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Project Leader:
michaeldeshazer
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English
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Pieces - a novel
Mark is a college student and young novelist living in NYC. He lives with his best friends, who just so happen to be lesbian strippers, and he can't seem to stick with his many love interests. Oh, and karma's a ... yeah. This is one man's journey to put together the pieces of his life before it's too late.
http://parkbenchwriter.com
http://parkbenchwriter.com
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11/18/2008 11:55 PM PST
Amazing work!
11/18/2008 11:54 PM PST
great book mike!
11/18/2008 11:24 PM PST
I enjoyed this novel from start to finish! Part 2 coming soon? I feel the writing is strong, engagingly graphic, humorously compelling, and page-turning...ly grabbing :-P
I was surprised when I read Reagsie's review about the grammar errors because that's an inaccurate observation at its least-- but I soon realized when I clicked on his/her? profile that the person probably doesn't exist (no friends, no groups, no reviews....) I see that a couple reviewers left negative feedback with no actual reasons other than the fact that there was sex in the novel-- it's 2008... Probably McCain supporters...
Anyway, if they actually read the novel, they'd realize the depth, but some people... nevermind... ignorant :)
Good stuff-- I hope to see this published so I can pick up a copy for my collection, and feel good that hey, I had a part in this happening!
I was surprised when I read Reagsie's review about the grammar errors because that's an inaccurate observation at its least-- but I soon realized when I clicked on his/her? profile that the person probably doesn't exist (no friends, no groups, no reviews....) I see that a couple reviewers left negative feedback with no actual reasons other than the fact that there was sex in the novel-- it's 2008... Probably McCain supporters...
Anyway, if they actually read the novel, they'd realize the depth, but some people... nevermind... ignorant :)
Good stuff-- I hope to see this published so I can pick up a copy for my collection, and feel good that hey, I had a part in this happening!
11/18/2008 10:32 PM PST
I, Thursias, bane of webookers, just wanted to give my final thoughts, prior to the end of the vote:
This book is probably not publishable without considerable editing.
As for it's literary quality, it's not my thing, so I can't really say, and defer to its fans(?).
This book is probably not publishable without considerable editing.
As for it's literary quality, it's not my thing, so I can't really say, and defer to its fans(?).
11/18/2008 8:57 PM PST
So many grammar errors, in the first five pages!!! I am sad for the people who have to decide which book gets published.
11/18/2008 1:12 PM PST
gooood luck!:)
11/18/2008 12:35 PM PST
Curlyman, if this gets published, I'll def make sure you get a signed copy LOL!
Jessie_Marie, I hope so, too... :)
AlwaysMe2B and HenryEarl, your vote is a step toward that and it means alot to me.
Dan3, yeah, I'd say this is more of an adult novel in that I wouldn't advise it as a good choice of a Christmas gift for your 11 year old daughter LOL!
peoples_voice, I think you're absolutely right...
nrhatch, this novel's not for everyone
And MsAlbs again, I love your description as "delightfully trashy" though I wasn't going for that-- but you received the main side-effect which was enjoyment.
To everyone else who commented and voted, thank you so much for your feedback and support during and before the voting cycle. I appreciate all of you for helping me in my endeavor to turn my dream into reality :)
And even if this doens't get published, I have more work and I'm looking forward to the next go-around.
Love you all for the 227 thumbs thus far!!
Jessie_Marie, I hope so, too... :)
AlwaysMe2B and HenryEarl, your vote is a step toward that and it means alot to me.
Dan3, yeah, I'd say this is more of an adult novel in that I wouldn't advise it as a good choice of a Christmas gift for your 11 year old daughter LOL!
peoples_voice, I think you're absolutely right...
nrhatch, this novel's not for everyone
And MsAlbs again, I love your description as "delightfully trashy" though I wasn't going for that-- but you received the main side-effect which was enjoyment.
To everyone else who commented and voted, thank you so much for your feedback and support during and before the voting cycle. I appreciate all of you for helping me in my endeavor to turn my dream into reality :)
And even if this doens't get published, I have more work and I'm looking forward to the next go-around.
Love you all for the 227 thumbs thus far!!
11/17/2008 11:07 AM PST
You lost my vote as soon as I read the first two paragraphs:
My truck’s upholstery was marred with sweaty aromas of pubis, a consequence of fierce copulations on our last night before my morning flight to New York. "Ah" was the only feasible utterance that escaped my mouth as I banged my head down and Karen plopped hers onto my scattered field of straggly chest hairs.
"Will you put that in your next book?" she asked. Lying there with my eyes closed and my family jewels actively recuperating after three emissions of all their love goo, I nodded my head to her as she grabbed my other. "How would you describe it?"
I don't want to read about the sexual exploits of a character who has not yet been introduced to me. I found it offensive, rather than enticing. Sex is a great accent to writing, but to lead off describing your character's genitalia, rather than the content of his character, caused me to say "Nope," and move on to the next book on my Voting List.
nancy
nancy
My truck’s upholstery was marred with sweaty aromas of pubis, a consequence of fierce copulations on our last night before my morning flight to New York. "Ah" was the only feasible utterance that escaped my mouth as I banged my head down and Karen plopped hers onto my scattered field of straggly chest hairs.
"Will you put that in your next book?" she asked. Lying there with my eyes closed and my family jewels actively recuperating after three emissions of all their love goo, I nodded my head to her as she grabbed my other. "How would you describe it?"
I don't want to read about the sexual exploits of a character who has not yet been introduced to me. I found it offensive, rather than enticing. Sex is a great accent to writing, but to lead off describing your character's genitalia, rather than the content of his character, caused me to say "Nope," and move on to the next book on my Voting List.
nancy
nancy
11/16/2008 3:00 PM PST
all the best
11/16/2008 2:02 PM PST
you've got my vote.
11/16/2008 1:00 PM PST
Amazing, I hope to see this book on the shelves when I go book shopping again. i will deffinetly buy it.
11/15/2008 11:05 PM PST
great!!!
11/15/2008 6:24 PM PST
Great, has potential. Keep up the good work.
11/15/2008 12:56 PM PST
I want a copy...any chance of a signed one? ;o)
11/14/2008 5:48 PM PST
Excellent story ... I agree with everyone else ~ this should be published!
11/13/2008 10:22 AM PST
Nice work, I love your word usage, I don't see why this isn't published already!
11/12/2008 1:00 PM PST
can't wait to see it published.....outstanding piece of work....
11/12/2008 10:31 AM PST
MissAlbs and Thursias, thanks for your support (you guys got my back LOL!). I really appreciate it and it means a lot to me to see you defending my words. As for lightbrite, thanks for your input as well-- though negative. In a way I'm glad you feel so strongly about my work, and again, though it is negative, I've always felt writing really sucks if it doesn't evoke someone enough to hate it. So, thank you lightbrite :)
And I'm not saying that to be sarcastic-- I appreciate your honesty LOL!
And I'm not saying that to be sarcastic-- I appreciate your honesty LOL!
11/12/2008 8:30 AM PST
Melissa just wrote to inform me that webook does use an IP monitor, so redundant IP votes will not count.
11/12/2008 12:02 AM PST
Wow thursias, that's a great idea! We should write Melissa with that
11/12/2008 12:00 AM PST
The book is terrible. I'm sorry, it is. and I didn't say it was thursias' site, or my site. "Peoples_voices" said that it was HIS site, I was rephrasing his line to point out it is a group site,, a community, not his site. Just stop ok? Defending a bad work does not mean it will be published. The work stands or falls on its own merit, and with it as it is, it falls.
11/11/2008 11:56 PM PST
Wow, so you did indeed get past the first chapter. What did you think, does it get good? What did you like about it? Would you recommend it? If so, will you buy a copy if it is published?
One thing I would like to see is a webook where we vote with our wallets: e.g. the only way to vote is to pre-order. Max number of pre-order's win, and credit cards are charged immediately. If you lose, you're refunded. That would be sweet.
One thing I would like to see is a webook where we vote with our wallets: e.g. the only way to vote is to pre-order. Max number of pre-order's win, and credit cards are charged immediately. If you lose, you're refunded. That would be sweet.
11/11/2008 11:40 PM PST
This is one of the few webook books where I've actually wanted to read past the first chapters. Also, unlike most other books on this site, I like how the story is intended for an adult audience. The irregular writing style makes it fun to read, not “hard to understand.”I do not feel that the sex is overdone; this is after all people, and a-d-u-l-t novel. I loved the urban vibe. This book is delightfully trashy, and very entertaining.
“We're not putting him down, we're saying that the work isn't ready, and for that you put US down. Nice maybe you should be kicked off OUR site”
…does this thursias character own the rights to weebook.com or did he just suffering from delusions of grandeur. By “OUR” do you mean yourself and a handful of other loosers who have nothing better to do but bash people’s work?
“My god, i still can't figure out how this is ready for publication.”
“More to the point, it's just not very well written. Really mediocre. I don't read much pulp fiction, is this actually the standard these days?” If this is not putting somebody down then I don’t know what exactly is. Physical force perhaps?
As for kicking people of YOUR site, you cannot do that unless you actually own the site. Which I highly doubt is the case. Yes, I do love this book. Yes, I did read past the first chapter. And yes, it should be PUBLISHED.
Thursias and lightbrite find some other way to express your passive aggression.
“We're not putting him down, we're saying that the work isn't ready, and for that you put US down. Nice maybe you should be kicked off OUR site”
…does this thursias character own the rights to weebook.com or did he just suffering from delusions of grandeur. By “OUR” do you mean yourself and a handful of other loosers who have nothing better to do but bash people’s work?
“My god, i still can't figure out how this is ready for publication.”
“More to the point, it's just not very well written. Really mediocre. I don't read much pulp fiction, is this actually the standard these days?” If this is not putting somebody down then I don’t know what exactly is. Physical force perhaps?
As for kicking people of YOUR site, you cannot do that unless you actually own the site. Which I highly doubt is the case. Yes, I do love this book. Yes, I did read past the first chapter. And yes, it should be PUBLISHED.
Thursias and lightbrite find some other way to express your passive aggression.
11/11/2008 11:04 PM PST
We're not putting him down, we're saying that the work isn't ready, and for that you put US down. Nice maybe you should be kicked off OUR site
11/11/2008 9:13 PM PST
people that vote down on you so
they can put you down are messed and should be kicked
off my site....
you got my vote
PUBLISH
they can put you down are messed and should be kicked
off my site....
you got my vote
PUBLISH
11/11/2008 6:38 PM PST
My god, i still can't figure out how this is ready for publication.
11/11/2008 1:47 PM PST
whoa i love it...i
11/11/2008 6:16 AM PST
Wow, nice word choice! Is this an adult novel?
11/11/2008 3:18 AM PST
You definately have my vote!
11/10/2008 9:48 PM PST
really great i liked it
11/10/2008 7:22 PM PST
WOW! You Got My Vote...
11/10/2008 6:57 PM PST
Wow! I was so drawn into this chapter. You are one talented writer, you so have my vote!!!
11/10/2008 5:11 PM PST
You have my vote!!!!
11/10/2008 5:09 PM PST
As thursias did, so shall I, because I can't help but agree. I got lost reading this and find that sex or anything graphic simply for the sake of it is a bit much...I'd like to quote one review if I may
"i just voted for you :D i didnt have to check it, i knOw its greAt ^^"
This bothers me, because I just don't understand when this became a popularity contest instead of a quality contest. Either the work is good and you are adamantly following it, or you just voted for the person. I am hoping no one looked at one page and went "this is great"
Just so i'm not trashed as I have been I would like to explain my criteria for a positive vote: If i read it and keep on reading it, I overlook minor flaws and vote positive. If i can't get through it, if it loses me, if i feel bored, or if the flaws are too great to make it readable, I vote no. That's just what I do and I'm not ashamed to admit this got a no from me, even though i don't necessarily think it was wise of webook.com to put up a "no" vote, as long as it existed, I used it. now that it doesn't, I'm just not voting if it meets my negative requirements.
"i just voted for you :D i didnt have to check it, i knOw its greAt ^^"
This bothers me, because I just don't understand when this became a popularity contest instead of a quality contest. Either the work is good and you are adamantly following it, or you just voted for the person. I am hoping no one looked at one page and went "this is great"
Just so i'm not trashed as I have been I would like to explain my criteria for a positive vote: If i read it and keep on reading it, I overlook minor flaws and vote positive. If i can't get through it, if it loses me, if i feel bored, or if the flaws are too great to make it readable, I vote no. That's just what I do and I'm not ashamed to admit this got a no from me, even though i don't necessarily think it was wise of webook.com to put up a "no" vote, as long as it existed, I used it. now that it doesn't, I'm just not voting if it meets my negative requirements.
11/10/2008 4:07 PM PST
To quote the review below:
"I'm just not getting the vibe that it's ready - the story doesn't feel consistent enough as it skips around. "
More to the point, it's just not very well written. Really mediocre. I don't read much pulp fiction, is this actually the standard these days?
Have those of you who've voted in favor of this actually read it? Did you get past the first chapter?
"I'm just not getting the vibe that it's ready - the story doesn't feel consistent enough as it skips around. "
More to the point, it's just not very well written. Really mediocre. I don't read much pulp fiction, is this actually the standard these days?
Have those of you who've voted in favor of this actually read it? Did you get past the first chapter?
11/10/2008 4:06 PM PST
Good job!
11/10/2008 3:13 PM PST
Vote:-)
11/10/2008 2:46 PM PST
I pray that everything works out for you, Michael....God bless!!!!
11/10/2008 1:21 PM PST
good luck
11/10/2008 9:34 AM PST
refreshing and honest
11/10/2008 9:26 AM PST
hahahaha Danny "Fish Eyes"
11/10/2008 9:23 AM PST
I like it!
11/10/2008 9:03 AM PST
Feeling this-- it's real.
Especially enjoyed the skinny dipping chapter- felt like I was there.
Also, the mobster scenes were thrilling.
Hope this makes it!
Especially enjoyed the skinny dipping chapter- felt like I was there.
Also, the mobster scenes were thrilling.
Hope this makes it!
11/10/2008 8:33 AM PST
It is really quite good. I think it went overboard in some places with the sexual aspect of it but it flowed nicely. Few typos here and there. Other than that I did enjoy it. Good luck.
11/10/2008 6:52 AM PST
I'm sorry it just isn't my kind of book It just has too much blatant sex and stuff. I just can't give you a positive vote. Sorry, but I also won't give you a negative vote I don't think there should be a negative slot. Just voting for what you like should be what this is all about not knocking others down. Good luck though.
11/10/2008 6:13 AM PST
i just voted for you :D i didnt have to check it, i knOw its greAt ^^
11/10/2008 5:46 AM PST
here for you man.just voted
11/10/2008 4:38 AM PST
Awesome story, definitely got my vote.
11/10/2008 4:17 AM PST
This is quite interesting. Count me in.
11/10/2008 3:22 AM PST
Incredible piece of writing, good insight on the journey!!!
11/10/2008 2:37 AM PST
got my vote! :)
11/10/2008 12:59 AM PST
Man, I've been there. I couldn't read all of this, I get lost. But it's interesting cause I have been there and know others who have traveled this journey.
11/9/2008 11:21 PM PST
voted for you earlier my friend
11/9/2008 10:10 PM PST
Greatly Talented
Wishing you
Success !
Wishing you
Success !
11/9/2008 8:02 PM PST
i got you ..look at my project
11/9/2008 4:28 PM PST
I feel like your talent need to be shared. I enjoy the way you write and your style, although completely your own is a kin to mind. In fact your discription is better that mine or your love encounter in your car. Good luck with your publication. Hopefully at some point (soon) I will be submitting my 2 books fro publica tion. As you said, There is a huge number of very talented writers in contention for publication. Keep up the good work.
11/9/2008 3:56 PM PST
u got my vote :)
11/9/2008 3:29 PM PST
I do agree with Charlie your story line is good, you are writing to your audience; however, I feel as if I am hanging here waiting for ??? I cannot tell you. I know it, you know it, and it is seriously within your grasp. I bet you can almost taste it. Nonetheless, it has great potential.
11/9/2008 3:28 PM PST
u have my vote
11/9/2008 3:17 PM PST
Got my vote!
11/9/2008 3:17 PM PST
Wow, I hope you get this published. You've got my vote.
11/9/2008 2:58 PM PST
Good
11/9/2008 2:40 PM PST
You are the shiz michaeldeshazer! Awesome stuff, you get my vote!
11/9/2008 2:25 PM PST
great work....
11/9/2008 2:02 PM PST
good luck
11/9/2008 1:04 PM PST
Thumbs up!!!!
11/9/2008 12:37 PM PST
voted
11/9/2008 12:29 PM PST
A vote .
11/9/2008 12:26 PM PST
:D cool. if i could give it a two thumbs up, I would
11/9/2008 12:16 PM PST
offering my support :D happy writting
11/9/2008 11:59 AM PST
good luck,
stay monkey.
black13
stay monkey.
black13
11/9/2008 11:57 AM PST
Excellent Work!
11/9/2008 11:40 AM PST
Good Luck and I enjoyed the read!
11/9/2008 11:33 AM PST
I agree with Tartaruga. Good luck Michael!
11/9/2008 11:30 AM PST
Yes, this definitely has potentia, and I love the concept of the park bench writer too.
Good luck. You have my vote!
Good luck. You have my vote!
11/9/2008 11:25 AM PST
great poetential here, thumbs up
11/9/2008 11:20 AM PST
Hmmm interesting I like. I might have to read more, but you have my vote! Good luck.
11/9/2008 10:31 AM PST
I find myself caught in the middle here. I think your story has great potential, and I love how our guy seems to be struggling with his own identity, his own sense of purpose. I think your book resembles him. It is a very good story, yet it's still a in the beginning. I love the writing, granted. But it's missing SOMETHING.
In my opinion, it is not my job, nor anyone elses rightful position to tell you what exactly it is missing. I think that that is your job, as you are the author. It is your child, your creation, and while people may give you suggestions, you must ultimately make the final decision.
It is up to YOU to decide what your story lacks, not ours. You must figure it out.
But i love the story. You have great potential.
Good Luck
Charlie Sullivan
In my opinion, it is not my job, nor anyone elses rightful position to tell you what exactly it is missing. I think that that is your job, as you are the author. It is your child, your creation, and while people may give you suggestions, you must ultimately make the final decision.
It is up to YOU to decide what your story lacks, not ours. You must figure it out.
But i love the story. You have great potential.
Good Luck
Charlie Sullivan
11/9/2008 10:25 AM PST
What I read was very interesting so you got my vote. Novels are not my thing I write poems.
Good luck.
lol john
Good luck.
lol john
11/9/2008 10:22 AM PST
"I'm just a glimmer of light beween two eternities..." perhaps says it all. You have gone for a unique slant on your structure, and it is difficult to follow the trail you are creating for us. Yet, I think I can see where you want this work to travel. You have talent, and vision but we readers may need a little bit more connection, or guidance to the point you want us to visit. I read through several chapters and enjoyed the reading, but I am not sure where it is all leading. Still, this is good.
11/9/2008 10:07 AM PST
I'm just not getting the vibe that it's ready - the story doesn't feel consistent enough as it skips around.
11/9/2008 10:02 AM PST
Good luck Michael.
11/9/2008 9:59 AM PST
I did not get a chance to read the entire book. I scanned it in its entirity. it shows great potential. Good luck.
11/9/2008 9:43 AM PST
Best of luck, making my vote count!! ;)
11/9/2008 9:43 AM PST
Thanks BigDaddyCash!
11/9/2008 9:26 AM PST
I didn't read it word for word but I scanned the entire book and it shows great potential. Good luck
11/9/2008 8:44 AM PST
Other than a few spelling mistakes and a misused word here and there, this is an interesting read. I voted maybe simply because it needs clean-up work...it is not ready for publication. The good news is that the foundation is there and clean-up will be minimal. Good luck to you.
11/9/2008 8:27 AM PST
interesting work, good luck
11/9/2008 6:48 AM PST
good
11/8/2008 11:38 PM PST
I think children below 15 will experiment something if they read this
Xd
Xd
11/8/2008 9:05 PM PST
This piece has a very scattered prose. Also, its profanity is overt and( most of the time) unnecessary -frankly, the sex scene is drawn together very poorly and the quirky environment of the "Koreans" apartment is not established by her toys or your use of words. Sorry bro you may need some work, some soul searching really.
11/8/2008 7:53 PM PST
I loved this book.
11/8/2008 6:12 PM PST
i would read it
11/8/2008 1:26 PM PST
I find the method of chapters confusing but the writing is great.
11/8/2008 12:40 PM PST
good writing
11/7/2008 10:52 AM PST
great concept
11/7/2008 6:16 AM PST
this is good stuff and i hope you get published.
11/6/2008 6:32 PM PST
Hi,
I've been keeping an eye on the poles and on the works for which I voted. I've noticed that it is quite plain that the best works are receiving the most negative votes, simply because others feel their chances are threatened. There might even be some cross-negative voting, ie, your fans voting negatively on other books, so I thought you'd like to know the following. Please read it and let your fans know that they need not vote negatively to get your work published! i received this email from Melissa, the site coordinator after emailing her my thoughts and feelings about the negative vote.:
From: Melissa
Sent: 11/6/2008 06:38 AM PT
Subject: Negative voting
James,
I've posted about this in the WEbook forums; check it out here: http://www.webook.com/forums/messageIndex.aspx?topic=cce7e374128946999b9c4baca1e2e360&fview=true
We did not anticipate the kind of negativity and unscrupulous voting that we've seen. We will likely not include negative votes in the final tally.
-- Melissa
-------- Original Message -------------
From: jamesbbrown
Sent: 11/6/2008 06:38 AM PT
Subject: Negative voting
Hey Melissa! I am writing because, as I'm sure are many we-booker's, I'm concerned about the 'negative voting'. People are clearly just voting every project (other than their favorite) down without reading the material. This is really disappointing, and I am a little bewildered as to how this clearly inevitable outcome might not have been anticipated.
Is there any talk of eliminating this feature prior to the end of the election? This is becoming a really hostile process, and it seems clear that given the "negative voting" mechanism, the results of this voting process will be impossible to interpret.
How will you select the top 10%? What will determine that ranking from which you will select a work or works? The highest % positive will of course be books only voted on a few time. Will you ignore the negative votes at that point?
In any case, I just wanted to express my profound disappointment at this process. I would love to know to what purpose the negative voting information will be put, as I would sleep better at night. Right now my favorite webook books are getting crushed under the negative weight, and it is tragic.
-James
I've been keeping an eye on the poles and on the works for which I voted. I've noticed that it is quite plain that the best works are receiving the most negative votes, simply because others feel their chances are threatened. There might even be some cross-negative voting, ie, your fans voting negatively on other books, so I thought you'd like to know the following. Please read it and let your fans know that they need not vote negatively to get your work published! i received this email from Melissa, the site coordinator after emailing her my thoughts and feelings about the negative vote.:
From: Melissa
Sent: 11/6/2008 06:38 AM PT
Subject: Negative voting
James,
I've posted about this in the WEbook forums; check it out here: http://www.webook.com/forums/messageIndex.aspx?topic=cce7e374128946999b9c4baca1e2e360&fview=true
We did not anticipate the kind of negativity and unscrupulous voting that we've seen. We will likely not include negative votes in the final tally.
-- Melissa
-------- Original Message -------------
From: jamesbbrown
Sent: 11/6/2008 06:38 AM PT
Subject: Negative voting
Hey Melissa! I am writing because, as I'm sure are many we-booker's, I'm concerned about the 'negative voting'. People are clearly just voting every project (other than their favorite) down without reading the material. This is really disappointing, and I am a little bewildered as to how this clearly inevitable outcome might not have been anticipated.
Is there any talk of eliminating this feature prior to the end of the election? This is becoming a really hostile process, and it seems clear that given the "negative voting" mechanism, the results of this voting process will be impossible to interpret.
How will you select the top 10%? What will determine that ranking from which you will select a work or works? The highest % positive will of course be books only voted on a few time. Will you ignore the negative votes at that point?
In any case, I just wanted to express my profound disappointment at this process. I would love to know to what purpose the negative voting information will be put, as I would sleep better at night. Right now my favorite webook books are getting crushed under the negative weight, and it is tragic.
-James
11/6/2008 12:18 PM PST
Fantastic! Good job, you definitely have my vote! Keep up the good work.
11/6/2008 9:39 AM PST
Great Job Man, Very Nice Work Here!
11/6/2008 12:54 AM PST
its really good, a definate thumbs up i voted
11/5/2008 11:56 PM PST
a seriously addicting read.
great writing that captures the mind of a troubled student without making "person's-mind-but-writing-style-has-hints-of-not-being-inside-person's-mind" errors.
better yet, it doesnt hurt that the timeline of the story is all chopped up and presented in media res frequently.
(check out my story!)
great writing that captures the mind of a troubled student without making "person's-mind-but-writing-style-has-hints-of-not-being-inside-person's-mind" errors.
better yet, it doesnt hurt that the timeline of the story is all chopped up and presented in media res frequently.
(check out my story!)
11/5/2008 9:04 PM PST
A good read! I gave it a Thumbs Up!! :)
Good Luck!
Good Luck!
11/5/2008 7:25 PM PST
Anything non-linear is great.
11/5/2008 7:12 PM PST
Nice job.
11/5/2008 7:09 PM PST
You have a unique voice. Very interesting stuff.
11/5/2008 6:59 PM PST
i said this was funny to chapter 2. chapter four was heart renching. you have great writing skills. keep it up!
11/5/2008 6:54 PM PST
this was funny!
11/5/2008 4:32 PM PST
Def. got my vote, great stuff
11/5/2008 3:48 PM PST
Voting for u! GOOD LUCK!!!
11/5/2008 2:47 PM PST
Good luck with your project.
If you have a chance could you vote on mine at
http://www.webook.com/project/The-Treasure-Hunt.com
If you have a chance could you vote on mine at
http://www.webook.com/project/The-Treasure-Hunt.com
11/5/2008 2:10 PM PST
voting 4 u
11/5/2008 12:52 PM PST
Voted for you!
11/5/2008 12:04 PM PST
I haven't yet started to read this, but I love the concept of non-linear. For you, I vote completely.
11/5/2008 11:04 AM PST
I voted!
Good luck on this project! =]
Good luck on this project! =]
11/5/2008 9:24 AM PST
I voted a thumbs up for your project and am sending my best wishes for your success.
11/5/2008 8:34 AM PST
I voted for you to be published!! Good lucK!!!
11/5/2008 8:27 AM PST
Good luck!
11/5/2008 8:24 AM PST
Great story!
11/5/2008 8:14 AM PST
Good luck, I voted
11/5/2008 8:10 AM PST
here you go. be sure and return the favor by voteing on mine, kountry
11/5/2008 7:19 AM PST
get your autographing pen ready
11/5/2008 7:19 AM PST
Done and dusted, my friend. Good luck.
11/5/2008 6:53 AM PST
I wish you all the luck and hope you can give me suggestions too! Thanks for sharing I enjoyed the read
11/5/2008 6:45 AM PST
voted for you...:) please vote my work too.... just click here..:
http://www.webook.com/project/Poetry-of-a-boys-life
thanks...hehehe
http://www.webook.com/project/Poetry-of-a-boys-life
thanks...hehehe
11/5/2008 6:39 AM PST
great piece..
11/5/2008 6:37 AM PST
Good luck !
11/5/2008 6:33 AM PST
This is some good writing! I have read some of you other work and you have a lot of talent. You sure you are from Memphis? lol
11/5/2008 6:21 AM PST
Good luck! Please vote for my projects too! Thanks.
11/5/2008 6:18 AM PST
thsi is great and i hope that you get it.
11/5/2008 6:14 AM PST
i love it, keep writin! be sure to check out my project that's up for the vote, for kids :D
11/5/2008 2:39 AM PST
Goodluck Michael, you deserve it, love Wennie xxxhugs
11/4/2008 5:27 PM PST
glad you found the Faith chapters in you Michael, I think this will make it soon. M.
11/4/2008 1:28 PM PST
I love this piece good luck!
11/4/2008 11:04 AM PST
i love the story you got my vote and i know must read the rest can you say book mark.
11/4/2008 4:57 AM PST
I am just reading this here at voting time, but I think it is great. I want to finish it now...good job! Thumbs up!
11/4/2008 4:32 AM PST
I absolutely loved this book. My vote is with you as well. My fingers are crossed for both of us.
10/27/2008 6:15 AM PDT
my vote i w/you my friend
10/22/2008 6:17 PM PDT
Yeah I'm definitely gonna vote for this.
I love your writing style.
I love your writing style.
10/21/2008 5:56 PM PDT
Thanks HD!!! It has been submitted!
10/20/2008 11:10 AM PDT
I really hope that you are going to submit this to be voted on tomorrow. "Pieces-A Novel" definately has my vote :D
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