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My Poetic Trilogy
I write poems for different reasons, not the least of which is to express my observations of the human condition. I enjoy writing poetry but I find it harder than writing short stories or novels, which comes much more easily to me. I hope my fellow WEbookers will find the three I’ve chosen for this voting cycle to be worthy of their vote.
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8/31/2009 11:06 AM PDT
Returning the favor since you looked at mine. These are great. I vote yes.
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8/31/2009 12:45 AM PDT
Three great poems, my favourite was 'One Rainy Day'. Definite yes from me.
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8/30/2009 4:57 PM PDT
wow you're poems are so beautiful! the first one is so romantic, i think i just fell in love with you! and the second one is mind blowing! the last one is amazing too! VOTE!
and thanks for voting for me btw! =) xox
and thanks for voting for me btw! =) xox
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8/30/2009 12:53 PM PDT
Great Job. Beautiful poems. Form, content, imagery, tone, musicality, all great!
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8/30/2009 12:23 PM PDT
I enjoyed these very much. You are very talented. Publish!
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8/30/2009 8:21 AM PDT
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8/28/2009 8:10 AM PDT
My vote and support I give. Your second submission moved me to tears. The third, I very much enjoyed the imagery it creates despite the depth of sadness.
Your talent, to me, is unquestionable.
Best of luck!
Your talent, to me, is unquestionable.
Best of luck!
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8/27/2009 9:44 PM PDT
One Rainy Day was beautiful; the rhyme clever and not overworked. Extremely resonating.
Good luck!
Good luck!
8/25/2009 7:39 PM PDT
Very nice......I like the third one best.
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8/24/2009 7:30 AM PDT
8/24/2009 6:48 AM PDT
You already know my thoughts on your works, I think they are truly sublime and, as a budding poet, I find them very motivating.
Truly the very best of luck with the vote, you are an inspiration.
Truly the very best of luck with the vote, you are an inspiration.
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8/21/2009 3:46 PM PDT
This really got to me . its great!
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8/20/2009 7:55 AM PDT
This is an EXCELLENT selection and entry. Hands down among the best poems I have read. Incredible talent. If this set of poems isn't published, the whole WEbook project would be a farce.
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8/19/2009 3:01 PM PDT
These poems were full of sadness and longing and a little hope! They had rich imagery and I loved the twist on "ONe Rainy Day" Really very touching!
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8/18/2009 4:50 AM PDT
Publish!
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8/16/2009 9:57 AM PDT
Absolutely beautiful!!!!
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8/15/2009 7:44 PM PDT
Wonderful job.
The content is mature and the form is delicious. Very insightful commentary into the self.
The content is mature and the form is delicious. Very insightful commentary into the self.
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8/15/2009 1:08 PM PDT
Very good! I loved them all! My favorite though was One Rainy Day. Excellent job and thanks for the vote!
8/15/2009 12:59 AM PDT
First of all Thanks for voting for my poetry, really, really apreciated.
Next I love your poems, specially 'one rainy day' its just fantastic
I practically got a shiver at the final line...its great
PUBLISH
Next I love your poems, specially 'one rainy day' its just fantastic
I practically got a shiver at the final line...its great
PUBLISH
8/14/2009 5:16 PM PDT
of course, PUBLISH!
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8/14/2009 2:41 PM PDT
publish!!
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8/13/2009 7:24 AM PDT
Different style which works wonders on the mind. Here's my vote
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8/12/2009 9:39 PM PDT
Like this greatly, brilliant, publish
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8/12/2009 3:28 PM PDT
very emotional poems, feels like a doorway to your most intermate feelings, very strong. spot on :-)
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8/11/2009 7:49 PM PDT
Publish (=
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8/11/2009 7:48 PM PDT
Very good!
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8/10/2009 8:40 PM PDT
Wonderful Dear Poet, I would love to see you published because your written word stands out. In all its beauty and astonishing expression, it flows like a mighty, pure river in torrent, getting into hearts everywhere. You have the skills and you have the gift, that amazing talent. You craft words so famously. It is always a great pleasure to read your Poetry, I look forward to reading your Poems in beautiful ink and enjoying the proud moment with you, JJ with your great faith, you've already climbed the mountain, now enjoy your dream moment, love Wennie xxxhugs
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8/10/2009 5:34 PM PDT
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you are great poet my friend you mssh words with care love feeling this can not be taught God bless always mike
you are great poet my friend you mssh words with care love feeling this can not be taught God bless always mike
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8/10/2009 12:39 PM PDT
Very beautiful writing. This is one of the best I have seen so far! Good luck.
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8/10/2009 4:24 AM PDT
thumbs up!!
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8/9/2009 1:08 PM PDT
General:
You have my vote, first because you voted for mine, and because I love ur style. The second two are by far my favourites and 'One Rainy Day' in particular, so sad and desperate. I'd like to take you out for lunch!
the first line is the best, by far!
good work, friend!
Imagery:
'One Rainy Day' certainly allows me to imagine this old man sitting with you and the look of dismay on your face when you see it's you....
You have my vote, first because you voted for mine, and because I love ur style. The second two are by far my favourites and 'One Rainy Day' in particular, so sad and desperate. I'd like to take you out for lunch!
the first line is the best, by far!
good work, friend!
Imagery:
'One Rainy Day' certainly allows me to imagine this old man sitting with you and the look of dismay on your face when you see it's you....
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8/9/2009 11:54 AM PDT
I liked the second two the best, but the last one seems to get you in a rythm and then throw you off at the end. good luck. i'll give you my vote.
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8/9/2009 6:00 AM PDT
Very beautiful
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8/9/2009 3:22 AM PDT
Voted publish, My favorite is "A Haunting Moon" - I can't resist how you managed to rhyme Marcel Marceau in there and it is full by other powerful images. I also like "One Rainy Day" very much.
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8/8/2009 6:10 PM PDT
I have always found your work a joy, I am just not that organised or confident in critiquing other's work, if I see something I feel could work in a different way I try to share that, but to comment beyond the usual fantastic and beautiful remarks takes me out of my own basic poetry zone, often I just don't see the need for change, but I do read peoples work, including many of your own, anyway enough rambling from me, you chose very well for your 3, I would like to see rainy day get through, that was by far the best in my eyes, I wish you success, and leave you a thumbs up, Dante
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8/8/2009 5:42 PM PDT
JJ I was one of the first people to vote for you. I voted a long time ago. I voted for you on the first, How could I not.
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8/8/2009 5:20 PM PDT
Hi Lynn,
There is nothing wrong with leaving a link to your poems with your comment on someone else's submission. In fact, WEbook encourages it. We are a community of writers and, as such, are meant to be a community and reach out and share with others. Our votes are not the votes that decide what gets published. WEbook is a professional publishing company and the voting is done by their staff of critics and editors.
And, by the way Lynn, I had already voted to publish your work.
I hope everybody who submitted poems in the vote were generous enough to read all 44 pages of submissions and leave comments. I did, and I think it's our obligation as part of the WEbook community to do so. Especially if we submitted poems to the voting cycle.
There is nothing wrong with leaving a link to your poems with your comment on someone else's submission. In fact, WEbook encourages it. We are a community of writers and, as such, are meant to be a community and reach out and share with others. Our votes are not the votes that decide what gets published. WEbook is a professional publishing company and the voting is done by their staff of critics and editors.
And, by the way Lynn, I had already voted to publish your work.
I hope everybody who submitted poems in the vote were generous enough to read all 44 pages of submissions and leave comments. I did, and I think it's our obligation as part of the WEbook community to do so. Especially if we submitted poems to the voting cycle.
8/8/2009 1:03 PM PDT
Good. Maybe a little sad...it sort of reminds me
of W.B.Yeats poetry, just in the flow of your words.
of W.B.Yeats poetry, just in the flow of your words.
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8/8/2009 12:00 PM PDT
nice work, a little sad mostly, loved the concept in one rainy day, getting a look at your future self, I voted yes.
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8/8/2009 11:27 AM PDT
I love these poems! One Rainy Day is AMAZING!
I agree that plugging your own project on someone else's page is somewhat dirty, however what are those of us on page 40 supposed to do to get people to notice us? No one goes through every page, and the person with the best poetry might be stuck in the back somewhere, never to be discovered. So, if you all like the flow of these poems, check out "The Poetry of Storytelling."
I agree that plugging your own project on someone else's page is somewhat dirty, however what are those of us on page 40 supposed to do to get people to notice us? No one goes through every page, and the person with the best poetry might be stuck in the back somewhere, never to be discovered. So, if you all like the flow of these poems, check out "The Poetry of Storytelling."
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8/7/2009 11:18 PM PDT
Your work is very powerful. I especially enjoyed "One Rainy Day" because it flowed well and it formed a cohesive story. Well done. You have my vote.
Keep up the awesomeness, indeed.
Keep up the awesomeness, indeed.
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8/7/2009 11:17 PM PDT
I like your work, especially "One Rainy Day". It's a yes. If you'd care to look at mine, you can find it by searching "Destini's Trifecta". Good luck.
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8/7/2009 10:26 PM PDT
Actually Annabob, you are mistaken in thinking that that’s why we leave our links to our own poetry. The judging is done by Webook’s own judges. If that weren’t the case no one would bother entering. The only reason we leave links to our own work is so that we can share it with others. That’s what these writer’s sites are about; sharing and learning from one another.
8/7/2009 10:00 PM PDT
I can't, in good conscience, vote for someone who leaves votes with a link on nearly everyone's submission just to get votes for him/herself.
I don't even have a submission. I'm just a fan of poetry and fair play.
I don't even have a submission. I'm just a fan of poetry and fair play.
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8/7/2009 6:00 PM PDT
All three are wonderful, and I think any or all of them would make a terrific addition to the anthology.
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8/7/2009 3:55 PM PDT
Longing is beautiful :)
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8/7/2009 12:59 PM PDT
Definitely got my vote, One Rainy Day in particular is very strong.
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8/7/2009 8:50 AM PDT
very touching work...and you do well with rhyming.
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8/7/2009 3:24 AM PDT
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8/7/2009 12:51 AM PDT
GREAT!!!U GOT MY VOTE
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8/6/2009 7:06 PM PDT
Wonderful and beautifully written. Such beautiful poems. I have voted publish.
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8/6/2009 7:02 PM PDT
Thanks for leading me to your poetry. Your play on words are great. The rainy day was especially mysterious. I really love how you played both parts and in the end it was actually just you all along.
The other two remind me of life's duty. It should be fulfilling, happy, and not so sad all the time. You write actuality which is most of our dreams never come true and the majority of those in life end up alone after having so many friends.
You have my vote
Niyah
http://www.webook.com/project/Pain-of-another
The other two remind me of life's duty. It should be fulfilling, happy, and not so sad all the time. You write actuality which is most of our dreams never come true and the majority of those in life end up alone after having so many friends.
You have my vote
Niyah
http://www.webook.com/project/Pain-of-another
8/6/2009 5:11 PM PDT
Wonderful, true to life poems. I enjoyed reading eveyone of them.
It's a YES vote!
And thank you on kind comment on my work.
It's a YES vote!
And thank you on kind comment on my work.
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8/6/2009 3:04 PM PDT
Wonderful! I really enjoyed reading these!
You have my yes vote!
~Kate
You have my yes vote!
~Kate
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8/6/2009 11:32 AM PDT
I searched high and low scrolling up and down looking for my face but it couldn't be found. I was sure I had been here and given you my vote but now and for sure You can bet you have my vote. Good luck. You deserve to be chosen for publication. You are one of the best poets here.
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8/6/2009 8:41 AM PDT
I've noticed your work before and it's encouraging that someone I respect enjoys my work. Thank you, and of course you have my vote.
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8/6/2009 6:39 AM PDT
lovely read.
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8/5/2009 5:15 PM PDT
Such complete and compact worlds you spin,
With whimsy and a dash of sorrow too.
Such complex reversals--every loss a win...
I, sir, shall gladly vote for you.
With whimsy and a dash of sorrow too.
Such complex reversals--every loss a win...
I, sir, shall gladly vote for you.
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8/5/2009 2:25 PM PDT
Heartfelt! You have an excellent sense of rhythm; your work flows beautifully. And the rhyme, when the poem has it, is never forced. Unlike the others, my favorite of these three is Longing. So bittersweet....
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8/5/2009 12:09 PM PDT
wow, this is really great!
http://www.webook.com/project/Three-Poems-From-My-Freshman-Year-In-High-School
http://www.webook.com/project/Three-Poems-From-My-Freshman-Year-In-High-School
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8/5/2009 12:06 PM PDT
I voted <3
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8/5/2009 8:49 AM PDT
You know that I am a fan of your work, and I have been for some time now. My only hope is for you to excel in whatever you may do. I pray that they recognize the work that so many of us have already been compelled by. Be blessed~
Crys
Crys
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8/5/2009 6:54 AM PDT
definately got my vote
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8/5/2009 12:13 AM PDT
Tone:
The tone of your work is extraordinary. It builds a story line and cascades into a decadent feeling of emotion as it catches readers on a live train of heartfilled expression and tenderness as not to over indulge but dramatically get your point across.
The tone of your work is extraordinary. It builds a story line and cascades into a decadent feeling of emotion as it catches readers on a live train of heartfilled expression and tenderness as not to over indulge but dramatically get your point across.
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8/4/2009 9:25 PM PDT
I've always been a fan of your work and would like nothing more right now then to see your trilogy of poems be published!
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8/4/2009 7:27 PM PDT
Of the three, I think "One Rainy Day" touched me most. It feels more creative to me. The rhyme scheme and flow and the ending, how it glows. I like it best. You've got my vote. Good luck to you my friend.
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8/4/2009 4:34 PM PDT
My vote is yours! And well deserved.
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8/4/2009 1:50 PM PDT
I really like this and say publish!
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8/4/2009 10:37 AM PDT
All three deserve the vote they've gotten and that's a hearty yes.
http://www.webook.com/project/My-Top-Three
I love the emotions carried within them. The sense of loss but hope in the first along with the concept of time and true love or at least what we believe it to be,being the only thing that it cannot really erase.
The second also embodies time and sometimes our inability to accept the toll that it has taken upon us. I personally think the majority of us have what I like to call Peter Pan syndrome where even when we find our hands lined by time we cannot grasp it but if we did grasp it I don't think we would put in effort to do anything.
The last once more speaks of time and loss but a sense of hopelessness.
I look forward to reading more from you sir.
http://www.webook.com/project/My-Top-Three
I love the emotions carried within them. The sense of loss but hope in the first along with the concept of time and true love or at least what we believe it to be,being the only thing that it cannot really erase.
The second also embodies time and sometimes our inability to accept the toll that it has taken upon us. I personally think the majority of us have what I like to call Peter Pan syndrome where even when we find our hands lined by time we cannot grasp it but if we did grasp it I don't think we would put in effort to do anything.
The last once more speaks of time and loss but a sense of hopelessness.
I look forward to reading more from you sir.
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8/4/2009 10:02 AM PDT
you got my vote
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8/4/2009 4:21 AM PDT
Gets my vote JJ.
"One Rainy Day" is an absolute diamond.
"One Rainy Day" is an absolute diamond.
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8/4/2009 12:37 AM PDT
Voted!
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8/3/2009 11:12 PM PDT
one of favorites! voted YeS
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8/3/2009 10:47 PM PDT
General:
Always a lovely flow and rhythm to your work. And you know how to play on the emotions.
Form:
Your poems are exquisitely structured.
Content:
Always your experience and caring for the plight of others comes through loud and clear.
Imagery:
You have an easy, natural talent with excellent imagery set against the background of human experience.
Musicality:
Always music to my ears you make the words sing.
Always a lovely flow and rhythm to your work. And you know how to play on the emotions.
Form:
Your poems are exquisitely structured.
Content:
Always your experience and caring for the plight of others comes through loud and clear.
Imagery:
You have an easy, natural talent with excellent imagery set against the background of human experience.
Musicality:
Always music to my ears you make the words sing.
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8/3/2009 10:15 PM PDT
These should be read by a lot more people, really liked the rainy day one, excellent & good luck :)
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8/3/2009 9:42 PM PDT
Publish!!! You write so well and your imagination is a large as your heart is big! Good Job, J.J.
http://www.webook.com/poetry.aspx?p=ac366f04cc1f4161a8d81d0459a3ca18&sit=bad16a55819d4b7fa4b6b33ec3ec6006
http://www.webook.com/poetry.aspx?p=ac366f04cc1f4161a8d81d0459a3ca18&sit=bad16a55819d4b7fa4b6b33ec3ec6006
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8/3/2009 9:13 PM PDT
Great job! Voted yes!
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8/3/2009 8:57 PM PDT
I love the stories you intertwine into your poems! My vote is yes!
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8/3/2009 8:50 PM PDT
oh that touched my heart so deep. You're awesome! Thank you for sharing this. :)
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8/3/2009 6:06 PM PDT
Thakes a STRONG man to write like this! touched my soul you did! VOTED!
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8/3/2009 4:53 PM PDT
You've done yourself proud, I am really enthralled by One Rainy Day. Your great talent deserves to be recognised. Three thumbs up...
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8/3/2009 4:40 PM PDT
Content:
I love how you write. It is simple and descriptive, it is very easy to read and absorb within your heart. It makes you think about life. I love your poetry. Thank you for voting for my poetry.
Sincerely,
Tamara0449
I love how you write. It is simple and descriptive, it is very easy to read and absorb within your heart. It makes you think about life. I love your poetry. Thank you for voting for my poetry.
Sincerely,
Tamara0449
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8/3/2009 11:30 AM PDT
these poems invoke imagery, metaphor, theme, and good rhyme.. making a fine wine..
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8/3/2009 10:51 AM PDT
Your words simply define the words poetry...I enjoy reading your works so much...yes the book would be less if your work was not included....got my vote
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8/3/2009 10:41 AM PDT
With your poetry this book will be so much better off
Publish
Publish
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8/3/2009 9:47 AM PDT
Oh yes you have my vote as well
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8/3/2009 8:07 AM PDT
indeed! i vote publish.
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8/3/2009 7:54 AM PDT
My vote has been cast for you, jj.... good luck!
http://www.webook.com/project/Three-of-my-best-Poems
http://www.webook.com/project/Three-of-my-best-Poems
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8/3/2009 5:43 AM PDT
General:
You have a brilliant writing style and each of these poems has its own appeal.
Very good work!
Form:
The form of all your poems works very well and you show you can write with rhyme and without. You manage to keep each poem well structured in its own special way.
Content:
I have to say 'One rainy day' is my favourite poem by far as its content is so rich.
You manage to tell the story so well and the twist at the end is brilliant.
Imagery:
You are very creative in your use of imagery.
'A haunting moon' is so rich in description and I can picture the scene perfectly.
In your other two poems in which you tell a story, I can picture the surrounding and emotions perfectly. This is very well done.
You have a brilliant writing style and each of these poems has its own appeal.
Very good work!
Form:
The form of all your poems works very well and you show you can write with rhyme and without. You manage to keep each poem well structured in its own special way.
Content:
I have to say 'One rainy day' is my favourite poem by far as its content is so rich.
You manage to tell the story so well and the twist at the end is brilliant.
Imagery:
You are very creative in your use of imagery.
'A haunting moon' is so rich in description and I can picture the scene perfectly.
In your other two poems in which you tell a story, I can picture the surrounding and emotions perfectly. This is very well done.
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8/3/2009 12:22 AM PDT
Excellent choices. Pub this WEbook!
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8/3/2009 12:19 AM PDT
amazing poetry; my vote is a yes, no doubt.
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8/3/2009 12:16 AM PDT
"One Rainy Day" - my favorite! OH yes, you definitely have my vote :)
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8/2/2009 10:11 PM PDT
Fabulous! I wish you the best of luck. :)
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8/2/2009 9:55 PM PDT
I definitely enjoyed your poems. They convey your feelings very well. They also manage to rhyme, a trait that I, alas, admire but am unable to apply to my own writings. Good job. I really hope that you make it to publishing.
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8/2/2009 9:11 PM PDT
"One Rainy Day" was definitely my favorite! All had their good points, but this was great story telling with poetic flow and a beautiful clever twist!
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8/2/2009 8:52 PM PDT
I'm in love with your poem "Longing" This poem has such a great flow. It has a flow of love, sadness, but also a dark edge to it. that is just great. love it when the words have their own voice.
Though I thought that the last stanza, where we find out who the speaker was referring to should be the opening stanza. But maybe re-thinking it again that is what made this poems good.
In the 3rd stanza first line the flow of words didn't sound to good. Consider something like this "The other day I saw you at the park," something amongst those lines would create a better flow.
I love your poem. Its so beautiful and descriptive.
You have my vote!!!
Best of wishes Ana
Though I thought that the last stanza, where we find out who the speaker was referring to should be the opening stanza. But maybe re-thinking it again that is what made this poems good.
In the 3rd stanza first line the flow of words didn't sound to good. Consider something like this "The other day I saw you at the park," something amongst those lines would create a better flow.
I love your poem. Its so beautiful and descriptive.
You have my vote!!!
Best of wishes Ana
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8/2/2009 8:08 PM PDT
A Haunting Moon is my fave JJ...All the best :)
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8/2/2009 8:08 PM PDT
My favorite one had to be "A Haunting Moon." The rest were brilliant as well, but this one definatley stood out more to me.
Publish!
Publish!
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8/2/2009 7:38 PM PDT
I particularly like the poem "One Rainy Day" and the sentiments expressed within.
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8/2/2009 7:32 PM PDT
A yes for publishing. Of the three my favorite is "A Haunting Moon," probably because of its richer imagery, conciseness, and its contemplative mood. I did appreciate your intro and I can see the ease you possess in story telling, especially "One Rainy Day," where you create a nice twist and tell a beautiful story. "Longing" uses very simple language and not a lot of imagery, yet it exceeds in the depth and honesty of feeling. Great work!
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8/2/2009 7:17 PM PDT
I love these so much! You have a whole lot of talent. Publish :)
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8/2/2009 6:50 PM PDT
Good Poems. Like the Longing one best.
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8/2/2009 6:03 PM PDT
voted!
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8/2/2009 5:08 PM PDT
Thanks evryone.
8/2/2009 3:53 PM PDT
These are great, you get a yes from me. Good luck!
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8/2/2009 2:40 PM PDT
If there was only one vote allowed, in good conscousness it would most certainly have to be for your work. poet laureate of Webook and future best seller I'm sure one day. you know you have my vote. ..........Russ♫♪♫♪♥♥♥
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8/2/2009 2:15 PM PDT
You're a good poet so a yes vote.
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8/2/2009 2:08 PM PDT
good poemes. I too enjoy'd the image of self realization in Rainy Day. While one can see the saddness wihing all three, I think that is mearly the outer display which hides the true depth and joy inside. The undying love and supporting of your love even though though that meant letting them go. And then while it is sad to say that w/o the one we love the moon itself has no glow, how grand must that love have been to make the ordinary become so much more. The moon may now be just a moon and no more then some rocks, but when seen by love and affection sure, the Moon itself will talk. There is far more than just sadness in these poems and it is nice to read. Good job.
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8/2/2009 2:01 PM PDT
General:
Good form..My vote is yes
Form:
different types but all good
Content:
A lot of sadness here in all 3
Imagery:
Great imagery..nice word pictures
Tone:
Very dark
Good form..My vote is yes
Form:
different types but all good
Content:
A lot of sadness here in all 3
Imagery:
Great imagery..nice word pictures
Tone:
Very dark
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8/2/2009 12:13 PM PDT
I enjoyed the twist at the end of One Rainy Day, as well as your "enigmatic hunch."
Good luck! nancy
Good luck! nancy
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8/2/2009 11:27 AM PDT
Also, I love your poem, One Rainy Day.
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8/2/2009 11:26 AM PDT
Amazing. You are already published, I can feel it.
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8/2/2009 7:41 AM PDT
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8/2/2009 6:55 AM PDT
Haunting imagery, romantic and spiritual essence, and a pure gift for the unexpected make your poems a true joy to experience. I hope to see you in print, I vote yes!
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8/2/2009 4:18 AM PDT
but of course my friend,
You are worthy of many, many votes,
along with mine,
with luck I send.
tuesday_rayne
You are worthy of many, many votes,
along with mine,
with luck I send.
tuesday_rayne
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8/2/2009 2:49 AM PDT
Loved all three JJ. My favourite being 'One Rainy Day' It surely is a classic and must be published. All the best luck in the world with them
Howard
Howard
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8/2/2009 2:23 AM PDT
May you get many more votes. Good luck, Josh !
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8/1/2009 8:35 PM PDT
Love your work, there is no way, I would not vote for you, my friend.
CretiaD
CretiaD
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8/1/2009 7:59 PM PDT
I'm rooting for you, JJ! So glad you submitted these three!
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8/1/2009 6:05 PM PDT
JJ you already know how highly i think of you as a writer. Your vocabulary's so rich, and your imagery and self expression simply divine. Good luck my friend!
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8/1/2009 4:01 PM PDT
General:
voted..
Content:
wonderful work...
Tone:
Lovely and daunting...
voted..
Content:
wonderful work...
Tone:
Lovely and daunting...
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8/1/2009 3:42 PM PDT
Well done nice trio
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8/1/2009 12:13 PM PDT
This is my particular favourite of the three,good luck
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8/1/2009 7:20 AM PDT
Form:
Rhythmic verse is my favorite poetry. Your flow was beautiful.
Content:
I enjoyed this poem about powerful memories of a lost love one. It touched me.
Imagery:
I saw you in deep thought. I saw the clouds in my mind's eye. I saw your vision broke by thoughts of a loss.
Rhythmic verse is my favorite poetry. Your flow was beautiful.
Content:
I enjoyed this poem about powerful memories of a lost love one. It touched me.
Imagery:
I saw you in deep thought. I saw the clouds in my mind's eye. I saw your vision broke by thoughts of a loss.
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8/1/2009 7:15 AM PDT
I voted for you. I think these poems were quite lovely.
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8/1/2009 7:09 AM PDT
This piece required thought and imagination. I enjoyed it very much.
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8/1/2009 5:49 AM PDT
Content:
publish..good luck
publish..good luck
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8/1/2009 3:08 AM PDT
General:
voted
Imagery:
He writes from the soul with grat imagery
voted
Imagery:
He writes from the soul with grat imagery
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8/1/2009 1:54 AM PDT
General:
All of the poems are crafted with so much understanding of the longing of what once was had.
Form:
the structure of the poems, to me are free form.
Content:
the poems are full or longing and reverence for love.
Imagery:
Beautiful.
Tone:
Slow and heavy infused with ease.
Musicality:
Symphony.
All of the poems are crafted with so much understanding of the longing of what once was had.
Form:
the structure of the poems, to me are free form.
Content:
the poems are full or longing and reverence for love.
Imagery:
Beautiful.
Tone:
Slow and heavy infused with ease.
Musicality:
Symphony.
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8/1/2009 12:42 AM PDT
yes, you have my vote!
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