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The WEbook community
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Poetry
Poetry
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Fiction
Fiction
Genre:
Biographies and Memoirs
Biographies and Memoirs
Language:
English
English
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Oops. my feedback seemed to mysteriously leep to another poem, I shall copy and paste the feedback below into the comment box for the poem I meant it for, and then return to give feedback on this one!!! Sorry - don't know what happened!
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I wouldn't necessarily suggest that this is ready to be published, I think you have a wonderful talent I just don't think that it has been properly harnessed yet, you have such inspirational comments to make on life and it's toils, I just think whilst your content glows with all of the possibility of a talented poet, your structure and technique could be tightened up around the edges. I'm not in a position to dictate what areas you should focus on in achieving this because I wouldn't want to encroach upon the style that you have already developed for yourself. I think with practice and more and more writing, you'll find that you work becomes naturally more precise.
You say on your profile that you really enjoy reading, I would recommend reading as much poetry as you can, including some of the less accurate work on the Internet to get a feel for what you love to read and what you don't, and this should give a little more focus to your writing as well.
The only correction I'll allow myself to make with this piece is that in the sixth line you show and inconsistency with grammar and punctuation, you use no punctuation at the end of the fifth line, but begin the six line with a capital letter.
You say on your profile that you really enjoy reading, I would recommend reading as much poetry as you can, including some of the less accurate work on the Internet to get a feel for what you love to read and what you don't, and this should give a little more focus to your writing as well.
The only correction I'll allow myself to make with this piece is that in the sixth line you show and inconsistency with grammar and punctuation, you use no punctuation at the end of the fifth line, but begin the six line with a capital letter.
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Hi Mel,
Your work should be published, you have a very gifted way of writing. Hopefully when I am finished with my project, I can have it voted on to be published. Write on girl, you have a message to tell.
Hugs,
Barbara
Your work should be published, you have a very gifted way of writing. Hopefully when I am finished with my project, I can have it voted on to be published. Write on girl, you have a message to tell.
Hugs,
Barbara
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Answers, as air to a gill... Nice! Upward Pointing Thumb!
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