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Neopolitan Poetry

Three flavors -- try a little of each. I hope you enjoy these!

I finally picked my three. Many of you have already read these -- thank you for your input!!!

Winner! This book has been selected to become one of the next published WEbooks. It is no longer accepting new submissions from outside the project team. To contribute to final revisions before the book goes to print, leave your feedback here.

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moxhp

8/30/2009 9:50 AM PDT

Voted.

http://www.webook.com/project/Top-3-Poems-of-Assorted-Interest

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Niyah_Love

8/28/2009 4:39 PM PDT

I like all of these. I remember reading Dr. Seuss to my child. You did a wonderful job at imitating his rhymric with yours. The playfulness as a child brought back long ago memories that I had pushed way back in my head.

The Change of Heart at first the imagery gave me a very menacing plot but then I realized it was far different than what I was thinking. It was a joy when read the second time.

I voted yes.
Niyahlove
http://www.webook.com/project/Pain-of-another

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catherinefrazer

8/27/2009 1:30 PM PDT

Sorry - E, I thought I had voted for these as well. Good Luck! You have me vote. CF

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Callisto

8/27/2009 2:13 AM PDT

Good poems, I like Dr Seuss, you have my vote.

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Sushruti

8/25/2009 8:40 AM PDT

good ones........rock canyon was best.
though i found Dr.Suess a bit trying-to-be-rhyming....but then that is what made it enjoyable.
keep writing.

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naiveandwitty

8/25/2009 8:32 AM PDT

I vote publish.

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ellenc

8/24/2009 12:28 PM PDT

Thanks! Thanks to everyone who has posted here -- I so appreciate your support and input! This has been an adventure, this poetry thing . . .

dnaleristap

8/24/2009 11:50 AM PDT

To Dr. Suess is the best ever love it
http://www.webook.com/project/Three-for-the-vote

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andie64

8/23/2009 4:39 PM PDT

Very good work. I love the flow of the first one. And the other two had some deep emotion. You definetly have my vote. Good luck.

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shahw

8/23/2009 10:33 AM PDT

Voted... .good luck. Shah. X

if you have time?

http://www.webook.com/project/My-Best-Three-Poems-WEBook-2009

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Jenny_Moxham

8/22/2009 6:23 AM PDT

You deserve my vote, so here it is!

http://www.webook.com/project/Animal-Cruelty

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jezabel

8/18/2009 12:22 PM PDT

A yes vote

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penbuddy

8/18/2009 12:08 PM PDT

Good choices, all. You've got my vote. Thanks for stopping by at http://www.webook.com/project/penbuddys-best-3-poems and expressing your appreciation.

Good luck.

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davidwthorn

8/14/2009 10:15 AM PDT

I really enjoy Change of Heart.

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BenB

8/11/2009 10:33 PM PDT

I think we can all identify with your appreciation of Dr Seuss. Who doesn't like a whimsical rhyme here and there? I like the silly way that you rhymed some of the lines, and I think it flowed well. I like how you sort of adapted a little bit of his style but maintained your own voice, and I think that the overall message was meaningful. Beautiful story, fun poem. =)

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CarelessSky

8/11/2009 6:34 PM PDT

All three were brilliant, publish!

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HocusSmokus

8/10/2009 4:17 PM PDT

Very good, 'To Dr. Seuss,' cleverly done, I suppeuss,

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tattyhead

8/10/2009 2:01 AM PDT

Musicality:
The doctor Seuss one had me spell bound !
The flow, the words, the story.
Just brilliant. Good Luck.

http://www.webook.com/project/Three-for-the-competition

If you have time.

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JDarrow

8/6/2009 1:16 PM PDT

I have to say....I love them all! Good Luck!

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nrhatch

8/6/2009 12:23 PM PDT

General:
Fantastic!

Especially enjoyed Change of Heart, and To Dr. Seuss. So different, and both so enjoyable.

Imagery:
Breathless wonder!

Musicality:
Dr. Seuss would be pleased with the lyrical nature of your tribute to him.

Good Luck!

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TraciB

8/6/2009 9:55 AM PDT

I enjoyed all three of these. "To Dr. Seuss" is whimsical and heartwarming; "Rock Canyon" lifted my spirits; and "Change of Heart" - well, I only hope I have occasion to write something similar one day...

A resounding yes vote from me.

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violingirl

8/6/2009 8:49 AM PDT

Great job, i love the twisting of words to match Dr. Suess in your first poem! Very neat style, a yes vote!

For my poems:

http://www.webook.com/project/The-World-from-the-View-of-a-Poet

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KP_Peterson

8/5/2009 11:24 PM PDT

Loved them all! Your ode to Dr. Seuss was brilliant! A Yes vote.

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Davy_Jack

8/5/2009 3:37 PM PDT

Good work. And best of luck to you!

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jamesmcshane

8/5/2009 11:28 AM PDT

Linda, you're a little genius. The Seuss poem works for me, too.

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AmeliaBadelia

8/5/2009 10:02 AM PDT

I love your ode to Seuss. Creative and brilliant, colorful. I of course, vote yes.

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santackas

8/5/2009 9:42 AM PDT

You have my vote!

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tuesday_rayne

8/5/2009 7:12 AM PDT

publish!!! great job.

http://www.webook.com/project/Voodoo-Hearts-My-3-Poems-for-entry-Webook-2009poetryVOTE

thank you.

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johntucker

8/5/2009 2:44 AM PDT

Especially liked Dr Seuss as this was outstandingly creative and imaginative. Was a little disappointed with the other two by comparison.

Dr Seuss won the vote on its own.

Good luck with the vote!

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McZero

8/3/2009 4:49 PM PDT

I especially liked To Dr. Seuss, but all three are great. Ten thumbs up.

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annabelsheila

8/3/2009 12:24 PM PDT

I enjoyed all three poems. Nice job.

Anna

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jimmybonez

8/3/2009 5:30 AM PDT

lovely work..
voted...

http://www.webook.com/project/3-Best

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jjbellinski

8/2/2009 1:46 PM PDT

Wonderful. Publish!

http://www.webook.com/project/My-Poetic-Trilogy

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mpolis

8/2/2009 12:10 PM PDT

Absolutely. Without a doubt.
I am always moved by "To Dr. Seuss".
As I've said before, that kind of writing takes skill and you have a great deal of it.
It's no fluke. One only has to read the other two poems to see you are the genuine article.

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Gereg

8/2/2009 10:50 AM PDT

I liked these before, and I still do. "Change of Heart" is, as I said before, a gem.

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Shari

8/2/2009 9:23 AM PDT

You got a yes from me, I have enjoyed all of your work and I love the Dr. Seuss one especially.

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anmar1027

8/1/2009 8:02 PM PDT

General:
totally for publish. Love "Change of heart." Specially these lines, Your kisses didn’t stop my heart
Or leave me, weak-kneed and wilted,
Frantically scrambling for my dignity
While toppling headlong
For the millionth time"

I love that poem.

Tone:
I like how the first stanza though there's sadness has that hope feeling/tone to it, and by the 2nd stanza its gone, its turned a bit dark. And by the 3rd stanza the tone kind of changes to a matter of fact type.
Really good job. And i love how you change the tones, but in the end they go along really good.

Best Wishes-
Ana

*P.S if you have time, i would appreciate you checking out my poems that are going into voting.*

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RKRickerd

8/1/2009 5:11 PM PDT

Got to go with the best in the flow. ...Publish

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linicap

8/1/2009 2:42 PM PDT

Like I said, I'm all about "Change of Heart"... it's just those last two lines. Anyway. Here's a vote. Do something with it.

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wayahowl

8/1/2009 12:10 PM PDT

varied, well sculptured, and each telling something important, a great contender. you have my vote

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cindi_greene

8/1/2009 10:52 AM PDT

Wow! I am stunned into awe. These, each and every one so different with a different mood for each were wonderful. But, the first one is my fave and it moved me to smiles all the way through. Again, wonderful.

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