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Poetry Vote Submissions (Glenn Jr. Marchand)
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1/20/2010 1:15 PM PST
Congrats.
If you decide to pursue publishing beyond webook, please let me know.
If you decide to pursue publishing beyond webook, please let me know.
8/31/2009 10:46 AM PDT
Thanks for visiting my submission (and without a self-promoting ad). I'm glad I returned the favor. These are beautiful. You have my vote.
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8/31/2009 9:45 AM PDT
Red Sea
8/31/2009 5:36 AM PDT
You definitely should be published you have enough great work to succeed, I often read your Poetry and I am in awe of your great talent, well done Glen, love Wennie xxxhugs
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8/30/2009 4:50 PM PDT
Your third poem is simply my favorite. Good luck with the voting!
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8/28/2009 7:49 AM PDT
I submitted my vote for you. I most enjoyed your last submission. The comparisons of the biblical references also gives the reader the ablilty to step back and view themself in much the same way- at least that is what I took from this.
Nice work.
Nice work.
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8/27/2009 10:44 PM PDT
I have to admit that I disliked both the repetition and rhyme in the first two poems.
That being said, the third was much more original and showed creativity and thoughtfulness.
Good luck!
http://www.webook.com/project/The-Romantic-the-Sucidial-and-the-Tortured-Soul
That being said, the third was much more original and showed creativity and thoughtfulness.
Good luck!
http://www.webook.com/project/The-Romantic-the-Sucidial-and-the-Tortured-Soul
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8/26/2009 11:49 AM PDT
I have never seen it in this light, but yes, there is truth in it. Well done!
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8/26/2009 7:07 AM PDT
Got my vote good luck
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8/25/2009 5:29 PM PDT
The repeated lines in the first two poems works very well.
I got lost in the third but the emotion in it comes through loud and clear.
I voted yes.
I got lost in the third but the emotion in it comes through loud and clear.
I voted yes.
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8/25/2009 10:55 AM PDT
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8/25/2009 10:41 AM PDT
Liked the last the best. Good fortune to you, my friend.
Thanks for reading and voting on my three...
http://www.webook.com/project/penbuddys-best-3-poems
Thanks for reading and voting on my three...
http://www.webook.com/project/penbuddys-best-3-poems
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8/24/2009 2:54 PM PDT
it's a yes from me, the poems are really good but there also needs to be more there so good luck
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8/23/2009 10:11 PM PDT
This was very nice =)
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8/22/2009 3:07 PM PDT
Hey I always enjoy all your Poetic art form. It brings out great emotions.
I also have mine listed as well. come by and check it out.
I also have mine listed as well. come by and check it out.
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8/21/2009 11:49 AM PDT
Hey;D
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8/20/2009 8:43 PM PDT
got my vote no problem a great poem :D
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8/20/2009 6:16 AM PDT
pretty interesting
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8/19/2009 12:34 PM PDT
Your poems are very well written, i wish you luck and you also have my vote
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8/18/2009 5:13 PM PDT
Wow!
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8/16/2009 11:30 PM PDT
I expected nothing less, they're all quite thought-provoking and very euphonious. Astute work. I voted publish.
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8/16/2009 7:51 PM PDT
Nice work and good luck in the vote!
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8/14/2009 2:04 PM PDT
I like the combination of succinct pieces with your more elaborate poem. Your allusions are intriguing and fill "Mystic Connexion" with weighted meanings. Nice work.
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8/14/2009 5:39 AM PDT
I'm sorry, I still don't like "God IS", as I find it far too preachy for poetry, BUT, the other 2 pieces are very well written and deserve consideration in the final round. best wishes. L :)
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8/13/2009 7:04 AM PDT
great job! vOtEd!
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8/13/2009 5:51 AM PDT
Beautiful work! I love how your simplicity in words create such a vivid vision in my mind.
Ell
Ell
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8/13/2009 2:15 AM PDT
Amazing work! I voted!
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8/12/2009 6:15 PM PDT
Imagery:
great imagery within.
great imagery within.
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8/12/2009 2:31 PM PDT
I voted yes, good sir.
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8/11/2009 7:34 PM PDT
You words are always potent.
A professional writer recently told me to either make my poems rhyme completely or not at all.
Not much imagery yet a whole lot of feeling.
Slow, light, and quiet
Cadence is good, short cutting simple yet powerful
A professional writer recently told me to either make my poems rhyme completely or not at all.
Not much imagery yet a whole lot of feeling.
Slow, light, and quiet
Cadence is good, short cutting simple yet powerful
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8/11/2009 7:20 PM PDT
like all three, LOVE the third one...agree with "dantesfire". the poetic journey you take us on is eye-opening. thank you for your beautiful and heartelt work. two thumbs-up!
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8/11/2009 10:20 AM PDT
The third being my favourite, though that is simply because you spoke longer than in the first two and I had longer to travel through your minds eye with 'Our Mystic Connexion is Wrecking Me' .
In 'God is' not only did I like this due to it's affirmation of his divine ability and presence, you actually introduced me to Sartre, I googled the word for an understanding of it's meaning, I spent quite some time educating myself on the entries I found, thank you for opening my eyes in a very intelligent display of words, thumbs up, and best of luck
In 'God is' not only did I like this due to it's affirmation of his divine ability and presence, you actually introduced me to Sartre, I googled the word for an understanding of it's meaning, I spent quite some time educating myself on the entries I found, thank you for opening my eyes in a very intelligent display of words, thumbs up, and best of luck
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8/11/2009 10:09 AM PDT
very talented and well written pieces. please put through!
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8/11/2009 6:24 AM PDT
Publish XP
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8/10/2009 12:07 PM PDT
I had some comments on your unrequited love poem but I keep forgetting to hit 'submit' when I go to view the next poem. This is frustrating. There should be an automatic save if you change to another piece.
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8/10/2009 11:31 AM PDT
Beautiful poem on the disenfranchised and disadvantaged minorities. I like the way the first letter of each line make a poem:
I.d. is I, I, I.
I B(e) I, I, I.
I.d. is I, I, I.
I B(e) I, I, I.
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8/10/2009 10:51 AM PDT
I've read your poems and voted. These show your talent for using language.
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8/10/2009 9:53 AM PDT
publish
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8/10/2009 8:29 AM PDT
I voted for you
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8/10/2009 3:57 AM PDT
nice and contemplative on the old grey cells I vote thumbs up all round
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8/9/2009 5:56 PM PDT
an excellent job on these.
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8/9/2009 1:23 PM PDT
Good writing . All the best.
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8/9/2009 9:03 AM PDT
Oh! I really love this! PUBLISH!!!
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8/9/2009 5:54 AM PDT
although I am not particularly fond of religious tinted poetry - your images are beautiful - and you are right to invoke Blake - since your imagination is surely something sent by what most people would call god. I vote yes to your talent
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8/8/2009 11:46 PM PDT
I voted
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8/8/2009 10:55 PM PDT
A solid YES! In particular, "Our Mystic Connexion" is a perfect mirror into your poetic style. Filled with allusions to myth, legend, literature, it immortalizes a powerful love and devotion. It's as if this "connection" takes the speaker through ages of human intellect, collecting pieces from other's loves in trying to describe what this burning feeling is like. And reading it is not overwhelming, because you weave the ideas so well with one another. You speak like Blake, conjuring gods and demigods, bringing the mystical and the mundane together, and elixir of words that leaves the reader intoxicated and tainted with that powerful love.
"God Is" is short and effective, less complex than other work, but cohesive and compact. "God is the universe made explicit" is now in my mind, unforgetable.
Best luck in the contest, although you are already a winner.
"God Is" is short and effective, less complex than other work, but cohesive and compact. "God is the universe made explicit" is now in my mind, unforgetable.
Best luck in the contest, although you are already a winner.
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8/8/2009 7:01 PM PDT
Thank you for your kind words. Love your poems, this is a no brainer publish!
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8/8/2009 5:22 PM PDT
Publish. I enjoy the poems, but I have to state I agree with Johntucker, yet I agree with latest Georgehoward. Will be tough but you don't need the luck. It's amazing writings. Good Luck.
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8/8/2009 5:15 PM PDT
You don't need my luck, but you have it anyway.Publish!
H
H
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8/8/2009 3:36 PM PDT
This is the best set of poems I've seen yet. If you don't get published here you will be published somewhere...
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8/8/2009 3:14 PM PDT
Loved "Our Mystic Connexion is Wrecking Me " publish!
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8/8/2009 1:06 PM PDT
Cool
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8/8/2009 12:12 PM PDT
i voted. :)=
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8/8/2009 11:18 AM PDT
A yes from me. I especially liked the first two.
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8/8/2009 10:59 AM PDT
Voted...G.L Shah. X
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8/8/2009 10:41 AM PDT
Spiritual commitment and struggle is always present in the theme of your poetry. It is one that I believe most of us share. Thanks for sharing and putting yours into such well formed and meaningful works of prose. Thumbs up!
Omanh
Omanh
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8/8/2009 10:02 AM PDT
yes yes yes :)
moonweaver
moonweaver
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8/8/2009 5:54 AM PDT
Ow wow!!!! These poems are fantastic. Well done. :o) Keep up with the great work. Keep on penning. Thank you so very much for sharing your wonderful and creative talents with us.
*S* Cynthia
P.S.
YES vote.
http://www.webook.com/project/My-Three-Submissions
*S* Cynthia
P.S.
YES vote.
http://www.webook.com/project/My-Three-Submissions
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8/8/2009 1:42 AM PDT
I thought your fist two were so beautiful. TRUTH is freedom. I vote publish!
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8/8/2009 12:24 AM PDT
good work, voted:-)
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8/7/2009 9:38 PM PDT
Interesting choice of subject matter... but nonetheless well written. If you have not already, I would appreciate it if you could have a look at my project and vote also. You can find it here: http://www.webook.com/poetry.aspx?p=797b196d175e443c811c0312ed65860c. Good luck.
Keep up the awesomeness, indeed.
Keep up the awesomeness, indeed.
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8/7/2009 7:13 PM PDT
Amazing work i loved your poems they where really good and detailed wish you all the best (:
Best wishes
Nessa x
Best wishes
Nessa x
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8/7/2009 7:09 PM PDT
Intriguing work. Of course PUBLISH.
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8/7/2009 6:33 PM PDT
Our Mystic Connexion...
Definitely a yes vote from me.
Definitely a yes vote from me.
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8/7/2009 1:59 PM PDT
God Is; the repeat of "vibration" takes the reader into a world of music that can be felt to the bones.
Ambinolent Existence; repeat of "shadow" makes the reader feels as if only your image is experiencing these events, not your body.
Our Mystic Connexion; Your words go very deep as if Shakespear was speaking in todays language. You analized the heros of the Bible and placed them into a new arena of thought.
Ambinolent Existence; repeat of "shadow" makes the reader feels as if only your image is experiencing these events, not your body.
Our Mystic Connexion; Your words go very deep as if Shakespear was speaking in todays language. You analized the heros of the Bible and placed them into a new arena of thought.
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8/7/2009 1:53 PM PDT
Spirtitually uplifting. Thanks for sharing. I've been scolded for repeating the same word. Perhaps in this subject, it brings the focus home. I've voted to publish.
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8/7/2009 1:20 PM PDT
Got a publish vote from me
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8/7/2009 12:06 PM PDT
8/7/2009 12:06 PM PDT
Lovely work. I vote publish.
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8/7/2009 11:28 AM PDT
You have my vote, good luck
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8/7/2009 10:11 AM PDT
You have my vote,best of luck!
B-zy
B-zy
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8/6/2009 7:29 PM PDT
very good poem
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8/6/2009 7:18 PM PDT
Voted
Hope u'll get published
Hope u'll get published
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8/6/2009 5:20 PM PDT
I vote for you...You knew I would never forget you, one of my favorite poets...good job!!
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8/6/2009 5:05 PM PDT
Voted, yes.
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8/6/2009 2:33 PM PDT
I like your repetitive style, your last poem is the best! There are great images! I love how you use all types of spiritual images!
The other two are lacking in the images like your last one.
The other two are lacking in the images like your last one.
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8/6/2009 2:06 PM PDT
it's captivating and mind-blowing. The use of language and rhythm within each poem is genius. I bow down to you! Bravo Bravo
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8/6/2009 1:41 PM PDT
Your poetry is very inspiring and I love the flow and rhythm in your use of words. Great works :)
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8/6/2009 1:09 PM PDT
Amazing poem! I love how you describe God in the eyes of man, and how he is more than we can ever imagine
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8/6/2009 10:52 AM PDT
Great job! I really liked this, and now definitely check out more of your stuff!
Please check out my new project, The Jeremiah Tree. it hasn't received any reviews yet, and I'm very curious about what people will think. http://www.webook.com/project/The-Jeremiah-Tree
Thanks, and keep up the great work!
- KillersFan94
Please check out my new project, The Jeremiah Tree. it hasn't received any reviews yet, and I'm very curious about what people will think. http://www.webook.com/project/The-Jeremiah-Tree
Thanks, and keep up the great work!
- KillersFan94
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8/6/2009 8:10 AM PDT
Great work, you beat me. I am humbled.
Please read 'Song of Freedom'
La Goya
Please read 'Song of Freedom'
La Goya
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8/5/2009 4:32 PM PDT
Love the spirituality and energy in these! yes vote
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8/5/2009 3:31 PM PDT
I enjoyed reading your poems, they were lovely. Keep up the good work.
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8/5/2009 11:41 AM PDT
WOW, lots of bible names in the last one, all three are nicely written, a little heavy in the content, it's good to see someone looking at God' humanity and one's place in the matrix of it all, I voted yes.
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8/5/2009 5:51 AM PDT
General:
Good luck to you my friend. Indeed, well worthy of my humble vote.
Imagery:
The imagery is so compelling that it drew me right in
Tone:
Brilliant tone
Good luck to you my friend. Indeed, well worthy of my humble vote.
Imagery:
The imagery is so compelling that it drew me right in
Tone:
Brilliant tone
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8/5/2009 3:37 AM PDT
Good luck!
A well deserved vote:)
A well deserved vote:)
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8/5/2009 1:47 AM PDT
publish.
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8/5/2009 1:41 AM PDT
Sorry for the late feedback, actually I have made my vote yesterday. Nice work anyway.
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8/5/2009 12:19 AM PDT
8/5/2009 12:15 AM PDT
Great expression and literal interepretation you got my vote keep up the good work.
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8/4/2009 11:45 PM PDT
voted.
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8/4/2009 8:55 PM PDT
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8/4/2009 6:56 PM PDT
Nice work. Good luck in the vote.
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8/4/2009 6:36 PM PDT
good luck
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8/4/2009 4:18 PM PDT
good luck
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8/4/2009 3:05 PM PDT
Your work's probably a bit too deep for me to understand, but even I can still feel the beauty and passion oozing from your poetry - the words flow and there's a real beauty in your writing. Publish!
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8/4/2009 2:47 PM PDT
incredible poem, i absolutely love the use of words and the mixture of religion and pigment of man's imagination.
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8/4/2009 2:14 PM PDT
"God Is"... great! Simple, leaving the reader yearning for more. Inspiring to a writer.
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8/4/2009 2:07 PM PDT
Life's mysteries... answered by the expertise of the greats.
Good use of religion.
Good use of religion.
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8/4/2009 1:27 PM PDT
Your poems are indeed a cornucopia of questions asking the who, what and where's in a desperate attemp in relieving ourselves of the burdens we find in everyday life, some choose to find comfort in their religion, prehaps the answers resides there; poetry for the soul. thanks for sharing. my vote is yes.
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8/4/2009 12:43 PM PDT
interesting work. God IS spoke to me the most and yet it still begs the question who is God?????
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8/4/2009 12:20 PM PDT
Beautiful poetry.
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8/4/2009 10:47 AM PDT
I loved the intellectual composition of the third poem; it's form was beautiful, and obviously a great deal of thought; perhaps research, put into it and is well worthy of publishing. The second poem while, writtten very well, in my opinion (and respectfully don't get me wrong) is indulgent and woe is me - I personally am kind of tired of reading about that subject matter on here to be perfectly frank.
I understand racial issues throughout life, are a large part of who you might be, but I think apart from that kind of overdone sentiment in poetry, which I am not belittling by any means, you might concentrate on something more worthy of your skill; other aspects of your life something with a broader appeal. You obviously are capable.
Again, the first poem, while executed perfectly, and obviously very meaningful to you, and no doubt others, disappointed me in its subject matter, I felt as if I was in church - so it wasn't really for me.
But I think you are a very very talented writer in general, and I sincerely wish you every success.
http://www.webook.com/project/Quirked
I understand racial issues throughout life, are a large part of who you might be, but I think apart from that kind of overdone sentiment in poetry, which I am not belittling by any means, you might concentrate on something more worthy of your skill; other aspects of your life something with a broader appeal. You obviously are capable.
Again, the first poem, while executed perfectly, and obviously very meaningful to you, and no doubt others, disappointed me in its subject matter, I felt as if I was in church - so it wasn't really for me.
But I think you are a very very talented writer in general, and I sincerely wish you every success.
http://www.webook.com/project/Quirked
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8/4/2009 10:09 AM PDT
I enjoyed the pieces good luck int he contest!
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8/4/2009 10:07 AM PDT
I am not religious, but your poetry cetainly made me sit back and think. Which is always a good thing if it gets peoples attention. Got my vote. Good Luck
sarah
sarah
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8/4/2009 9:40 AM PDT
i seen your skill, you get my vote
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8/4/2009 9:02 AM PDT
impressive very im not a fan of religious poetry but yea shore you will get my vote this months vote is filled with diversity right
http://www.webook.com/project/STAVONTAE-STUBBS-MY-BEST-3
http://www.webook.com/project/STAVONTAE-STUBBS-MY-BEST-3
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8/4/2009 8:01 AM PDT
impressed beyond words, definitely got my vote.
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8/4/2009 7:21 AM PDT
very nice job on all three. you got my vote.
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8/4/2009 7:14 AM PDT
very interesting...all three
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8/4/2009 12:46 AM PDT
speecless...... hope you get published!
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8/4/2009 12:13 AM PDT
Beautiful poetry, and good luck in the contest !
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8/3/2009 10:49 PM PDT
You knew I would vote for you.....
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8/3/2009 10:23 PM PDT
Right on track!
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8/3/2009 8:09 PM PDT
You've got my vote.
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8/3/2009 7:54 PM PDT
General:
These are very religious poems of one in desperate search for understanding. Well written and well thoughtout.
Form:
Form is ballad with some free verse.
Content:
Content of these poems is as if the author is questioning the belief structure as if the religion has somehow left out important aspects. The mystery isn't solved but the search is continued.
Imagery:
Imagery is shown through sacred book characters and comparisons are made to the poets life. Also through great artist and writers the author give examples.
Tone:
Tone is somber and distressful and slow and quite.
Musicality:
I did not find them musical
These are very religious poems of one in desperate search for understanding. Well written and well thoughtout.
Form:
Form is ballad with some free verse.
Content:
Content of these poems is as if the author is questioning the belief structure as if the religion has somehow left out important aspects. The mystery isn't solved but the search is continued.
Imagery:
Imagery is shown through sacred book characters and comparisons are made to the poets life. Also through great artist and writers the author give examples.
Tone:
Tone is somber and distressful and slow and quite.
Musicality:
I did not find them musical
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8/3/2009 6:30 PM PDT
This is amazing. The way you compared and brought to life so many things most of us cannot say is truly astounding. You have my vote. :) Great work!
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8/3/2009 5:58 PM PDT
as i knew they woulld be OUTSTANDING!! voted!
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8/3/2009 4:44 PM PDT
Very deep work.It's got my vote.
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8/3/2009 4:32 PM PDT
Form:
You have great form in your poetry. I really enjoyed reading them. Very good writing.
Sincerely,
Tamara0449
You have great form in your poetry. I really enjoyed reading them. Very good writing.
Sincerely,
Tamara0449
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8/3/2009 4:27 PM PDT
great work...
vote submitted....
vote submitted....
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8/3/2009 4:11 PM PDT
Good luck to you.......really good work!
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8/3/2009 3:51 PM PDT
got my vote...
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8/3/2009 3:22 PM PDT
your work always blows me away nave...you are a great writer and you deserve to have your work published, Atleast some recognition, write on!
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8/3/2009 3:08 PM PDT
all the best
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8/3/2009 2:15 PM PDT
Done! I like your work. I'm shocked I'm in contention, if you don't mind, please do the same.
It's called "Confusion Over The Meaning Of Life"
See ya!
Susan
It's called "Confusion Over The Meaning Of Life"
See ya!
Susan
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8/3/2009 1:31 PM PDT
Great, I voted!
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8/3/2009 1:20 PM PDT
Yes - I love your introspection and knowledge. 'God IS' must be my favourite.
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8/3/2009 12:49 PM PDT
great. voted
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8/3/2009 11:51 AM PDT
awesome
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8/3/2009 11:39 AM PDT
Form:
Wrecking Me: This poem is simply a piece of art
Wrecking Me: This poem is simply a piece of art
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8/3/2009 11:38 AM PDT
My vote is in
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8/3/2009 11:17 AM PDT
good luck in the vote
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8/3/2009 11:15 AM PDT
Your work; your passion,( therefore; is it really labor?)..resonates so deeply within me, words not only fail for true expression, but almost any other sensory vehicle fades by comparison. Yes; as one bereft soul proclaims, it IS so expansive, so pure, so metaphysical, that mere mortal perception cannot begin to comprehend the magnitude of wisdom and abject sorrow that streams from the anointed spirit. It is not often I say say this with such utter, blissful candor; you, somewhere between all the prismatic hues of imagery, emotion, and memory, have moved....me. I could vote for your offerings forever...so; let it suffice to say, I believe the cosmos itself demands silence so the Hosts miss not one word....good...great....mindbending.Not for competition's sake; I know you know the demands of Higher Calling...but to justify what we are driven to reveal, please go read my (HIS) revelations. I think you, of all authors may find reflection...yes, I talk this way all the time...lol. MYSTERIANNE'..(disguised as a grandmother in Texas)
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8/3/2009 11:10 AM PDT
Agsin, love the imagery and use of language.
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8/3/2009 11:09 AM PDT
Nice use of words and imagery. I too believe God is more than man's invention to explain what he cannot.
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8/3/2009 10:59 AM PDT
but are poems more than man's invention? hmmm...
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8/3/2009 10:48 AM PDT
Great Job!, you are a great writer. Poems are not my thing but I really enjoyed your work here.
I don't believe in the scratch my back and I'll scratch yours style of voting. Your work deserves to be published but that doesn't mean that everyone who votes for you also deserves the same. Keep that in mind when you go to vote!
Mitch
I don't believe in the scratch my back and I'll scratch yours style of voting. Your work deserves to be published but that doesn't mean that everyone who votes for you also deserves the same. Keep that in mind when you go to vote!
Mitch
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8/3/2009 10:40 AM PDT
General:
Your use of words is rare and often baffling. It's like reading a thesaurus dedicated to biblical and mythological references. Frankly, for me, it is almost unintelligible. It is so private I feel like an intruder. Esoteric poetry, e.g. T.S.Eliot, is very fascinating, but this poem appears to be written for you and, perhaps, on other.
Form:
Good for. I'm not a poet, so I don't know what is good form or bad form.
Imagery:
Again, the imagery is so esoteric that it is, for me at least, almost impossible to experience. I feel I need a thesaurus in one hand and your poem in the other.
Your use of words is rare and often baffling. It's like reading a thesaurus dedicated to biblical and mythological references. Frankly, for me, it is almost unintelligible. It is so private I feel like an intruder. Esoteric poetry, e.g. T.S.Eliot, is very fascinating, but this poem appears to be written for you and, perhaps, on other.
Form:
Good for. I'm not a poet, so I don't know what is good form or bad form.
Imagery:
Again, the imagery is so esoteric that it is, for me at least, almost impossible to experience. I feel I need a thesaurus in one hand and your poem in the other.
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8/3/2009 10:25 AM PDT
GREAT i voted yes for you make sure u return the favor and vote for mines.
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8/3/2009 10:12 AM PDT
Sir @@ you are pure magic @.@ epic, flow of ideas, images and moments @.@ thanks a lot for the experience =D
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8/3/2009 10:09 AM PDT
Your poetry reminds me of a band I find pretty intriguing; it is called Tool, and in a way you remind me of their transcendance with your words; thanks a lot for the experience =D
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8/3/2009 10:07 AM PDT
great poem my friend @.@ I missed your poetry jojojo cosmic, parabolic @.@ indeed, vibration may be the nailing chain of sounds, because universe, cosmos, as totality, cannot be perceived but only felt in order to be conscious of it; the truth is such a cubist in our minds @.@
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8/3/2009 10:05 AM PDT
All books have 'limited' readership in that we all have our likes and dislikes in books.
I am not a great fan of poetry but I was moved by the subjects and the treatment of the subject.
I vote for publication.....Paula Shene, author, Mandy The Alpha Dog
I am not a great fan of poetry but I was moved by the subjects and the treatment of the subject.
I vote for publication.....Paula Shene, author, Mandy The Alpha Dog
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8/3/2009 10:00 AM PDT
The depth of your poetry alone deserves to be shared with the world. You possess a unique perspective of human emotions. Good luck!
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8/3/2009 9:53 AM PDT
This type of intellectual poetry appeals to a limited audience and is not normally popular with the masses.
For this reason alone I believe you may have difficulty being published except in specialist lierary magazines etc
From my perception the aims of the webook fraternity are likely to be influenced by the appeal of the poetry to a mass audience.
If I were a publisher I would be looking to include work that a mass audience would be tempted to purchase and read.
This is very well written but too long to keep my attention and is not really for me. I found myself quickly getting bored by the endless name dropping and references to Biblical and Historical characters.
In that context I can only vote a tentative maybe regarding its appeal to a publisher as I don't see the masses flocking to read this - excellent though it may be.
Kind Regards John
For this reason alone I believe you may have difficulty being published except in specialist lierary magazines etc
From my perception the aims of the webook fraternity are likely to be influenced by the appeal of the poetry to a mass audience.
If I were a publisher I would be looking to include work that a mass audience would be tempted to purchase and read.
This is very well written but too long to keep my attention and is not really for me. I found myself quickly getting bored by the endless name dropping and references to Biblical and Historical characters.
In that context I can only vote a tentative maybe regarding its appeal to a publisher as I don't see the masses flocking to read this - excellent though it may be.
Kind Regards John
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8/3/2009 9:46 AM PDT
publish :D
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8/3/2009 9:21 AM PDT
Our Mystic Connexion is Wrecking Me: Wow that's so beautiful. I love the words you use and I especially love all of the references to bible stories. Thank you.
Nicole.
Nicole.
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8/3/2009 9:08 AM PDT
Got my Vote!
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8/3/2009 8:54 AM PDT
Imagery:
vote!
vote!
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8/2/2009 7:24 PM PDT
okay, I'll vote yes
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8/2/2009 8:02 AM PDT
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8/1/2009 5:51 PM PDT
you are an awsome inspirational writer! I wish you the best of luck and thank you for your vote!
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8/1/2009 4:08 PM PDT
Ambivalent Existence, of the three this one is my favorite. the voice is very strong. the rhythm is continuous, the vivid imagery and the full content, well worth inclusion in the final selection.
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8/1/2009 4:05 PM PDT
you are one of the best poets here and deserve it if anyone does.
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8/1/2009 12:25 PM PDT
I wish you luck.
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8/1/2009 5:26 AM PDT
I vote for this poet...publish
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