Looking for critique partners.  I will be posting the finished rough draft here for inspection.  But it is finished for all intents and purposes:

When Colonel Dale Pennington woke that morning, he had no idea that his life in the military would be over in less than two weeks and that he would be a paid assassin doing the bidding of a Secret Society that seemed all powerful, until he met their bosses.

When thirteen year old Andre Chavez ate his breakfast on the terrace of his family・s Villa ... more »

Looking for critique partners.  I will be posting the finished rough draft here for inspection.  But it is finished for all intents and purposes:

When Colonel Dale Pennington woke that morning, he had no idea that his life in the military would be over in less than two weeks and that he would be a paid assassin doing the bidding of a Secret Society that seemed all powerful, until he met their bosses.

When thirteen year old Andre Chavez ate his breakfast on the terrace of his family・s Villa in Cuba, he had no idea that the hunter would soon be the hunted.

What will happen when these two cross paths?  Will Dale be able to obey the rules or will he fall before he has a chance to learn them?  Less