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"Princess Sheeba" (Placed 2nd in WeBook voting cycle April 2009)
Born on an abandoned cattle station in the searing heat of the Australian outback, Sheeba after surviving an opportunistic attack by a family of wild boar, is rescued from marauding buckaroos by Kaz The Wise One, a rather eccentric but well meaning kookaburra. Unable to care for the estranged dingo pup, Kaz with Sheeba dangling precariously from his beak takes her home to the more forgiving climate of the coastal bush. Here in the early hours of dawn, he places the helpless whelp in the pouch
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10/18/2009 8:45 PM PDT
Read some of the story. Good job!
I love dogs, sorrry to hear this didn't published but this would be an interesting book but second place isn't half bad.
You plan on doing a sequal to this?
I love dogs, sorrry to hear this didn't published but this would be an interesting book but second place isn't half bad.
You plan on doing a sequal to this?
7/7/2009 4:18 PM PDT
sounds interesting
6/19/2009 6:19 AM PDT
To be the subject of such praise is indeed humbling.
6/2/2009 12:57 PM PDT
OF CALLUM, GIFTED WRITER
From highland to Queensland and all points in between
Finding friends by words of gold and greater mind of keen
Gifted like a Burns to express his passion's lot
By soul a weathered writing man, by birth a solid Scot
A traveling dreamer sharing dreams uncompromisingly
He even proves some best-laid plans n'er "gang aft agley"
To thank him is my intent, to praise him is my side
For Callum's placed his imprint and its beauty cannot hide.
From highland to Queensland and all points in between
Finding friends by words of gold and greater mind of keen
Gifted like a Burns to express his passion's lot
By soul a weathered writing man, by birth a solid Scot
A traveling dreamer sharing dreams uncompromisingly
He even proves some best-laid plans n'er "gang aft agley"
To thank him is my intent, to praise him is my side
For Callum's placed his imprint and its beauty cannot hide.
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4/20/2009 5:19 PM PDT
I read the first two chapters CallumC && was hooked! Good Luck my friend!!
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4/20/2009 4:54 PM PDT
Your publishing this all the way. If not, WEbook's insane and so are you people who voted he shouldn't. And shouldn't you be using full quotation marks? Not just, you know... an apostrophe?
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4/20/2009 4:19 PM PDT
Wow! I let my youngest brother read it and he LOVES it. Once again, great work CallumC!
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4/20/2009 10:49 AM PDT
I voted publish, good luck
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4/19/2009 10:19 PM PDT
I voted!
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4/19/2009 12:50 PM PDT
Very interesting! I had to look up "Kookaburra' to see and read what they looked like. Unfortunately, my sound is out on my computer for the moment otherwise I may have caught some of the calls on the site I was viewing. I could see myself getting into this story and reading it through. Your work as a writer is admirable, Callum, and I hope this one will get published.
Pete O'Malley/omanh on WEbook
Pete O'Malley/omanh on WEbook
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4/19/2009 11:31 AM PDT
A delightful read.
Best of luck!
Sara
Best of luck!
Sara
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4/18/2009 7:29 PM PDT
good luck!
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4/18/2009 6:16 PM PDT
Sweet and lovely book! Good luck!
Kathy
Kathy
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4/18/2009 4:15 PM PDT
You got my vote,I`m an animal lover.... Good luck.
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4/18/2009 4:01 PM PDT
I think it's so hard to write animal stories from the animals point of view and make it interesting. You've done a good job. You deserve a crack at the big time.
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4/18/2009 7:24 AM PDT
Definitely got my vote, it caught my attention immediately and after that I just could not stop reading. Good luck! :D
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4/18/2009 7:01 AM PDT
very good you get my vote, i will visit often to read more later
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4/17/2009 4:04 PM PDT
We all search for our identifies, why not a pup?
Good style and context...keep up the good work....2 thumbs up.
Good style and context...keep up the good work....2 thumbs up.
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4/17/2009 3:11 PM PDT
I love this book and I'll for sure vote and read more!
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4/17/2009 2:34 PM PDT
I love the way you bring Kaz to life. Especially the description with the crows brought a little smile on my face. Well done and good luck with the vote!
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4/17/2009 2:26 PM PDT
You got me again CC. How do ya do it ? Please tell a poor bewildered novice....
Smile!
TP
Smile!
TP
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4/17/2009 12:55 PM PDT
vote
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4/17/2009 5:10 AM PDT
Very Disney, and very good! Wonderful sentence structure, and heartwarming dialogue. Vote Publish!!!
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4/17/2009 4:44 AM PDT
wish ya luck
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4/16/2009 4:37 PM PDT
Beautifully written! It is very reminiscent of Kipling. The description and depth in your writing is sublime. I'm a fan. I hope it gets published...seems like it will!
Good luck!
~ Sarah
Good luck!
~ Sarah
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4/16/2009 10:07 AM PDT
I like it keep up the good work
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4/16/2009 12:35 AM PDT
I like this story, but you could have made it flow better, for example: their sentance that starts...He could now see the main house with it's rusty red corrugated roof and sun bleached rotten supporting timbers beneath....i think in this sentance you can drop the rusty or red...one of them at least and you can drop the sun and rottem and the word supporting....it would make the sentance flow better....that's my main point....when you come back to do your first draft...you need to look at ways of making it flow better...but because i like this story...i'm going vote publish...only because it as potential...so i hope for the best
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4/15/2009 9:05 PM PDT
Great stuff.
Beautifully detailed view of the harshness and beauty of the outback from an unusual perspective.
One of those tales thats sufficiently well written to sustain parents through the million times of having to read it!
Good luck!
Beautifully detailed view of the harshness and beauty of the outback from an unusual perspective.
One of those tales thats sufficiently well written to sustain parents through the million times of having to read it!
Good luck!
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4/15/2009 8:00 PM PDT
good luck [=
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4/15/2009 12:44 PM PDT
Wow I said i'd read and i'm glad i did
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4/15/2009 12:22 AM PDT
This is an absolute joy to read! I love Kaz and his instinct to protect the dingo family, especially his affection to the runt. It is a sweet story that flows flawlessly. Definitely publish! :)
~Staci
~Staci
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4/14/2009 8:37 PM PDT
yes! plz publish this ><!
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4/14/2009 6:25 PM PDT
Best of luck, CallumC.
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4/14/2009 3:56 PM PDT
I was very familiar with "Right hand up to God" (Which I am very much in to and about to finish) but I never even looked at this project. What a delight. I read the first three chapters and I am hooked. Wonderfully descriptive and imaginative. You give your animals such character that its easy to forget that they are not human. Definitely publishable.
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4/14/2009 3:50 PM PDT
You got my vote. Good luck
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4/14/2009 1:49 PM PDT
I voted.
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4/14/2009 11:45 AM PDT
Very nice and interesting story. Great descriptive language that places you right in the Australian outback. Love the personalities of the characters, making them endearing at once. Great work. Got my vote!
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4/14/2009 5:13 AM PDT
Got my vote
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4/13/2009 8:30 PM PDT
Great story. Read first 5 chapters. Will have to come back later and read the rest :) Best of luck.
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4/13/2009 8:21 PM PDT
This is such a wonderful little story. Can't wait to find the time to read it all. Definitely a must publish. Thanks for inviting me to read it.
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4/13/2009 1:42 PM PDT
Amazing writing pblish from me
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4/13/2009 12:40 PM PDT
awesome! i luv the name
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4/13/2009 8:22 AM PDT
Very well done as usual. I think you have a good shot at getting this published. You got my vote
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4/12/2009 5:59 PM PDT
nice job man
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4/12/2009 5:08 PM PDT
Great Aussie tale & tail.
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4/12/2009 7:15 AM PDT
Wonderful! Publish!
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4/12/2009 12:50 AM PDT
good work thumbs in the air
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4/11/2009 3:33 AM PDT
Great job - the descriptions are fantastic. Publish!
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4/10/2009 7:40 PM PDT
This is a wonderful children's book set in the Australian outback. I think kids from anywhere in the world though could relate to these characters and love them. Publish it please!
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4/10/2009 6:01 PM PDT
As an edutainer myself,
any book with this quality of
EDUTAINMENT
gets my vote... and my THUMB PRINT...
WRITE here...
WRITE ON...!
any book with this quality of
EDUTAINMENT
gets my vote... and my THUMB PRINT...
WRITE here...
WRITE ON...!
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4/10/2009 12:33 PM PDT
publish!
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4/10/2009 10:43 AM PDT
Not this one is great. I think I like this one, it seems like the type of book I would read :D
Its interesting how you incorporate animals into your work.
I vote Publish.
Its interesting how you incorporate animals into your work.
I vote Publish.
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4/10/2009 3:17 AM PDT
You got my vote!
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4/9/2009 3:37 PM PDT
Good Luck
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4/9/2009 2:13 PM PDT
hmm...good, but the ending seemed to abrupt to me. Perhaps another bukaroo-fight and a reunion with sheeba and her brothers/mother? I don't know.
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4/9/2009 1:56 PM PDT
just had to point one thing out:
"With all ten pups and the Queen of Sheeba safely hidden beneath the water tank, "
weren't there only nine pups? Or did I read something wrong?
"With all ten pups and the Queen of Sheeba safely hidden beneath the water tank, "
weren't there only nine pups? Or did I read something wrong?
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4/9/2009 1:50 PM PDT
Like your other story, very well written and interesting. Your main character (I love his name) is real likeable from the start. You do have a few punctuation mistakes, but that's all.
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4/9/2009 12:59 PM PDT
i love it this is really good
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4/9/2009 10:52 AM PDT
This is a great story for kids/young adults with all the elements that capture the imagination, a definite "yes" to publication!
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4/9/2009 9:13 AM PDT
with best wishes and bless of God
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4/9/2009 2:07 AM PDT
Good luck on this one too my friend!
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4/8/2009 8:07 PM PDT
well done Callum. M.
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4/8/2009 6:50 PM PDT
Almost forgot - I love kangaroos and wallabies too!
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4/8/2009 6:46 PM PDT
Being a mutt-lover, I just have to give you my vote! Apart from that, this book is stuffed full of delightful descriptions of the animals and as fot those those 'Aussie Bleeders' ... the Stockpersons! Kaz almost has the role of a commenting Greek chorus from the dramas of ancient times. Although he takes an active role in the events and outcomes, there is almost the feeling of those events/ outcomes, going on despite his best efforts. Don't know quite how else to express the feeling - sorry if it sounds a bit clumsy! It would certainly be a feast for any good animator, so let's trust that someone comes forward in the future.
You paint such a vivid description of those parts of Australia, that the Outback is brought to life with all it;s grit and dust!
You paint such a vivid description of those parts of Australia, that the Outback is brought to life with all it;s grit and dust!
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4/8/2009 6:18 PM PDT
And there was a tiny mistake in the first part you put
"Im here it," said, "here at last..."
was that supposed to be
"Im here" it said, "Here at last..." ?
Hope that helps a little....
And by the way I voted a big YES
"Im here it," said, "here at last..."
was that supposed to be
"Im here" it said, "Here at last..." ?
Hope that helps a little....
And by the way I voted a big YES
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4/8/2009 6:16 PM PDT
I don't know what to say... Its the perfect story. If there was a line of perfectness... it would go like this |God---|Jesus----------->Little far down the line|This--|Portal(something totally unrelated)
As a kid I loved the Lion king... this is that new Lion King for me... And I am so glad you asked me to read this...
As a kid I loved the Lion king... this is that new Lion King for me... And I am so glad you asked me to read this...
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4/8/2009 6:08 PM PDT
Really good. One tiny mistake I found.
Miricle is spelled Miracle.
Hope this helps!
Miricle is spelled Miracle.
Hope this helps!
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4/8/2009 4:08 PM PDT
Must be published. Excellent work all round
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4/8/2009 9:28 AM PDT
publish!
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4/8/2009 8:12 AM PDT
one word...PUBLISH
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4/8/2009 8:05 AM PDT
Good luck.
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4/8/2009 5:23 AM PDT
Amazing work
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4/8/2009 4:38 AM PDT
compelling, well written and original
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4/8/2009 1:27 AM PDT
excellent , I so enjoy reading your work, good luck my friend, hope this vote helps :)
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4/8/2009 1:15 AM PDT
You are a very talented writter and everything I've read so far should be published.
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4/7/2009 9:12 PM PDT
Callum, I must say I'm impressed.This book is so different from the other, yet I love it I think even more. The use of the Animal characters here are wonderful. And again your discriptive scenery is so vivid I am there. I surely hope you are chosen to have your books published. This would be a great Disney Movie. You have my Yes Vote ! Good Luck !
LIz
LIz
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4/7/2009 6:42 PM PDT
TO ALL THAT HAVE VOTED, AND WILL VOTE.
Thank you so much, I am overwhelmed with your support, and comments. I don’t know how many votes are necessary to get into the top ten percent, but I do know that you have all set me well on my way. Whatever happens, it is a great feeling to know I have your support.
Respectfully yours, C.
Thank you so much, I am overwhelmed with your support, and comments. I don’t know how many votes are necessary to get into the top ten percent, but I do know that you have all set me well on my way. Whatever happens, it is a great feeling to know I have your support.
Respectfully yours, C.
4/7/2009 5:28 PM PDT
Goodluck, Callum, you are so talented, great work...
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4/7/2009 4:19 PM PDT
Great job.
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4/7/2009 4:16 PM PDT
Got my vote - keep up the good work!
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4/7/2009 3:01 PM PDT
Hope this vote puts you over the top ...Russ
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4/7/2009 2:32 PM PDT
You've got my vote. Well done!
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4/7/2009 1:46 PM PDT
As far as reading the vote zone, I find this project to be interesting. I believe my little eight year old nephew would like this tale.
CallumC, you have my vote.
CallumC, you have my vote.
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4/7/2009 1:25 PM PDT
I can't also wait to read more, I voted again because you are just outstanding with your words. I agree this should be made into a movie. It is a pleasure to vote on your projects. :-)
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4/7/2009 12:54 PM PDT
This is one that I hope one day will be a movie. It has great literary quality.
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4/7/2009 12:40 PM PDT
I don't know exactly how you did it but this story held me all the way through. It just goes to show that good writing can draw those who would shy from the subject matter. Very well done.
Concerning story length, if I counted right, this seems to be somewhere around the 20,000 word mark. Mine are roughly the same.
Concerning story length, if I counted right, this seems to be somewhere around the 20,000 word mark. Mine are roughly the same.
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4/7/2009 12:31 PM PDT
A delightful and compelling story. Another big thumbs up!
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4/7/2009 10:50 AM PDT
great work!
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4/7/2009 9:54 AM PDT
Brilliant! I read the story as if I was Kaz, Must be Published, along with mine I hope
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4/7/2009 7:45 AM PDT
You have my vote!
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4/7/2009 7:18 AM PDT
Publish!
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4/7/2009 6:44 AM PDT
like I said before, this is a great book. This should seriously be published, because childern and adults all over would like it.
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4/7/2009 6:14 AM PDT
Beautifully descriptive. I loved it!
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4/7/2009 12:00 AM PDT
An other good read from your Pen. I have read it from beginning to end, an recommend it to any one.
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4/6/2009 11:24 PM PDT
This is an absolout delight in both the telling of the plot as well as the vivid scene description.
Goodluck Cal - you'vegot my vote!
Goodluck Cal - you'vegot my vote!
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4/6/2009 6:41 PM PDT
You have my vote for sure. So Good Luck !
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4/6/2009 6:07 PM PDT
Good job! You got my vote.
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4/6/2009 6:03 PM PDT
Good luck.
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4/6/2009 5:32 PM PDT
Wow! what a lovely story C...All the best my friend!
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4/6/2009 4:16 PM PDT
A great read. Good luck and I wish you all the best.
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4/6/2009 9:36 AM PDT
You are a very good writer I love your style. I voted for you please vote for me to.
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4/6/2009 9:35 AM PDT
terrific write good ;luck my friend mike
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4/6/2009 9:33 AM PDT
Good luck Callum. I vote to publish
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4/6/2009 8:51 AM PDT
Good luck. You got my vote.
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4/6/2009 8:09 AM PDT
Nail biting time, thank you all.
4/6/2009 1:49 AM PDT
Fantastic story, still loved it reading it again. Best of luck.
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4/6/2009 12:52 AM PDT
This story is a great read and will make a great book.
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4/6/2009 12:38 AM PDT
Another brilliant work. It seems written by one
of the classic authors yet maintaining originality.
Well done.
of the classic authors yet maintaining originality.
Well done.
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3/11/2009 6:38 AM PDT
OzMon just returned from the outback. This book should be a fun read! Good luck.
J
J
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3/7/2009 6:19 PM PST
Thanks for the invite. I am looking forward to reading it...
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3/7/2009 2:03 PM PST
Cool, thanks for the invite. But it sounds a bit like the Aussie movie, Napoleon, doesn't it? Except that Napoleon's a Labrador. :)
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2/10/2009 2:21 PM PST
I'm sorry I must decline my schedule is packed at the moment.
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2/9/2009 7:59 AM PST
May I compliment you on your vivid imagination.
A great beginning using Kaz the Aussie Kookaburra.
Letting her be the protector from Queensland skies.
Circling proudly over the outback and down under.
Over watching the animal kingdom with keen eyes.
Looking for unwanted scavengers especially crows.
Making things safe for the child birthing Dingo.
Congratulations Mr Malcolm J. Croan.
Real interesting and very well done.
Only something of real creativity
A literary masterpiece.
Nice interesting read.
A great beginning using Kaz the Aussie Kookaburra.
Letting her be the protector from Queensland skies.
Circling proudly over the outback and down under.
Over watching the animal kingdom with keen eyes.
Looking for unwanted scavengers especially crows.
Making things safe for the child birthing Dingo.
Congratulations Mr Malcolm J. Croan.
Real interesting and very well done.
Only something of real creativity
A literary masterpiece.
Nice interesting read.
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2/6/2009 3:52 PM PST
I can't wait to check this out when I have more time!
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1/30/2009 1:01 PM PST
Nice!
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1/15/2009 3:14 AM PST
Callum I thoroughly enjoyed your story "Princess Sheeba" and will definitely be voting for you when it comes to publishing. You are an amazing writer, and I love your work.
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1/9/2009 5:12 AM PST
Exocentric definitely is a word but I don't think that it is the word that Callum intended. In linguistics, it refers to phrases and compound words which are not the same part of speech as their constituents.
For example, in the sentence "I am in the doghouse", the phrase "in the doghouse" is an exocentric phrase, since it functions as an adjective (similar to the "tired" in "I am tired"), not as a preposition or noun, which is what its constituents "in" and "house" are. The word "shortcoming" is also exocentric, since it is a noun, but its two constituents are an adjective and a verb.
It is also used in virtual reality to describe an environment that is all encompassing for the user, rather like being put in a Skinner tank and then indoctrinated:).
For example, in the sentence "I am in the doghouse", the phrase "in the doghouse" is an exocentric phrase, since it functions as an adjective (similar to the "tired" in "I am tired"), not as a preposition or noun, which is what its constituents "in" and "house" are. The word "shortcoming" is also exocentric, since it is a noun, but its two constituents are an adjective and a verb.
It is also used in virtual reality to describe an environment that is all encompassing for the user, rather like being put in a Skinner tank and then indoctrinated:).
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1/8/2009 3:50 PM PST
Things to look at:
*cookaburra - Kookaburra
*exocentric - forgive me if I'm wrong but is this a word? Perhaps you mean eccentric?
Specifically, I don't like animal tales but that's just me. From this description, I think your storyline would suit a children's/pre-teen story quite well.
*cookaburra - Kookaburra
*exocentric - forgive me if I'm wrong but is this a word? Perhaps you mean eccentric?
Specifically, I don't like animal tales but that's just me. From this description, I think your storyline would suit a children's/pre-teen story quite well.
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1/8/2009 10:41 AM PST
Sounds as if you've created a good storyline here. I will go to chapter one and read on.
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