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Poem of the stars
Here are some poems that I've done.
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Magnificently written poems. You have my vote, and I wish you the best of luck with future writings.
~Kate
~Kate
I should just let people know that in The Star, Shones is purposefully spelled that way. Thanks all for the feedback!
These are intriguing. You've got a couple of spelling errors that would be easy to fix. I like that you show a variety of moods and perspectives . . . nice work.
Good work...you come across very wel with your thoughts...
please...http://www.webook.com/project/Three-of-my-best-Poems
please...http://www.webook.com/project/Three-of-my-best-Poems
The Star, for some weird reason made me feel melancholic (in a very good way). You have my vote and good luck!
And The War Shall Be is certainly my favourite of the three.
Good job and the best of luck with the vote.
http://www.webook.com/project/My-3-Emotive-Entries
Good job and the best of luck with the vote.
http://www.webook.com/project/My-3-Emotive-Entries
The last ones great.
Voted
if you would look at my poems please:
http://www.webook.com/project/Oppression-Hope-Freedom
Voted
if you would look at my poems please:
http://www.webook.com/project/Oppression-Hope-Freedom
Ohhh, definitely. I really like " when the lights go out" you have my vote!
http://www.webook.com/project/Troubled-Waters-Poetry
http://www.webook.com/project/Troubled-Waters-Poetry
Content:
moving poem with great structure well done my friend great moving strife wornderment
moving poem with great structure well done my friend great moving strife wornderment
General:
... And War There Shall Be. A great poem. I vote publish.
Content:
I think we can all identify with your pain and frustration in justifying war based on religion. God has nothing to do with battlefields, wars are created solely by us.
Keep on believing, your faith comes across beautifully.
... And War There Shall Be. A great poem. I vote publish.
Content:
I think we can all identify with your pain and frustration in justifying war based on religion. God has nothing to do with battlefields, wars are created solely by us.
Keep on believing, your faith comes across beautifully.
I found your last piece the most interesting to me. I've voted for you and now wish you much luck.
http://www.webook.com/project/penbuddys-best-3-poems
http://www.webook.com/project/penbuddys-best-3-poems
i vote yes, especially on ...and war there shall be; this is very good; strong, be a great addition to the collection.
General:
Three poems tied loosely together with a theme of illumination:
starlight - lights out - the darkness of war
Form:
A few typos to be corrected:
enemies (not enemy's) of the lord
star shines (not shones)
Musicality:
Despite the dark subject matter, . . . And War There Shall Be flowed beautifully.
Three poems tied loosely together with a theme of illumination:
starlight - lights out - the darkness of war
Form:
A few typos to be corrected:
enemies (not enemy's) of the lord
star shines (not shones)
Musicality:
Despite the dark subject matter, . . . And War There Shall Be flowed beautifully.
And War There Shall be is my fave. I vote yes have a look at mine when you have thetime
Very intruiging. You have my vote.
Check out mine?http://www.webook.com/project/Touch-My-Heart
Please and thank you!
Check out mine?http://www.webook.com/project/Touch-My-Heart
Please and thank you!
Very interesting, I liked them all, very expressive and it had an old world feel to it, nice job
interesting and vividly told. I liked them.
i say YES!!!!
if you want to find mine:
http://www.webook.com/project/Voodoo-Hearts-My-3-Poems-for-entry-Webook-2009poetryVOTE
thank you!
i say YES!!!!
if you want to find mine:
http://www.webook.com/project/Voodoo-Hearts-My-3-Poems-for-entry-Webook-2009poetryVOTE
thank you!
General:
You write with great style and I found all three of your poems very appealing.
Form:
The form of your first two poems work very well. The rhyme of 'The Star' works with great effect and the structure of 'When the lights go out' is well thought out.
I would personally think about breaking your third poem down with some punctuation as I feel it is too block-like and detracts from the poems message.
Content:
I like the variety in your content. It is good to write about different subject matters and you have done this well whilst also demonstrating different syles.
Imagery:
I love the imagery of 'The Star'. This is definatley my favourite of your submissions.
You write with great style and I found all three of your poems very appealing.
Form:
The form of your first two poems work very well. The rhyme of 'The Star' works with great effect and the structure of 'When the lights go out' is well thought out.
I would personally think about breaking your third poem down with some punctuation as I feel it is too block-like and detracts from the poems message.
Content:
I like the variety in your content. It is good to write about different subject matters and you have done this well whilst also demonstrating different syles.
Imagery:
I love the imagery of 'The Star'. This is definatley my favourite of your submissions.
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Shit I said I wasn't going to lie but; Ha, Ha, I DIDI
You have some real BEAUTIFUL POEMS here.
THUMBS UP.....
Shit I said I wasn't going to lie but; Ha, Ha, I DIDI
You have some real BEAUTIFUL POEMS here.
THUMBS UP.....
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