well done! i love Bipolar Distress the best - very well written! i vote publish! please vote for me if you have the time! =) http://www.webook.com/project/Cazza3000-WEbook-Poetry-Vote-2009 xox

Enjoyed the work. Publish!

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Bipolar Distress is the poem i vote yes for.
However, all 3 are excellent.
Good luck:)

Thanks for all the comments, and appreciated support guys... ;-)

Oh the Orange Sonnet... the poem is NOT meant to be a sonnet. The sunrise is the 'sonnet'. to which i refer.

Gutted about the 'leeks' typo...it amazes me that i went through it so many times and still didn't see such an obvious mistake. Apologies readers!.

Shah .X

All three poems are vividly written.  "Bipolar Distress" is excellent, with its use of parallel structure and repetition to reinforce the theme.  'The Orange Sonnet" has a couple of typos that caused momentary stumbles (such as "leeks" for "leaks"), and it doesn't actually seem to fit the meter and rhyme scheme of a sonnet, but it's well done, nonetheless.  "Spirits of Memory" is short and to the point, but no less powerful than the others.

All in all, well done!

Traci
http://www.webook.com/project/Communion

A real pleasure to read your work.....

You certainly captured the disorder in Bipolar Distress, I found it somewhat depressing just because it would be  a great burden on the one with that disorder and the loved ones of them.

I really enjoyed the imagery in The Orange Sonnet. My favourite line was "So quickly such a day of beauty leeks into silver starry diamond nights, ". Excellent!

Spirits of Memory is very clever in its own way. Well done.

You have my vote.

Very nice, I like your writing style. Voted ! (:

Very nice poetry, I vote yes. Good luck!

All three entries are top drawer.

You are a truly inspiring poet.

Great work and the best of luck with the competition.

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bipolar distress is the gem of these three with spirits of memeory a close second, thumbs up

Voted to publish!

voted. :)

voted to publish

I remember reading Bipolar Distress before, and enjoyed its relevance again this time through.  I'm not sure I get the question marks in the first lines of the first and third stanzas, but that's neither here nor there.  Nice work.  Thanks for stopping by my project.  I appreciate it.

There is indeed a quiet introspective inherent in all three, you have a very nice way with words, and I can tell probably that you are an artist too, in the way that you paint the picture in the readers mind.  I didn't have a favourite, I liked all three for different reasons.  Well done and wish you well.

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Nice Job. You have my vote. Good luck.

Thank you all for your time and support. Shah .X

Good luck with the vote.

Thanks for voting for me.

Spirits of Memory is my favorite.  Good work.

I liked spirits of memory best

Very nice I like the bottom one best! Good luck I voted for you.

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Love them all, but Bipolar is my favourite one. Perfectly descriptive.

Very intricately done..:) good one!

Great job!

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Just voted.

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The element connecting the two parts of the third poem, is in bold? Spirits being the memories, which it says in the title, are strong in denial, then lay in strips when 'accepted'! The raw less flowery language of Bipolar Distress is purposeful, in that there is nothing flowery about the disorder... moods are ecplicit... its the nature of the disorder i am writing about and portraying... hense the language use. I'm glad you liked the Orang Sonnet. But the difference in the three is to illustrate that different subjects require a different structure and different language...Each subject required an individual stance.

Many thanks. Shah. X

I think the poems reflect a strong creative drive and vivid imagination, filled with color.  "The Orange Sonnet" is the most complete of all, as it takes the mind to a moment in time when the speaker is looking back and contemplating a long life and a lost love (perhaps).  The sunset is symbolically replaced by the idea of the orange sonnet, so that it is as if the sun itself were the inspiration to meditate.  The opening line is gracious, playful, magical, and it immediately brings into the poem the deep emotions of the speaker.  Then the reason for that one tear is revealed: "The certainties of youth are replaced by the uncertainties of age" and the poem moves on to speak of "thief" time and the passionate love of youth, "wrapped in your lithe arms
between cool cotton sheets," yet another powerful image.  At the end it all returns to the sunset, which now becomes the sunset of life, near the end.  A great poem.  I felt like the last three lines were anticlimactic, and you could easily end it at "beneath this orange sonnet," without having to explicitly tell the reader what the message, but rather let the reader take away just from the hidden meanings in the poem.
As far as "Bipolar Distress," I mainly liked the mirroring effect between the first two and the last two stanzas, creating a play of opposites that is, of course, the theme of the poem.  In the first part the speaker is "all you hope to be," which in the second half changes cleverly to "but never hope to be."  The only piece missing here is the imagery and more ornate language you used in "The Orange Sonnet," so that it makes it a little less appealing and too explicit in its message.  Finally, "Spirits of Memory" uses great descriptive language but it lacks an element connecting the two parts.
Overall, great work, with some casual interesting grammatical constructions that might interrupt the flow.  Good luck!

I voted.

My vote is yours!

Check out mine if you got some time;
http://www.webook.com/project/Born-of-The-Sun

Love, love, love "Bipolar Distress": honestly one the best poems I have ever read.

Defo publish

GOOD SWAP VERY GOOD BUT I DO WANNA READ THE OTHER PUBLISH

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You are a natural...I love reading your Poetry, it is raw and it is pure.  Your ability amazes me again and again.  I know I will always get to read something different, it's like a surprise parcel you can't wait to open.  You give the reader your all every time.  Your Poetry and the way you craft it deserves to be published.  I thought I'd just stop by and leave my vote and best wishes, not to forget my love.  I am truly proud to know you, the honourable person you are, love Wennie xxxhugs

Just started ere an this is good stuff. Publish definately.

Nice work!

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amazing poetry!  keep writing!  i hope your poetry gets published!!!

This is absolutely outstanding! Gave me "goosebumps" you have the gift it seems! Well done!

Your poetry is very powerful. I love them!
You have my vote!

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SO much thanks to ALL of your support. Amazing... truely amazing. I'm stunned at all the praise, really. And from those i most respect too. Brilliant.. Thank you guys and gals. And best of luck to you all!! Shah. X

Great work.  You have my vote.

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Well Done Shah you desrve to get these published!!!! xxx love SIS in Law

Oooh, I like this one a lot. I love the imagery.

Lovely poem!

Publish!!!

I vote yes, and you will be on your way to be a great writer.

These poems are among the most deserving to be published.

Thanks for sharing them.

I told you I would vote long before.. so here I am. Good work.

i agree, these poems deserved to be published. you got my vote.

These are definitely worthy of publication. First, they are finely composed and second, especially the first, very healing.
'Spirits of Memory' is a brilliant piece.

You got my vote. I had read yours before. just hadnt come back to vote yet.

This one gets my vote!  Awesome.
-WendyWac

Brilliant work... Publish for sure!!! Hubs. X

great show of poetry with the first being very powerful...
PUBLISH!


if you want to find mine:

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I voted for this and MarkBrad's poems. Good work! :D

very good reading, well done


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this is increibly intense, so well done

Perhaps my favorite by you yet.

voted!

Publish this!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

I have to say these were really good! But the best one for me was Bipolar Distress. Great job, you've won my vote.

~A.J

Great poems :)
I'm not expert but they are really good and I enjoyed reading them :)
Amber :)

"Bipolar Distress"

This one is powerful.


Great work.

Great selection!

General:
Bipolar Distress clearly conveyed the inner world you chose to share.  Well done.

Content:
My favorite part of The Orange Sonnet was the last three lines.

Musicality:
I enjoyed the "Denial" stanza's flow, especially "tiny, timid lies."  Unfortunately, the overall message in that poem escaped me.

I like the first and last one so it's a yes from me.

Publish

Hi Shah!

Have cast my vote.  Wishing you more luck!

A yes vote.

think your orange sonnet very  well crafted, as are all of your works, i hope you make it.

vote submitted...

All the best.

go girl.  You know how I love these.  great submissions.  Good luck.

I especially liked the first poem 'Bipolar Distress', I work with adults with learning difficulties and mental illness and I see the distress first hand.  Well done Shah!

Hazel x

A wonderful selection ~shawh. Sweet!   ... :0)

My best regards and support,

~g

Ok so these are the final three. Not sure if i have made the right choice even now, but still. I guess i will find out. Thank you everyone for your touching comments and support. Please keep reading, and if you think i might deserve your vote, PLEASE DO VOTE! ;-) XXX Love Shah.

I have also entered the vote and would love to help you out! Going to check your poems out ---->

I would just like to sincerely thank all of you who take the time to look at my poems, and to leave feed back. Its a busy time when loyalty is tugged at and favours are asked from all directions, so it means a lot.

Love Shah. XX