials that I want to read when I just want to get lazy and relax. :)
A good coffee table book.

LadySilentread

7/31/2008 6:14 PM PDT

I really liked it! Mostly, I like to sit around the house in my pajamas. Those are usually my favorite days.
So it was refreshing to read your poem and feel like I was a ball of energy, ready to do all of those things you wrote about.
Refreshing.

greerhart

7/31/2008 5:56 PM PDT

wow i loved how it was a poem but veered towards being a love letter itself to all the things you want to do.

pastelspring

7/31/2008 5:03 PM PDT

wonderful abandon!!!!

wisperwithin

7/31/2008 4:23 PM PDT

great!! it`s that light within that lights the way for others!!

cc_crazy

7/30/2008 2:37 PM PDT

Wow, I really like this one.
Your stlye of writing is good.
I liked to read about a woman in the war, than a man like usual. Its very sweet, great job!

cathy_21

7/30/2008 1:43 PM PDT

i like this one very much

SeaUrchin

7/30/2008 9:24 AM PDT

Bravo on your writing style, very compelling. I kept coming back for more!

DavidMcKellar

7/30/2008 2:29 AM PDT

Love your style. I was moved by Mama's still a hero in my eyes.
David McKellar

pattimari

7/29/2008 9:41 AM PDT

You are good; very good. Your emotion was high in this poem and it says a lot. Keep writing because you will make it to the top one day.

Lila_Marie

7/28/2008 11:37 AM PDT

I love this poem! Well written!

Beatrice

7/28/2008 9:08 AM PDT

You have an excellent way with imagery; the dress, the cookie dough, the ballet dancing . . . it was just enough detail so that I saw it all, but not so much that it bogged down the flow of the poem.

BigDaddy

7/28/2008 9:05 AM PDT

The depth of thought is good

Cire_Redeorhcs

7/27/2008 6:51 AM PDT

These poems are beautiful. They reach out to many base human problems and emotions.

AlwaysMe2B

7/25/2008 5:50 PM PDT

I like the style you chose for those poem, and I could relate to many of the things you have mentioned in it.

Great job & good luck in the contest!

elgee

7/25/2008 3:57 PM PDT

smiling sunshine.. you light up my world, this is the first one i read of your and it the bomb.. the detail expression and feeling and passion..have me smiling sunshine

crissyelaine

7/25/2008 2:37 PM PDT

You were born to write. I don't care what anyone dare say, everything I've read of yours thus far is absolutely beautiful.

*Crissy

Jenndate

7/25/2008 2:02 PM PDT

I think anyone who reads this poems will be able to relate to one of the "I need.." if not all of them. Good work.

Jenndate

teekieb

7/25/2008 12:07 PM PDT

the last 6 lines to me made the entire poem, keep writing i do not know you but can tel it's in ur blood

hanlon

7/25/2008 11:05 AM PDT

amazing.... truely amazing. your poetry gave me chills

Testament8877

7/25/2008 9:17 AM PDT

Excellent work!

deveti_putnik

7/25/2008 3:37 AM PDT

this doesn't like poem for me, but very nice story presented into poem form.

wordman

7/24/2008 1:41 PM PDT

i vote for it

wordman

7/24/2008 1:41 PM PDT

this one is very good

babyface

7/24/2008 7:54 AM PDT

Nice poems I vote for your project carmen

Balinor

7/23/2008 10:57 PM PDT

Wonderful words, thank you for allowing me to share them

Dee_da

7/23/2008 9:30 PM PDT

the comment below is for 'i need to light the world' and I just finished 'heart trimming' and loved it. I guess my first comment would be applicable here as well- isn't it funny how many of us feel this way? I've written pieces like this myself. But I love the hair analogies- very clever and relatable.

Dee_da

7/23/2008 9:18 PM PDT

isn't it funny how so many of us feel this way? I guess that's why the saying 'youth is wasted on the young' is so timelessly true.
I enjoyed this. pamela

mrsSadieRose

7/23/2008 5:34 PM PDT

Great Job!!

sherry

7/23/2008 5:04 PM PDT

I VOTE FOR YOUR PROJECT SHERRY

charli

7/23/2008 2:01 PM PDT

that was a nice one !

readingsorcerer

7/23/2008 1:41 PM PDT

This poem expresses every feeling that I am feeling now.

BFlatBaroness

7/23/2008 11:45 AM PDT

Elastic Rebound Theory is my favorite because of the images. It's simple, but conveys a beautiful picture.

mindfulmentat

7/23/2008 11:40 AM PDT

Very well written, with some beautiful imagery. Your voice comes through very clearly, conveying a wide range of emotion in every line.

crissyelaine

7/23/2008 11:08 AM PDT

I really like how you project your feelings with words. It truly gives the reader a picture of what you're feeling. Excellent job. It's also very inspiring and shows most of the readers (if not all) how we unknowingly need to grow as people.

Malemother

7/23/2008 10:18 AM PDT

Just by dint of the subject matter, this poem calls to mind the Pink Floyd song "Time"--that is to say, like "Time" this poem treats of the finite aspect of all things, but in a much more affirmative way. (See also, Book of Ecclesiates in the Old Testament). I liked this poem the best out of the three I sampled.

Cleveland

7/23/2008 10:17 AM PDT

you say you were meant to write, and I totally agree with you. even if you don't get published by webook, you'll get this published by somebody, sooner or later. oh and I think it's great that you write some poems with Christian themes. there's not enough Christian poetry being written these days. so. you got my vote. good luck!

green8red

7/23/2008 10:14 AM PDT

I like elastic rebound theory. A persons heart is beautiful whether it is broken or whole.

kristin777

7/23/2008 9:18 AM PDT

wow i love these they are so deep!!! awesome.

Alkimista

7/22/2008 8:14 PM PDT

me encanta! :)

missdalena

7/22/2008 7:52 PM PDT

Lovely.

hugsANDkisses

7/22/2008 11:25 AM PDT

Wow, so inspiring! i loved it.

KarlLee

7/22/2008 8:50 AM PDT

Evocative and pronounced. Well done.

angela_olsen

7/22/2008 7:45 AM PDT

Crystal! I am so proud of you and all that you accomplish in your writing!

BrieSummerhill

7/22/2008 7:42 AM PDT

I enjoyed this. I hope you do well in the voting process! Good luck and God Speed!

daydreamer251

7/21/2008 10:33 PM PDT

wow...i love it...it's everything i need to do also...thank you!!!

Amanda_80

7/21/2008 7:20 PM PDT

When I read this poem I have to admit I was almost crying. I can relate......

Amanda_80

7/21/2008 7:17 PM PDT

This is a wonderful poem. You should be proud

Delafinca

7/21/2008 3:28 PM PDT

I like the succinctness of Elastic Rebound Theory. I hear William Carlos Williams in it. It forces us to think more about your metaphor. Good job.

boston_blackie

7/21/2008 2:11 PM PDT

I like to write poetry myself, I would like to write as well as you do. I think the three poems I read are very good.

Padraic

7/21/2008 9:36 AM PDT

You express yourself very well with very understandable language, bravo! In this poem I hear a cry to live, and I can empathize. Don't ever lose your God-given passion for living, even when life's experiences try to dull and temper it. Our experiences are the ground in which we plant our words and actions, but the sky is the limit for how far we can grow and travel!

latina4life

7/21/2008 8:31 AM PDT

Nice job...
i love ur poems
they're very inspiring...
great job!!!!

GLFernandez

7/21/2008 7:39 AM PDT

I was so glad that you did not let anyone change your mind. Your mama is a hero... not only to you, but to every American who depends on her to defend us. A tribute to your mama!!! A wonderful thing.

GLFernandez

7/21/2008 7:36 AM PDT

Unafraid melted my heart. When he touched your hand and something wonderful happened... it sounded like love to me! Then when you walked hand in hand I was looking fof more.

GLFernandez

7/21/2008 7:32 AM PDT

I need to light the world is facinating. I like how you carry fear of rejection so well fom one scene to the next. I am sure that you will blanket the market with pazzaz!!!

smilingsunshine

7/21/2008 4:12 AM PDT

although she's still alive, it used to be my biggest fear that she'd kill herself from consumption.

just to make that clear...
but if you want to read where i got the talent from, check out "her rays beam just the same"

my mother wrote it and it's beautiful.

smilingsunshine

7/21/2008 4:09 AM PDT

just to clear things up, sorry for the disappointment: "mama's still a hero in my eyes" was inspiration i had. my biological mother is an alcoholic that i haven't seen in years. the poems i wrote about her are "gone" and "lavendar pieces."

i wish she had inspired me with more beauty, but sadly it's not the case.

Brinxas

7/20/2008 10:22 PM PDT

Beautiful and can be interpreted in so many ways!

daylilie

7/20/2008 7:45 PM PDT

amazing. You actually made me cry. Not because I can relate to the story, but for the message you gave , what you implied and the honor given to the hero.
amazing.

DayDreamingFool

7/20/2008 7:10 PM PDT

Your words are deep and scream like the sound of someone being cut by a knife. My heart aches the more I read, I cannot go on.... Bravo!

Amberjade

7/20/2008 5:16 PM PDT

Awesome........I just love reading other people's stuff. It inspires me to write more myself.

witness4HIM

7/20/2008 11:04 AM PDT

Heart-Trimming is simply marvelous in the way you associate your damaged hair and your heart impurities.

This is actually the first time I have had this brought to mind, always as a gardener pruning the pants, cutting the damaged and dead parts to insure that the new growth will emerge.

We all need to be trimmed in getting rid of un-glorifying parts of our walk with HIM, and HE is the only one that can successfully do this.

I like the way you want HIM to wash you u[p, clean you up, and make you what HE wants you to be.

witness4HIM

7/20/2008 10:54 AM PDT

Unafraid is beautifully written and I enjoyed the picture with words that you painted in HIS opening your hand and you walking together with the sunset to your back.

A new life and a new beginning is what this is and you haven't been given the oppression but a sound mind.

Wonderful!

Krispoems

7/20/2008 10:09 AM PDT

I really liked it. I love reading poetry, I love writing it even more!

cswandering

7/20/2008 9:29 AM PDT

mamas strength shines in you

witness4HIM

7/20/2008 9:28 AM PDT

Your poem Mama is till a Hero in My Eyes, would bring tears to the eyes of the reader as they feel the love and compassion in it through your Daddy, and your Mama.

Truly JESUS, the Just Man, did die for the sins of the world to set us free from the afflictions of the world.

What greater than than this- there is none.

witness4HIM

7/20/2008 9:20 AM PDT

A well written poem with thoughts and intentions of doing something other than just sitting there doing nothing.

I appreciate this poem due to the periods of time that I was for medical reasons, made to sit and do nothing, and because I had not the strength to do otherwise.

Your last stanza really speaks volumes of worth and I applaud you for it.

dylanway

7/20/2008 3:48 AM PDT

I really like that! it is so flowing! light as the taste of strowberries.
The power of the wind !
Sometimes I just leave my bad thoughts to fly away with the wind, it come and go like the wind !

kcmitch

7/19/2008 7:53 PM PDT

beautiful.

BaileyNB

7/19/2008 4:32 PM PDT

beautifully imagery and nice use of enjambment. i like how you bold some phrases within your stanzas, but i'm not sure that i like the word after 'i need to' being consistently bolded. know what i mean? nice work, though!

emo_tree_hugger

7/19/2008 1:19 PM PDT

omg i completely agree with xAnthonyx that was awesomely good

xAnthonyX

7/19/2008 8:52 AM PDT

holy crap thats really good

KylaMoriarty

7/19/2008 6:16 AM PDT

It's a beautiful poem with a beautiul ending, and very inspiring as well. All I can say is a great job well done, and I look forward to reading your other poems : )

BeautifulZeta

7/18/2008 8:12 PM PDT

I really loved the poems. "Unafraid" just speaks to me. I truly believe that sometimes our writings are not for us, but for others. Thanks. I needed it.

blairbuchanan

7/18/2008 6:22 PM PDT

"I need to light the world" is beautiful, I really identify with it.

QueenJay

7/18/2008 5:16 PM PDT

Great poem...
you remind me of a friend =)

devy5

7/18/2008 3:58 PM PDT

I love that poem, it expresses how important it is to stay true to The Lord regardless the temptations of sin that people go through today. Your work is really good. The only part that I didn't understand is when you said "gathering together to glorify your name and your light is falling" other than that I really like this poem.

JonasCullen

7/18/2008 3:38 PM PDT

Nice work, my favorite line was: "I could still hear her promise echoing through my soul" That one and "he reminded me that freedom isn't free" It's really touching.

JonasCullen

7/18/2008 3:34 PM PDT

Love this one, what a happy ending!! Gives people encouragement.

CarlosMeza

7/18/2008 3:08 PM PDT

...Enjoyed reading these poems. My favorite was " a pair of glass shoes".

JerryHarvey

7/18/2008 1:50 PM PDT

A gifted young writer with a great deal to say.

Bruce

7/18/2008 1:23 PM PDT

Very nice, I wasn't sure at first if she was going off to war or leaving for a sanitarium so she didn't hurt her kids, or maybe that was her inner war. Probably not, but interesting where the mind can go with good writing.

DayDreamingPoet

7/18/2008 1:22 PM PDT

Wow, great :)
Very nice work and imagery. I love how it just flows. You seem very professional :)
I hope you'll read some of my poetry if you haven't already :)

C_E_Faltum

7/18/2008 1:11 PM PDT

it is more hopeful than I know of now... so let it stand for a while.

Alexander

7/18/2008 12:45 PM PDT

Some very good stuff

Brattyfatoosh

7/18/2008 11:51 AM PDT

Wow, this is great, I love it. It's...inspiring. : D

Twilightfan

7/18/2008 10:26 AM PDT

Wow, that is really great! :-)

billy_aka_hill

7/18/2008 9:08 AM PDT

i love your writing

Angelic_Dreams

7/18/2008 8:52 AM PDT

Really great poetry
From the innner soul, connected to the basic emotions.
Its just wow.

mansello

7/18/2008 8:31 AM PDT

Thanks for writing and sharing

Buretto

7/18/2008 2:18 AM PDT

Beautiful inspiring poetry, absolutely amazing.

Rolphe

7/18/2008 2:06 AM PDT

I enjoyed reading this, as I have felt and still feel and will probably feel exactly this same way.

An interesting style too, very overt in a way, while still filled with symbolisms and the stylistic elements of poetry that I like.

One question. Why "screaming for other reasons than me" and not [e.g.] "screaming for reasons other than mine"?
Grammatically the sentence could be "screaming for other reasons than I am screaming [for]"? This is difficult to read and elision the would make "screaming for other reasons than I", which just sounds very pretentious.
I'm not saying that you should change it, I just like wondering why people choose the phrases that they do. That is the essence of language, how and why it differs from person to person and place to place.

Danya

7/18/2008 12:20 AM PDT

usually say, "poetry should not be rated"; but this is a 5.
I wrote a poem about reading too much poetry and the awfulness that resided in me afterward - about having pain of my own today and desiring a poem whose tongue was not a sword; but whose voice was a blanket made for shoulders too burdened with life to rest:

I was writing about poems I hadn't read yet - or not in a long time... poems like this one.
Thank-you!

bamafanforlife

7/17/2008 9:16 PM PDT

Awesome of collection of poetry.

zion

7/17/2008 9:12 PM PDT

I was just wondering the same thing, how do we add after been invited?

chord0

7/17/2008 7:42 PM PDT

thanks for the invitation, but I do not know how to add another poem, where does it say add another poem?
most of my contributions will be translations from Spanish, about love and struggles of life.
thanks
chord0