General:
If you feel the need to change what I think is a great title, then change it to MAYBE WE SHOULD TALK. If it were any of the others, I probably would not pick it up to read it. You definitely need to stay with a catchy title.
In general it has the same problems as the other stories-grammar being a big one.
Again I would read it-once it has the tweaks fixed.
I do not know if I like so many bad words in it, but I loved the plot and the title-If that is how that person talks, then that's the way you have to write it I suppose.

Plot:
Perfect-need to shorten the about the book

Character Development:
I like the way it is going.

Structure:
Again that needs an editor's touch. Maybe rephrasing in places will make it flow better.

Tone/Voice:
Check your point of view making sure the right voice is being heard in each seperate scene.

Having only read the bump and tag-line so far, it's pretty easy to see where this novel is going. That's all right though - love-hate relationships are one of the tropes that I feel makes the world go 'round.

You've got a great start with this hook.

General:
Sounds awesome so far.

Plot:
Sounds like it would have a good plot line, as long as there'll be some type of conflict between the two of them.

Sounds good!

it is good but could be better, i got bored at points, but it was instring at other overall good job.

i love the name liam.....just thought i'd put that out there :)

I have read the whole story up to this point and it has an interesting concept as a story, but it definately needs some work. I apologize if this critique is a bit long, but I have lots of advice to give you for your writing process, so please read all of it and take everything into consideration!!!!

I like what you've done with the early plot development; the conflict is clear almost immediately. Your pacing of the story is good, too--no one wants a good read to go too slow or too fast.

The characterization is very forward, and maybe the story could be a bit more appealing to higher age levels if it had a more sophisticated edge (using different grammatical styles to switch up the structure, which attracts very advanced readers). The dialogue is very realistic--I like  it, because it reminds me of actual high school cnversation--but, at times, it seems very repetative and needs to be switched up a little. Grammatically, there are lots of errors, which can be removed in the editing process, but improving the grammer styles, again, is encouraged.

When it comes to the tone, yours is very appripriate for this type of story. The amount of swearing is based on you personal preference, but it would be wise to consider your target audience of readers for the story. Are you aiming for just older teens, or also adults? Pigeon-holing yourself into one group of readers effects the potential popularity and number of readers for your book.

The wording can, at times, make your intents for the story confusing. Before posting more, it's important to check back over your work in case any grammer, diction, or syntax errors are hiding from you. Your mission: search and destroy. Be careful when editing, and ask others for help if you aren't sure about ANYTHING. It is always good to have backup support.

Overall, I like the story so far and want to read more, so keep up the good work. Please keep the comments from this critique in mind when writing more work to post. I hope it's helpful to you! -^.^-

Like it so far, has potential to be star-crossed lovers type book.

I read the title and was like WOW. This is probably the best book to read when your in an argument with someone it's amazing.
And it's just so true, you just captured it all in the title with some people hating them is just too easy! Oh i love it :)
I love the plot so far, haven't finished reading it, but trust me i will.
Love it <3

Awesome story, easy to relate to as a teenager.

OH yeah this is going into my reading list for SURE! <3

I'm in! <3

Love the picture you choose.  I thought the title is catchy and you long description.  I guess you're working on the short description as it's not displaying. 

Only one amendment:

Now that they live next to each other their going to have to agree on a arrangement to make this work.  ('their' should be 'they're')

Oh,yeah; I am definetly reading this.

This sounds good!! I will have to read it soon =]

XxIvyXx

awesome my  name is missy

Eww, it's you

I think that'd be a good title

General:
Thrilling... XD Dirty thoughts. sorry. I'm a perv, but I will read tomorrow. It's late right now.


Character Development:
Isn't it just wonderful? She's gullible enough to think her snobby friends are nice. *shakes head* Poor girl.

It's a good idea. I will definitely read it! ^__^

Haha love this!

sounds cute:)

I love Bookfan13's idea: On Second Thought... I Hate You!
If you don't use it- I might have to snitch it for meself! lol

I like Love to hate and Me and you never!

Please tell me if you like any of them. I hate my title right now.

Ideas for titles.

Hatred is key here.
Not a sappy love story.
Enemies for ever and all ways.
Love to hate.
Hating you is just too easy.
Maybe we should talk.
Hate.
Me and you, never!
Eww, it’s you.
Hatred is fun.
The sad truth of Liam and Missy.

hmmm maybe The enemie next door? its just an idea

General:
Title ideas:

Plain Wrong, Man

On Second Thought... I Hate You.

Public Enemies

You can come up with your own, but I saw the "not sure about title". These pretty suck anyway, but I'd like to spark ideas in your own brain.

Plot:
It sounds HILARIOUS! I'm looking forward to reading.

~Courtney